Official SSCC Officer Jerzy reporting for duty!Alright, how do I start this review? Well I will start with grammar.The mistakes you made are miniscule, but they did require me to read over some parts. First and foremost, your dialogue is not written particularly properly. When you write dialogue, every time someone talks, you should start a new paragraph. To me, that includes when one character adds something on to what he was saying.The next thing I'd like to talk about is minor stuff, such as rewording of sentences. Such as:This line "The alien entities from the stars told her society that their creations called them the Great Beings" was confusing on first read, upon reading a second time, I knew what you were trying to say."The laboratory doorway flew open and Skyvir instinctively glanced up". I think that you would have been a bit better off if you'd have made her react a little more panicked. Unless I have a grave misconception of her character, you'd think she would be a little more surprised by a man who just burst into her lab, and little things like that.Other then those instances, and the missing of a few symbols, the grammar and the writing itself were very good. You conveyed the scenes and the sense of the story very, very well.Moving onto the story itself, the plot is very cool. I've always been a fan of Science Fiction, and this fits the bill of that genre perfectly. I loved the machine vs. man theme of this story. Most of my favorite Sci Fi stories are Man V. Machine stories (Battlestar Galactica 2004, Mass Effect, etc). It's a great subgenre that needs further exploration. The idea of making a Mechanical Great Being also sparked my interest. Over all the plot of the story was very good and enjoyable.As far as far as the characters go, they are very diverse and very well written. I loved that part of the story and thought it was it's shining part.Other then what I listed here, the story was very good.