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I think my only criticism is that some parts seem a bit... messy. Like there's too much going on at once in some areas, making it just seem to... clash here and there. Otherwise, I think this is fantastic. Great work!

Ah, good old Junkbot.

Days of tedious time and frustration are brought back to my mind...

...Those were good days.

Nice work! The stickers really make him accurate. Wonder if it'd be possible to build a larger version of him complete with that claw arm for grabbing trash cans...

An excellent build! It looks incredible, and I'm most certainly imprssed by the whole thing. I like how you used the tooth pieces for the eyes, if I'm seeing them correctly - though I'll agree with some of these other folks that the legs seem a little wonky to me.

Great work! I really love how sleek the entire thing looks. Those wickedly sharp claws, horns and teeth are arranged in an excellent way that make it seem generally ferocious, in my opinion.

I think my favorite games are the PC version of Bionicle Heroes, MNOG, and VNOG, to be honest. The old BIONICLE game on PC is good too, I think I have the CDs somewhere...

Hmm... Well. This is an interesting comedy you've written, though unfortunately I didn't find it all that funny. I was amused a bit about the 'I'm a pirate' part, but otherwise it just seemed a little bit too random/tried a little too hard to be funny. I noticed a few spelling errors here and there as well - 'Dr. Collosol' - Colossal is the correct spelling, unless this was intentional. Then where the postman was 'flapping his winDs furiously'. Aside from that, pay a bit more attention to your punctuation - emphasize things a bit more smoothly. If Brutaka was looking for Nera, you'd think he'd be a little more enthusiastic about finding her. "Miss Nera, I finally found you." sounds a bit flat, whilst something like "Miss Nera (, or ! can work here) I finally found you!" would sound like he's happier that he 'finally' found her. A good idea is to read out your story once it's finished - just read it in entirety, perhaps out loud if you feel necessary, to see how it feels - how it flows.

So, in a nutshell... Focus a little bit more on the punctuation and grammar (Run it through a spell checker, then look over it for any errors, for example), and refine your humor a little, and you'll be golden. Good luck!

Vocal-wise, I'm going for Gravity Hurts.

Instrumental, I'm going to go with The Bionicle Music - the full track.

Takua: Sing Oprea

Takua: Equip SandKind weaponry for throwing

To put things simply...

wat

You don't know what "oprea" is, and you're not a very good singer. You think you've heard something about a style called "opera", but you think in an irritating level of context-sensitivity. You never auto-correct things in your mind by figuring things out with the letters or whatnot. You take what your strange, silly conscience (the voice in your head* - you're pretty sure it's your conscience anyways) at absolute face value. Speaking of which, you don't know why you're thinking to your conscience. It's not like it's seperate from you, after all.

Also, what's a Sandkind? You are absolutely certain you have no idea what that is at all.
 

What will you do?

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Still experimenting with this new lighting style! I missed adding some lighting on his torso that could have made things look better, and only noticed after I had already animated it. Oh well, I'm learnin'!

Also. To those of you talking about the Three-Finger Island, I don't know if that's even appeared yet. I don't remember seeing it in MNOG, and upon some research, I'm pretty sure it only showed up after the Toa all met up. And Tahu is only just now setting out, so that's not for awhile, I think.

Furthermore. Takua will, most of the time, assume that whatever you're telling him to do, is within the same area contained in the panel, unless instructed otherwise. If there's something you want him to look at or investigate, tell him to 'go over here' first, then tell him what to do once he's there. Say, if you tell him to look at the telescope, he wouldn't have an interesting response because he just plain and simple can't see it from his current position. It's too far away. Tell him to go over to somewhere before giving him a command relevant to something outside of the current 'panel-area'. For instance, telling him 'look at that island out in the sea' - Can you see it in the panel? Then he likely can't see it from his position. Tell him to turn if necessary, or go to where it can be seen. However, if he's been somewhere at least once, you can tell him to go directly there, as he remembers it once he's seen it. You can tell him to go somewhere, and investigate something in that same somewhere, in the same AC.

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Addressing this:

"Takua: walk to the cliff to your left, and look at that sand circle with the white rock and that black rock. Seems suspicious."

For the record, during the original time this was sent in, Takua was kind of in the middle of seeing strange Shadows mcDarkington suddenly standing there, and it'd be kind of awkward to have him suddenly just run over to the cliff in the middle of that.

As for the Sand Pit in some of the other posts - the main one, if the Wiki states correctly, is at the Kini-Nui. The one in the game is on the top of the cliff, near the telescope. You'd have to not only tell him to go to the cliff, but to find the stairs, as well as climb them, before he'd even know there was a 'story pit'. So if you told him 'go to the pit with the stones', he'd have no idea what you were talking about until he had seen it at least once.

However, rest assured, I will try to get to him looking at the stone face in the wall that is nearby at some point. Depends if people want to keep hanging around the beach for a bit first, or just head on and keep moving. It's up to you folks on this!

Regretfully, I have no secret comic for you today.

* if you didn't guess, that means you AC-sending readers.Whee, footnotes from the author!

You know, I don't know why I haven't posted in this topic more. This comic has been consistently pleasing and amusing. It's got a nice touch and balance of humor and 'random' - not too much to be obnoxious, but enough to keep people guessing. Good work!

Takua: Cake that creature in sand too, boy! Maybe it will erode his defenses...

Takua: Notice the shadowy figure looks hungry. Knowing that aliens eat sand, you provide a convenient feast for the stranger and throw sand in his face.

AAAAAAAA-

...Oh. He's gone.

What will you do?

(whee, new lighting effects test. also new secret comic. find iiiit)

So you're probably wondering.

Why do I take so long to make comics?

Sadly, I must report LIFE HAPPENS. Much to my chagrin. Because I have a terrible case of procrastination despite my love for making this comic. It's easily my favorite one to make yet. Because we can have fun and be silly!

LIKE THIS!

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So Takua's the Kazekage now, huh.

YES.

What will you do?

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Oh, by the way. As an extra tidbit to hold you all over. I hid a secret comic somewhere! It was produced while messing around for the sake of messing around, during a recent comic-making session. Here's a hint: It's not in this post.

Hee hoo. Good luck!

Takua: Take it up a notch, boy! Build silly things out of the sand along the footprints and see if you can pimp them up with whatever the sea has washed on shore!

Takua: Build your army of sand to stand against this newfound foe and take back your kingdom!

Takua: And on that day sandkind received a grim reminder.

Takua: Strife with the unknown creature, boy! STRIFE! Through what-ever means you can.

Why, absolutely!

But there's a few problems with your sudden plans...

...the only thing you could find on shore was the pod, which is way too heavy, and a bunch of sand...

...your army washed away in the last wave...

...and you were so flustered and surprised you had to hastily shape your old castle into a shoddy little mound as a misplaced barricade, rather than a strong wall.

You're also now caked in sand. You like to think of it as armor.

The strange, shadowy apparition stares at you in what you believe is a mixture of exasperation, boredom and disbelief.

What will you do?

Takua: Take it up a notch, boy! Build silly things out of the sand along the footprints and see if you can pimp them up with whatever the sea has washed on shore!

You couldn't find anything along the beach, and it was difficult to shape the darned thing, so you focused on making it at EXACT ANGLES rather than making it all detailed. But you are satisfied.

You now rule over a tiny kingdom of sand, and you are its RUTHLESS DICTATOR. Your word is law in this glorious dwelling - none may stand before you and say otherwise in your estate, it is impervious, nobody can stop you now-

ooooooooooooooooooooooooohhhhh nyoooooooooooooooooooooooooooo...

...ooooooooooooooooaAAAAWHO IS THAT GUY

What will you do?

Okay, so... A few issues.

One: Try to arrange the comic into tangible panels that we can easily see, without them overlapping.

Two: Focus things a little more. I've noticed several blurry panels, which can detract from the reading experience. Also, careful about the lightning as it can make things a bit too 'glaring'.

Three: Try making the text easier to read - make speech bubbles, or outline the text in a program like GIMP using Drop Shadow.

Four: So far, I noticed some swearing - which isn't allowed on BZP, as it is a child-friendly forum. A notable example is panel 4 of comic #2. Censoring of it and alluding to it (Panel 2, Comic #4) is also on 'shaky ground' when it comes to the rules.

Five: Accuracy. Typoes and lore. 'Ga-magma'... I don't think there's a 'Ga-magna', to be honest, unless you've got a full lore of this realm. Check a Bionicle wiki for this sort of information, it's invaluable.

Six: Careful about adding MS Paint 'effects' like the... Is that blood in Comic 10? I'm not sure. Furthermore, adding sprites like in Comic 7 - Putting sprites in a photo comic is jarring, and I don't reccomend it - plus, I highly doubt you got permission from those people in the comic to appear, like Lavaside Rahi (and if I remember the name of the red drawn-looking one, Vataki), which is usually pretty necessary.

So far, I haven't found the comics to be all that funny either. Try to think and read it out from the perspective of someone who doesn't understand your in-jokes or humor that'd come naturally to you, say, they have a different sense of humor and thought process. Don't rely on randomness too often - it has to be handled carefully or it can just end up being annoying or boring.

You've got a fair start going for you, though, and I wish you luck.

I'm afraid that the folder isn't public. I'd suggest clicking the images in your brickshelf twice, to get the raw .png, .jpeg/jpg, or .bmp file - whichever you're using. Those you can link without the folder being public.

Otherwise, I'm curious as to what this will be like, since there are still a couple of photo comics around. Good luck!

Leraku: GET ON WITH IT

I've been crazy busy lately. I'm really sorry about it, but I've been swamped with schoolwork, working at relatives' places to raise money, and all sorts of things - including an upcoming birthday. I do have updates 'planned out' in a way - once I see the ACs, I think up an idea to incorporate them. However, /making/ the comic can be time-consuming - especially when I have to make new backgrounds. I know it's just one panel, but I'm just an 'average' comic maker trying to make relatively high-quality stuff - it can take longer than you'd think.

So... in short, It'll be done as soon as I can get around to it. I really do want to work on it, life just keeps getting in the way lately.

Edit: Furthermore, my right eye is having problems. I hope it'll get worked out soon, but I have barely any peripheral vision in my right eye and have an extremely hard time focusing my eyes on things as a huge portion of the right side of my vision is fluctuating/blurring, which really disorients me.

Takua: Go West, young man.

Takua: Follow the footprints and draw silly things into them, boy!

Okay, sure. You're not sure if you're going west, but this is one way to have a little fun when following ominous footprints.

You figure you're the best at drawing silly things in sand.

You're pretty sure that's absolutely correct and you are most certainly the best there is.

What will you do?

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Takua: Go West, young man.

  

Takua: Worry incessantly about that nasty cough.

Action Commands can be sent in via PM or in a post. If in a post, please provide a legitimate post alongside it.

Leraku: GET ON WITH THE STORY.

 

Goodness. I've left an edit in the OP about this now - I don't think it's that big of an issue anymore, so let's not be pointing it out to people deliberately.

Furthermore, unlike my past comics I don't really have a big story for this! It's mostly just us having some fun going along the MNOLG storyline. Maybe a little embellishment for kicks, but otherwise it's nothing big.

Takua: Get back to the place you were before.

Takua: use TOY DUCKIE on cliff.

Takua: Go find nearest village.

...Okay. You're back now.

Problem is, you don't have a TOY DUCKIE...

...and since you have no idea where you are (memory loss) it could be days of just wandering. Why not give yourself a direction to go in?

...Oh. And you suppose you have the power to bypass the FOURTH WALL and exit the panel whenever you want, now. That might come in handy.

What will you do?

Takua: Attempt to break the fourth wall.

Takua: Spread your wings and FLY NOWWWWW

...Ow.

What will you do?

For starters... I'm pretty sure I want swords like that.

Really. I could swing them around and make 'zeersh fweoorsh vwoom' noises and pretend to be a Jedi.

...Or say nothing at all, and pretend to be a ninja.

But enough about my dreamworld shenanigans! This art is fantastic. I can't comment on the background due to it being, as you said, a thumbnail, but it really looks like this Lewa fits in there. The coloring is fantastic and the shading is qute amazing - I like how you incorporated the Nuva pauldrons into shoulders that vaguely remind me of Samus Aran, and the nice details of the lower torso adds a very nice touch to the characterization. I did think for a moment that the hips were wide in a way that vaguely reminded me of 'baggy pants' (which is an interesting style in character choices given how many 'tight jeans-ed' protagonists there are), but then I realized it's more of a perspective of his movement and position, and it works quite well. The asymmetrical design of the lights on his body are also quite intriguing.

Overall, I think this is a great piece of artwork. Good job!

That looks fantastic. The shading is incredible, and you made it really look underwater - I like how you just used 'whited out' areas for some of the outlines in the darker areas, it really makes it look fluid. Great work as always!

Takua: Start walking left into the unforeseen environment you now find yourself. Keep walking along the shore line until you find someone, something, or complete a full circle(?) of the map and reach the strange pod.

Takua: Explore.

You assume to go to the perspective's left - your right. You won't stop until you find somethi-

OW WHO PUT THIS CLIFF HERE

WHO WOULD DO THIS

YOU FIND THIS INCREDIBLY DISTRESSING

(distress intensifies)

What will you do?

I would suggest saving this in a .png format. .jpg is more suited for photos, and causes blurry artifacts when used for comics.

Furthermore, keep in mind that photoshop jokes will eventually get old - try to spice it up with some more varied happenings.

Good luck, regardless.

It's like his two(or maybe three?) CYOA comics that he's made in the style of mspaintadventures. But I'll bite.

 

Takua: Take a look around the beach.

The first one was heavily inspired. The second, I was trying to reboot the story due to massive flaws. This one, I'm sticking completely to Bionicle with some webcomic-inspired references.

Takua: Go follow the markings and Kill the thing with fire.

 

What do you mean by "Creative Liberties?"

Temporarily story derailing, changing things up a little bit. Just fun little shenanigans.

 

I love dis. I can destroy Takua. Right?

Takua: Explore and jump off the tallest tree in the forest.

 

Destroy him..? Not necessarily.

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Also! For the record. I've got this next strip planned out, so don't worry about sending more until the next update. New Year's just got me a little tuckered out to whip up the panel(s?).

Unfortunately, it would appear that the folder for your comics is not yet public. I suggest clicking on the image twice - once in the gallery, again once it's on the 'zoomed in' singular picture, to get the raw image. Then you should link it into a post. Good luck - I'll admit I'm curious about this!