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Bitter Cold

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  1. Well, I know I have one, but it was taken at a weird angel so I look funny.

    If you have another pic shoot me an email.

    Hey now, you're pretty great but don't go around asserting yourself as a heavenly being. Even a weird one. =P

     

    I have a fedora, but it's pretty dressy and I don't ever wear it. I can't seem to find a name for the hat I do wear. I guess it's somewhere between a flat cap like an old paperboy and a patrol cap as seen here.

     

    I want a top hat though. Or several. Can one have too many hats?

  2. Probably so.

     

    I have the Samsung Intensity (first version) and for me, it works great. I only use it for texting, making calls, and taking pictures (mostly for use as phone wallpapers, but they're not bad), and also sometimes I make notes on it and use the calculator function, but yeah those are pretty basic. And alarm clock.

     

    I didn't pick it out, but I've had no issues with it whatsoever and it's good for me.

     

    My mom, however, got the same phone and hers began malfunctioning. It'd turn itself off for seemingly no reason, sometimes even in the middle of calls. Sooo I dunno what's up with that.

  3. Methinks the Twilight reference is slightly out of place, as you have no indicator to imply it's a Twilight reference. Maybe if the wizard fellow was, I don't know, wearing like five popped collars? Or doing something else that might make you wonder if he's Edward a Twilight vampire?

     

    You write in class? I barely come up with decent doodles! Curse you~

  4. Oh my, the weirdness expands. =O

    The reasons for these actions are simple. You see, when given the choice, people will often choose to do something that will not put them at risk of dying, or that will remove said risk. I’m fairly certain it’s human nature, or something.

    The narration seems less formal (or something) this time around - "you see," "I'm fairly certain," and later on it says "yeah" a few times. The previous one struck me as more by-the-book, which added to the comedy for me because of the ridiculous situation it was describing.

     

    so understandable he was surprised

    Just a proofreading thing. =]

     

    The warlock admitted to himself that he was glad the man wasn’t sparkling

    Twilight reference?

     

    Instead, picture this:

    This strikes me as less of a writer thing to do and more of what my friend Brian does when he describes to me a world he created for D&D or something. Maybe try to describe what's going on spatially, or by giving details of what the characters are seeing, instead of describing the concepts of the world you've made.

     

    the waters cleared around a hole in the middle of the waters.

    Sounds weird.

     

     

     

     

     

    Anywho, it took me a bit to wrap my head around the total disconnect from the previous part. I'm still not sure what to think of it. I was certainly not expecting wizards to come into this. I just hope he doesn't have a bag full of deus ex machinas. =P

     

    I'll still stick around though, the first installment got me hooked well enough to be interested in how this plays out.

     

    Is there a purpose to the LORE? Because he seems to disappear pretty quickly and I'm not sure why you would create an acronym for such a minor character. But if not, it might be nice to have just a bit more focus on him so we'll remember him next time he shows up.

     

    I sound like all criticism but I did find it enjoyable. =P

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