Vezon shall Return

Hahaha... Thank you for your words of inspiration. I just got the next chapter up for you to read. I think I took a lot better approach and did it in first person and most of it was dialogue, though there is still somewhat of a demand for explanations of the main plot on what is going on yet, but I think it was a good and fun way of exploring their personalities and for the audience to get to know them a little better. I hope someone will find it amusing or even funny. I hope you like this next chapter.

 

New notes: Just posted Chapter and removed the short "intro", because it really didn't fit at all. I might change the first chapter to be more like the latest two, which is more first person and is a lot better in general. So any new people reading it try to at least get through the first two chapters before judging it.

Chapter 2: First Impressions

I woke up, still unsure what happened previously. “Who was that? Did that happen or was I just dozing off again?” I asked myself. When I stood up I felt great and stretched my arms. I then walked out of the cave to join up with Ahji. When I finally did, Ahji looked at me surprised. “What’s wrong?” I asked her. Ahji looked at me as if she never seen me before. “Ahji why are you so silent?” Ahji finally spoke, though rather oddly hesitantly, “Galatius is that you? What happened to you, you look different? Look at your reflection.” I raised a brow and responded, “What!” I panicked a little, and quickly looked at a reflection from my sonic boomerang.I had a light tannish skin that was covered in bits of my silver armor, though still similar to what I normally wore. My jaw and mouth were exposed as organic with little to no mechanical enhancements was incorporated in my flesh and only was covered in armor. I wore mechanical helmet that mimicked a part of my skull with a strap around my jaw that held up my mask. I could feel and see organic dark brown hair on my head and my eyebrows, my eyes were completely organic and my iris was revealed as a deep purple and no longer glowed. I had a nose and through the transparent mask of breathing underwater, revealed a gentle and handsome face, all completely organic.“How did this happen to me? What am I now?” I cried out. A laugh broke out behind everyone, and there stood behind us was that mistress, only she was transformed into a similar form as I was, only her armor revealed more of her peach colored skin of her arms and legs and her mask was white instead of black and was transformed slightly to look more like a small crown with a glass visor to reveal her beautiful fair face. Her eyes were the color of a pinkish crimson and she had long flowing red hair blew in the wind, as she red lips drew a sinister smiled.“You witch! What have you done to my brother?” Ahji cried out to the mistress.The mistress replied, “How rude of you I have a name, my name is princess Xezia. I made him more then you’re ever be, not only his powers are far beyond yours, he is now truly independent. Free from the trap of bionics. I’ve have truly out done myself.”“Turn him back or else!” barked Ahji.“…or else what? You might use your little elemental powers on me? I don’t think I approve of such rudeness….” said the Xezia.I then stepped in between, and spoke, “Wait, I’m a little confused here, princess Xezia why have you done, how did you did this, what do you possibly thin your gain from all of this?”Xezia laughed and placed her gentle hand on my face behind his mask and said to me, “You ask way too many questions, all in due time. Oh by the way I love the new look for you. Your eyes are so cute.”Ahji pushed Xezia’s hand away angrily and took out her Lightning gauntlet for her left hand and it supercharged her fists with lighting flowing around her and her eyes. She then shouted out to Xezia, “Enough of your ramblings and turn my brother back!”Xezia just smirked and responded by leaping backwards in a swift grace and two wings appeared behind her, her right wing was white in the appearance of a feathered bird while the other was black and her left wing emerged as bat-like, both fully organic and sustained her position in the air.As Xezia hovered above us a few feet, two forms emerged out of the energy that generated from her being and out of pure light she held a shield in her left hand and in her right a sword from empty darkness. She laughed and then spoke out to Ahji, “You naïve Toa, you have no idea who I am or what I can do… so back down and I’ll pretend you weren’t so rude a moment ago.”“No not until you restore his true form!” shouted Ahji angrily and shot out bursts of lighting at Xezia, but she was protected with her shield of light.After several strikes at the shield, it became unstable and faded from existence. Xezia face looked fearful for a moment and then lunged at Ahji with her sword of darkness and was met with Ahji’s Lighting Gauntlets and sparks of energy flew.Both were engaged at each other and then a powerful shockwave hit both of them to separate them from engaging each other. It came from my Sonic Boomerang that I threw between their feet, though it was a lot more powerful than I thought I would be.Xezia and Ahji were both laid on the ground, one on top of each other. Ahji blushed and quickly pushed Xezia off of her and stood clinging to her ear receptors. Ahji spoke harshly to me and said, “Galatius what in Mata-Nui’s name were you thinking! Are you trying to deafen me, I was in a middle of beating some sense into that witch!” I responded, “You two need to calm down, and talk calmly what little Miss Princess over there.”Ahji shook her head at me, still clinging to her left ear receptor, “Curse you to Karzahni… Since when did you suddenly able to speak up to anyone? Clearly this witch has corrupted more than just your appearance and for that she must be brought to justice.”Xezia stood listening and spoke as she brushed dirt off of herself, “As much as I enjoy listening to you two argue, I feel we have wasted enough time getting to know each other, a little too ‘close’ for my comfort.” She giggled and then continued, “Admit it, Toa of Quick-to-anger, your just jealous of me and Galatius falling in love and my superior beauty in comparison to your ugly artificial appearance.” This enraged Ahji and she spat out, “Ugly am I! I’m going to enjoy beating some sense into your think organic skull. Then ‘We’ shall see how your bruised up face looks once I’m done with it.”I once again tried to step in between them to whisper Ahji and say, “Look you need to calm down and maybe we’ll get to the bottom of this. She’s not going to talk if you keep threating to beat her senselessly. I don’t think she means any harm, I want my body back too, if the one thing I had always exceeded you was thinking things through… even if I never got any of the credit for it.” Ahji whispered back to me, “Look I’m sorry, but this witch is pure evil, I don’t trust her for a minute and since when were you the peaceful negotiator type?”Xezia snuck close to both us as we were whispering and then cried out loud, “Hey you are we done with your little sister’s ‘attitude’ problem, or are you going to help me? Because I have a tight schedule for my... ‘master’ plan, but it requires only you, Galatuis… so say good bye to your dear poorly tempered sister.” It may seem I was at that moment unable to look away from her beautiful crimson eyes. I heard Ahji speaking behind me, but wasn’t able to comprehend what she said and then… all went blank.To be continued…

Hahahahaha.... Thank you so much for such an honest review. I see your points, and they are very good points. However, this was more for just for fun and to get my mind out of school/life for a little bit. It’s more for just the sake of doing not really getting too serious about it.Anyway, concerning the “Deus Ex Machina” character, she is actually going to be sort of a main character, but I do see where you’re coming from and I had no intention to follow that clique at all, she’s actually going to be quite different than most people would expect. Regardless, I was going to explain her and the other characters in more details and through dialogue in the next chapter.The funny thing is, the intro was actually from an old unfinished epic from a few years ago and it was supposed to be serious, but in this epic I'm leaning towards something… “Different” and a little choatic. Though the story was suppose to be humorious in that chapter, not the short intro. Hahahaha... irony. I think I'm going to change the first chapter to “Introduction” just because it was so monotone and indirect. I probably should not have copied and pasted that short intro, but it was more to throw people off to the level of seriousness. I did write this at 3am because I couldn't sleep so, yeah I didn't want to write a decent intro. I like your historian/ vet WWII Analogy, because ironically I just wrote a history paper a day ago and I do notice that I was still using the same style almost when I was writing this “chapter” and before you pointed that out. I find this all rather amusing. I really enjoyed reading your review. Also, you actually gave me some good ideas of improvements. I knew it was flawed and I was almost trolling for someone to come and point me in the right direction. (Though not the trolling that would get me in trouble… but still.) I do have some fun plans for this and now have a better idea where to go from here.I know I've never been the strongest writer and probably won't be and that's just fine with me, I do it mostly for fun, but I am glad to have so much feedback.Thank you.Oh and by the way, nice kitten pic.

Oh hey, this is really nice! I love the colours and your use of simple shapes - I'm definitely digging the Megaman influence as well!Out of curiousity, what program did you use for this?

I used Lightwave 3d 9.6. I've found a really good cartoon texture and then changed a little was from some website a long time ago.Yeah, I'm a huge fan of the Megaman X and Megaman Zero series. My drawings are similar to this as well. However, I haven't complated the Toa design, which in comparision to the Matoran are going to look a lot bigger and more powerful than them. I am also planning to edventually make the Matoran disks, spears, swords etc. and I have designs for Pewku.

This is pretty cool looking. However, I will say that there should be more definition on the face because, IMO, it looks nothing like a Pakari.

It's the style... he was the first character in my old comic series I never posted and he had the simplest mask and was suppose to be sort of the icon of the series. Also, there is the possiblity that if I actually produce short flims the characters would have different names and the story would be loosely... "inspired" by the 2001 story. So technically I would own all of the rights, since they are made in my design etc... Not to mention it would be more flexible in telling the story if I ever reach that point. Regardless, for now they are fan-based images of Bionicle characters, vaguely based on their orginal design.

Pretty neat! The shaping of the first one, specifically the limbs, vaguely reminds me of the old Megaman for some reason.

There is some influence from Megaman in the design, but it actually came from a Bionicle sprite comic (especially the "chubby" version) that I made a long time ago but never posted them.

"First of all, my boots would be a lot cooler. Like...robot boots."Ignore my random references that no one will get. That's fantastic. Really good job. And chibi/chubby Takua is adorable.

Thanks, and yes he is... Bahahahahaha!!! Anyway, I think I heard that reference from somewhere, but I forget where. I demand an explanation. Oh I know what it is from... "Strong Bad" I think, it was when he was describing what he would look like if he were an anime.

The first one looks really good. I like the body design although the head doean't really resemble a Pakari. The mascot version is awesome and adorable. It looks like it could actually be a real mascot.

Thanks, it's supposed to look more like the movie version only a lot simpler and more specifically rounder. If you've seen the Hali one, you would notice it doesn't really look like her mask but is still recognizable, which is really the important thing. Not to mention it gives him more character. If I ever assemble enough people to help me create a movie I was going to use "chubby" Takua as the mascot.

Here is Cartoon Style of Av-matoran Takua and here is Hali. Oh... please note, I just realized that I accidentally messed up the legs of the 3d model, I'll have to fix it later and rerender everything, but I can't do that right now, so try to ignore the deformity in his legs. Questions... comments? Oh and just for fun here is "Chubby" Takua my mascot. Here's all three of them (from the other topics) rendered.

Yeah, I think it wasn't the clearest render and I think I can fix it and do a better render, but I'm a little lazy at the moment to do it right now, I'll probably do later. I'm going to up load a spin around video of Hali and both versons of Takua (normal and chubby, like the one for my profile pic.) I'm not done yet with his company, but I'm almost done with Matoro and Kongu maskes (I'm planning on making all of the masks from 2001). I need to learn to build a proper skeleton to animate them, I do know how to animate but I lack the time to build skeletons for both the female and male models. I'm using Lightwave 3d 9.6. I also made Vezon's head (still a work in progress) but I did manage his animate mouth and eye movements, it was fun. I also have several ways of animating Hali's "hair", but I haven't got the time to do all of it.

Behold the Beautity of Animated cartoon of Ga-matoran Hali and here is Takua.Model almost finished. (Note I rerendered it.) Any questions or comments?Here's another render.

Here where you can review my epic, I will update character info soon. Here is the epic.

Xezia (Szee-stsee-ah)It is going to be a short serious-romantic comedy-horror epic mix about a young Toa who must find his destiny and gets involved with a shadow mistress and is a cross between being loyal to his sister or to this so-called friend. It’s going to shift a lot in mood among chapters so bear with me and this is just a short introduction/chapter 1. I made this for pure fun and I will update it as much as I can, but I am in College so it may not be updated as much as I would like. I just hope I actually finish this Epic, so if you guys like it yeah for me, if you don’t oh well… I’ll write it anyway. Regardless, I’m aiming for at least 12-15 chapters. However, if it somehow a good story that at least a few people enjoy I might expand it. Also, I’m not the best at grammar, so please point out any mistakes that I know I probably did. So anyway enjoy my… “work” of art… twisted in my image. To give me your honest opinion (and I don't get offended by any criticism so you can say whatever you wish), click here for http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=7560"]review[/url] this epic.

 

A few notes before reading, I might change the first chapter some time to be more like the latest two, which is a more first person and is a lot better in general. For any new people reading it try to at least get through the first two chapters before judging it.

 

Chapter 1: Unforeseen VisitorA young toa was being trained and preparing for a war for Metra-nui. Her name was Ahja (Ah-jah), she was a toa of lightning. Her sleek form allowed her extraordinary maneuvers and tactical advantages and she wore the great mask of speed. She was being taught by an member of the Order of Mata-nui, who called himself “Ios” (Ee-ohs), he was a wolf-like rahi, but could speak and clearly intelligent. Next to Ahja was another toa, Galatius (Gah-lah-tee-oos), a toa of sonics. He was less graceful and needed much practice. He wore the great mask of underwater breathing. He was not the usual toa and many of the rumors say the was a mistake when he was summoned to the temple with Ahji, while others say he was given only left over elemental powers that Ahji didn’t need or couldn’t use.His build was slow, weak, and couldn’t swim well, though his mask helps preventing him from drowning. Though he was often ridiculed for his weakness and being saved by Ahji, but occasionally he was proven useful. Though, he was not summoned to train with the Order of Mata-nui, it was because Ahji refused to train with them unless they allowed him to train with them. Ios laughed at the thought, but in the end agreed. Nevertheless, the two were being trained by Ios, but as time went on Ahji improved with great skill, but Galatius failed to advanced. Frustrated he took off to hide in a small cave. There he sat alone in the dark, contemplating on his destiny, his thoughts weighed great doubts about his future or purpose.Among the cave a shadow figure appeared before him. Galatius felt a shiver down his spine. To deep red eyes glared at his presence with a terrible grin. Galatius readied his sonic boomerang, but the slender dark being laugh and mocked him, the shadow being’s voice sounded female and soft, “And to what end may that worthless weapon bring? I come with an offer you can’t refuse… power that exceeds even your skillful and powerful sister. I desire only one thing…” Galatius desperately replied, “I’m listening…” The dark being grinned and answered, “Your assistance….” Galatius hesitated and then responded, “Uh… I don’t know….” The shadow moved more close and her voice became seductive, “Don’t you want to feel worthy the title of ‘toa’… praised by name and adored by all? Your sister finally respecting you?” then changed her tone to mockery, “…or forever mocked as weak fool who should be fighting?” Her laugh was cruel and sinister, but sounded beautiful and soft.She stood there quite for a few seconds and then laughed again and revealed her true form from the shadows. His eyes met hers and he felt an instant longing to love her though he knew her not. Her body was slender and beautiful and whose built was that of a toa but wore small plates of armor colored as dark steel; she also wore a strange gentle mask, but unknown to him it was a great mask of beauty, a rare mask with the power to distract or influence enemies by causing those who look into her eyes a few seconds of hesitation or insecurity, just enough to give her an unfair advantage in influence or fighting, it caused a glitch in most biomechanical beings emotions, but wears off after a few minutes as long as they don’t dwell on her beauty. However, it was only effective among those of the opposite gender, for it is ineffective with mechnoids, some form of rahi, or those who are blind. She moved slowly towards him touch gently his shoulder gradually and grinned.The dark mistress leant over and kissed Galatius’ lips and for several seconds of feeling her soft lips upon his was breathtaking. He was thrown off guard by such maneuver that he dropped his sonic boomerang. He never felt feelings like this before, but responded, “Who are you and why are you doing this?” She laughed again ignoring his questions, and lifted her hand and placed it on the side of his face, and then channeled energy to him. He felt power surge through him, and his build was no longer weak, for his elemental powers never flowed through him so easily. She disappeared before his eyes laughing until her voice faded into the darkness. Galatius without knowing it was fading and then fainted, lying before her feet in a dark cave. “I’ve been watching you for quite some time now, my dear Galatuis… my sweet love. So gentle and kind I shall rescue you from your ungrateful sister… and then we shall be together forever.” Said the mysterious shadow mistress.

I would say it's an escape to my past of enjoying a fictional storyline, even though I haven't play with nor bought anything Bionicle since 2006. I mostly go to the art forums, epics, and story/theory topics. I generally like the community here on Bzpower.Although I honestly I think there seems to be a lack of "Music and Movies"...Perhaps a "helping/tips topic" in that forum to help members to make music, flash, and stopmotion and encourage creativity.I am sure there are several members who would like to do something but simply don't know how to.I suggest examples should be shown as well and demestrations.I assume there are members here that know good tips on how to do these types of projects, it might help expand this forum a little more.In terms of 3d projects, it seems to be too advanced to expect a topic on that.

I know you'll be disappointed, but for some reason I thought of sunshine and flowers when I heard the Dark Theme. I'm not kidding.But it's all really very good. You use Garageband I assume?

I'm sorry to disappoint you on being disappointed, but I'm more intrigued then disappointed... Anyway, no I didn't use Garageband I used Finale 2011, it's a lot easier to use in my opinion and the quality and sound is also better quality for most of the instruments. The only thing is, it is a lot more expensive.

I supose you could, but you'll have to pm me the details and examples of what your working on.Although, there are some songs revealed that I was might to use for my own secret project, (now all I need is a small crew of minions and a promotional announcement... *Slow evil laugh, like Kira*).Anyway, I will tell you which ones I would allow in the pm if you're interested.Also, I could always compose new music too, just discribe a theme or feel for whatever you're working on.-TrueshadowX01 (Hahahaha... it's 1:00 am...ish where I live.)

Well according to Biosector1Trivia

• [*]Velika is

Greg Farshtey's favorite Matoran.

It could be plausible...

I always thought that plasma was just pure heat energy which was generally used much like in most sci-fi games such as halo or mass-effect. I never really had much of an issue with plasma; I viewed it to be pretty straightforward. I'm pretty sure most people can tell the difference between a blue (or green) plasma bolt and a fireball. It's quite simple, a toa of plasma and a toa of fire are both limited to a range of abilities of which only they are able to control heat in certain ways. For example, a toa of plasma cannot create a flamethrower effect, while a toa of fire can't produce a superheated concentrated burst of heated air. Although, theoretically, they could possibly learn how to do these other range of abilities but it may require a lot of training, just like the av-matoran in using light abilities. So generally, depending on what element they possess as their primary is what they naturally are able to control with little effort, while they might be able to simulate other abilities similar to a toa of a similar element, it requires more effort and concentration. Another thing concerning elements in general (in Bionicle), I don't think "element" mean exactly the same in the Matoran world and ours. For example, it seems more as if "elemental powers" refers to different aspect of matter and/or energy combined with an idea of controlling that specific matter and/or energy in a particular and limited way, while our elements are divided up into the atomic level or the simplest forms. P.S. I forgot what primary and secondary colors a toa of plasma and Electricity are; could someone please remind me.

Thank you both.Also, all of my compositions (and that one arrangement) were made with Finale 2011.Oh yeah, if you click on each song some have some brief mention of them.I am actually a little surprised you guys like "Dark Theme", I personally didn't like it that much. I may revise it.I will also note that most of the piano solos will be translated into orchestrated versions, except for songs like "Lonely Curiosity, Encouragement, and Temporal Peace"."Earth and Stone" is supposed to be a rock song, but the electric guitars generated in Finale don't sound very good and I haven't mastered the drum sets, I may experiment with it a little more with different instruments. (Also, I actually forgot about this song and was surprise to hear it after a few months later…)"Encouragement", is one of the few songs posted that is fully completed, along with "Lonely Curiosity" and "Temporal Peace". Anyway, it was a personal favorite and I glad you like.I encourage all of you to listen to all of my music, for I wish to know the best and the worse of my pieces.Again thanks.

I have returned from not being on here for a long time.So anyway, here is my music on this site http://soundcloud.com/trueshadowx01.Most are based on Bionicle characters and locations, while a few are simply have nothing to do with it at all, but check them out too.Here is a list of most of them and what they are meant for:His Quest (Has been posted in a previous post as a slide show)The Hero's Theme (A theme for the Chronicle. There's two versons: piano solo and orcestra)Dark Theme (A theme for Makuta's lair. There's two versons: piano solo and orcestra)Peaceful Jungle (A theme for the jungles of Le-koro)Journey (A theme for Under Ga-Koro)Earth and Stone (A theme for a battle in Onu-koro)Shadowed (A prototype theme for the Shadowed One)Chaotic Winds (A battle theme I once considered to use for B:NG, but I changed my mind)Lonely Curiosity (A theme for Takua)Endless Winter (A theme for the Place of Far Seeing)Encouragement (A theme for Unity)Feelings of Uncertanty (A theme for Destiny)Final Choice (A theme of Duty)Insanity (A prototype theme for Vezon the insane)P.S. I will attempt to update my epic "His quest" sometime this week.P.S.S. Oh and things are slowly moving along with my "project" for Bzp, but still going. (Just look at my avatar.... guess who.)Also, I will try to post something on it soon, but in the meanwhile enjoy my music.

Well, Sumiki, it's not really about if you like or know what it is, but rather if it catches your eye and adds personality to this site enough to wonder what it is or why they picked it.

I sometimes do if their avatar or banner happens to interest me

By the way, I always wondered. *looking at your banner*Could you tell me how to create and use animated banners such yours?If not, do you know anyone who does?I always wanted to do that.

You could go pm Pohauki. Seems like he has several of those animated banners

I think I might do that, thanks.

I sometimes do if their avatar or banner happens to interest me

By the way, I always wondered. *looking at your banner*Could you tell me how to create and use animated banners such yours?If not, do you know anyone who does?I always wanted to do that.

I would say Hahli. Mostly because she is the only female character that had any signs of actual character development then all the other female characters combined... nah I'm just kidding. No, I actually like her because she seemed to be most involved female Matoran/Toa.Also, her voice and character potrayed in the movie was pretty good.

I guess it was the Homestuck banners that got me into MSPA.And what is your banner anyways, Trueshadow?

I actually made it myself. It is a render of two Bionicle characters I’ve made from a 3d program. I just edited it so it remains somewhat obscure for now. Try and guess who these two are supposed to be. Here’s a hint, there is a letter next to both of them, what is the translation of these two letters?

I have that spark of interest every once and awhile, just trying to figure out some things. I had that interest when viewing your banner, actually. =P

Thank you, I had a previous one, but I thought it revealed to much detail.

Usually I just acknowledge an avatar/banner. I don't really bother with trying to find out what it is depicting unless i'm really, really bored.-CM

Exactly, I am…I mean was very…very…bored...I’m glad you understand.Look at me I'm amused right now. Thank you.

I do that. xD

Wow, someone who does what I do... I guess I'm not crazy.(You're not crazy are you?)

I always thought Hapori Tohu was just BZP’s mascot. I had no idea that he was an actual member… Sorry I don’t pay attention to this sort of thing that much. Although, I do miss that icon on the left of the screen when looking at forums. Not to mention, the fact that the main page hasn't been up dated yet.

Huh... not quite what I expected, but hey it's a start.Alright, let me swich it up a bit.Have any of you ever seen an avatar or banner of something and it presented a unique feeling or spark of interest?(Regardless, if you know what it is or not.)