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Franz Joseph Haydn

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  1. Kind of like Chicago. Usually took me 20 minuets to get anywhere when I was there. And the Traffic. Oh God the traffic.
  2. Best: Halo 4 (Spectacular story, stunning visuals, great Multiplayer) Forza Horizon Minecraft XBL Sleeping Dogs Madden NFL 13 Worst: Mass Effect 3 (The whole thing felt rushed and seemed to deviate from the series-established gameplay) Prototype 2 (Excessive swearing and gore lead to a less than enjoyable experience, overall gameplay was disappointing) And there is my list for your consideration.
  3. My boy, Felix, to fully accpet this, one must be devoid of sanity! As such I think it's very interesting.
  4. I am just as Saracstic in real life as on the internet. I'm more satirical and cynical in real life, however.
  5. Going to the midnight release, anybody else going?
  6. Due to Holiday festivities tomorrow, I wish to inform everyone here that I will not be able to review as quickly as I would be able to normally. Just a heads up.
  7. Right from the start I get a nice vibe and very chill feeling from this song. The instruments are smooth, the drumbeat is awesome, and the vocals, while in another language, are very well done. Now if only I knew what they were saying :P4/5The Rolling Stones- Doom and Gloom
  8. Finished my review of Mr. Zaranya's story: http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=7359&st=0&gopid=444979&&do=findComment&comment=444979
  9. SSCC Review coming your way.I enjoyed this story. I really did. Not only was this story well written, but it drew on a period of turmoil and strife, and that no doubt helped you along in the writing process. I also am a history nut, which appealed to me. This story captures a lot of the injustice that went on after the end of the Knight's Templar, and is written extremely well. Other then some parts where I had to reread it, which is probably due to my haste in reading over your grammar, you didn't miss much.One thing that this story did for me was keep my attention, which is rare of amateur fiction. At least for me. But this held my attention all the way through, which is something I feel like I should praise. You really did a bang up job on this, in more ways than one. I really can't find many flaws with this story, and perhaps that is why you are heralded as such a good writer. You really stand out to me on BZP as one of the premier writers of the site, a part of an elite club, so to speak.I really truly did enjoy this story and think it's very good. Keep up the good work!
  10. Guess what I got done: http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=7304&st=0&gopid=443183&&do=findComment&comment=443183
  11. Official SSCC Officer Jerzy reporting for duty!Alright, how do I start this review? Well I will start with grammar.The mistakes you made are miniscule, but they did require me to read over some parts. First and foremost, your dialogue is not written particularly properly. When you write dialogue, every time someone talks, you should start a new paragraph. To me, that includes when one character adds something on to what he was saying.The next thing I'd like to talk about is minor stuff, such as rewording of sentences. Such as:This line "The alien entities from the stars told her society that their creations called them the Great Beings" was confusing on first read, upon reading a second time, I knew what you were trying to say."The laboratory doorway flew open and Skyvir instinctively glanced up". I think that you would have been a bit better off if you'd have made her react a little more panicked. Unless I have a grave misconception of her character, you'd think she would be a little more surprised by a man who just burst into her lab, and little things like that.Other then those instances, and the missing of a few symbols, the grammar and the writing itself were very good. You conveyed the scenes and the sense of the story very, very well.Moving onto the story itself, the plot is very cool. I've always been a fan of Science Fiction, and this fits the bill of that genre perfectly. I loved the machine vs. man theme of this story. Most of my favorite Sci Fi stories are Man V. Machine stories (Battlestar Galactica 2004, Mass Effect, etc). It's a great subgenre that needs further exploration. The idea of making a Mechanical Great Being also sparked my interest. Over all the plot of the story was very good and enjoyable.As far as far as the characters go, they are very diverse and very well written. I loved that part of the story and thought it was it's shining part.Other then what I listed here, the story was very good.
  12. I failed the first time. I shall NOT fail again!

  13. I think Forza 4 and Red Dead Redemption are your best bets. I'd also play Minecraft and Halo if you feel like it.
  14. Almost blew chunks reading that. Seriously.
  15. I'm an exceptional gamer, and apparently a great oral story-teller.
  16. I would probably most like to meet Black Six, Watashi Wa and Velox, since they are by far the people I've talked to most over my tenure on BZP. also meeting Metax would be awesome. I can think of others I'd like to meet.
  17. Metal isn't really my cup of tea, but I have a few bands that I will listen to. I don't like how they accentuate some notes, draw them out, when they could be using that time to add more lyrics or add more vocal power to the song. The Guitar riff is pretty solid, but a bit redundant. The drums are good tho. If you took out the vocals and made this instrumental it would be a great song. I just find the singing style to be a bit difficult to understand and a little too drawn out.7/10Thin Lizzy- Boys are Back in town
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