Tavakai

I'd probably be a Forum Leader in Artwork III. That's where I spend most of my time anyway, and I know my way around really well. Plus I'm friends with a lot of the people there so it wouldn't be very hard for them to bow down to me, start a war against other subforums in an attempt to slowly gain control over BZP, etc.

This is an outrage. Applejack's apples taste way better than Steve Jobs's. http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/mad.gif

It's possible. I have way too much story planned to make everything as comics, so it could happen after I retire from comic making here.Anyway, commentary (I'm doing it in bulk to keep me from being too lazy to update two topics every day):Comments on Chapter 6:I'm pretty proud of how the guards turned out (they're obviously pictured in the title image). Very spiky, too.Pretty much nothing to say on the chapter itself, though. Comments on Chapter 7The "I really hate you" line is a reference to Gerlicky's "I hate you guys" line, which he says whenever he posts something that doesn't get a reply.Also, in hindsight I made the Seeker seem like a ##### there. I needed some kind of reason for him not to use his uber powers to help, though.And here we see the beginnings of the ICC being formed in-canon.Comments on Chapter 8PLOT TWISTComments on Chapter 9I just now realized that "dunked" is a pretty creative word to describe people being put into a volcano. :tehe:Also, bit of trivia--originally, the word "gods" was used rather than "great beings," but I decided I might be breaking the no religion rule and decided to use something more BZPolitically correct. And in hindsight, it's probably better for a Bionicle story anyway.And yeah, there's so many plot twists here you could call it a plot pretzel. Don't eat it though; I've heard from reliable sources that it gives you food poisoning.Also, you may recognize the header as one of the images I used for C3 2010. Didn't remake this one, even though it used my old closeups--I lost the original files when my computer crashed, and the closeup on the closeup is such that you can't tell the closeup is the old closeup and not the new closeup unless you look really closely at the closeup. XDComments on Chapter 10I'm not totally sure if those heat gliders obey the laws of physics. But this is fiction, so screw physics.Also, I think I did pretty well on the picture for this. Who knew those leaf brushes would come in handy as shadows?Comments on Chapter 11So, I'm going to admit that there was some inspiration from Pirates of the Caribbean: Dead Man's Chest for that part where Jacku ran up. Only slightly; I hadn't seen the movie yet when I came up with that part.Also, if I'd split this into parts or acts or something, the end of this chapter would be the dividing line.Partly because it's such a huge cliffhanger, partly because it also ends in the plot twist that defines the whole plot.Comments on Chapter 12Anyway, the funny thing about this is that I didn't know how to swim when I started writing this, but assumed I would by the time I finished and posted it. I was right. :PZondo's partly based on by my awesome teacher I had last year for Honors Chemistry.Also I love pickles.Comments on Chapter 13TRIPLE CHAPTER WEEK :awesome:Not much action here, just backstory. Same goes with the next chapter.Comments on Chapter 14Randu has the Mask of Sanity.I'm also going to take the canonical liberty to assume that when Axonn healed Gali Nuva's insanity back in '06, it was with his mask and not with some random other power he had.And anyway, now you know Jacku's backstory. And yeah, he's going to stay sane for the rest of however long I do these comics.Also, I realized while rereading a chapter a while back that some people could mistakenly think Jacku turned the group in. It was totally unplanned but it's definitely an added bonus. :PAnyway, now we're getting into the climax. CONFLICT CONFLICT CONFLICT ACTION STUFF all the way across the most of the rest of the epic.Comments on Chapter 15CLIFFHANGER AGAIN----Anyway, in case I forgot to mention, I posted all of this on a different website during the downtime, and I'm just copypasting the commentary.lastly:oh man i may have just stopped forgetting to update thishttp://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/cool.png

"Today is a great day for the people of the great Apple Jacks! Not only has our leader come to us, but he has directed us to his great enemy, the TK! Yes, see! He is the red and black one!" Randu pointed out into the arena at the three Matoran tied up in the center of the field. "When the sun goes beneath the horizon, justice will be served, and the TK will be defeated!"Around the stadium, the Ke-Matoran cheered, some waving their hands in the air and many eating out of bowls of Apple Jacks. In the distance, the volcano loomed over; it cast a shadow over the field at certain times of the day--the stadium was built at its base. Now, however, at sunset, the shadow was outside the structure.Down on the field, Jacku, VakamaTK, and Viron stood shackled to a post. Viron seemed to be feeling the metal around his wrists."It's iron..." he said, and VakamaTK noticed a faint, grim smile appear on his face."So?" VakamaTK snapped. "We're bound in the middle of a high-walled stadium, surrounded by violent and brainwashed Matoran, about to be killed in an apparently entertaining way." With this last detail, he gestured at the cheering crowd--as much as he could while being chained. "And you're feeling around to see what metal we're bound with?""In case you've forgotten," Viron said, and closed his eyes, "my element is iron."In an instant, the six bands on their wrists snapped open, leaving them free from the post. VakamaTK looked at Viron."But Matoran can't use elemental powers...""Regular Matoran can't. Kaitoran can, to a certain extent."A loud noise drew their eyes to the end of the field. They hadn't been paying attention to Randu's speech, and it appeared he was almost done talking.As a rusty metal gate opened up, a creature emerged from it. The thing looked like a humanoid scorpion--it had clawed feet, tan and black armor, an insectlike helmet over its face, and a stinger tail. It also held a sharp-looking spear, which it then raised above its head and roared like a predator about to pounce on its prey."In one corner," Randu said, "we have this creature, imported from such a faraway place that we do not even know its name!"The three stood riveted at the sight before them, but also looked in the other direction as well--for another gate was opening. This time, a four-legged monster came out, with daggerlike feet that stabbed into the ground as it rapidly moved across the ground. It lifted back its similarly dagger-shaped head, letting out an ear-splitting, high pitched cry, and gnashed its razor-sharp teeth."And in the other corner, we have the Fenradox Razor, created by blending the DNA of the Fenrakk spider with that of the Zakadox praying mantis!"The scorpion started moving toward the three, but the Fenradox seemed more interested in the crowd--it tried to eat one of the Matoran in the front row, but was poked with a spear by a guard before it completed the motion.VakamaTK stood looking at the scorpion, wondering what to do. Surely there was something. This couldn't be the end, there had to be a way out...And then it hit him, the full speed and impact of his train of thoughts causing him to step backward.He saw once again the maskmaking forge with Viron, and his sword. Viron said, "It's the most technologically advanced sword we've ever developed. It's personalized--it recognizes your DNA, and can home in on your signal." Although he didn't have his sword at the moment, it was somewhere inside the stadium. All he had to do was ask for it.VakamaTK held his hand out and concentrated, hoping it would work. The scorpion wasn't near enough to strike, but would be soon. It was, perhaps, twenty feet away. Then it was fifteen feet, then ten feet, then--The scorpion was suddenly knocked aside and propelled into the wall of the arena. In its place hovered VakamaTK's sword, gleaming in what little sunlight remained. It made a few flourishing motions, then glided smoothly into VakamaTK's outstretched hand.He held it firmly, and turned toward the Fenradox. "Okay," he said, "I guess I should just... go after that one now." He winced at the thought, for there were surely a million ways one could be injured from that creature."No," Jacku said, "I don't think you have much of a chance of surviving that. I wouldn't even fight one, except as a last resort."The three of them stared warily at the Fenradox, which was beginning to notice them.

After a bit of planning, they began their journey to the storehouse of the Ke-Matoran's Apple Jacks. There was a small issue of who would go--Jacku needed to go, certainly, and Viron went because of his knowledge of the island since Jacku's banishment. VakamaTK also went, but in the interest of efficiency and stealth his other friends stayed behind.They were just reaching the outskirts of the Ke-Matoran village. Jacku urgently motioned for the other two to kneel down in the tall grass, and shortly afterward a patrol of Ke-Matoran guards marched past.After the coast was clear, the group tiptoed cautiously out of the jungle and to the edge of a nearby building. There they found a depression at the base of the wall, which turned out to be a hole--Taku had used this to escape last time, and told Jacku about it.They slipped inside and, finding the coast clear, began opening the crates of Apple Jacks. They poured in a chemical Zondo had provided them with, which was an acid designed to only affect the virus (Taku had given Jacku a sample) and leave everything else untouched.When they finished, they made sure all of the crates were shut, and went out the way they had entered.As VakamaTK walked back toward the edge of the jungle, he marveled at how easy their task had been. His thoughts then began to stray toward his missing past.And then the world around him went black.A hazy image swam before him, then solidified into a mask-making forge--one that made his old one in Metru Nui seem like a junkyard.He heard footsteps behind him, and turned. It was Viron, and he had one hand behind his back."Hey, Tav! How's it going?""Great." VakamaTK found himself replying. "Business is going really well. I've been getting a lot of orders.""That's good. So anyway, my people just invented a new sword. And we wanted you to test it out."Viron then pulled his hand behind his back, and in its grasp was a magnificent-looking, red sword. "Hmmm... Pretty cool." VakamaTK marveled."Oh, it's not just that. It's the most technologically advanced sword we've ever developed. It's personalized--it recognizes your DNA, and can home in on your signal. And it has an auto-fight mode, so it can basically fight on its own--so far that feature uses up quite a bit of battery life though, so don't rely on it.""Wow. Why is it that I get this?""Well, you're my best friend, Tav.""Still... it seems a bit much. I suppose I can get used to it, though.""I probably shouldn't tell you that the final design will go to our Leader.""You're kidding!" VakamaTK said in shock."No, I'm serious. You'll get the new one too. Just make sure to report how well things run, since this is the prototype, after all.""Sure thing.""Well, I'm off!" Viron said as he left the room.VakamaTK marveled at his new sword. He pulled out his old one, and in comparison it seemed like an awkward chunk of metallic Kaitrodermis. This was going...Things faded away without warning. The next thing VakamaTK knew, he was bouncing up and down in some kind of makeshift hammock. He could hardly even see what was going on, the thing was so volatile.Eventually, he was able to make out who was carrying it--two Ke-Matoran guards. In front, Jacku and Viron, handcuffed together, were being pushed along by one soldier.Feeling it was the best option, VakamaTK went limp and pretended to be asleep.--------He must have actually fallen asleep eventually, for he awoke to find himself in a room with the other three."What happened?" he asked."You fainted, or something." Viron said. "We had to carry you, and that slowed us down and made us less stealthy. And if that wasn't bad enough, a Ke-Matoran hunting party suddenly showed up. Needless to say, they captured us.""You should have just left without me.""I never leave my friends behind, Ta...va...VakamaTK." Viron said. "No matter what the cost.""So anyway, where are we?"Viron apparently did not know much on the subject, for he turned to face Jacku."I'm not sure." Jacku said hesitantly. "I don't think this building was around back when I was here. It was big, certainly--we saw it on the way in. And it was built a lot like that stadium on the volcano.""Well, I guess we're just going to have to wai--"VakamaTK was interrupted by a loud banging noise. All three of the Matoran turned their heads toward the source. A Ke-Matoran guard was walking in, and by his stance it appeared he had kicked the door open.The guard, silent as the grave, walked up to the prisoners, then piled the three of them on his shoulder. He then walked out of the room as if he did this on a regular basis. Which he probably did.In the distance, a familiar sound similar to a cheering crowd could be heard.

Found it in early 2007 via Wikipedia. Forgot to join for most of the year, though.

I agree, mine was kind of stupid. I guess it's partly because 97% of my experience with mysteries is Scooby-Doo. Also, I originally was going to cut it off after Dark said, "It's like you guys are obsessed with me or something," but then I for some reason decided to put in that part about the body just to confuse people.And it's also because, as some of you may be able to tell, whenever I make something that has a good plot it ends up being ridiculously long. Maybe in the summer or during winter break I could have been able to make something with a good plot for this, but not in the middle of February when I was so busy with school that I had to use whatever time I could in a few weekends. So instead I kind of tried to make it humorous, but because there was an emphasis in this contest on seriousness I sort of tried to force it in that direction. And obviously that didn't work and hurt the entry.I'd probably respond about more, but I can't spare that much time right now.

VakamaTK burst into the room, and Jacku jumped up from the bench he had been sitting on. Viron followed VakamaTK, a nervous look on his face."Jacku!" VakamaTK said. "I told Viron you weren't evil, but he wouldn't believe me!""That's understandable." Jacku replied, sitting down. "It's a long story, but I'll tell it to you.""Long ago, the Ke-Matoran--the Matoran of Apple Jacks--came to this island, which, by the way, is called Kaitro Nui. We were accepted by the community, despite the fact that we were foreign. We sacrificed no one. We had no bloodthirsty, fictional Great Beings. We did not even have a Turaga ruling over us."Then it all changed. I got back from a trip to a different area of the island with my friend, Taku, and we found everyone to be behaving quite oddly. They were constantly speaking of some Great Beings we had never heard of, and began construction on a stadium on the volcano, and an arena near its base."Another thing that seemed to be different was the Apple Jacks. We compared them to some left over from our trip, and noticed the ones in the village somehow radiated evil--something not noticeable unless you had some regular ones to compare them with. We concluded there was some kind of virus or something in the Apple Jacks, causing them to corrupt whomever ate them."We tried to replace the poisoned Apple Jacks, but at the storehouse we were spotted by guards. Taku got away, but I fell in a pile of boxes. While I tried to get back on my feet, the guards caught up with me, and I was captured."They took me to Randu, who had somehow become a Toa. I remember him from years ago--he always seemed to be a shady character, and was one of the ones who pushed for migration to Kaitro Nui back when we were on our home island."Randu questioned me, and I was very bold in my answers. I asked him what had happened to our tribe, and told him these 'Great Beings' he spoke of did not exist."He was not pleased, of course. Declaring me to be an abomination, he said I would be banished from the tribe. But first, he activated his mask. I didn't know what it was doing at the time, but now I realize what was going on. He was driving me insane."I don't know how much time has passed since then. It was all a blur. The only thing I remembered was that I wanted to destroy the Apple Jacks, for that would mean saving my tribe from the horrible influence put on them. But, being insane, this desire was magnified to the extreme, and I lost all of my rationalization."When we were on Philbert's boat, and I saw we were about to land at Kaitro Nui, my memories made a huge effort to resurface. I did remember that I was banished--meaning it would be unwise to just casually return—-and as such tried to keep from going forward. I'm sorry I was such an inconvenience."Shortly before you were captured by my tribe, someone came and took me. It was Taku, and he was a Toa. He later explained to me that he had managed to rob Randu of his Toa energy and take it for himself."Taku took me a ways away from you guys, and looked deep into my eyes. Activating his Kanohi Rode, he restored my sanity. He then informed me of your plight, and told me to rescue you and take you to the lake. He also informed me of how to enter the stadium undetected, and that there was a track that led straight to the lake. He gave me a dagger to help with the rescue. I don't know where he went after that."There was silence as everyone took this information in. It certainly explained a lot.Viron broke the silence. "So, you know a way to overcome the Ke-Matoran.""Yes," Jacku replied, "but it's dangerous. It could just as easily end up the same as last time, except Randu will probably try to kill us in a more foolproof fashion.""It doesn't matter. We've been stuck here for years. Now's our best chance. Now we have someone with inside knowledge. We need to take action fast--the Ke-Matoran followed you to the lake. They know we're under here.""They believe the lake is cursed--something Taku told me, and something your organization probably caused. Still, I see your point. I will help you.""Very well then. Let's begin."

"You go a thousand years without a pickle, and this is what happens..." Viron muttered.After eating not just one more pickle, but about a dozen, VakamaTK asked where his friends were. Eager to keep the pickle supply from being completely used up, Viron told him he would take VakamaTK to them."You and your friends were lucky." Viron said. "The Ke-Matoran seemed to be leaving after your ship sank, but we caught one of them near the entrance. If I hadn't seen you out the window, who knows what would have happened to you."They walked for a while, then VakamaTK asked Viron, "What exacly is going on on this island? Are the people in this...base...the only Matoran here?"Viron slowed his pace a little. "That's a very...very long story, and one I'm sure you'll remember eventually. But...I suppose I could tell you a bit."There's this Makuta--Vitriax--who has been terrorizing this island for years. No one knows why, he just does. The organization you and I work for was created to combat the threat. We're both independent businessmen--you own, or should I say, owned, the leading maskmaking company, and I owned the leading weapons design company. We both supplied this force with tools to use against Vitriax and his minions."Well, one day we got a lead from a spy that one of those minions was headed to Metru Nui--specifically Ta-Metru. We would have sent one of our usual spies, but since the dominant profession for Ta-Metru Matoran was maskmaking, we decided to send you--you'd blend in perfectly."No sooner than you had left, Vitriax launched a joint, all-out attack, on our nation's capital, and on the headquarters of our organization--which, by the way, is not here; this is merely a local base. The president was killed. The leader of our organization--our boss--went missing."The emergency evacuation button was pressed--something that had been installed in the event that something like this would occur. Civilians and nonessential members of our organization were shipped overseas almost immediately; their houses turned into escape pods. They have stayed in safety--I hope--ever since. That night was the last time we saw Vitriax, or any hint of his existence. Many believe he's dead."If it weren't for the fact that the Ke-Matoran are such a big danger, we would have sent out an all-clear message to our citizens. While we waited for Vitriax to return to attack again, they grew, becoming malicious and violent. They've destroyed our satellite dish used to communicate with the main base, and collapsed the tunnel we use to get there--possibly unintentionally, but we can't be sure. The people there probably think it's a trick from Vitriax to get them to leave an open target while they come over here. I don't blame them. We can't go outside to do anything about this, because the Ke-Matoran tribe basically owns this region of the island, and we definitely don't have enough force here to combat them all. Anyway, here we are."They had reached a small room with a few couches and a TV. On the couches sat Hero100, Bladeran, Philbert, Coleanuva, Gerlicky, Yoobye, Grav, and Gavla. Each looked up when VakamaTK entered the room."VTK!" Hero100 exclaimed. "We thought you had drowned when we got here, but the guard told us you had survived."VakamaTK told them of how he had floated to the surface, and some of what Viron had been telling him--he left out much of the story he had just heard, for his brain was still processing it."Tavakai, huh?" Yoobye said. "Sounds like a cool name.""Yeah, but it doesn't feel like it's my name," VakamaTK said, "so just keep calling me VakamaTK.""So Grav, I was wondering," Gavla asked, "why were you with the ship on that lake anyway?""I'd like to know too." VakamaTK said. "I told you to stay at the beach.""Well," Grav began, "I did stay for a while, but then I heard a strange noise. I looked down, and there were two Ke-Matoran guards creeping up to the ship."So I dropped an anchor on them, and they were knocked out. I didn't kill them though; their armor was too strong for that. Anyway, then I decided I should get out of there. I started digging sand away from the base of the ship, using one of the guards' swords to help."Eventually, I got it done enough to push the boat into the ocean. Then I just had to go wherever the current took me, which happened to be to a river. It got pretty rough after a while though, and then came the waterfall and I ended up in that lake."As Grav finished his explanation, VakamaTK looked around. He felt someone was missing. Then it dawned on him."Viron? Was that Ke-Matoran prisoner...was he red and green with a Noble Ruru?"------------Jack the Magic Pirate had never had such a good time in his memory. These people were treating him like a king--no, a Great Being. He could get practically anything he wanted, except in the way of technology, which this tribe was significantly lacking in.When he had first been brought to Randu, the Turaga had claimed he was someone called Janak, and was a Great Being. Jack went along with it, but was initially worried that the tribe would eventually figure out the truth. However, after seeing a number of carvings and paintings around the city of the three Great Beings the Ke-Matoran revered--seeing that the one called Janak looked almost exactly like him--he decided he could fool them indefinitely.And then VakamaTK had appeared, along with his friends. It was the most astounding coincidence he had ever experienced, and at first he thought he was dreaming. But it was indeed real, just as when VakamaTK and his friends were rescued by that Apple Jacks-hating Matoran. Randu should be back soon with a report on their recapture.The door opened, and Randu walked in. He bowed low, his face nearly touching the floor. "Janak! I bring news! Please forgive us for our incompetence, but we were not able to catch the sacrifices. Our entire guard force went after them, as you ordered, and yet they still escaped.""Well, go catch them!," Jack replied, "What are you waiting for, fool?!"Randu paused, and then scowled at Jack. He seemed to have lost his cool. "Janak, our master may have placed you over me, but he said nothing of eliminating these people. Really, what's the meaning of this?"Jack frowned. "Master? A Great Being serves no one but himself.""Drop the cover, Janak, we're not in public. You're serving him for life--you can't get out of that oath you made. But that reminds me--you can't issue an order to a fellow servant if it goes against that oath. So yes, I will carry out that order."Putting his hand to his forehead, Jack's mind raced. What did Randu mean about their "master?" What oath? He didn't remember anything about those things. But wait--no--he saw brief flashes of memory, snatches of imagery and sounds--the vast wasteland resulting from an invasion of some kind--a tentacled monster with a rough yet intelligent voice--being shipped off to Metru Nui with an Olmak and specific instructions--Then his mind snapped back, and Jack blacked out.

There was no escape. VakamaTK was underwater, and he did not know how to swim. And because he had exhaled so much with that yell on his way down, he was very much in need of a breath.And because of this hopelessness, or because of some hidden instinct, he relaxed. He flipped over on his back, perhaps wanting to make his last sight one of the surface--he was not even sure himself.Yet somehow he was able to keep water from entering his lungs. This was a very good thing, because he then ceased to sink and began to rise, elevated by what air remained inside him.Finally, VakamaTK broke the surface. He coughed and gasped, eventually coming to the equilibrium needed to breathe without devoting thought to the action. He stayed on his back the entire time, because it seemed to be helping him.Out of the corner of his eye, he saw something floating in the water next to him. He reached out, and found it was a board, probably from Philbert's ship. He clung to it, using it as a flotation device. This allowed him to look around and see where the others were. Some had managed to get to the waterfall, but the rest were probably still in the water.Suddenly, something emerged from the water near him. At first VakamaTK thought it was a shark, but it turned out to be an armored figure--not a Ke-Matoran guard, though, but a guard with white armor. It was obviously designed for aquatic use, and was fitted with an air tank, flippers, a head lamp, and an external speaker, which was now being used."I have orders to bring you back to base." the guard said. "Please relax and the experience should be relatively safe."VakamaTK had no objection to that, and so allowed the guard to tie a rope around him in order to pull him along."But what about my friends?" he asked. "There are nine other people with me--will you rescue them too?""I'll tell my commanding officer about it." the guard merely said, and was silent for the remainder of the journey.They reached the waterfall, then stopped. The guard accessed a small computer on his wrist, punching a series of keys. Nothing appeared to happen, but he still moved forward, towing VakamaTK into the waterfall with him.Behind the waterfall was not a solid wall of rock as VakamaTK had expected. Instead, the two were in a sort of antechamber, which largely consisted of a pool of water containing some speedboats.Standing at the edge of the water was a silver-black Matoran wearing a Miru, who looked familiar to VakamaTK despite the fact that he had surely never seen him."Tavakai!" the Matoran said, sounding elated. "I thought I'd never see you again! It's been what, a thousand years? Whenever it was we sent you over to Metru Nui..."VakamaTK climbed out of the water, heavily dripping onto the floor. "I'm sorry, my name's VakamaTK, not Tavakai."The Matoran did not appear to hear him. "I can't believe you managed to get past the Ke-Matoran. We ignored them for a while because they didn't seem to be a threat, and now we're basically trapped here. Vitriax hasn't been seen since before you left, though. What was that you were saying?""I said you're mistaking me for someone else. I'm VakamaTK."The Matoran looked confused. "But--you... Fine, I'll take you to Zondo and see what scientific stuff he has to knock some sense into you. You're most definitely Tavakai.""Oh, but first," the Matoran led VakamaTK over to a machine near the wall, and pushed a button on it. All of the moisture was sucked off of VakamaTK's body, leaving him as dry as he had been before he went into the lake. "You'll need to dry off."He led VakamaTK through a door and down a hallway. They passed a number of offices, many of which were empty."By the way," the strange Matoran said, "since you seem to have forgotten, my name's Viron."-------------"It seems to be some case of amnesia," a Matoran, whom Viron introduced as Zondo, said, "though it seems to involve everything except the previous thousand years.""Will he ever remember?" Viron asked, worry in his tone."I can't say. If he's presented with enough stimuli, he may get total recall. It could happen in snatches, though--a vision of his past here, a recovered thought or instinct there--eventually bringing the whole back together.""Look, I'm telling you you've got the wrong Matoran." VakamaTK said. "And in any case, please stop talking about me as if I'm not here.""That's just it." Viron said. "You're not here. You know what this is for me? Not only did I lose a friend for a thousand years, but when he turns up, he doesn't even remember me!"He walked over to the wall, muttering something about "enough stimuli to blow a fuse" as he did so. He pushed a button on a small control panel, and said, "Tavakai's here. You know what to bring."Viron quietly returned to his seat, saying nothing."What was that about?" VakamaTK asked."Oh, you'll find out..." Viron replied, "I hope."A few minutes later, the door to the room opened to admit a Matoran wearing a chef coat and hat, carrying a silver platter with a lid on it. The chef walked toward VakamaTK, and then lifted off the lid. Underneath was..."A pickle?" VakamaTK asked incredulously."Yes, a pickle." Viron said, exasperated. "Just eat it. It's your favorite food ever.""I don't think so. I've had cucumbers; they're not too good."But seeing how important this seemed to be, VakamaTK decided he might as well take a bite. Just one.When his taste buds made contact with the pickle, it was as if something had exploded in his mouth, except it was a good feeling rather than one of pain. It was the best taste he had ever experienced, and before he knew it he had eaten the rest of the pickle. He could feel a wonderful aftertaste in his mouth, and he did not think he had ever felt this good before.At last, he remembered there was in fact a world around him outside of the glorius taste. He saw Viron leaning forward in his chair intently."Can I have another one?" VakamaTK asked.Viron leaned back, folding his arms behind his head. "No one but Tavakai reacts to a pickle like that."

"Hey! VakamaTK!" a voice shouted from the distance.VakamaTK looked up. There was water before him, and at the edge was Philbert's ship. He ran up to it, almost at a loss for words.As he got to the ship, he could make out Yoobye leaning over the edge to look at him. "What took you so long?" the salesmen said, "Hero100 got here a while ago!"A distant rumbling almost made Yoobye's words inaudible, but VakamaTK managed to figure out what he was saying. "Guards showed up." he replied as he scaled the rope leading to the deck. "Jacku had to fight them off. By the way, how did Philbert's boat get here?""It was just here, and Grav was with it." Coleanuva replied. "Where is Jacku, anyway? If you had the chance to escape, surely he would."As if in answer, Jacku emerged from the trees--but not on a sled; he wasn't even near the ditch."Hey Jacku!" VakamaTK shouted down, "We've got a boat! Come on!"Jacku did not answer, but continued running. It then became apparent what the rumbling noise was caused by.A horde of guards burst from the forest behind Jacku, carrying swords, shields, arrows, and all sorts of weapons. The number seemed endless--perhaps the entire force had been sent in pursuit."Push off!" Jacku practically screamed, sounding very much out of breath. "Push off! I'll swim out to you!""Grav," Philbert said, "Which direction do we need to go to get out of here?""We can't." Grav replied. "This is a lake."Philbert froze. "A lake? But...but how did you sail this into a lake?!"In response, Grav merely pointed in the distance. Philbert looked and saw a large waterfall on the far side of the lake, in which a raging river filled the lake with water."Okay then," Philbert said, "in that case we should probably just go into the middle of the lake."He went down below with Gerlicky to row, and instructed Gavla to steer. The boat began to move away from the shore, just as the guards drew close enough to aim their long-range weapons. Many of the arrows fell short, and those that did not merely bounced off the ship. A battle axe thrown by one of the more muscular guards soared through the air, and hit the hull.At last Jacku reached the ship, and climbed up the rope onto the deck. He was soaking wet and very tired, but unharmed.---------Below the deck, Philbert and Gerlicky rowed the oars back and forth. It was normally a dull job, made even more so by the fact that you cannot see where the ship is actually going.But most of the time, being pursued by an army of savages who had tried to throw you into a volcano outweighs any sense of monotony a rower might feel. Even now, arrows could be heard clattering against the hull, and then there was a sharp bang as something else hit.Philbert and Gerlicky did their best to ignore this, for once the ship got out of range of the weapons, they would not have to worry as much about the guards. Even so, it was hard to ignore the fact that water was now up to their knees."What?!" Gerlicky exclaimed. "I thought you said this was airtight!""It was." Philbert replied. "I think something might have pierced the hull!"They looked around, and eventually found what they were looking for--a large hole in the side of the hull, with what appeared to be a battle axe bursting through it--along with water. Lots and lots of water.Both instinctively knew they had to get above deck, so voicing the idea was quite unnecessary. The water level was now at their necks, and rising quickly. They hurriedly climbed the ladder, but upon reaching the trapdoor found it would not budge. Frantically, they beat their fists on it, trying to get the attention of those above and nervously looking down at the water flooding in.--------------The ship was almost out of range. Only the strongest of the archers on the bank could get their arrows to reach it. Nevertheless, almost rarely cuts it, and the arrows could still hit. Oddly, the guards stayed out of the water, choosing to try in vain to make a long-range attack rather than get closer."They're really superstitious." Jacku explained. "They think this lake is cursed, and thus won't follow us into it. But we need to get a little farther before they give up."VakamaTK nodded. "I'll tell Philbert and Gerlicky. I think we stopped moving; they must be slacking off or something."Looking down, he found that he, Jacku, and Hero100 were all standing on the trapdoor, so he and the other two stepped aside. But before VakamaTK could so much as bend down to lift the trapdoor up, it burst open. A wave of water flowed out, carrying Philbert and Gerlicky with it, who both gasped for breath."There's a hole in the hull!" Gerlicky said. "They threw something and busted the boat!"More water rushed out, and the ship tilted sideways as it sank into the lake."That's it," Jacku said, "We're going overboard. Meet me on the other side of the lake, by the waterfall.""Wait!" VakamaTK called, but it was too late. Jacku had already dove off the ship.The others followed, none expressing any inhibitions about the situation."Hey, wait a second!" VakamaTK tried to say to Yoobye as he dove off the boat.The ship lurched sharply, tilting even more and causing VakamaTK to lose his balance. He fell, clawing at the air as if it were a solid object he could grab onto to stop his fall."I don't know how to swim!!" he yelled. Soon afterward, he hit the water and sank like a rock.---------Viron was just getting back from his break, whistling a tune and carrying a can of soda, occasionally taking a drink. He passed a window showing the lake bottom, and shot a glance out of it. He spat out his soda, and then looked again. It still showed the same impossible sight."Tavakai!"

I like this one. Definitely would have been pretty high on my list of choices had it actually gotten into the contest. You seem to have a pretty mysterious story going on there; I'm wondering what's going on, like Bio. And I definitely empathize with the Metru Nui background thing; there aren't really many good ones so it isn't always easy to use them. You pulled it off pretty nicely, I think.

Jacku quickly roused VakamaTK and the others, who had been in a bit of a stupor due to hanging upside down with waves of heat coming in their faces. He took out a bunch of mini-hang-glider shaped objects and handed them out with instructions to strap them to their backs, then turned to face the guards that were no doubt advancing on him.He was correct--he barely had time to prepare himself before the first attacked. Jacku ducked as the guard stabbed out, then he kicked his enemy's legs out from underneath him. Pinning the guard down, Jacku then wrestled the enemy's sword out of his hand, and put his dagger in his belt for a future desperate situation.By this time, more had arrived. Now that he had a better weapon, it was easier for Jacku to fend them off. He disabled a number of guards, but they just kept coming.At last, there was a lapse in the endless stream of enemies. Turning around, Jacku saw that the others had just about gotten their miniature hang gliders strapped on.He took a moment to put his own on, then explained, "We need to use these to get out of here. See, the heat from the volcano rises, blowing the gliders up into the air. They won't get you too far normally, but you'll get to the rim of the volcano. I call them heat gliders. They're pretty useful for times like this."VakamaTK's eyes widened. "Jacku!" he cried."Yeah, I know it seems confusing. I'll have to tell you later.""No!" VakamaTK pointed at something behind Jacku.With the reflexes of one used to this kind of thing, Jacku whirled and blocked a sword thrust from one of the guards. This one seemed more determined than the other ones, and put up more of a fight."Just go!" Jacku shouted to VakamaTK, who was standing with the others near the edge of the platform. "Hang out at the rim until I get there!"He focused back on the fight. The guard seemed to be taking quite a few unnecessary risks. This, Jacku decided, he could probably use to his advantage.Slowly, he backed toward the edge of the platform. When he was within a step from falling, he noticed the guard tense. Jacku quickly jumped aside, and the guard hurtled forward, tumbling into the lava below.Taking his chance, Jacku leapt from the platform. At first he fell, but then the heat glider caught the upwardly surging air and he rose rapidly.Once he reached the rim of the stadium, he clambered over it. Just as he had told them, VakamaTK and his friends were here. Now they would just have to get to a safe location.-------This was proving to be yet another strange day for VakamaTK. First Jack the Magic Pirate turned out to be in the same place on the same secluded island as him, and then Jacku seemed to have no trace of insanity whatsoever.But that did not matter. At least they were escaping the savages.Just then, Jacku climbed over the rim of the volcano to meet them. "Okay," he said, "there's a certain way we need to go to escape them. Follow me."Jacku climbed sideways along the rim of the stadium, followed by VakamaTK and the others. He seemed to be feeling the wall for something. Evidently finding it, he grabbed at an ordinary-looking part of the wall, which opened up. Inside were quite a few round objects that slightly resembled sleds.After handing these out to everyone, Jacku explained, "We'll drop down one at a time. Put this underneath you and push off from the wall, aiming for that little ditch," he pointed at a slight depression in the ground below them, "and bracing for impact. When you hit the ground, you'll start to slide downhill. Lean forward so you'll go faster. That ditch will take you almost to where we'll be safe. I'll give you more instructions when we get there.""I'll go first." Coleanuva said. "It's just like sledding on Wava Nui. It shouldn't be a problem at all."And with that, he leapt down, landing in the ditch and sliding down the hill, into the forest, and out of sight. He was followed by Bladeran, Yoobye, Gavla, Philbert, Gerlicky, and Hero100. Only VakamaTK was left, and just as he was about to drop down, Jacku stopped him and pointed to a group of guards approaching from the left of the ditch.Jacku dropped down, and readied the sword he had taken earlier. He made short work of the guards, knocking them out with very few blows."They don't train these guys like they used to..." Jacku said to himself. He looked up at VakamaTK, who was still hanging from the rim of the stadium. "What are you doing? Go!"VakamaTK did so, plummeting toward the ditch. Though he had been ready for it, the impact still sent a jolt of pain running through him, and it took all the concentration he had to keep in position on the sled.After landing, he began to move downhill, gaining speed as he went, more so after he ducked down. In that position, only the darkening of his surroundings told him that he was now in the jungle.He waited for a few seconds, then glanced up. Seeing the ditch end in an abrupt cliff, he decided to keep his eyes down. He felt the sled cease its bouncing against the ground, knowing that it was because there was no longer any ground to bounce against.When the bouncing returned, VakamaTK almost fell out of the sled. He looked back, and saw that the ditch had indeed gone off a cliff, but it then resumed at the bottom, on the other side of a river.Not long afterward, he found himself ejected from the sled as it abruptly stopped. He noticed a number of other sleds lying around him, but the Matoran occupying them were nowhere to be seen.

Congratulations to everyone! Even though my favorite entries didn't win (hey, my absolute favorite didn't even get finished on time), that's okay because most all of these were pretty good anyway. :DAnd also, thanks for the congratulations, votes, etc. everyone!@Windrider: Doitashimashite.

Like I said, this probably would have won, or gotten really close. The graphics are really smooth and shiny, the plot's original, and I like the structure of the chapters where you open and close with basically the same voice-over.

"Janak!"It was impossible. And yet, it was true. Jack the Magic Pirate was here. It defied all logic, but logic tends to go out the window when this sort of evidence comes into play."And that is not the only thing the Great Beings have given us!" the Turaga continued. "No! They also gave us eight souls to give to Janak as a welcome gift!""This is getting worse and worse." VakamaTK said bitterly. "Bad enough that I'm being killed, but sacrificed to him? Really?"The guards tied them each to their corresponding rope, and then put them over the platform. VakamaTK, Bladeran, Hero100, Coleanuva, Gavla, Yoobye, Gerlicky, and Philbert--each hung headfirst, forced to stare down into their fiery doom.----------The JungleHe had to hurry. It could happen at any moment.Racing through the undergrowth, he imagined the scene--the prisoners would be readied, a speech would be given, and then they would be dunked. Hopefully, Randu would talk for a long time before reaching that last step.But he couldn't count on it. He would have to make his way as fast as he could no matter how much time existed.Finally, he reached the peak of the volcano. He would never be able to get in the entrance, so he scaled the wall and hoisted himself over the top.Feeling around, he was pleased to find the secret vine he had been informed of was in place. He looked at Randu's platform, and the prisoners' platform, and made judgments as to the amount of force and length of vine he needed.At last, he leapt. The vine swung him down just below the prisoner platform, and he grasped it. As he had expected, everyone had their attention on the Turaga, and had either not noticed him or dismissed it as a trick of the heat haze.Reaching up, he turned one of the cranks. The corresponding prisoner rose up, eventually getting to the top. He did the same with the other prisoners, until all were hanging just below the ledge.Now would be the tricky part. He would have to get each of the prisoners onto the ledge before being noticed by the tribe. This is hard to do when they are hanging upside down.He took a deep breath, and then shoved the first prisoner. The prisoner rose up, and hit the ledge with a grunt. Not even pausing, he moved onto the next one, and the next, until all were on the ledge. Then he heaved himself up, and quickly cut their bonds with a dagger. He would have to get a better weapon soon, but that would have to do for now.Straightening up, he noticed a disturbance in the crowd. He turned toward the royal box to see that Randu was looking directly at him."YOU!" the old Turaga spat. "You should never have come back here, Jacku! You are an abomination! We spared your soul last time, but now we will not be so merciful. We will feed it to the Great Beings!"

Yeah, seriously, why would you waste your Friday night going deep into a cave to get a Lapras when you can get one pretty much any time you use Surf? I really don't understand what was going on there. (I had Crystal)

From what I've seen so far, Bfa's and Ziko's names are my favorites--they're from Silverwing and Scooby-Doo, and both are awesome.EDIT: I guess that's what I get for leaving a post open for like ten minutes without finishing it. Would have seen this coming. *is killed by Mr. Hyde*

After bringing their prisoners to the top of the volcano, the guards led them to a small room, in which they were locked. A while later, they were brought out of the room and led down a hallway.The lead guard opened a door at the end of the hallway, and a deafening blast of sound exploded inward. It sounded like cheering--an ominous, hair-raising version, though.Upon emerging on the other side of the door, they could see that they were observed from all sides by an enormous crowd of beings. It was hard to make out the details, because of a slight shimmer in the air, but it seemed they were probably Matoran. They all seemed to be green, orange, red, or some combination of the three.More shoves. The guards urged the prisoners on, forcing them to look only at what lay before them.A platform was built a third of the way into the center of the area. At its edge, eight ropes were attached to cranks. Clearly the ropes were made to be lowered down by the cranks.Below the platform--a sizeable distance, of course, for the heat would be unbearable otherwise--was a pool of lava.They were in the center of the volcano."People of the great tribe of Ke-Matoran! The Great Beings have truly favored us!"The voice came from above, on a raised platform not noticed by the group before. On it stood a sinister-looking Turaga, orange and red and green."As you all know, we serve three Great Beings: Apple, CinnaMon, and Janak. We worship these Great Beings by sacrificing souls to them."But recently, one of the Great Beings has come to dwell with us! It is my great pleasure to present to you..."The Turaga stepped back, and in his place stepped a group of guards carrying what appeared to be a fancy-looking lawn chair. They set it down, and one of the guards began fanning the person sitting in it with a large leaf.VakamaTK squinted, trying to make out the features of the figure through the heat haze. And then its identity came to him.It was Jack the Magic Pirate.

"Move!"VakamaTK woke with a start, along with a sharp jab in his side. He looked blearily at the guard who was doing the jabbing, and decided he should probably get up.Around him, he saw the others with their hands bound behind their backs, something the guard was now doing to him. The guard shoved the group outside the cell, where he was met by a few more guards. They herded their prisoners down a tunnel, eventually emerging into a bright jungle.At first, VakamaTK thought they might be going toward the pyramid he had seen before, but the guards hustled them in the opposite direction. It looked like there was some sort of large object in the distance, but the trees mostly blocked it from view.Dejectedly, he directed his attention solely on going where the guards were taking them. Gerlicky walked up to him."You know," the Matoran of Plasma said, "I really hate you."VakamaTK did not reply, keeping his eyes on the trail.Some minutes later, the trees opened up, and it became apparent what their destination was.Before them, the ground sloped upward, ultimately coming to a point. Atop this point, some sort of stadium was built, and another could be seen on the base of the slope, though almost on the opposite side from them. A trail led up to the entrance from where the group was standing, and ash coated the ground.It was a volcano. In truth, it seemed more hill-sized, but it was a volcano nonetheless.And if they were being taken there, it could only mean one thing.---------LLL Towers, Kato, Taone NuiKahinuva, a renowned comic maker, sat at his desk. He was frustrated. Recently, he had had a brilliant idea--a partnership between him and a few other comic makers. He was currently trying to call everyone involved, but found that no one so far was answering their phones. He had tried Bladeran, Gerlicky, and Philbert--to no avail. All three seemed to be absent from their studios.He decided he would call VakamaTK next. Once he punched in the number, he turned back in forth in his swivel chair as he waited for someone to pick it up."Yes?" a strange voice said."Is VakamaTK there?" Kahi asked."No, I'm sorry.""Oh. Well, where is he?""That, I can only imagine. You see, he disappeared the other day, along with most of his characters. Those that remain say he was trying to go on some quest. I fear this crazy idea was planted in him by something I myself told him.""Huh. Wait...who are you?""That is a very good question, young Kahinuva. I do have an actual name, but I am better known as 'The Seeker.' You may remember me as the one who helped VakamaTK begin comic making. Seeing as nobody was around to pick up your phone call, I took the liberty of doing so in order to answer your questions.""Oh...yeah, I know who you are. But you're really powerful. Why aren't you going to find VakamaTK? He could be in some kind of horrible situation.""Sometimes, Kahinuva, we have to learn things the hard way. If someone was always around to save us, we would get very reckless. More so, we would not learn anything. I told VakamaTK specifically not to go on this journey, but he did not listen. Now he must face any consequences that come from it."

@Chath: Thank you! I actually did end up writing a full parody of "Poker Face" based on that. Don't know if it'll ever go anywhere, but hopefully it will.@LR: Anyway,I somehow made it to the FINAL POLL of the comics contest! Yeah so go over there and stuff.Also, I've recently realized I forgot a while back to keep updating that epic (which I wrote in July but can't post all at once since there's a rule against that). I'm going to try to get back to that. So keep your eyes on this topic (but don't post in it) and bug me if it's been over a day since I've updated it. That way it should be done in less than a month.(and just as a reminder, don't talk about the epic here, talk about it in the review topic--this is just a general announcement. And don't bug me in any topic whatsoever since that's considered spam and it's a federal offense on BZP. Just PM me or comment on my profile.)Anyway, I've also noticed that not many of my fans seem to be reading the epic (or if they are they haven't given me any indication). Therefore, I've decided to make an abridged version in a new style I'm trying out, since if you've been a fan of my comics and don't keep up with this part of the storyline, you'll be confused come my next series. That is, if that comes out at all (beyond the first comic which I made in August). I if you're too lazy to read the epic (that's not an insult; I'm usually too lazy to read people's epics too--there's something about reading things on computers that really kills my attention span even though I've read 1000+ page books) then go ahead and read the abridged version. I'll try to churn out those pretty quickly; I made two and a half in almost no time at all. That said, there are details in the epic that aren't in the abridged version, so you'll benefit more by reading that. Plus it's proof I can write pretty serious stuff (which I kind of failed at with the mystery because I can't do serious stuff on short notice). The abridged version is not serious; I basically just get the bare facts out of the epic's story in a humorous manner not at all the same as the epic.ANYWAY

I NOW PRESENTTavakai the Movie: Part 2 Scene 3: The Secret of the Castle - ABRIDGEDWonderful quality, I know. And it gets better, too.Also, I recall putting some kind of riddle in my 2008 Christmas Advent Calendar (that is, the one I personally made for this series with sprites and preview panels, not the sort of MAS thing that didn't exist for two more years) that had to do with this.Yeah, I've had this storyline planned out since 2008. Wonder why I'm so eager to get it all posted?

The JungleCarrying Jacku any further had proven difficult, especially since the deeper they got into the forest, the more shadows there were, and it is hard to carry someone through an unfamiliar forest in the dark--especially when that someone is resisting you.So the group set up camp in a clearing, and spent the night there. Luckily, they did not run into any sort of hostile or poisonous wildlife, and woke in the morning unharmed.They set out once more, for the first time having light to guide them. Looking around them, they saw strange birds, plants, and the occasional animal. So focused on these new sights and sounds were they that they were immensely startled when the ground suddenly opened up and swallowed them.Down they fell, into what seemed to be a large cage. VakamaTK, quickly regaining his senses, tried to climb up the bars, but when he got to the top he found that more bars had somehow been placed there. He tried to cut the bars with his sword, but it was no use. He dropped back down, careful not to land on the others.As everyone else sat up, the cage rose out of the pit. The group was then able to see who was raising it up--a number of armored and helmeted beings, possibly some kind of guards, whose faces were shrouded in shadow."This is not good." VakamaTK said."You can say that again." Bladeran replied.So he did.The guards then attached poles to the sides of the cage for carrying purposes. As they took it to some unknown location, VakamaTK found himself thinking, not about what was going to happen to them, but about the one person that now appeared to be missing from the group.Jacku.---------A CaveVakamaTK woke up in a cave, which was doubly surprising as he had not remembered falling asleep in the first place.He examined his surroundings, or at least tried to in the dim light. It was clear that they were only locked in a portion of the cave; bars similar to the ones made by the cage blocked a corridor to the side.The guards had brought the rest of his friends here with him, and they were all lying in various parts of the cave. None had their weapons, which led VakamaTK to notice his had been taken as well.He sat by himself for a while, wishing he had not brought everyone into this mess, until he wondered why there was any light at all in the cave.Looking around, he found a small hole--also barred--in the wall of the cave. It was obscured by a somewhat thick cloth, which explained why he hadn't noticed it before.After VakamaTK took a look out the window, he knelt on the floor and shook Coleanuva, who was nearest."Gah..." Coleanuva moaned, "Where am I...?""We're in some kind of jail cave." VakamaTK replied. "Quick, help me wake up everyone else; there's something you guys need to see."Once everyone had been woken, they each took a turn looking out the window. Each became wide-eyed and speechless after they beheld the sight:Down below, hundreds--perhaps thousands--of the same kind of guards they had seen before stood in military formation. They all had their attention fixed at a certain point: up at the top of a pyramid. Some beings were atop the pyramid, but they were too far away to discern any further.One thing was certain--VakamaTK and his friends would have a hard time getting out of this.

@Ayel: Thanks!@Justax: Yeah, the problem here is that is had to be more serious, so I kind of tried to force it in that direction (not overly successfully, either). I'm good at coming up with serious plots, but they usually turn out pretty long (Christmas 2008+2011 comic, Mega GS comic, Tavakai: The Movie, etc). So since I knew that would happen, I sort of threw this thing together and had some mixed results. Still pretty good, but not the best--I'd say your assessment is the most accurate one I've seen of it.And the other part of this is the vectors themselves. Because of their level of detail and their gradients, and the fact that I have to cut eyeholes into new masks every time I put them in Gimp (this is why I'm considering switching to Inkscape or something), I get really lazy when doing this, and don't really use the creative poses and expressions that normally show up in my comics. I think that stuff adds to the things I put in my comics, and without that support, it's easier to see those holes you pointed out.@Oneker: Ennar probably could have gone into this, but he didn't occur to me at the time. Besides, I had plenty of characters in there and since I wasn't aware the deadline was extended I couldn't exactly have shoved in another one with such little time left.As for the body, it just popped in my head and went with it. This is one of the times that there isn't a concrete ending because I haven't even created it (like the Kopeke saga). It's basically up to interpretation. You guys could even make fan comics of your interpretations, if you so chose.@Ddude: Sure, graphically it may be better, but in terms of the other things, but just look at what Justax and I said. And anyway, winning isn't all the point of the contest. I don't care if I win. I looked forward to this contest because it sounded fun to make a comic from a prompt or idea that I didn't come up with.Anyway, it's high time we have some new comic stuff in here.Disregard Forums Acquire Pokemans part 10: Challenger Approaches!This is the last one of these I've made. *cue sadface*Fortunately, I have at least half a dozen more scripted, and I haven't even reached an ending. And remember, this was originally supposed to be one comic, and a filler, at that. :PGentleman Gavla in this comic is supposed to be a parody of Lady Gaga, in case you couldn't tell.Also, besides Politoedsworth (who was caught and stored in the PC, and had a different nickname) and Haxoraktor (who left the team later on), that's my real team from White. The other two are Zorro (Zoroark) and Suicune (which is shiny), both at Lv.100 as well. I trained them all legitimately, too. I don't lie about my Pokemon obsessions; I finished the Pokedex and got my team to Lv.100 in just about exactly two months from when I got White, and then put it aside for pretty much all of the time since then.I'm pretty proud of that Pokemon arena thing I made. Well, except for the cubic-interpolation resize for the foreground platform. I was lazy. It's completely from scratch, though.And I didn't make that Gavlantula; it was either Emkay or Zakitano. Can't remember which. It's an inside joke, I guess; it's from back when the English names for the Generation V Pokemon were released.Next time: FINAL RWAM COMIC!And don't forget to go check out the contest entries once the polls open. Sure, it would be cool if you voted for me, but I'm not particularly concerned with winning. I mean, I'm not interested in Lego too much anymore, so if I get a prize my reaction will just be, "Hey great, free stuff!" Just follow your heart brain artisticriticismeter or whatever you use to vote for the best entry.

Well, this is a pretty good change. I do like Kahi's modification better, though. And I for one don't really mind the change to Lego; it's not like BZP would last long if it stayed only Bionicle.

In general, I don't really think I "fit in," since I'm not really interested much in Bionicle anymore. I guess I'm in the inner circle of Artwork III, though--completely on accident, though.