Athmos

I guess I can see how this show gained popularity, but then it's gonna end some day, and all y'all are gonna forget about it as fast as you got into it.

IC(Tajeh):As the Takea Shark swam closer and closer, Tajeh began swimming for the nearest pad he could see.The shark, sensing that it's prey was fleeing, darted off like a torpedo after him, missing Tajeh's legs by inches.

I turn words upside down, see what they look like, pronouce it and if I like it, I move it to the next stage of naming. I then alter the words order a little, add a few or take a few out, pronouce it and if I like it, it's goes to my list of names to use.

IC(Tajeh): Tajeh decided to give his newly crafted boat a try around Ga-Koro, just to see if it could handle the water. Gently, gently,Tajeh thought to himself, as he pushed the boat into the deeper water from the shallow-carving docks. As the boat plunged into the water, Tajeh held his breath, waiting to see if it would sink or not. It gently rocked up and down, following the movements of the water. "Fantasic! Now just to see if it can hold someone.." He said gingerly, as he climbed into the boat, after grabbing an oar. He slowly started paddling, floating inbetween pads and the walk ways, heading out to the more open expanse of Naho Bay, then the even more open expanse of the Endless Ocean. He glanced down into the water, and saw many differnet breeds of Rahi swimming beside his boat, but the Rahi that took his attention the most was the Takea Shark barreling directly at his boat. "Oh, you gotta be kiddi-" He muttered just before it hit his boat and broke it in two, sending him into the water with the Takea still circling around. "Pfffellllp! Help! Helpppffff!" He screamed as he attempted to draw breath and stay above the water.

To be honest, that quote just makes him seem incredibly dull. There's nothing clever or interesting about a villain like that. It's just cliche dialogue for a dull character.Why does that make him seem dull? Most villains of bionicle are all shceme-y, like teridax. This makes Icarax feel less like another Teridax. I think a Makuta who tries to destroy everything is interesting; most other makuta we've seen before are very behind-the-senes and manipulative.And personally, by most bionicle standards, I don't think it's cliche.It's cliche by overall standards. It's just standard bad-guy talk. He might be unique for Bionicle (which I don't think he really is anyway) but is just the same of 99% of villains in everything ever.- TiliusThat's very true.He's basically monologuing, which we know all villians do.

This was really good! I don't like Myz nor Vulz very much, but this an entertaining read. The end was a golden nugget for me, letting the reader decide who wins.

OOC: First post in BZPRPG, Whoo-Hoo!IC(Tajeh): The day was warm, close to hot, this would have bothered most Ko-Matoran, but not Tajeh. He was in the water, carving designs into a new boat he recently dug out and smoothed. Soon, it would be up for sale and a nice twenty widgets would be in his money pot. While in the water, he could seen most of what went on in this section of Ga-Koro. Toa walking by in groups, Matoran running to and fro and the occasional Skakdi or Vortixx. Finishing the design, Tajeh swam to the edge of the pad and pulled himself up to admire his handy work. Pretty good, and that's only the one side, thought Tajeh, while drying himself off. OOC: Interact if you want, just don't expect a reply right away.

Brilliant read! I have no criticism for this, only praise! Unique way to tell a story in the arena of Bara Magna, beautiful writing style and I love the ending!

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I'm not sure what I read, but I can tell you this: This had the potential to be funny, but I think you really hurt it with the whole "heart stone" thing. That just flat out confuzzled me.