I do like this story. You have a quite descriptive writing style which helps flesh out the world, which I love. Already, I find myself caught up in the story. It's great. I'll definitely be keeping my eye on this story.
Sometimes, I think I underestimate our fandom. This is very inventive. Love the way you used the orange studs. This reminds me, have you seen Saber-Scorpion's Dark Fantasy MOCs. They're sort of like this.