JohannDakitsch Posted October 14, 2011 Share Posted October 14, 2011 (edited) Hi!So, I have this account for some time, but never really used it (must have about 5 posts on the old forum)... Anyway, I tough it would be a good idea to post some of my personal favourite MOCs here as a 'presentation'. Hope you like it! Grivok: Lygiros the Titan: Ekaran & Kadin: Harai: Nui-Long: Devianox: So, these are some of my favourites, hope you like it! Theres my MOCpages and Flickr accounts, if you like to take a look:http://www.flickr.co...johanndakitsch/http://www.mocpages.com/home.php/7968 And that's all, folks! Edited October 14, 2011 by JohannDakitsch Quote The night is dark and full of terrors... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toa of the Blazing Inferno Posted October 14, 2011 Share Posted October 14, 2011 Wow, just, wow, those are awesome. Is Lygiros supposed to be holding his swords, or are they coming out of him Wolverine-, or Deadpool-, style? Quote My Maj | My MLN page | PDF Bionicle comics | Custom additions to Bionicle figuresGuardians of the Galaxy Teaser Poster in LEGO (originally from the LEGO Magazine July 2014 issue, now without the extra text)The Mata Nui Saga rearranged into chronological order, instead of having flashbacks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sumiki Posted October 14, 2011 Share Posted October 14, 2011 In separate topics, I'd usually go and to a full review on any one of these, but I'll keep it to a simple pro-con system for these. Grivok: Likes: Rib cage! Wonderful use of those pistons. Double-jointed legs. Usually not a fan, but not this time. Dislikes: Too many colors. Simplify it a bit. Keep it to a consistent bulk. It's a bit too thin in places like the middle legs and the lower torso. Lygiros: Likes: Solid, more consistent than Grivok. Nice part usage on back, upper arms, and upper legs. Dislikes: Still suffers slight consistency issues. While there's NPU on upper arms, they look strange. Ekaran & Kadin: Likes: Nearly everything. Easily your best MOC in this topic. (I'm a sucker for good vehicles.) Dislikes: Nothing. Harai: Likes: Head is wonderful. Piraka torsos actually do something! Dislikes: Some aesthetic consistency issues like Grivok and Lygiros. Tires on lower legs are really strange. Nui-Long: Likes: Shape Dislikes: Color scheme! This could be really good if you were able to reduce it to two or three colors. Devianox: Likes: A lot more sleek and consistent than Grivok or Lygiros. Hands! Onua Mistika head in ribcage-like thing. Dislikes: Those limb joint things sticking out of the lower torso. Parts of the joints seem lacking and thin. Quote avatar by Lady Kopaka Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teal Armada Posted October 14, 2011 Share Posted October 14, 2011 Nice works on Harai, Very bulky and very like the eyes. Grivok seems too skinny, maybe you can bulk some areas like his lower body and legs Quote Teal-Teal-Teal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aedai Rivin Posted October 14, 2011 Share Posted October 14, 2011 These are all fabulous, but two in particular stand out: Harai has a great upper body and arms, but his lower legs/feet are a bit small for me. Nui-Long: I LOVE this Chinese dragon! Don't worry about the color scheme, it looks great! Rivin Quote Signature Guidelines: Avatar and signature total file size may not exceed 100 KB! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Major Marvelous Posted October 15, 2011 Share Posted October 15, 2011 You've got some awesome Mocs here, JohannDakitsch. Since you posted so many of them, I'll go over the two that I like best and then glance over the other four.Let's begin with Ekaran and Kadin. I'm guessing Ekaran is the pilot and Kadin is the vehicle, so I'lll start with Ekaran first. At first glance, he looks like a basic Toa build, but once I saw some other views of him; I could see he has a cool design. The legs and head aren't anything fancy, but the torso and arms are a bit more interesting.The torso looks like it has a lot of articulation, with waist movement and shoulder movement. One thing that bugs me though is the skinniness. If you could find some way to add armor to the upper torso to cover the one-stud wide waist, that would fix most of the problem. Maybe you could try adding a lime green Hero Factory armor piece that would be long enough to cover that part.The arms are also skinny, but this seems more proportional to a normal body than the skinny waist. Also, the gears on the lower arms are out of place. If you removed them altogether and shortened the arms by one stud, you wouldn't have to worry about replacing the gears and the arms would still look good.So, basically, just remove the gears and make the waist less skinny and Ekaran could be even better. Now, I know that he is just the pilot so he needs to be simpler/skinnier to fit on the vehicle, so that would excuse some of the problems.So, now we get to the main part of the Moc, Kadin. It looks very sturdy and well put together. The front section looks a bit jumbled, but that's hard not to do if you want the vehicle to actually have shape rather than looking like a big block. The Fenrakk head piece on the front is what made me interested in this vehicle in the first place. It works very well there and helps make the vehicle a lot more smooth and dynamic. That is until you move further along and see the Thornax launcher piece. The groves in this piece ruin the smooth feel. I think if you removed it, the front would look a little more streamlined.When you get down to the cockpit, the Moc gets even better. I don't know why, but for some reason it just looks cool. It might have something to do with the tubes going through that section, I dunno. Speaking of the tubes, I think they're a nice touch throughout the Moc, although I think the Mahri tubes by where the rider places its feet are out of place.Then you get to the X-wings. I think the wings are what make this Moc look like an awesome futuristic aircraft it is. Their smoothness help you visualize them cutting through the air. The turbines are also equally impressive. I could imagine swooshing this Moc around in the air just for fun. Overall, Kadin is awesome. Just remove the Thornax launcher piece and it would be even more awesome.--------------------The second Moc I wanted to go over was Harai. The size of the thing is awesome all in itself. The two best parts are, in my opinion, the torso and the arms. The torso is very well constructed. It's great that someone found a use for the Piraka torso. The hunched L-shaped body works well with the Moc's gorilla arms.The arms are very cool looking. The use of various blades to create an oval shield-like shape makes them look aesthetically pleasing.The main problems that I can see with this Moc are in the legs. They look pretty skimpy compared to the rest of Moc. It kinda seems like you got tired designing them and just threw something together. In my opinion, you should just start over and try to build bulkier legs. Actually, if you took the legs from Devianox and used them here, that would fix the problem. Just a suggestion. Do that and this Moc will be amazing.--------------------Now a glance over rest of the Mocs:Grivok face looks... interesting to say the least. The hands and leg structure are good. The Ehlek claws on the legs look out of place. If you could, replace them with something less spiky and more rounded, such as a Bitil wing or the longest Hero Factory armor piece in silver. The color scheme seems a bit jumbled, if you could add more white to the torso, that might balance it out.Lygiros the Titan's legs are great, but the tire feet are kinda weird.The Nui-Long dragon looks pretty sweet. The color scheme is kinda bad. If you limited the colors to red and yellow/keetongu orange, it would bring more attention to how awesome this Moc is. Also, the back legs are a bit skimpy.Devianox reminds me of a Protoss Templar from Starcraft. The legs are great and the skeleton hands look cool. The elbows are kinda skinny. The tubes that connect the arms to the torso look out of place. If you removed them it would look better in my opinion.--------------------So, overall, you got some great Mocs here, along with the ones you didn't post. Hope you keep Mocing! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hey it's felix Posted October 15, 2011 Share Posted October 15, 2011 Johann! Good to see you around the forums. I'm quite impressed by Harai and Devianox in particular, as you probably know already. They're just so... bulky and ape-like.Why isn't Famine in here? D: -FtC Quote I have an old Flickr account here..Previously Feefeeri/Felix the Cat..I MOC sometimes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Obsessionist Posted October 15, 2011 Share Posted October 15, 2011 Some of these are old, right? Because I haven't seen any of them but Harai on the 'pages. I'm glad you're on BZP, too. Ekarin and Kadin is awsome, very sleek. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Oblivion Posted October 16, 2011 Share Posted October 16, 2011 Glad your going to be active over here Johann =D You already know that Harai and Devianox are my favorite MOCs of yours. The rest are decent, but not as good as the aforementioned two. Quote Twitter Instagram Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohannDakitsch Posted October 16, 2011 Author Share Posted October 16, 2011 (edited) Thank you all for commenting, people! Well, it happens all these MOCs are already dismantled (I always do that before starting new ones), but be sure I'll take your criticism in consideration on my next creations! I'll just make like you and do my comment on each MOC: Grivok: well, this one is the oldest of bunch.i've already done better stuff after it, but it still remains one of my favourites, as it was the first of my 'better wave' of MOCing. Its supposed to be quite skinny, as it was inspired by general Grievous, but I'm aware he could be better balanced. Ekaran & Kadin; The pilot, Ekaran, is pretty simple, and uses a recurring build style of mine for Toa-like MOCs, and wasn't much the focus here. But it was my first attempt at a flexible torso on a Toamod. I'll try others. As for the vehicle, Kadin (the name of the mask of flight, btw),I agre abotu the tornax laucher thing... However, if I remove it the front would look quite gappy, and I don't know wich would be the best. Probrably removing it would look better... Lygiros: Gotta say this one is my favourite. It just look right to me, its one of the few MOCs that came even better that I planned. My only problems about it are the shoulders and the speaker, wich didn't come up so good due to my lack of experience with System... Apart from those, I like it all.Btw,a s for the feet, they're supposed to be hoofs, like in a horse or bull... Harai: I agree with pretty much everything about the feet. Indeed, I got lazy doing them, as they wre the last part I built. But it was for a contest,and the deadline was very near, so... Nui-Long: people use to complain abotu its color scheme. To be true, ti would be a bit less colorful, but I ran out of the right pieces, so I imprivised. BUt, chinese dragons are quite colorful, and if you pay attention, there is a color padron, so believe me, there is some logic behind it. Devianox: well, I gotta agree with the joints, but they hold up well... Those limb thing on its waist were a last-minute addition, because the torso kept falling, so it was necessary... Johann! Good to see you around the forums. I'm quite impressed by Harai and Devianox in particular, as you probably know already. They're just so... bulky and ape-like.Why isn't Famine in here? D: -FtCThanks! Famine will be posted as separated, don't worry. Some of these are old, right? Because I haven't seen any of them but Harai on the 'pages. I'm glad you're on BZP, too. Ekarin and Kadin is awsome, very sleek. Not quite, they're all on my pages, just look them up (on MOCpages, tough, some are not showing yet) Edited October 16, 2011 by JohannDakitsch Quote The night is dark and full of terrors... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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