Oh no, that's fine. But you must not have read the recent post HH made on the official topic. She said that it didn't have to actually be resolved by then, and that we could even continue writing once the judges had finished judging! So we have all the time in the world to write this thing! So in that case, you might actually want to go back and edit your first chapter to make it more meaty... if that's allowed. But we need to focus on quality, rather than quantity. I know that makes me sound like a hypocrite, but meh.

 

And I wasn't planning on branching the story out, although I suggest we forget about the Baterra altogether. The thing that healed his leg should be the primary focus at the moment (in my opinion. You don't have to listen to me.).

 

P.S. Xander, you haven't been talking much, and we'd like your input!

Good . I just thought it would be nice to at least wrap up the story (partly) so the judges had a (partly) full story to work with. Another reason the beginning started out so fast-paced was because I just like stories like that =/ anyways ToD can't wait for your chapter!

~BC~

Well, I'm off to bed. It's lame to be in a time zone so far from you guys'.

I hope the new chapter will be up by tomorrow -__-;

I'll probably post it tomorrow.

I'm not quite sure what to say. Hrmm

Well, I was thinking, since baterra can't shape-shift into beings, that the first one, "Tuma," wasn't actually a baterra. What if it was something else? What if it was one of the guardians of the spring?

The others in chapter 2 were baterra, but the one of Tuma was something else. What do you think?

I'm not quite sure what to say. Hrmm

 

Well, I was thinking, since baterra can't shape-shift into beings, that the first one, "Tuma," wasn't actually a baterra. What if it was something else? What if it was one of the guardians of the spring?

 

The others in chapter 2 were baterra, but the one of Tuma was something else. What do you think?

That would explain why it was easily killed off, and sounds mysterious. I like it! Maybe it never even died....?

~BC~

There's Xander too. Four different personalities.

I meant excluding me.

~BC~

Haha! Great idea, Xander! You took a while to give us your input, but it was worth it!

As for the name of the story, let's try to find a name related to Surel's leg healing, rather than the wolves.

Dude, I don't even think the leg thing was really... good. It sounds meh. But whatever. The way we're doing this, this story is going to end up with three Surels fighting each-other. XD

Anyways, would you like it if I kept saying "wait no our team name isn't Aetas Praesidium!" And no matter how many times you guys said it was decided on I kept saying "NOOOOOOO! NEVER!"

That's what I feel like with the name of the epic. That's what you sound like to me right now. I'm not calling you a cry-baby or anything, I just stating a fact.

Look, I have nothing against "follow the wolves", in fact, it's catchy! But the thing is that by the time we get to chapter 4, we might end up with a story where a title like "flying platypi" may be more relevant! (not really, since this isn't a comedy XD)

u get it now? I'm not trying to be contradictory, I'm trying to be logical and realistic!

P.S. I'm not actually doing it for the prizes, what I meant by 3rd place, is that it should at least be worthy! I don't actually care about the prizes unless it's Premier Membership! XD

X3

Flying Platypuses.

X3

Still, if you have a story about Surel, it's going to have wolves involved.

Not necessarily. There's only one left with him now. O.O

Besides, we can get more relevant.

Well, "Follow the Wolves" could be a temporary title, but if we come up with a better one, we might as well go with it.

Wait, what? He has a whole pack of them. I don't remember that happening.

If that is the case, I need to overhaul the entire chapter... :/

Aww crud.

Lol, u did read the chapter, right? Only one wolf fell into the water with him.

Yeah. I assumed it was a lake they fell in from the start. They came back up and got out of the lake.

Ah, sorry. I should have explained better.

They fell into an underground river and came out in a lake.

Well, for the purpose of the entire chapter, which I had just finished, can we please go with it just being a lake?

Also, you need to take that leet out of your sig.

Oh snap, it's my turn. Time for explanations and plot twists. Woot!

People, people, too much arguing XS. The second I leave...let's keep ToD's name, and also not only focus on the leg healing. It may have been interesting, but it's not good to have one person's idea dominate the whole story. I suggest we make the leg healing, mysterious creature that seems to be a Baterra, ToD's mysterious creatures, and baterra all be main topics, (and any other complications Xander dreams up) ALL be main focal points. It's not that your idea wasn't good, Kehuri, it's just that it's unfair for you to completely control the story. Now let's all stop going at eachother's necks and have a good time (I do know I may be understanding things wrong, these are just my thoughts. Not trying to provoke anything)

EDIT: I'll be here tomorrow at six fifteen eastern. Should I post up a review topic?

~BC~

No, I'm pretty sure review topics aren't allowed until the end of the contest. I'm actually asking 'bout that now.

Okay, cool. If it's okay, I guess the first one of us that sees the answer can post the topic? W/e. Anyways, looking forward to Xander's chapter...

~BC~

Aww, I liked the idea that he had been cut off from his wolves

Aw well, there's no helping it now, is there?

As for the subject, all of what Chronicler said could be fine, only I think that the baterra may just be adding a bit too much to the list. They can still be a part of the story, but certainly not a main subject. I don't want Surel to go off looking for five things at once. If the baterra are tied into the story, I think it should be related to the Tuma thing.

Sorry for being so controlling, I'm just trying to make this story as original as I can (more original= better reviews), but I guess I need you guys' approval before making decisions.

Oh, and Chronicler, we decided to go with Follow the Wolves already, although I insist that we don't make it a totally unchangeable fact. Later in the story, one of us may come up with a much fore fitting name, and we may want to change it to that. Get it?

And the latest chapter was kinda short for something that took a full day to write...

Have you guys ever heard of Daunte's Inferno? Cause I was thinking we could do something similar with the seven circles of the under world. There would be seven different lakes (the circles) each with their own guardian. Surel and Kirbold would have to follow the wolves in order to get out.

See where I'm going with this. The first thing with Tuma was the "door man," the rodent swarm was the guardian of the first lake, and so on. The batera were just following Surel and Kirbold because of their weapons and what not.

What do you think?

Have you guys ever heard of Daunte's Inferno? Cause I was thinking we could do something similar with the seven circles of the under world. There would be seven different lakes (the circles) each with their own guardian. Surel and Kirbold would have to follow the wolves in order to get out.

 

See where I'm going with this. The first thing with Tuma was the "door man," the rodent swarm was the guardian of the first lake, and so on. The batera were just following Surel and Kirbold because of their weapons and what not.

 

What do you think?

That is genius. Though why would anything in **** heal you? Maybe a person trying to save them? Like... the battera, who had wrong programming and aren't trying to kill them but protect them?

Also, don't make the rodents a focal point of the story. I had them in as a way to drive Surel from the caves. Also, how about the thing that chased Kirbold is a portmanteau of Satan, driving them into the caverns? Of course, there can't actually be any religious content, but more like a ruler of those caverns. And obviously the ruler wouldn't be frozen in that ice.

Have you guys ever heard of Daunte's Inferno? Cause I was thinking we could do something similar with the seven circles of the under world. There would be seven different lakes (the circles) each with their own guardian. Surel and Kirbold would have to follow the wolves in order to get out.

 

See where I'm going with this. The first thing with Tuma was the "door man," the rodent swarm was the guardian of the first lake, and so on. The batera were just following Surel and Kirbold because of their weapons and what not.

 

What do you think?

That is genius. Though why would anything in **** heal you? Maybe a person trying to save them? Like... the battera, who had wrong programming and aren't trying to kill them but protect them?

 

Also, don't make the rodents a focal point of the story. I had them in as a way to drive Surel from the caves. Also, how about the thing that chased Kirbold is a portmanteau of Satan, driving them into the caverns? Of course, there can't actually be any religious content, but more like a ruler of those caverns. And obviously the ruler wouldn't be frozen in that ice.

1) Maybe the healing thing was sort of a "gift," in order to give them a chance at full strength. Or maybe it just loves messing with people.

2) Let's stick with the battera killing them thing. And who knows, maybe they aren't that far down, or the guardians already took care of them.

3) Rodents aren't a focal point, just one of the guardians.

4) I think the thing chasing Kirbold should be the entrance guardian furthering their number of possible victims.

5) This won't have any religious aspects. I think it should be about how Surel outwits all of the obstacles in his way to protect his pack (Kirbold included).

Have you guys ever heard of Daunte's Inferno? Cause I was thinking we could do something similar with the seven circles of the under world. There would be seven different lakes (the circles) each with their own guardian. Surel and Kirbold would have to follow the wolves in order to get out.

 

See where I'm going with this. The first thing with Tuma was the "door man," the rodent swarm was the guardian of the first lake, and so on. The batera were just following Surel and Kirbold because of their weapons and what not.

 

What do you think?

That is genius. Though why would anything in **** heal you? Maybe a person trying to save them? Like... the battera, who had wrong programming and aren't trying to kill them but protect them?

 

Also, don't make the rodents a focal point of the story. I had them in as a way to drive Surel from the caves. Also, how about the thing that chased Kirbold is a portmanteau of Satan, driving them into the caverns? Of course, there can't actually be any religious content, but more like a ruler of those caverns. And obviously the ruler wouldn't be frozen in that ice.

 

1) Maybe the healing thin was sort of a "gift," in order to give them a chance at full strength. Or maybe it just loves messing with people.

2) Let's stick with the battera killing them thing. And who knows, maybe they aren't that far down, or the guardians already took care of them.

3) Rodents aren't a focal point, just one of the guardians.

4) I think the thing chasing Kirbold should be the entrance guardian furthering their number of possible victims.

5) This won't have any religious aspects. I think it should be about how Surel outwits all of the obstacles in his way to protect his pack (Kirbold included).

Sounds cool! Can't wait for the chapter (suspense)!

~BC~