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#281 Offline Velox

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Posted Mar 07 2013 - 07:24 PM

Let us Remember -- Dual Matrix

 

Assigned to Tolkien.

 

 

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#282 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Mar 07 2013 - 11:43 PM

And Truth is reviewed.  Sorry for the lateness.


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#283 Offline Tolkien

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Posted Mar 11 2013 - 01:23 PM

Reviewed "Let us remember", by Dual Matrix.

 

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#284 Offline Zaxvo

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Posted Mar 12 2013 - 11:01 PM

And I've finished my review of our very own Velox's poem Eldritch Abomination.
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#285 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Mar 13 2013 - 10:09 AM

The Luckiest Grandfather in the World is reviewed.


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#286 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted Mar 13 2013 - 11:13 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Thank goodness I had that extra week; I needed every day of it. [/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]A Jaunt in the Woods[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);],[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);] and also [/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]O Dark Legion[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);],[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);] reviewed.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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Posted Mar 14 2013 - 12:41 AM

Edit: "Someone's Waiting For You", reviewed. For this week:

 

Velox: The Story Behind a Picture, by Kraggh

Nuile: Rainbow Powers, by Kraggh

Yukiko: Leaving on a Jet Plane, by Kraggh

Zaxvo: Shredded Radiance, by Zarayna

 

Yes, it looks like we've come to the Kraggh section of OTC. =P Due March 20th.

 

 

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#288 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted Mar 20 2013 - 08:50 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]We have traversed the highest peaks of OTC, and now we explore the deepest Kragghs.Yes, that was a very bad pun.[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]Rainbow Powers[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], reviewed.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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#289 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Mar 20 2013 - 11:00 PM

Leaving on a Jet Plane has been reviewed.


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Posted Mar 20 2013 - 11:14 PM

Shredded Radiance has been reviewed.
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#291 Offline Velox

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Posted Mar 21 2013 - 12:41 AM

And I have reviewed "The Story Behind a Picture." For this week:

 

Velox: Endgame, by Chro

Nuile: Paradise, by Alex Humva

Yukiko: Accomplishment, by Kakaru

Zaxvo: Nixie Lands on an Island, by Kraggh

 

Due March 27th. Thanks guys!

 

 

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Posted Mar 21 2013 - 02:13 PM

My semi-ocd is weeping that I didn't get the Kraggh story last week when everyone else did lol.Anyway, here's the review.
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#293 Offline Tolkien

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Posted Mar 22 2013 - 11:45 AM

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Might as well take the opportunity to request a review:[/font]

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]The Power, by Tolkien.[/font]

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]JRRT[/font]


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Posted Mar 22 2013 - 01:15 PM

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Might as well take the opportunity to request a review:[/font]

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]The Power, by Tolkien.[/font]

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]JRRT[/font]

 

Assigned to Nuile. 

 

 

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Posted Mar 23 2013 - 06:00 PM

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]I would appreciate review of the below story. As always, I look forward to your advice, and thank you for your time.[/font]

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"] Rebirth - Replicant.[/font]


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Posted Mar 23 2013 - 08:51 PM

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]I would appreciate review of the below story. As always, I look forward to your advice, and thank you for your time.[/font]

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"] Rebirth - Replicant.[/font]

 

Sure thing! Assigned to Yukiko.

 

 

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Posted Mar 27 2013 - 09:19 PM

Accomplishment has been reviewed.


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Posted Mar 28 2013 - 01:09 AM

I reviewed Paradise, by Alex Humva, because Nuile accidentally reviewed Endgame and I didn't want to make him review another thing. =P This week:

 

Velox: Being the Only Girl, by SkyLandOceAnnaNuile: Newfound Land, by Alex Humva (giving you another go for Alex =P)

Zaxvo: Beyond the Ridge of Tears, by Tolkien

 

(Yukiko exempt due to assignment) Due...wow it's April already. April 3rd. Thanks guys. 

 

 

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Posted Mar 29 2013 - 08:16 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Late, but better than never, Tolkien's [/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]The Power[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);] has been reviewed. If you were looking for harsh criticism, co-boss, I'm sorry to disappoint you. =P This was a spectacular story and I highly recommend it.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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Posted Mar 31 2013 - 12:59 PM

I have reviewed Rebirth.


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Posted Apr 04 2013 - 12:20 AM

In lieu of the Easter holiday/Spring Break (yeah I know, a little late, but I didn't think about it last week and wanted to give people a week off), I'll be extending the deadline one week (if you need it) and not assigning another charity cycle this week, so have fun with the week off, guys. =] (though of course all official assignments still have their due dates as stated). I'll be assigning new reviews next Wednesday as usual.


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Posted Apr 04 2013 - 04:43 PM

Woah, sorry about that. Somehow I thought it was due the 4th.Anyhow, here's the review to Beyond the Ridge of Tears.
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Posted Apr 06 2013 - 05:15 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Newfound Land reviewed[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], as of three days ago.Reporting. Reporting my reviews is important. =P[/color] 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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Posted Apr 11 2013 - 01:11 AM

Here's the next batch:

 

Velox: Sinking by Tekulo

Nuile: Settlers of Disaster, by Chro

Yukiko: Coloring Between the Lines, Thinking Outside the Box, by Aderia

Zaxvo: And We Are Only Human, by Chro

 

Due April 17th. Thanks guys! 

 

 

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Posted Apr 11 2013 - 04:22 PM

Velox, since I'm part of the team now, may I ask which story I have to review?
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Posted Apr 11 2013 - 07:05 PM

Ah right, I forgot to assign you one because I was waiting for your reply first. But here you go:

 

Dual Matrix: Ending, by Tekulo

 

And with that, as an announcement: We do indeed have a new critic, Dual Matrix! It's good to have another hand on deck. ^_^

 

 

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Posted Apr 15 2013 - 05:46 PM

[color=#008080;][font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]I'd like to request a review:[/color][/font]

 

[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"][color=#008080;]West of Po-Koro[/color][color=#008080;], by X-Ray[/color][/font]

 

[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"][color=#008080;]:akaku: X-Ray :akaku:[/color][/font]


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Posted Apr 15 2013 - 07:00 PM

[color=#008080;][font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]I'd like to request a review:[/color][/font]

 

[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"][color=#008080;]West of Po-Koro[/color][color=#008080;], by X-Ray[/color][/font]

 

[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"][color=#008080;] :akaku: X-Ray :akaku:[/color][/font]

 

Assigned to Zaxvo. Thanks for choosing the SSCC! 

 

 

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Posted Apr 15 2013 - 09:23 PM

I'll get on that one.Here's the review of And Are We Only Human.
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Posted Apr 16 2013 - 02:22 PM

Ending is reviewed by Dual Matrix:

 

A very short but enjoyable story, good descriptions and well-chosen theme, not much to review though...


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Posted Apr 17 2013 - 06:45 PM

Coloring Between the Lines, Thinking Outside the Box has been reviewed.


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Posted Apr 18 2013 - 12:27 AM

And I have reviewed Sinking, by Tekulo

 

Velox: Special, by Ezorov

Nuile: Pink Bow, by SkyLandOceAnna

Yukiko: Disturbed Zen, by Ilyusha Blokfase

Zaxvo: Allison, by Zo'Tomana

Dual Matrix: A Cry Ignored, by Nick Silverpen

 

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Posted Apr 21 2013 - 09:52 PM

And here's West of Po-Koro reviewed.
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Posted Apr 23 2013 - 05:10 PM

Through The gates of Eternity(http://www.bzpower.c...ndpost&p=536680) -- Dual MatroxI'm extremely tired and just would like to say it appears something went wrong with the copying and pasting and the most down part is missing, just not that, as I will fix it tomorrow.
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Posted Apr 24 2013 - 09:26 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]I needed every day, nearly every hour, of that extra week. But by the skin of my teeth:[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Settlers of Disaster[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], reviewed.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]and[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Pink Bow[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], reviewed.[/color]

 

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]On another note: Welcome to the team, Dual Matrix! Always the more, the merrier.[/color]

 

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]And now I would like to request a review for myself:[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]The Eye of the Storm[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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Posted Apr 24 2013 - 10:54 PM

Here's the review for Allison.

Edited by Zaxvo, Apr 24 2013 - 11:01 PM.

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Posted Apr 24 2013 - 11:22 PM

I have reviewed Disturbed Zen.


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Posted Apr 25 2013 - 12:02 AM

I feel sorry to ask, but life this week was not so nice, I've got most of my review ready, just a few final tweaks, could I please get 1 day more? Next week and the week after that are sure to be npt a problem.
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Posted Apr 25 2013 - 12:28 AM

@ Dual Matrix ~ Yeah, that's fine. Just keep in mind that for official reviews, you'll need to give me notice within four days after the review is assigned; for charity reviews, things are less strict so you're fine. 

 

Through The gates of Eternity(http://www.bzpower.c...ndpost&p=536680) -- Dual MatroxI'm extremely tired and just would like to say it appears something went wrong with the copying and pasting and the most down part is missing, just not that, as I will fix it tomorrow.

 

Assigned to myself.

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]The Eye of the Storm[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith[/color]

 

And assigned to our newest critic, Dual Matrix. 

 

Charity Reviews for this week:

 

Velox: Unfortunately I'm going to have to take this week off.

Nuile: The Hardest Thing to Hold, by Legolover

Yukiko: Attic Treasure, by Velox

Zaxvo: Somewhere, by Alex Humva

Dual Matrix: Creation, by Ilyusha Blokfase

 

Due 5/1. Thanks guys.


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Posted Apr 25 2013 - 04:37 PM

Finally, take that Life! After all you trew at me I still did it:A cry Ignore reviewed by Dual Matrix: A short story woth amazong descriptions, but not much to review on.I hower feel to tired to do anything else and mist continue to my math work, bye.
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