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    The Folly of the Toa - Review

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    Posted · Edited by El-P

    Pohatu's condition struck me more than Gali's.

     

    I do not recall if in the original canon Makuta gave the Skrall shadow powers, I think not, in any case it was a nice addition.

     

    The initial meeting/sparring between Toa and Glatorian seems too hurried, even considering the situation. They're aliens to each other, after all, but that's the only flaw of some significance I could find so far. Good work!

    The Folly of the Toa - Review

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    I'm up to chapter 17.

    The part at Matoro's memorial is very touching.

    Your description of Gali's depression and obesity is...overwhelming, for it is extremely realistic in a striking way, that makes the reader feel bad for her. That's an exceptional thing for a writer to accomplish.

    I appreciate how you dealt with matoran surgery and moreso with their diet, making rahi edible and such. I guess rahi reproduce in your canon? Do agori eat rahi?

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