Sounds like some inner conflict is taking place...

*Thinks*

I'm not sure how to define 'real' poetry, but I certainly think that this is. Impulse writing isn't meant to be professional, in my opinion... moreover, emotional. And, as always, you succeed in making it so ^^

And just why, you tell me, isn´t this 'real' poetry?

It´s good poetry, even. I wouldn´t be able to think of such few, short words in each paragraph to describe so much, and at the same time, you even have a story being told through it.

I think it´s really good. And the last line has that certain kind of effect which is very... effectful.

Wow. That's kind of a mixture between Gothic and Emo. I like it . Its very depressive, but sometimes one just feels that way.

Well, real poetry or not, I like it! =D I usually have to force myself to write poetry. XD You do it very well! The last verse is really great; it turns the whole thing around!

Still expressive in feeling like poetry though.

I have certain writers note about my most personal feelings that are somewhat like this..

but alittle bit depressing at some times :|

Can't anyone ever write a cheerful poem? I'm bloody sad over here.

Sounds like some inner conflict is taking place...

 

*Thinks*

 

I'm not sure how to define 'real' poetry, but I certainly think that this is. Impulse writing isn't meant to be professional, in my opinion... moreover, emotional. And, as always, you succeed in making it so ^^

How'd you guess that?

Hey, thank you ^^

And just why, you tell me, isn´t this 'real' poetry?

 

It´s good poetry, even. I wouldn´t be able to think of such few, short words in each paragraph to describe so much, and at the same time, you even have a story being told through it.

 

I think it´s really good. And the last line has that certain kind of effect which is very... effectful.

 

~MOSM~

Just try it - when you've done it a few times, you get a feeling for what you can do. Seek for symbols, and you shall find them. =J

Wow. That's kind of a mixture between Gothic and Emo. I like it . Its very depressive, but sometimes one just feels that way.

It is? That's interesting.

Well, real poetry or not, I like it! =D I usually have to force myself to write poetry. XD You do it very well! The last verse is really great; it turns the whole thing around!

It turns it around? hm...

You write poems, too? =D

Still expressive in feeling like poetry though.

I have certain writers note about my most personal feelings that are somewhat like this..

but alittle bit depressing at some times :|

Life is depressing.

Can't anyone ever write a cheerful poem? I'm bloody sad over here.

Cheerful poems? I'm not good at that....

Poor you! D=