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  1. Thanks guys. I knew those mata feet were sticking out but I wasn't sure about what to use instead. About the touch of keetorange that Zakaro pointed out: I added it because there was already some on the Malum claws and a very few on the fire shells, and thought it'd be nice as tertiary color.

  2. HF's storyline is too simple to bring back old characters as part of a new adventure (more than just a cameo appearance) and thus connect single story arcs to each other like Bionicle. Which means I don't think he'll return. Unless HF's storyline is evolving. Anyway, I guess we don't have a chance to see a new Von Nebula set.

  3. "Spoiler: one is gold, one is orange, one is a Makuta, and one is a mecha."So, the Makuta MOC is this one. The Demon Makuta. King of a demon army in a volcanic land long, loooong ago, in the shadows, when the universe was still a WIP, when Matorans didn't exist yet.This land will later be named Karzahni, by the way.000_0005.jpgClick on the pic for gallery.He's got a whip for disobedient demons. And yes I managed to put the Fire Throwbot visor on the Kraahkan. Thoughts?

  4. Clockspirit:Even though he doesn't really look like one, this guy reminds me of a spider. Perhaps it's the skinny arms and cute little Visorak head. Not jaw-droppingly amazing, but very nice and original. 7.5/10Cascade 5.0:Alright, you just set a new standard for Hero MOCs. The Bionicle pieces look very well alongside the HF ones. He is kind of reminiscent of Keena, which is most cool (unless he also speaks like Kiina. That wouldn't be so cool). Despite his mission though, I'm not sure if I like that flame piece. 9.5/10

    Thanks! Clockspirit reminds me of a spider too, but also of Lampent and Chandelure.

    I really like Clockspirit. It makes excellent use of both the playset Visorak and those...whatever-you-call-thems that make up the arms - both of which are difficult pieces to use - and looks great doing it.Cascade is great as well. The integration of Technic pieces to the HF skeleton is top-notch, and it flows quite well overall (no pun intended). However, I do think that this would look better if the red pieces were removed. While three colors is sometimes okay, red just contrasts far too much with the white and blue. Overall, this is certainly one of the best basic HF mods that I've seen. :t: :b: :3:

    Thanks, it's the first time I use the whatever pieces. I guess you're right about red.

    Clockspirit: It's cool how that Visorak is being used. The arms give me a feeling that it's like some sort of ghost spirit which is pretty awesome.Cascade 5.0: He looks great. The shield is unique and the colors are great. He sort of reminds me of Berix.

    Ghost spirit. That's pretty much what it's supposed to be. Glad you like them.

    About Clockspirit, I liked very much how you used that old Visorak minifig, but the overall isn't that fantastic. 6.9/10Cascade, instead, is a very good one. 9.1/10----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

    Thanks, Lord of Mordor. Clockspirit is just a tablescrap.

    I think Clockspirit could be benefited by gears on his torso, on the shoulders.

    Good idea.
  5. So guys. I've new MOCs, but they aren't finished yet. So I decided to show one that I made before Shieldask.ClockspiritInspired by a clock pendulum, that's why it's called Clockspirit. Just wanted to find an use for those strange black pieces from Axalara T9. A 3 minutes MOC.000e0023.jpg_thumb.jpgNot my best, but it was fun to make.Another one:Cascade 5.0A new Hero project: trying to armor HF bones with Bionicle pieces. So here is Cascade 5.0, who has to recapture an Ice Villain on an icy planet. That's why his Multi-Tool Ice Shield has a flame generator. Don't know about you, but for me this guy looks kinda like Kiina.cascade.jpg_thumb.jpgNot my best too, but at least it's not the boring Hero build. Plus, he has back armor. :biggrin:Next MOCs: the ones I have to finish. Spoiler: one is orange, one is gold, one is a Makuta, and one is a mecha.Enjoy. C&C welcomed.Edit: The images were a bit over 100 kB, so I thumbnailed them. Please try to keep the file size to 100 kB or less in BBC.-Wind-

  6. Thanks everyone! :)

    Woah! Such excellent combination of Bionicle, Technic, System and HF. This has a great design, robotic and very cohesive. It seems like the knees wouldn't articulate too well, but you tell me. The right arm is too black, considering the light grey HF left upper arm. The bohrok plates ought to be the same, I think. it makes the MOC look more unified if the same type of pieces (HF, Technic, etc.) are the same color. Especially with Bionicle parts, and particularly with the larger ones, it is very noticeable when a pattern is disrupted (or in this case, fails to exist when it seems like there should be one). Anywhoo, very nicely done.a_peace.png

    Actually the knees articulate well and don't break in pieces. Ah, finally someone who notices what I've done to the arms. Well, since the left arm is light grey with a black weapon, I decided to invert this color scheme for the right arm: black with a light grey weapon. Why? Because I only have one light grey short HF upper limb.Hmm, I knew there was too much black in the torso, and tried to use least black pieces as possible. Glad you like it.

    I love the character of this guy! The feet and legs look really cool. I would have kept the lower legs even more thin, but that's just me. The feet are a really nice shape. The torso is brilliant, not much more to say about that. The shield arm is a bit weak, and a bit too simple. It might me alot better if you made the shield a bit more mechanical or added a simple, mechanical hand to it. The other arm is great. Well done!

    The shield arm is the last thing I built in the MOC. I guess I was tired and didn't want to spend another hour for the last piece of a MOC that's destined to competition. Lol. Thanks anyway.
  7. I like how you've used the Bohrok and Toa bodies to build the body of the bike. It has a good flow to it, whereas those pieces usually seem too bulky in MOCs. The green color was pulled off nicely, although I do think the wheels could be better. The figure itself isn't too exciting, but grey with green works well enough, and after all it's the bike that's supposed to stand out. Nice job. http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/cool.png :music:

    Thanks. I chose those wheels because their color was close to gunmetal, as I wanted the Bike's color scheme to look like the Hero's.

    The colours. Oh, those glorious colours of Mata Green and lime :wub: . Ok, lets start with the Hero.Swamp 2.0 is very, very nice. The colours are beautiful and those guns on his back are really cool. Mata feet look great there.Bike: When I saw the first picture, I thought the bike and rider were one. That is how perfectly these two are suited for themselves. The use of those Mata and Bohrok body parts are great, the bike has an 01-03 feel because of them. Yet it still looks good with Heroes. Those blades on the front are really great. Perhaps the only part I'm not a fan of are the wheels. In a swampy enviroment, these would get caught in the muck and would just get the bike caught in it. Perhaps for a swamp bike other wheels with treads would work better. Even so, this is a definite 9.95/10

    Thanks Ehlekdude! Yeah, I dislike how the '08 vehicles clashed with their drivers so I made two green MOCs here. Sadly I don't have treads that are big enough, maybe should I put Baranus wheels.

    Woah, all I can say is awesome bike, awesome rider. The use of large pieces is astounding, and makes it look Bionicle-esque yet still very cohesive and inventive. Yet ... to much Mata green. If all the liftarms were lime, then I think the color layering could be improved a great deal. The solid color makes the great design blend together.Superb work, regardless. a_peace.png

    Well I don't think I have many lime liftarms. Glad you like it.

    While this is a superb creation, it could improve.The wheels on the bike could be changed to something less metallic, and some of the Mata-green on the bike could be switched to light green. The blue pins could also be changed to black.The rider is okay, but I would loose one color and spread out the color-scheme a bit more. The Mata Green looks a bit odd as feet for a Hero. I would also get rid of the trans name-tag plates, they stick out a bit too much.Finally, the Shooting Device. Although it's a cool concept, it's not that great. The things that I believe are guns could be more flowing, and the limb pieces a bit more complex. I also have an aversion to just the use of guns.Overall, a pretty neat MOC.

    The SD was an afterthought... I always thought I should have leaved the MOC without it, but then, I'm pretty sure some people would have said "It has no weapons?" so... And lol I knew about the blue pins but simply forgot to change them. I used the trans-green plates because it's the best I have for mata green shells. Thanks anyway.
  8. Interesting.I agree with you that the Akaku isn't the best mask for a Rahi. A Pakari or Kakama would have worked better. However, the world of MOCing has no limits, and trying to incorporate an Akaku in a Rahi MOC is hard, but great.Skull Monkey: It looks great, actually, and reminds me of Kardas. What's annoying is that the Akaku looks random here.Gearbox: The Akaku fits well there because the Rahi is kinda mechanical. That's like a Manas. I like it and its blueness.Preying Mantis: Probably my favorite. It just needs pincers.Rainbow Snake: Oh yeah its face looks damaged by acid. It's still a nice idea. If I was you, I'd just add a little more red shells to suit the mask.Vatuka: This one is cool. Reminds me of a golem. And an ape. A golem ape. Good use of Ben 10 pieces.Overall, good job! You managed to incorporate an Akaku in Rahi MOCs. Can't wait to see other Rahi topics. And nice little Matorans btw. http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/cool.png

  9. This is my 700th post! And my latest MOC.I just wanted to make something green, and then remembered I wanted to make a decent vehicle too, so I made a mata green vehicle.This is Swamp 2.0 and his Swamp Bike.swampbike.jpgWhy did I choose a Hero as driver? Because I already saw vehicles built for chibified Heroes, and thought it'd be great to see one for a normal Hero.000_0010.jpg_thumb.jpgThis 15th MOC of 2012 is made of three parts: Swamp 2.0, the Bike, and the Shooting Device (SD for short).The SD can be put on and used by either the Bike or Swamp.Yes, the Bike is semi-sentient. Because it's powered with a Quaza crystal. But it has no brain and thus can't feel pain. Isn't that great, for a driver, to have a (semi) sentitent bike?000_0011.jpg000_0012.jpgC&C welcomed.

  10. Haha Cute. It has a very Throwbots-like feel to it, which being a retro Lego fan, just speaks out to my heart. While I like the weapons you put on it are very nicely done, I couldn't really see this as a battle mech with it's lack of armor. Work bot? Of course. Scout? Maybe. But that's really about it. Though seeing it's overall style, I think that it really shouldn't be bulked up. All in all, it's a fun little MOC. 8/10Oh, and welcome back to BZP. :)

    Thanks, yeah I think it's not really a battle mech, the weapons are there just to defend himself. Glad you like it :)

    Nice MOC! The head is very nice build, nice use of technic suspensions and kanohi. The shield and gun are kinda small, though, a big gun/cannon would be nice I think. Good luck for the MOC-off BTW :biggrin:

    Thank you! Yep I know about the gun. But I guess this guy should definitely not be a war mech he's too thin XD. Good luck for you too.
  11. I'm baaaack! I know I missed a while. That's due to school, and another password forgetting. But now, BZPers, I'm back for good and next time I'll miss a while, it'll mean we'll be in Downtime Era.Here's another MOC of mine, probably one of my best actually. This is a mecha named Shieldask, made for my second MOC-off in the Piece Out group, against christo1096.001.jpgGalleryAnd, guess what, the nuhvok shield used as head has no connection points what-so-ever. It's simply stuck between the three wheel pieces.005.jpgEnjoy! C&C welcomed as always.

  12. Chapter 11: Kalmah is hilarious. The Kopaka part made me laugh too. It seems he's never at house and just sends messages, right? And "Nuju's Ice Cream" sounds funny.Chapter 12: Lol I like name problems. I was expecting to see some in your comedy. This chapter is a little short, but who cares. An hilarious quote is:

    Brutaka: Iruini, do you want to get shot in the head?Iruini: What do you THINK?Brutaka: Well, Commander said you do, so I can do you that small favour.Iruini: Well, I don't. Are you really that stupid?Brutaka: Even if you don't, you should NEVER call someone with a bazooka stupid. *shoots Iruini*

    Just wondering, is Iruini a Toa or a Rahaga?Keep up good work. http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/cool.png
  13. Chapter 9: The HF Invasion-----------Evo: I'm happy!Nex: And why?Evo: Because I've a new samurai armor with a big gun arm, while you're still a little tiger.Nex: Grumble. Who said I was little?Evo: Me, of course.Me: To be honest, I don't like the new core.Evo: Who cares? I see a small villain here.Kanokuaza: I'm not a villain! *throws his head/disk on Evo*Meanwhile at Mata Nui's house...*toc toc!*Mata Nui (opening the door): Yeah?Kopaka: I've heard you didn't save Pohatu from drowning. *shoots Mata Nui*Gali: What have you done?Kopaka: Nothing. I'm back, btw.Gali: And Tahu?Kopaka: He's trapped somewhere in the frozen sea.Narrator: Then let's see what happens to him.Tahu: Who will save me?Furno: Hero Factory is here! Too bad I can't go underwater it's all frozen.Jawblade: Help me too!Furno: Of course. *shoots Jawblade*Tahu: What about me?Furno: Have you forgotten you've the power of fire?Tahu: Oh yeah I have. *melts the sea* I'm free!Jawblade: I am too!Tahu: Goodbye Bill! *swims away*At the bank...Takadox: Yeah! I took the bank over! I'll be rich forever!Brutaka: It depends. Police is here!Evo: No, Hero Factory is here! *shoots Brutaka*Takadox: Slave, I order you to attack those dumbs!Toxic Reapa: spits toxic flames and burns the bank.During that time, at school...Black Phantom: Where is my brother, Fire Minotaur? Answer or I'll shoot you!Nokama: What are you doing here, terrorist?BP: You haven't answered me, so I'll shoot you!Rocka comes and blocks the shot with his shield.Rocka: Fear me, Black Phantom. I'm a boss!BP: Tell me where Fire Minotaur is. We have to take the world over!Kirop: May I help you?Rocka: Follow me, renegades. We'll find Fire Minotaur- err I mean Fire Lord.Reidak: Have you heard of the other Piraka, Daniel?Rocka: Hakann and Vezok are glued somewhere in a dark, narrow street. Dunno about Thok and Avak. And call me Boss.Reidak: Okay, Daniel.Rocka: Let's go before I kill him.Reidak: Goodbye, Daniel!Rocka: shoots Reidak.In the desert, near the Iron Canyon...Avak: It's cool to fly. This bug is fantastic!Thornraxx: I'm not a bug, I'm Thornraxx. And if I carry you two on my back, it's just because you gave me cookies.Thok: I've a plan. We'll kill The Shadowed One and take his place.Avak: At first let's find him.Thornraxx: Is that this guy?Avak: No it's a Skrall.Skrall: I'm not a Skrall, I'm Branar!Thok: Have you seen TSO, Branar? Branar: No. Don't even know who's this guy.TSO: It's me!Thok: Yay! Thornraxx, you can leave us!Thornraxx: Bye. (lets the Piraka fall on sand)TSO: What are you guys doing here? I could kill you. And I'm going to do it.Thok: Actually, I am going to kill you. *pushes TSO in the canyon* I'm the new leader of the Dark Hunters!Avak: We are the new leaders of the Dark Hunters.Thok: You didn't even kill him.Avak: But I'll kill you.*pushes Thok in the canyon* I'm the only new leader!Pridak: Now you'll have to face Pridak the Great.Back to the city...Onua: Yay, a breakout! Well I'm free.Surge: An escaped villain! Die! *shoots Onua with his water pistol*Onua: I'm a Toa, kid. And your weapon is just a toy.Surge: I've this too. *takes out his sword and knocks Onua with an electric shock*Lewa: Anyone who attacks my buddy must die! *makes a piano falling on Surge* How are you, Onua?Onua: Pretty good. Where are the others?Lewa: Gali and Kopaka are quarrelling, Pohatu is dead, Takanuva is watching TV, and I don't know about Tahu, but who cares.Pohatu: No I'm alive.Lewa and Onua: :blink:Pohatu: Those guys in the Red Star teleported me, believing I was Mavrah. When they realized I wasn't him, a hatch opened and I fell on a mattress.Onua: You're so lucky.Lewa: Well I guess Kopaka killed Mata Nui for nothing. And he'll be thrown in jail for nothing. And he'll escape for nothing.In the forest...Breez: Since Thornraxx is innoffensive, I have to arrest Bulk.Bulk: I don't want to go in jail. I like forest.Breez: They'll free you when they'll have to upgrade you.Bulk: I don't want to be upgraded. I like being a werewolf.Breez: And killing people?Bulk: Yeah. *stabs Breez*Back to the city...Tarix: The bank is burning and there were people inside! We firemen must save them! *floods the bank*Kiina: I see people going out.Evo: The epic samurai is alive!Brutaka: So is the epic Brutaka. And that poisonous, flame-handed guy, even if he escaped in another direction.Evo: But Takadox perished. He liked gold too much.Brutaka: That's a good thing, because I was running out of cells. Until "they" broke out, of course...Tarix: So you don't need help. Bye bye.Hakann's voice: Then help us!Tarix: Where are you?Hakann: In this dark, narrow street! Ehlekdude glued us to the ground!Tarix: Who's with you?Vezok: Me!Tarix: I can't see very well... *lights a match*Kiina: Fiiiiire! *floods Tarix*Tarix: Are you mad, Kiina?Hakann: Yay, glue is gone with water!Brutaka: Pirakas! They must be arrested!Hakann: Oh no.A tall, half-black half-red being is walking alone toward the Author's castle. He certainly has bad purposes.Narrator: What will happen to Furno and Jawblade? Will Tahu eventually come back to the City? Will Rocka, Black Phantom and Kirop find Fire Lord? Where is Toxic Reapa gone? Will Avak defeat Pridak the Great? And what is Splitface planning?Me: That's a lot of questions and they'll be answered in the next chapter.End of Chapter 9Word count: 972
  14. Like everyone I'd want a new team, I'm getting tired of seeing multiple versions of Stormer and Bill. Wait, I mean Furno.Not sure about names. Frost and Tantalus, Hero MOCs of mine, would be cool as sets.Colors: I'd like to see darker green, teal, purple, tan, grey, and darker blue or red armor pieces. Brown would be awesome, but I doubt Lego will ever release this color in HF sets. :/Anyway, we need a new female Hero, a rogue Hero (Tantalus?), and a black Hero Core. And Bionicle pieces.About villains, I dunno, as long as they have interesting pieces. I'd like an Ice Villains theme with trans-light blue shell pieces though.

  15. Well it's up earlier than I believed.Chapter 8: The Fire-Spitter------------Narrator: Why isn't this chapter named "The Birth of Splitface"?Me: Don't reveal spoilers!Narrator: =PRocka: I'm baaack! And I'm XL-armored! Guess why?Ehlekdude: Why?Rocka: Because I have to arrest a villain named Blackface. I've heard he's somewhere in the forest.Ehlekdude: I come with you!Later.Rocka: Yo, Blackface! Where are you?Blackface: Here!Ehlekdude: He's stupid enough to answer you.Rocka: Yeah.A greyish black, Thunder-shaped being emerges from a bush.Blackface: Die, Rocka! *shoots Rocka*Rocka: falls on Ehlekdude.Ehlekdude: You almost crushed me, big fat lion!A voice in the forest: Blackface, where are you?Blackface: Here!A red, bulky, dragon-headed guy comes.Ehlekdude: What's your name?Red dragonman: I'm Splitfire, the fire-spitter!Ehlekdude: But why aren't you named Spitfire?Splitfire: Because the Author did a spelling error on my name. Anyway, I'm here to kill Blackface, my second worst ennemy.Ehlekdude: And who's your first worst ennemy?Splitfire: Hero Factory, of course.Blackface: Die, Splitfire! *shoots the dragonman* Oh #### it doesn't work. *throws the pistol away*Splitfire: Die, Blackface! *spits fire and burns the forest*Gali: I'm here! *makes a rain fall*Ehlekdude: I just glued them, so shoot them now.Gali: I just have a Kanoka launcher because I forgot my Nynrah blaster. *shoots Blackface and Splitfire and makes them merging* Oh no it was a Kanoka disk of fusion!Fusion: I'm half-red half-black. I'm the evil Splitface!Ehlekdude: Or Blackfire. Now let's go away before Bulk finds us.Gali: And Rocka?Rocka: I'll stay here to stop Bulk.Ehlekdude: And get killed. Splitface, come with us!Splitface: No, I have to organize the Breakout because Black Phantom is incompetent.Bulk (popping out of thin air): Good idea. *stabs Rocka*Ehlekdude: glues Bulk and runs away.Gali: Don't forget meeeee!!!Meanwhile in the castle...Someone: *toc toc*Me: Come on.Meltdown: Hello! Where's Kalmah?Me: A Scorpio has eaten him.Meltdown: Oh darn. He was a fool, but he was still my brother. I used to visit him every ten years, just to see if he was still alive.Me: Don't worry I can bring him back using my awesome powers.Kalmah: I'm baaack!Meltdown: Kalmah! My fool brother!Kalmah: Meltdown! Glad to see you again, radioactive cyclop!Meltdown: What's up since last time?Kalmah: Well... I'm still alive.Narrator: It seems villains are popping out here and there due to the Breakout. In the sea of Aqua Magna...Tahu: I'd better to learn how to swim since nobody helps me.Jawblade: I can help you... with my teeth.Tahu: Aaah! An ugly shark! Help!Jawblade: Raises his swords to kill Tahu.Kopaka: Freezes the sea.Tahu: Oh, good job. I'm now trapped in an immense frozen sea with a mad shark.Kopaka: At least you're alive, Mister Never-Satisfied. Good bye.Elsewhere...Takadox: Suddenly, I feel I'm no longer alone.Toxic Reapa: Raaaah! *spits toxic flames*Takadox: Hypnotizes Toxic Reapa.Toxic Reapa: What must I do, master?Takadox: You'll help me taking the bank over, toxic slave.And elsewhere...Hakann: Yay, a breakout!Brutaka: Stop!Avak: imprisons Brutaka in a psychic cell.Hakann: Since Zaktan is gone years ago, we need a new leader. In other words, me. -_-Thok: No, me.Hakann: Remember what happened last time you shared power with me?Thok: Well, I'll be the only leader. *freezes Hakann* Who wants to come with me?Avak: Me!Vezok: I prefer staying with Hakann.Thok: Then our team is broken. Goodbye.Avak: imprisons Vezok.Vezok: Hey!In the desert of Bara Magna...Ackar: We're here to hunt a Scorpio and eat it, but we don't find it.Gresh: You don't find it, 'cause you're a noob.Ackar: Hold your tongue, kid. I see something big coming.Fire Lord: Where is my brother, Phantom Lord? Answer or I'll shoot you!Ackar: Wow! I never saw a Scorpio like this!Gresh: It's a minotaur with jetpacks, noob. And it looks angry.Ackar: Who cares. For me it's a big Scorpio.Fire Lord: You didn't answer me, so I'll shoot you! *shoots lava spheres on Ackar*Gresh: Runs away.Mr Makuro: So I guess we'll have to upgrade our good old Alpha team. End of chapter 8.Word count: 704.
  16. Well for once you won't have to wait too much.Chapter 7: The Mad Doctor---------Part 1: And his mad patients--------Me: Do you remember what happened, reader? Because I don't.Anonymous Reader: Yep. You and Ehlekdude have to stop a crazy doctor named Vezon.Me: Oh right. Let's go!Ehlekdude: Knocks at Vezon's door.Vezon (opening the door): Come on! Who are you?Me: I'm the Author, unspiked Piraka. And this guy is my friend Ehlekdude.Vezon: I'm not a Piraka.Me: Then you're a Skakdi.Vezon: I'm not a Skakdi.Me: Then what are you?Vezon: I'm a doctor! Now sit down and tell me your problem.Me: Well, our problem is you.Ehlekdude: Can we see your patients? We're... hmm... expert doctors who want to know if you do a good job.Vezon: Of course you can see them! Why didn't you tell me this before, mister?Ehlekdude: What's up, Leafix?Leafix: ROAAAAAAAR !!!Ehlekdude: What happened to him?Vezon: Oh, I simply replaced his brain with a Muaka's. And vice versa.Muaka (with Leafix's voice): Help me! This guy is mad!Vezon: Trust me, I'm the Doctor.Me: I already heard this somewhere.Ehlekdude (to Vezon): Do you have other patients?Vezon: Yup. Look at this dwarf. He said he's named Nuju.Nuju: *squeaks furiously*Ehlekdude: Why is he speaking so weirdly?Vezon: Dunno. He must be mad. Anyway, he said "I'm not a dwarf!"Muaka: This place is full of weird people. There's even a living Kanoka launcher.Ehlekdude: Where?Kanokuaza: Here! My name is Kanokuaza! Fear me and my spikish arms!Me: Oh no. A Quaza-corrupted Kanoka launcher. And a MOC of mine.Ehlekdude: Really?Me: Yep.Kanokuaza: I'm not a MOC! I don't have a master!Vezon: Oh, shut up.Kanokuaza: Throws his disk/head on Vezon.Kanokuaza: I lost my head!Vezon: You said you're doctors? Well, you have to try my brain exchanger.Ehlekdude: No!Meanwhile in the Author's castle...Scorpio: kss kss!Rocka: I don't want ending up being eaten by a Scorpio.Narrator: Neither do I.Rocka: Then let's jump out by the window, okay?Narrator: Okay.And they jump out.Scorpio: Grrrrrrrrrrr!Kalmah: Have you guys forgotten me?Scorpio: walks towards Kalmah.Kalmah: Fear the tentacled Barraki!Scorpio: eats Kalmah.Meanwhile in the sea of Aqua Magna...In the floating cell/ship, Tahu wakes up.Tahu: Where am I? *goes out and falls in the water* Help me! I hate water!He's rescued by a boat that was sailing around.Tahu: Thank you very much! Who are you?Nektann: It's me, stupid victim!Tahu: Aaargh! The nasty killer Nektann! You don't want to kill me again, do you?Nektann: Yes I do.Tahu: Goodbye. *jumps in water* Wait... I hate water. Help me!Another boat rescues him.Tahu: Thanks! Who are you?Kopaka: It's me. I'm back.Tahu: Argh! Kopaka! I hate you! *jumps in water* I hate water, too. Help meee!!!Kopaka: Good luck. *goes away*--------Part 2: We need to take risks sometimes.-------Me: Wow Ehlekdude, your body is better than I believed! I love controlling glue!Ehlekdude: Can't say so much about you...Vezon: What do you think of my brain exchanger?Me: It's great!Ehlekdude: It sucks!Me: Now take this, mad Doctor. *glues Vezon to his desk*Vezon: You betrayed me!Me: You betrayed us too.Vezon: Because I knew you'd betray me.Me: Then why didn't you run away?Vezon: I wasn't sure.Me: Then shut up.Leafix: jumps and destroys Vezon's brain exchanger.Ehlekdude: Oh, good job! Now I'm trapped in this body!Muaka: So am I.Me: Let's go to my castle, we'll find a way to repair this.Nuju: *squeaks*Ehlekdude: What?Me: I think he said "Don't forget me".Kanokuaza: Don't forget me too!Me: Okay. Good bye, doctor!Vezon: curses the Author.Me: slips on a banana peel.Vezon: Yay it worked! I'm the new Witch Doctor!Later to the castle...Scorpio: kss kss!Me: Don't annoy us. *throws Scorpio through the window*Ehlekdude: What happened to Rocka and Mister Pointless? Wait, I don't care about Mister Pointless.Me: I don't care about both of them.Muaka: So what do we do now? Me: I don't know.Muaka: Oh cool.Me: Let's reflect.Three hours later...Muaka: What's up?Me: Nothing.Ehlekdude: Couldn't you use your awesome powers?Me: Remember, I'm in your body. And I don't suggest trying something with my body. You could make the entire city explode.Ehlekdude: I see you trust me.Me: Yeah, because I'm going to ask you to try something.Ehlekdude: Really?Me: Yes. You'll make the entire city explode, but who cares... Ehlekdude: You Splitface. *tries something**the city explodes*Me: Yay I'm back in my good old body!Ehlekdude: So am I.Leafix: Hurrah for Ehlekdude!Me: *using my awesome powers, I recreate the city* And now let's have new adventures! Next chapter: The Fire-Spitter.Word count: 801
  17. The upper legs would look better if they were black instead of grey, and those silver rahkshi heads stick out. Other than that, it's awesome! I like the upper torso/shoulders area and head. The cape works very well there. Oh and the hands would maybe need fingers. Overall good job.

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