Athmos

IC(Kaerhi): He gave a slight grunt to Hatann. He continued his walk to the guards, activing his hidden blades.

If I was in your shoes/sandals/heels, I would have said the same thing, so don't sweat it. And we all have.....vain friends.

I've never read much about these two, but this is a really good read. The personification was flawless, the entire story flowed very easily and I loved the poem at the end. Did you write that yourself? The detail you put into this is awesome. This takes skill to just write something like this down.

Anyways, I thought the all caps and bolded letters deserved an acronym. Call it nerdy overkill, if you will.S- Short, simple, not exactly sweet, but you get my jist. I think the most controversial thing about short stories is that people get intimidated and decide not to read them if they look too long, and if they're short, they can end up lacking. Not this story in particular, of course, just something I've noticed.U- Under estimating yourself. Okay, so I've been there, done that. And you've gotta be carefull, putting your own work down so much, because people might start to think you're fishing for compliments. Nothing personal, I've just had some experiences myself with this. It's kind of contradictory in itself, because if you really, truly thought it sucked, you wouldn't have finished writing it in the first place, let alone post it.C- Could use a few more details, like about who this Toa is, who that Ikoan was that was mentioned. At first I thought this was a Matoran narrating. Even though I liked the brief, distant tone the story was told in, I think some more expansion could have been done without losing that feel.K- Keep at it. Writing, that is. I saw the link to the BZPRPG in your sig, and let me say, I have the highest respect for all you RPers. I wish I had time in my schedule to be able to actively RP. It's a great way to practice writing, as far as I can tell, from what little RPing I've done on here.S- So overall, I give this a thumbs up. The insights on your opinion of dying were fascinating, but not in a creepy 'i'm obsessed with death' type of way. While it would be cool to have some more background on this character and his homeland and his death, etc. the detached sort of narration he (she?) gave us was different, in a good way.Keep up the good work! Haha, morbidness is a virtue.@S: I've always found my stories tuned to shorter tales, then normal.@U: Yes, you do have a point. I have always shared anything I've written. I just never liked the idea of writing something and then throwing it away or hiding it. Oh, I don't mean to seem like I want compliments.@C: This is actually the start of a series of stories based on this Toa. I thought the lack details would make people ask EXACTLY that.@K: Haha, I will. RPing may be a good training skill, but I always found re-writing your favorite quotes is good also.@S2: Thanks for the thumbs up. Yeah, death tends to be a rather picky subject. It's a he.

IC(Tajeh): Tajeh's limp body rolled on the snow after hitting, vomit oozing from his mouth.OOC: Remember kids, only in 1968 was it safe to eat or breathe mushrooms.

IC(Kaerhi): "Not the good ones." He replied calmly.

IC(Kaerhi): Kaerhi grunted. He they made their way to the bridge, the lava made the air increasedly hot. Even for Kaerhi, it was too hot to wear his hood. He pulled it down, showing his scar ridden face and his blank expression.

OOC: Eh, no. But I'm more better at understanding that sorta thing. IC(Tajeh): Tajeh couldn't see the figure below him real well, his vision was blurring and his mind felt like it was on fire. He realized who it must be. "Makuta..." he said, barely a whisper. He then started vomiting on the branch he was holding on to. In his last second of staying awake, he realized what happened. He had sat down on poisonous mushrooms. They made the eater, or in Tajeh's case, the breather of the spores, paranoid and violently sick. After this revelation, he passed out and fell out of the tree.

IC(Tajeh): Tajeh froze in the tree. The Rahi were talking to him. "Y-you'll never get me, you smelly Rahi!" he half yelled, half wimpered.

Really? The new ones fit for me, it was the old ones I had problems with.

IC(Tajeh): Tajeh's senses betrayed him. He saw Rahi every where he looked. He left his spot next to the hut and climbed a nearby tree with difficulty. Once at the top, he stared, hardly blinking at the forest floor, waiting for a Rahi that wasn't there.

I can't see anywhere in the article where it remotely suggests that, so I'm going to go ahead and assume you're making stuff up. All we have is a brief synopsis, so it's practically impossible to know what direction they're going to take this.Could this go down in history as an epic failure? Quite possibly, but to assume it will do so before we have even seen so much as a trailer is insanely pessimistic.It's LEGO. The only thing they are good at is making toys.I'm just making a very accurate guess.On the other hand, LEGO knows it´s a very risky project and hasn´t accepted any big screen productions before this one, so that may mean they do even know what they are doing.-Gata I hope so.

With the one's form Lewa's, yes. But other ones, no.

I can't see anywhere in the article where it remotely suggests that, so I'm going to go ahead and assume you're making stuff up. All we have is a brief synopsis, so it's practically impossible to know what direction they're going to take this.Could this go down in history as an epic failure? Quite possibly, but to assume it will do so before we have even seen so much as a trailer is insanely pessimistic. It's LEGO. The only thing they are good at is making toys. I'm just making a very accurate guess.

No one is quite sure what happens before you die, or even after. Ko-Matoran Researchers have spent countless hours trying to figure it out. Oun-Matoran Miners have found dozens of ancient tablets, of ancient people trying to find out for themselves. Death, to all, is no mystery. It's the before and after, that is the mystery. My Turaga called me to his hut one day. It was a meeting that changed my life. He was sitting in his chair, telling me of his life. From his times as a Matoran, to his adventures as a Toa,all the way up to today. I asked him, questioned him, "Why are you telling me this?" He replied very simply. "When you see your life, you die." He had no sooner finished those words when his hut was hit by elemental energy, destroying it and killing him. I escaped, only to learn the attack was from Dark Hunters, coming for his life. Thus began, a war between the Toa on my island, and the Dark Hunters. The first battle between us was, sadly, my last. I charged at a Dark Hunter, a large brute with powerful claws. He was slow as well. He easily knocked me aside, even when I was at my fastest. As I looked up at him, his claws coming down at me, I remembered my Turaga's words. "When you see your life, you die." And I saw my life. My first time climbing a tree. My first attempt at riding a Rahi. My first meeting with the Turaga. When I became a Toa. When I fought my first battle. When I met....Ikoan..... It seemed to take a lifetime, a literal lifetime, for the clawed hand to finally reach me. It was a spurt of blood, a moment of pain and.... Nothing. Just light, light never ending. I wrote this over two days, while I was thinking about dying(Yes, I'm morbid, I can't help it.), and decided to write this. I'm not real pleased with this. Actually...... ....I think it SUCKS, but I'm not one to trash something I've written. Thanks for reading.

Me too - I especially enjoy that staff mocked us a year or so ago when they linked to a certain video site on the front page.We can´t. Just News Reporters can and only for their news stories and only to appropiate sites they have checked before posting. Or would you have preferred it if they hadn´t provided you with the news at all?Last time I was on that site, it wasn't very appropriate. I don't know, seems kind of hypocritical. It doesn't seem hypocritical, it IS hypocritical.

2003. Kopaka Nuva was the first, and he is the only Bionicle I have left. I have all his parts still.

A winged female(?) in armor that looks uncomfortable.

Wonderful. Another movie aimed at 8 - 12 year old, but they make it for 2 - 5 year old. Always happens....

The best part of Bionicle was it's ending. Just kidding. Although, I did like the entire "Moon Head Smash Kill Makuta" thing.

IC(Kaerhi): Kaerhi gave the floating village a long look. "Ta-Koro." he whispered to himself, remembering the name. He turned to Hatann. "Where is this tunnel, exactly?" he said, slowly as ever.