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I, too, thought this was a great story in reference to the picture of the Gravestone. I think you incorporated Death into the story well and still gave great life to it. A lot of times, people lose contact with their friends from high school, and at certain times in their lives, like the one represented in your story, they remember those times. They relive those special moments they had at that time with their friends and then they start a domino effect where they are thinking of their friends, which can lead to thinking of their parents and then to a pet and then to another thing. I think it is good to reflect on one's past in order to see how they have changed their future and understand that they are who they are today based on the decisions of the past. I think Gravestones can also give other people a description of someone's past based on inscriptions. Though they only remember the good things by stating how they were a 'devoted parent' or a 'great friend', but that is what most people want remembered by. Thank you!

I found this story very interesting. I do wish it could be longer. I want to know what Silver Bird will discuss with Neo and how the relationship between Theo and Neo will change, whether it becomes better or worse. I look forward to The Adventures of Mary. Thank you!

I thought this was a really great story. I thought it actually occurred which made me feel remorse for you. I think it is great when stories allow the reader to feel what the characters feel. I was raised most of my life by just my dad, so I guess my story would be opposite of Johnnys, except my parents are divorced and I'm not sure what my 'blue chair' would be. Thank you!

I wrote this about 5 or 6 years ago and decided I would share it with you. It's pretty long, so it'll take several days to share it all with you. I accept all critique. Thank you! Black Cross Open with four doctors running from the hospital doors at night to an ambulance arriving with its sirens on. The doors of the bus open and two paramedics and a man emerge as they bring a pregnant woman, covered in blood, out. The man grabs her hand when she reaches the ground and the woman is rushed in.Doctor: What happened?Paramedic: She was bit.Doctor: By what?Man: A man!Doctor: A man!Man: We were at home watching the TV when my wife's water broke. When we were on our way to the hospital, the car died. Since we were only two blocks away, I asked my wife if she thought she could make it, but her contractions were getting closer so we went to the nearest house. I sat her on the porch swing and went in with their permission, but when I came back out, I saw a man biting her neck. She was unable to move and when I went to try and help her, another man jumped out after me, but I knocked him to the ground, so he ran off. The other man followed and then the ambulance showed up.Doctor: No man could make holes like these.They enter an empty room where the wife is situated on the bed and another doctor prepares to deliver her baby as others try to control the bleeding and a crash cart is brought in.Another doctor: Alright ma'am! I need you to push.Woman: I can't.Man: Yes you can Caroline. The baby and you are going to be fine.Caroline: But it hurts so much Joe.Joe: I know baby, but you'll see. Isn't it worth all the pain and tears to bring our child into this world and raise her together, as a family?Caroline: Alright! I'll do it for our daughter.Doctor: Alright then! Push Caroline! Push!She begins to push and scream until the baby comes out and they all smile. The screen then begins to beep after the doctor hands the mother the baby girl and the father holds her little hand. The doctor hands the baby to the father and moves him out of the way with help from the nurses.Joe: Caroline?She drops her hand and Joe moves closer to get a better look at the situation and to consult with the doctor as the baby begins to cry.Joe: Is she alright?Doctor: Please remove him from the room.Joe: Wait! No!A nurse escorts him out of the room, he looks in to see the doctors surrounding his wife, and then you see them a few hours later sitting outside the same room. A nurse confronts him about his wife. You see him begin to cover his face with one hand and the nurse then walks away. He then speaks to his newly born daughter.Joe: I'm sorry baby! It looks like we've both lost someone special tonight, but I'll take care of you. You'll never lose me. I'll always be there for you. You'll never have to worry my sweet Kara.He then puts her near his neck, on his shoulders, and you see a birthmark of a black cross on her neck. You see a close-up of it and then you see her nineteen years later with the same birthmark in a car with headphones on. You see her listening to her headphones and moving her head to the rhythm of her music. Her father notices this in his rearview mirror.Joe: Kara!She hears him and takes her headphones off. You can partly hear the music.Kara: What?Joe: We haven't talked since we left the campus grounds. So, how was school? Did you enjoy your classes?Kara: It was alright. Classes are good. Easy.Joe: Good! Good!Kara: Now can I listen to my music?Joe: No Kara! I haven't seen you since the fall, let alone received a single phone call or an update of how you were doing.Kara: I told you! I did fine! Ok? Now if you don't mind, I just want to relax and listen to my music.Joe: Kara, give me the iPod.Kara: No!Joe: Kara!Kara: No!Joe: Give me the iPod Kara!Joe turns around and tries to take the iPod.Kara: No! Let go! Stop! No! Dad! Look out!Joe turns around to see a deer in the road and he turns the wheel hard and fast enough that the car turns upside down with Kara and Joe yelling inside the car. When it stops turning Kara crawls out and then tries to find her father on a gimp leg.Kara: Dad! Dad! Can you hear me?She goes around to the other side and tries to open the door and rips it off and holds it for a second.Kara: Whoa! Not again!She then throws it out of the way and gets down on the ground.Kara: Dad? Oh, please!She looks in and sees him with his face against the air bag.Kara: Dad?He slowly opens his eyes and weakly speaks.Joe: Kara! Are you alright?Kara: Yeah! I think I sprained my ankle, but I'll be fine! Are you sure you're alright?Joe: Yeah! Lucky for me the air bag deployed and I was wearing my seatbelt, but my leg hurts a little.Kara: I'm so sorry dad. This is all my fault.Joe: No, it's not! I should have been paying attention to the road and just let you relax.Kara: But that's what I meant dad. If I wasn’t so upset about being dumped, this never would have happened.Joe: You have a boyfriend.Kara: Had, until he thought a semi-long distance relationship wouldn't work, but it’s probably because I told him you were a police officer.Joe: Yeah, that seems to work really well.Kara: Dad!They both laugh, but when she turns her head towards the end of the car, she sees it is leaking.Kara: Oh no!Joe: What? What is it?Kara: The car's leaking.Joe: Don't worry. Stay calm. We're fine as long as there are no sparks or flames.Kara: Dad, we're in the middle of a desert in Arizona, one of the hottest states in the United States.Joe: Right! Right! Oh! There was a sign about a mile back there. It said the next town is about four miles from here. It will be dark soon so I think I'll be fine until you get back.Kara: No! I won't leave you!Joe: Don't worry Kara! I'll be fine! Just reach into the glove box and get me my gun.Kara: Ok!She goes back to the other side and opens the glove box. She pulls out his gun and notices his water bottle and grabs it too and goes back to the other side.Kara: Here you go Dad!Joe: What's this?Kara: Well we're in the desert. I'm sure you're going to get thirsty. Oh, and here. Kara reaches into her pocket and pulls out a pack of gum and hands it to him.Joe: Gum?Kara: Yeah! It keeps the saliva going.Joe: Oh, thanks! Alright Kara! I need you to help me down when I unfasten my seatbelt so I can get out.Kara: I can't do that. You'll get hurt even more. We don't even know what's wrong in the first place.Joe: Yes you can! It’ll be alright! I think I just fractured my ankle. I can still move my legs and feet.Kara: Ok dad!He reaches for the belt and gets his finger ready to push.Joe: Ready?Kara: Yes! Now!He pushes it and she holds his shoulder and head as he slowly pushes himself out of the seat to the ground. His leg is bleeding and parts of his clothes are torn and bloody as well from minor cuts. She pulls him out of the car and helps lean him up against the side.Joe: Alright, now go!Kara: It’s alright dad! You’re right! It is probably just a sprain. I can shoulder you the four miles.Joe: Don't worry so much. I can handle myself. Besides, I know you'll come back with help.She stares at him for a moment and looks around to see if a car was hopefully coming, but then bends back down beside him.Kara: I love you dad!Joe: I love you too Kara!Kara: I promise to come back with help.She gets up and begins to hobble down the road.Joe: Good luck Kara!She stops at his words and then continues. You see her a ways down the road with no sign of the accident. She is more tired now because of hot sun and injured leg. She sees the sun beginning to set and behind her in a distance from the road, you see a close-up of a cave. Next you see her at night time exhausted and hobbling real slow like. She then sees four bright lights coming from a school-sized bus. They stop next to her and a man and woman come out of the bus.Woman: Are you alright miss?Kara: No! My dad and I were in an accident. I need to get help.Man: Well, I have a phone on the bus. You can come with us and we can take you into town in the morning.Kara: Oh thank you!Woman: Alright! Come on! I'm Kasey and this is Jay.Kara: It's nice to meet you. I really appreciate this.Kasey: Don't mention it.They let her on the bus first and then they follow after giving smirky looks to each other. After she’s on, she sees that everyone looked like they were going to a rock concert and was acting like it too. She finds an open seat in the back and sits down.Jay: Alright everyone. Let's get this show back on the road.Everyone begins to scream, "Whoa!" You then see the bus move and a ways back down the road she came from, you see her on the bus on a cell phone.Kara: Yes! Thank you! Tell him not to worry about me or my leg and I'll see him in the morning.She pauses.Kara: No! I don’t want to stop these people that picked me up from their plans. Thank you though. I’ll be there tomorrow.She gets off the phone and hands it to Jay.Kara: Aaah!Jay: So everything's set then!Kara: They're coming now. Thank you guys so much. I don't know how to thank you.Kasey: No need to thank us. Just enjoy yourself tonight.Kara: I'll try, but I don't think I'll be able to, not with this leg or knowing that my father is probably worrying about me. Maybe I should go wait with him.Kasey: Don't worry! It'll be fine! Besides we’re already here.Kara: Really?She peers out the window. You then see them leave the road and drive towards the cave. They all leave the bus with Kara exiting last. The bus then drives off behind the cave. You hear music come from the cave and she follows everyone else into the cave. When inside, you see the final persons go in and two men pull on strings that are attached to a boulder to block the exit. She hobbles farther in to the cave and sees everyone dancing with a group playing on the stage. She continues through the small crowd and as she does, you see a man with two women dancing around him and watching her every movement. She gets to the other side of the crowd and notices that there is a long tapestry against the wall that is moving. As she moves towards it you see the same man behind her. She pulls back the tapestry and goes in. she finds a dark room, which appears to be someone's bedroom. She shuts her eyes and rubs her face, signifying her exhaustion when she sees the huge bed. She walks over to it and sits on it and then brings her legs to her chest, and then lifting up her pant leg to see how swollen and red it is.Man: Are you ok? The story continues in Black Cross Part 2...I couldn't remember how to add directly to here, but I got it on the Part 2 one.

I thought that was a very good short story. i really like the picture and thought that this is a good story to go along with it. I didn't realize at first that she was a ghost, or for that matter, Death. Thank you!

Since I am a girl, if okay, I would dress up as a female version of Gandolf. Maybe I could be one of the elves. I don't mean one of Santa's elves though.

That's a difficult one. With coolness as the main factor, I would say...Yoda still. Even though he is small, he does big things, which makes him cool to me.

Yoda. Although I do like LotR with Gandalf, I would still have to go for Yoda. They are both wise, but I think Yoda could win in combat. It's been awhile since I've watched the movies, but I think Yoda does more fighting in his movies than I see Gandalf do in all of his.

I understand Basilisk. Thank you!

Yoda! Sorry Bruce.

So from my understanding, which may be wrong, radicals believe in something to the extreme. If this be true, then I can see why it would be characterized as not being itself bad or being good. I think in some cases, it could be construed as good as long as the extremity of it doesn't go overboard, where it would then appear bad. As with your opinion on relationships, I am exactly the same way, and I have been told by my friends that it is too extreme for them, just because they have had sex and kissed and held hands. I, however, don't believe such things should be done until at least marriage. I don't mind them trying to change my mind, but they never will, and hopefully they'll get used to that fact. I think that society has changed a lot and that people are doing these things at younger ages as the years go by and that it is affecting many lives as such. I understand it is their decision, so I won't judge, because it isn't my duty. I just wish things could be like they used to in this instance. Thank you!

George Bailey. I love It's a Wonderful Life.

Captain Kirk....with Spock on his side...they're the best.

Parody for John<3 Chloe SullivanI want to say sorry, to that face of an angelWho I pushed away last Thursday nightAs I paced back and forth all that timeAfter I had your roommate place that ultimatum on youHolding on, the days dragged onStupid girl, I should have knownI should have knownI’m not your Lois, even though you're SupermanI’m not the one you’ll sweep off her feetFly her around SmallvilleThis isn’t Hollywood, I’m from a small townI was a dreamer who thought you to be her princeTo take me away from the ordinaryMaybe I was naïve, got lost in your bowtie and eyesAnd never really had a chanceI had so many dreams about you and meHappy endings, now I knowI’m not your Lois, even though you're SupermanI’m not the one you’ll sweep off her feetFly her around SmallvilleThis isn’t Hollywood, I’m from a small townI was a dreamer who thought you to be her princeTo take me away from the ordinaryMaybe I was naïve, got lost in your bowtie and eyesAnd never really had a chanceI had so many dreams about you and meHappy endings, now I knowI’m not your Lois, even though you're SupermanI’m not the one you’ll sweep off her feetFly her around SmallvilleThis isn’t Hollywood, I’m from a small townI was a dreamer who thought you to be her princeTo take me away from the ordinaryAnd there you are againTyping away on your computerWriting those amazing stories for your blogCause I’m not your Lois, even though you're SupermanI hope you’ll find someone someday who can be who I apparently wasn’t for youThis is a big world, and it was my fault but I only have three more daysSo I hoped you would’ve choosen to get to know me tooBut I still have three more days of schoolBut I still have three more days of school, so please think about itOh, whoa, whoa, whoaPlease John think about itOh, please give me a chance before I have to leave.Thank you!

John Conner.

Abraham Lincoln. Looking forward to the movie about him coming out.

I've never been lucky when it comes to the concept of relationships. I've never even been on a date, sad to say. Recently, however, I was sitting at lunch with my friends in mid-conversation, when a man walked by. I saw him out of the corner of my eye and froze in thought and turned and watched. He isn't like normal men, he goes against what my friends consider to be the social norms in society, but that just made him better. I hadn't ever talked to him or seen him before that, but in that moment, I had never been so scared and curious. I watched from afar for awhile, while my friends constantly ridicule me for liking someone and being too afraid to even talk to him. I have never felt that way toward a guy, so when the chance came because my friends had a friend that knew him quite well, I hid. I knew that their friend had told him however, it was so obvious by the way they acted. A boyfriend of one of my friends earlier that day went up to him and got his number and later my sister did, turns out the number was wrong. No wonder he didn't answer. Though disappointed, I wanted to break my fear, because I'd heard his friends talk about him and heard him a couple times for myself. He seemed intelligent, charismatic, nonhumanistic, sincere, and honest, so I wanted to be braver. I even got the chance to talk to him once, because my friends thought they were sneaky, but I didn't quickly leave or hide. It was really great, but once again my nerves got the better of me and I couldn't act like my usual self and just listened, which was fine with me. He had great ideals and he wasn't afraid to act out what he wanted to say and when people looked, I thought 'at least he's not afraid of what others think', which made me think of myself. My friends didn't understand why I was so taken with him, having only talked to him once and watched from afar, but I didn't care what they thought. I don't completely understand it myself, but I really wanted a chance, even if it turned bad. Initially, I believed that it's better to wait for the right one, instead of going through a billion guys to avoid heartbreak, but I thought he could be someone great to have a relationship with. I guess that's what caring for someone is, knowing that you want something good for them even if something good doesn't happen for you in return. Or taking a chance even having met only once, but hoping the other would see your commitment and give you a chance, even if you knew it wouldn't turn out how you hoped. So I gave his friends things I hoped he would like, just hoping to make him smile when he received them. I eventually gave him my number as well, this in more of a selfish state. Sad to say, he never called, but he wasn't much for his phone. He even yelled at it once. LOL! My time at the place where we both could see each other was coming to an end (I only have a couple days left) and although I know it was selfish of me and I was scared, I had his friend talk to him to ask him to meet me. I waited for an hour, but texted his friend at half an hour, saying I was leaving, but he didn't show. I shouldn't have stayed that extra half an hour, because I knew the result would be the same. But it was the last time, I told my sister, I would think about him, and I just wanted to hold on to for a bit more. I had learned a lot about him, about his past, his character, his religion, his political view, some of his favorites, his artistic and writing abilities, but he knew nothing of me in return. I keep hoping that's why he didn't show, maybe if he would've gotten to know me better, if I wasn't so scared of a guy, that he would have shown up. Still something I read tells me he probably wouldn't have either way. I know I said I wasn't supposed to think about him anymore, but it's really hard not to. Like I mentioned earlier, he's not like other guys, so I feel my situation is like that song by Katy Perry, 'The One That Got Away'. Now all I will have is memories of that one night where he talked and I listened. And for my final couple of days, I'll have to try and avoid him, so I don't have to feel remorse for letting this great guy go. He truly was great and I wish him the best of luck in his future endeavors and in finding the one for him, after he completes school of course. Good luck to you too Jean Valjean! Thank you! :