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Transonicle 3: The Ultimate Doom

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Posted Oct 22 2011 - 10:48 PM

Well, I saw Dark of the Moon, and I went "Oh gee, time to write."And so it was. While I'll continue Transonicle Re-Mastered in it's own topic, this will get it's own. If you haven't seen Transformers 3 yet, beware! Spoilers galore! It will differ from the plot of Transformers 3, considering I have very little idea of what the plot of the film I JUST watched is. All I really know is :space bridge, explosions, robots.Also, this will contain the same level of violence and action you have seen preivously, and it would be recamended that you, the reader, read Transonicle 1 and 2 in order for you to not get confused out of your mind by who's who.Also also, anyone who wants to just star, you have two (2) more days to do it, before the final deadline for guest starring for all Transonicle stuff is cut. (technically, you have until I actually write the next chapter, but..) I haven't decided on names for the Wreckers yet, so anyone who wants to be them, there's a spot! PM if you want.Well, thus is begins..... DuhDuh duh DUH DUHDuh duh duh duh DUH DUH DUH DUH DUH DUH DUH DUUUUHHHHPresenting, Transonicle 3! Being the the third and final part of the Transonicle series! (Unless Michael Bay makes a fourth one, but thats a different type of cereal)TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 1THE VERY BEGINNING OF THE END<Four score and several thousand years ago, Metrutron was lost. It had been apparent for everyone who was paying attention. We could not defeat the Deceptikuta, who were in their prime. We were losing on every front, and I knew that Makutatron would soon have the AllShiny if we did not do something. So in the final days, my friend Norik Prime, who had just invented the space bridge, a portal that, with enough energy could send objects of immense size (even a planet I suppose) anywhere we choose. But something went wrong. Norik’s ship was attacked while he was transporting the pillars that controlled the bridge. He and his crew were lost. I then launched the AllShiny anyways, and so it was that it flew aimlessly through space with Makutatron in tow. So it was that all our fates crossed in one very important location: the planet of the Matoran....>METRU-NUI, PRESENT DAYJaller dreamed a dream. Not a very exciting dream, but a dream. In this dream, he weighed 7000 pounds and ate at McNocturns every day. He could also spin around like a ballerina.Jaller was enjoying this dream when, up the stairs, of all people, came Hahli. Why Hahli you ask? Because they had not broken up because she insulted the writer or anything, allowing us to keep a sense of continuity.AANNNNYYYWAYYYSS, Hahli came up the stairs, holding in her hands, a box. What was inside this box? Read on you lazy-AANNNNYYYYWAAAYYYSS, Hahli, annoyed that Jaller was still asleep, hit Jaller with the box. The box screamed almost as loudly as Jaller.“What! What!” Jaller said, getting out of the bed.“You’re late. You slept in again.” Hahli said angrily.“Late? Late for what?” Jaller asked.“Late for your job interview you yellow-masked buffoon! Now get out off the bed and get to the job before the mighty warrior Goddess uses me as a hammer again!” said Wheeldax, crawling out of the box.Wait a minute, you ask. Didn’t 12345 take Wheeldax at the end of Transonicle 2?Very right, however, the Autotoabots made him give Wheeldax back. They did not exactly want him having more robots. Transraga, whom 12345 also took, escaped.ANNNYYWWAAYYYSS, Jaller got out of bed, had some toast (all the while being berated by Hahli for being so slow at getting anywhere) then went outside and got into the car, which was small, ugly and yellow.“I still don’t know why you’re driving THAT around when your car was much nicer and a giant alien guardian.” Hahli said as Jaller started to open the door.“Pohatubee had to go help the Autotoabots with something I guess.” Jaller said back.“Why? Hydraxhide, Tahkan and Dakama alone work well enough to let Pohatubee and half the Autotoabots sit around all day. Not to mention Omega Kaita merely being on this planet should be enough to scare every Deceptikuta away.” Hahli said. Wheeldax winced a little at Omega’s name. He was a little bit scared of him.Ok, a lot scared of him.“Blue Flame said something about new recruits showing up.” Jaller said, trying desperately to get the door open the entire way.“Blue Flame? Shouldn’t he be watching your parents?” Hahli said.“Geez, is she always thi-“ Wheeldax started to say until Hahli kicked him down the steps.Jaller moved away from the door. He decided it was stuck and he would have to slide in. “Look, Hahli, stop worrying. The Deceptikuta haven’t done anything in three years. Blue Flame said they were doing something behind the moon. And besides, my parents are coming by here within the week.”Look how I skilfully wrap up all of Transonicle 2’s loose ends. Some of them at least.“What makes you think they aren’t planning something? There’s all those Deceptikuta at the Tohu Memorial!” Hahli said.‘Relax, the Autotoabots beat the Deceptikuta’s entire army, Matanui killed Icarax, the Zivonastator and wiped the floor with Makutatron’s face. I bet you Makutatron is probably dead, and Nihiscream is trying desperately to keep the Deceptikuta together. And those ones in the park are always watched. The second they do anything, the Autotoabots show up and turn them into scrap metal.” Jaller said. Behind him, the door to the car fell off.Jaller, as it turns out, was half right. About the Nihiscream thing. Telling you about the others would be spoilers, and I’d never do that...ON THE MOONNihiscream was mad. Quite mad. As he walked down the steps out of the Deceptikuta ship, the Dinobot, he thought over how pitiful his current position was. After Icarax and Makutatron failed so completely, the only one worthy of leadership was so clearly him.Except no one else thought that.Dreadinock, captain of the Deceptikuta’s most powerful ship, the Terragator, was still somewhere on Voya-Nui, and still keeping in touch with the Deceptikuta, saying that Icarax, who had kept Dreadinock as his personal third in command after Makutatron, was the highest ranked Metrutronian, and therefore rightful ruler of the Deceptikuta. A good portion of the Deceptikuta captains in their ships believed him.Nihiscream would’ve chuckled at that, since all those captains still stayed on the moon, away from the planet. He would’ve chuckled, if he had been in a better mood.The other contender was Flufskiron. This famed Deceptikuta warrior and strategist, said that right to rule the Deceptikuta belonged to the strongest and the best. Of course referring to himself, the other good portion of the Deceptikuta who hadn’t chosen Dreadinock followed Flufskiron.Nihiscream intensely hated Flufskiron, and also thought his name was silly. Nihiscream had yet to say this to Flufskiron’s face however.The other other contender, was, of all Deceptikuta, Sleedat. Due to Makutatron final order, she had been left in charge of the majority of the Deceptikuta’s on planet forces, as well as two ships. She had turned a large park in Metru-Nui into a Deceptikuta fortress. She remained in contact with the moon forces, and although she had made no claim to the Deceptikuta thrown, she was basically implied to be the only one actually capable of anything.Nihiscream was not too fond of this either. He had counted on Sleedat being on his side in this.The major problem however, was Makutatron.The Deceptikuta leader, contrary to what Nihiscream wanted everyone to think, was not in fact, dead. He was very much in fact, alive. Nihiscream kept him in some special dungeons deep inside the ship, with only a select few knowing about this.That select few, was two. Thunderstrike and Skystrike, Nihiscream’s most trusted Strikers. Ramstrike, while trustworthy, just unsettled Nihiscream whenever Nihiscream saw him. It might have been Ramstrike’s tendency to spit whenever he spoke. While Nihiscream realized that really did make no sense for a giant robot to do, he accepted it, since he himself was guilty of it whenever he got angry.Nihiscream finally reached the bottom of the stairs, where Thunderstrike, Skystrike and Ramstrike all stood.“Reporting for duty, SIR!” Ramstrike said. The spittle floated up gently on the low gravity moon.“Really, I didn’t notice.” Nihiscream said, “What news?”“We’ve found him.” Skystrike said.“Excellent. Let’s go.” Nihiscream responded.“Where to?” Ramstrike asked. Nihiscream looked at him angrily.“Do you really not know where?” Nihiscream responded.“Uh, uh, uh, uh, the person we’re talking about?” Ramstrike asked.“Very good. If you’re lucky, I won’t DEACTIVATE YOU ON THE WAY THERE!” Nihiscream yelled. Ramstrike cowered. Skystrike chuckled. Thunderstrike looked solemn. The four transmoced and flew to “him”.AT “HIM”The four Deceptikuta transmoced as they neared it. “It”, being a large, crashed ship. Distinctly Autotoabot. How was it distinctly Autotoabot? Well, it wasn’t covered in ridiculous amounts of spikes.They walked past some Deceptikuta who had set up camp nearby.“Hey, it’s chicken-legs and his flock! Bawk bawk bawk bakw bawk!” A Deceptikuta yelled.“Shut up! SHUT UP! HOW CAN YOU INSULT WITH ANIMAL YOU’VE NEVER HEARD OF?” Nihiscream yelled.“At least my knees bend the right way!” The same Deceptikuta yelled.“I’m really not in the mood for this.” Nihiscream said as he walked to the entrance of the ship. Beside the entrance, Soundprah stood, silent.Nihiscream was surprised by this. Usually Soundprah was on some satellite thing monitoring Autotoabot communications. “Soundprah, what are you doing here?” Nihiscream asked him.“Flufskiron requested my help with the subject. I awaited your arrival so we could begin.” Soundprah said in his monotonous tone.“Flufski- Let’s just get this over with. Ramstrike, stay here and make sure no one enters after us.” Nihiscream ordered.“That will be unnecessary. Flufskiron has posted patrols nearby.” Soundprah said.“Has he now? Fine then. Ramstrike, follow. Behind Thunderstrike and Skystrike.” Nihiscream said. Ramstrike nodded in agreement.As the five walked through the ship, they saw damage everywhere. There was damage from the missiles that presumably shot the ship down, damage from the crash and damage from the Deceptikuta finding it. They turned corners, walked up stairs, walked down stairs, turned more corners and finally walked into the control room. Autotoabot bodies littered the floor, covered in a thin layer of dust, having lain there since the ship crashed. There was also a Deceptikuta body, his head and an arm torn off.“He tripped.” A Deceptikuta said. Nihiscream eyed him suspiciously. Nihiscream and his entourage walked to the centre of the room. “Where is Flufskiron?” Nihiscream said.“Here.”Nihiscream and his entourage turned to see a large, greenish, bulky, weapon covered Deceptikuta walk in, followed by heavily armed (and one multi-armed one) guards.“Welcome Nihiscream, to the Autotoabot’s failed attempt at victory. Welcome, to the ship, of Norik Prime!” Flufskiron said, walked up to Nihiscream.Nihiscream narrowed his eyes. “If this is Norik’s ship, where is the Prime? I see bodies, but none befitting some one of Norik’s stature.” Nihiscream said.“Swiftinock, let the king be seen on his throne!” Flufskiron said, talking to a Deceptikuta standing near a control console. Swiftinock pressed come buttons, and in one corner off the room, the floor separated. Up came a throne, on which a body sat. The body was large, slightly taller than Nihiscream, a dull shade of red and silver. His shield and double sided sword lay propped up beside him. At his feet was a container.“Norik Prime. Deactivated, or at least, shut down for the time being.” Flufskiron said.“So, is he dead?” Thunderstrike asked.“I just explained it you tinhead!” Flufskiron snapped. Thunderstrike took a step back.Swiftinock stepped forward. “Soundprah, show them why you’re here.” He said.Soundprah, in this fit of stepping in directions, walked to Norik’s body, raised his hand, and fired a wire from it. It attached to Norik, electricity flowed through it, and........Nothing happened.Confused, Flufskiron looked back at Nihiscream. “Have you done something?” he accused.“What? How could I? I didn’t even know HE was in this ship until you found him today!” Nihiscream yelled back.“We need Shockvak! He could do it!” Ramstrike said.Everyone in the room turned and looked at him.“Is he.. always... this out of the loop?” Flufskiron asked.“I’m afraid he’s barely even this good.” Nihiscream responded.“Why, what happened to him?” Ramstrike asked.“Well, his head was sort of RIPPED OFF BY HYDRAXHIDE!” Nihiscream shouted. Ramstrike looked mortified.“You mean he’s dead?” Ramstrike said. Skystrike chuckled. Thunderstrike facepalmed. Flufskiron shook his head. Nihiscream stood there, fuming. Every other Deceptikuta in the roomed just watched in humour or disbelief.“What could possibly give you that idea?” Nihiscream said, his voice shaking in anger.And then Swiftinock spoke up. “Actually, if Dreadinock’s last message is to be believed, that has been remedied.”“What?” Flufskiron said.“How?” Nihiscream said.“Who?” Thunderstrike said.When?” Skystrike said.“Why?” Ramstrike said. Nihiscream turned around and punched him in the face.Soundprah said one word. “Blitztran.”SEVERAL HOURS EARLIERVOYA-NUI, NEAR THE PYRAMIDSFlying over the battle field that had been quiet for three years would have been eerie, if Dreadinock cared enough for that. All he saw was bits of Deceptikuta drones and Constructikuta, sticking up through the sand, the wind and said substance beginning to erase the scene from view. If it hadn’t been for the ruins of the Sun Eaterer, the pyramid it stood in, and the several metre high piles of Zivonastator, it would’ve been hard to tell, aside from the aforementioned bits of Deceptikuta drones and Constructikuta.Dreadinock remembered the last thing Icarax had said to him before announcing his presence to the warriors below.“Dreadinock, today I finally receive my destiny.”That he did, Dreadinock reminisced. That he did.The small ship, only capable of holding about a dozen Deceptikuta, neared some ruined building.“Here.” Dreadinock said. The pilot lowered the ship to the buildings. Near the buildings was an almost outrageous amount of Deceptikuta parts.Hydraxhide’s work, Dreadinock thought.“Are you sure this will work? It’s been two years. He probably stopped functioning minutes after it happened.” A Deceptikuta on board said.“Do not vorry.” Blitztran said, for some reason having a very thick stereotypical German accent, “If I know Shockvak, vhich I do, zhen he vould have found a vay to survive zis. Hiz vun eyed head ist zuch a fun target to hit! He alvays thinks ahead! AHAHAHAHHAHAHA!”Blitztran, since you probably did not know, was one of the Deceptikuta’s leading scientists. Well, he was, until a failed experiment caused him to go completely bonkers.The ship landed, and Dreadinock was the first out. Following him was Blitztran and eight other Deceptikuta. They fanned out, searching for Shockvak’s head.“Here it is!” A Deceptikuta said. The others walked to him. In his hands, rusted just a little bit on one head spike/ear thing, was Shockvak’s head.“There you are. It was only logical that you would return. My genius could not go so easily from our cause.” Shockvak said, his one eye blinking with every other word.“Vo ist ze rest ov you?” Blitztran asked.“Blitztran? You brought Blitztran? Millennia of meticulous work for the Deceptikuta and you bring me Blitztran! This is an insult.” Shockvak said, unable to turn his head and look at Blitztran.“Quiet! Blitztran just here to make sure we know what we’re doing.” Dreadinock said.“You would have been better off with Krekkacrusher.” Shockvak responded.“Considering he’s been dead for five years, I think not.” Dreadinock replied.“Zhen ve should have brought Matanui! He’s great mit faces! AHAHAHAH!” Blitztran laughed.“Enough! Just rebuild me!” Shockvak said angrily.“Actually, we brought something of yours with us.” A Deceptikuta said. Two Deceptikuta ran back to the ship, and brought with them a body.“My, it has been a while since I saw that. It was only logical I suppose, I should be reunited with perhaps my greatest creation.” Shockvak said, almost happily. The body in question was created for occasions just like this; Shockvak in the past had had his head removed before, and was prepared. His last body had been done when none others had been available. This body had been made by Shockvak, but he had been unable to use before Nihiscream made him come to this planet.Blitztran, activating some electricity thing of his, reattached Shockvak to his new body. This body had only one hand, but since the other was a giant cannon with a sword on it, he was fine with it. The body was also heavily armoured, which suited Shockvak just fine. It also transmoced into a tank. Not a flying one, but a heavily armoured gun with treads on the bottom of it.“Now then, what was the hurry to rescue me?” Shockvak said as he tested out his new servos.“Things are looking bad now. Makutatron is missing, presumed dead. I blame Nihiscream for that. Icarax got killed as well, but I assume you know that.” Dreadinock said.Shockvak’s emotionless face looked at Dreadinock. “I do.” He said.“Nihiscream now has most of our forces on the moon. I really doubt anyone is listening to him.” Dreadinock said.“The logical conclusion.” Shockvak said.“So we decided on you. Why you had to follow Nihiscream around, when you’re obviously much more competent than him, is beyond me.” Said Dreadinock.“You attempt to persuade me to take the leadership via complaints leads me to conclude that, should I agree to the leadership, you would want something from me.” Shockvak said.Dreadinock smiled. “Oh yes.” His eyes narrowed. “I want Nihiscream’s head.”END OF CHAPTERNEXT TIME: NEW RECRUITS! NEW PLOTS! NEW CHARACTERS!MTL

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Posted Oct 23 2011 - 12:27 AM

interesting first chapter. I love the little notes about tying up[ loose ends, and I notice that you've also taken some cues from other incarnations of the TF franchise, particularly with Blitztran. And speaking of other incarnations of the Transformers franchise, are you familiar with the Tranformers Prime version of Soundwave?
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Posted Oct 23 2011 - 10:57 AM

A good first chapter. Since all I've read of the other two so far is what you've posted in Transonicle re-mastered I'm not sure exactly how far away from the movies you've gone in the past (compared to this which is way different :P), but I pretty much have the story of Dark of the Moon memorized, so I can help there. Also, are Skids and Brains going to be appearing in this? Mudflap & Skids were simply cut out from the film's final... cut. I can pm you their fates if you want, since it'd be spoilers. Also, there was supposed to be an Autobot called Silverbolt in the film that transformed into a jet (which is seen in the hangar during the film with an Autobot symbol on it) - it'd be cool if you had him in it. His fate would've probably been tied with Mudflap and Skids (or I guess in this just Skids. :P) -ibrow
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Posted Oct 23 2011 - 03:04 PM

A good first chapter. Since all I've read of the other two so far is what you've posted in Transonicle re-mastered I'm not sure exactly how far away from the movies you've gone in the past (compared to this which is way different :P), but I pretty much have the story of Dark of the Moon memorized, so I can help there. Also, are Skids and Brains going to be appearing in this? Mudflap & Skids were simply cut out from the film's final... cut. I can pm you their fates if you want, since it'd be spoilers. Also, there was supposed to be an Autobot called Silverbolt in the film that transformed into a jet (which is seen in the hangar during the film with an Autobot symbol on it) - it'd be cool if you had him in it. His fate would've probably been tied with Mudflap and Skids (or I guess in this just Skids. :P) -ibrow

Well, since my version of Skids is Mataus, and he survived Transonicle 2, I'm pretty sure I'll include. I got stuff planned for him... Mudflap (Onewaflap) was killed by Nihiscream, and as such will probably not return. :P There is a Guest being Silverbolt, called Ramembolt. He will appear in the next chapter with the new characters. I actually bought the Movie and have seen it twice already, so I think I'm good. I'll follow the basic plot, with improvements. Considering I'm not having to pay anyone money for every scene, I can do a bit more than Michael Bay can :)!

interesting first chapter. I love the little notes about tying up[ loose ends, and I notice that you've also taken some cues from other incarnations of the TF franchise, particularly with Blitztran. And speaking of other incarnations of the Transformers franchise, are you familiar with the Tranformers Prime version of Soundwave?

Blitztran was fun to do. I loved Blitzwing in animated, and all though this guy doesn't have 3 faces (a bummer, but writing that might've been difficult), he's equally crazy. There are some looose ends that still need to be tied up, but most of the major ones are good. I've only watch a few episode of Transformers Prime, but luckily, I saw the one where he beat Arachnid (or whoever that was) around. I don't quite like how he looks, but his charecter itself is... fascinating. Makybe Soundprah will act like him...... I was sort of going for a G1-ish version, but the TF Prime's silent Soundwave is pretty neat... Next chapter tommorrow probably, as today I am a bit busy.. Name:Height:Gender(rather silly for giant robots I know, but anyways):Alt mode (non-earth modes or earth modes)Weapons:Appearence:Personality:Anything else:Autotoabot or Deceptikuta:Do you want him to die or not: MTL

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Posted Oct 24 2011 - 06:20 AM

Ahh, I see that Transonicle has returned. Does this mean that the Guest Star I PMed you late last year or earlier this year will be appearing? Anyway, there isn't really much for me to comment about. The spelling is okay, there are a few small problems with grammar but nothing else really. Which BIONICLE villain exactly is Blitzran equal too? Wait, let me guess, Mutran?
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Posted Oct 24 2011 - 10:41 PM

Ahh, I see that Transonicle has returned. Does this mean that the Guest Star I PMed you late last year or earlier this year will be appearing? Anyway, there isn't really much for me to comment about. The spelling is okay, there are a few small problems with grammar but nothing else really. Which BIONICLE villain exactly is Blitzran equal too? Wait, let me guess, Mutran?

Yep, Jodkra is here! Most of the spelling and grammar problems will probably be from Word autocorrecting itself without me noticing. My spelling and such as improved since the first Transonicle. Blitztran is Blitzwing and Mutran, but mostly Blitzwing, with Mutran's appearence. WIth treads and wings and rockets. Fun Commentary: THis one is rather boring, I know. Introductions mostly. Next one will be more fun, I swear. TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 2MEANWHILE, WITH THE AUTOTOABOTS <In the years since the battle of Voya-Nui, the Deceptikuta have remained hidden, except for Sleedat’s forces at the Tohu Memorial near the Coliseum, and have created a fortress around it. While Tahkan Metra and the Matoran keep watch on the Tohu Memorial, the other Autotoabots have begun to deal with the Matoran’s problems, stopping them from erupting into their own civil war.> EASTERN PO-METRU In all the Metru, there are large cities. However, aside from these cities, there is not much else. In Po-Metru though, there are some towns long abandoned when the carving business went bad. These abandoned villages are favourites for evil Matoran wishing to sit there and plot mischief. In one small village, for instance, sat Bobby Ahkmou. Since his car dealership had gone bad (due to not in fact, being able to sell any cars) he had taken to illegal means to pay the bills. Which he stopped doing too. What had he decided to do instead? He had joined an illegal Kanoka disk selling group. These groups would create disks from “masks of death” or “masks of bacon’neggers”, and sell them to mask-makers and Kanoka-disk-sport-player-peoples. Of course, these masks did not exist. Not all Matoran are as smart as you and I, however. These disks would be sold for outrageous amounts of widgets, and would be non-returnable. I bet you see where this is going, so I’ll cut to the chase. These were profitable, nigh-untraceable, illegal operations, which the Metru-Nui police and Vahki squads (which were never very capable) were hopeless to stop. So naturally, it was the Autotoabots who had to stop it. And the one they were going for today just happened to have Bobby Ahkmou in it. “What one we doing today boss?” Bobby asked his superior. Evil-Boss Matoran looked at Bobby with pity in his eyes. “Same thing we always do, Bobby. We make fake Kanoka. Why would you even ask that? You’ve been here for 2 months already! You should know!” “It’s the stereotypical intro to say for this sort of things, I had no choice.” Bobby responded. “Oh. Well, we have a client coming by, and he says he has a really odd-assortment of vehicles with him, but we should not be suspicious. And if we see a giant bird flying around, that’s normal. He said he had a pet that escaped but follows him around now.” Evil-Boss Matoran said, “I’ve warned the guards, so they shouldn’t shoot anyone if they drive up- wait a minute, why am I telling you this? You may have risen up in the ranks here, but you still shouldn’t be knowing our plans!” It was true. Bobby Ahkmou’s natural talent with haggling and the like had allowed him to gain promotion after promotion. “Sorry boss. Say, can I have another promotion?” Bobby asked. “Hmm, your way with words makes it hard for me to say no. But no.” The Evil-Boss Matoran responded. “Ok.” Bobby said, knowing that the next promotion would soon be in his hands. Suddenly, a speaker went off. “Attention! Clients incoming! Rendezvous at the gates and prepare the Kanoka!” The speaker said. “You heard, get ready! Oooh, I wonder how many we can sell!” The Evil-Boss Matoran said. Bobby followed his boss out into the yard, where some gunmen were already in position. The gates were closed, but Bobby could see the client’s vehicles coming up. “I see a big black truck, a blue Lamborghini thing, a silver Corvette Stingray, a green Chevy Beat and a bird in the distance! Yep, it’s our guy! Classy convoy, if I do say so myself.” A Matoran gunman said. The Evil-Boss Matoran walked to the gate, while Bobby Ahkmou stood back and watched. “Welcome to our humble abode!” The Evil-Boss Matoran said. ‘Neat place.” The Lamborghini’s driver said.. at least the Boss Matoran thought he said. The windows were so heavily tinted he couldn’t see inside at all. “Thank you, thank you! Well, if you just step out here, you can receive the shipment.” The Boss Matoran said. “If you open the gates, we’ll drive on in” The Lamborghini’s driver said. “Well... wait, how can I hear you so clearly when your inside the vehicle?” The Boss-Matoran said, beginning to become worried. “Uh, the windows open a bit. Yea, that’s it!” The Lamborghini’s driver said. “Yep! We all got drivers!” the Chevy Beat said. And that’s when the awkward silence happened. The Evil-Boss Matoran, shaking, motioned for the gunmen to raise their weapons. “Well lads, looks like our covers blown. Autotoabots, TRANSMOC!” The black truck said. And so it was. The truck drove forward, mowing down the gate, then it split apart, forming and reforming into a giant walking robot with a cannon on one arm and a gun in the other’s hand. Yes, poor Hydraxhide lost a cannon. It was during the Battle of Voya-Nui. Some drones fault I suppose, he did fight a lot of them. The Corvette drove forward then, towards the other end of the small village. It transmoced into the speedy Tahuswipe, who spread his arms as he rolled along, and sliced the ends off the gunmen’s guns. The Lamborghini and Chevy beat drove between Hydraxhide and Tahuswipe. The two transmoced into Vakama Maximus and Mataus, respectively, who aimed their weapons at the Matoran. The Evil-Boss Matoran ran into his vehicle, and began to drive away, when the bird came down and landed on the back end of it. It transmoced into Phoenix Prime, and picked the Evil-Boss Matoran out of the wreckage. The Evil-Boss Matoran began to cry as he was carried back to the others, who had surrendered. Bobby Ahkmou stared in horror as he and his cohorts were rounded up. He remembered how the Ta-Matoran who he had sold a car too had been on the news 2 years late, having apparently helped save the world. He could’ve sold that car for so much more and not be in this situation. Hydraxhide found the Kanoka Disk stockpile, and without so much as a second thought, destroyed it. “Well, that’s done.” Hydraxhide said. Tahuswipe rolled back down towards the other Autotoabots, carrying two Matoran in his arms. They looked absolutely terrified. “Found this two running away. I suppose we’ll want them too.” Tahuswipe said as he put the Matoran down. “You got it.” Hydraxhide responded, surveying their handy work. “That was pretty easy, if I do say so myself.” Vakama Maximus gloated, “Got that done faster than even I thought we would.” “Not like you did anything.” Phoenix said. “Stop arguing good chaps.” Mataus said. He then looked down to a Matoran “Anything else here we need to deal with?” “Uh, uh, uh, uh, no-PLEASE DON’T KILL ME IT WAS HIS FAULT!” the Matoran cried, pointing to the Evil-Boss Matoran, who didn’t look so evil now. “What.. what are you going to do to me?” he said through sobs. Hydraxhide aimed a cannon at the Matoran. “Arrest you.” he said. The Matoran fainted. PEST HEADQUARTERS At some point after the battle of Voya-Nui, PEST headquarters got moved to the Metru-Nui mainland. In fact, it was rather close to Sleedat’s encampment, in order to respond quicker in case she did anything. However, the next segment does not take place there. IN A FIELD, SOMEWHERE IN METRU-NUI Pest soldiers were lined up in neat, orderly rows. They would all die like that if it was Deceptikuta they had to deal with next. Hewkii shook his head. Taking a megaphone from the Matoran beside him, he shouted into it “GET OUT OF THOSE ROWS AND INTO POSITIONS!” The Matoran did as told. Hewkii handed the megaphone back to the Matoran beside. He looked behind him. The Autotoabots were right on schedule. He looked back. Landed in front of them, was a ship. He presumed it was an Autotoabot ship, since it wasn’t covered in spikes like the ones at Voya-Nui had been. Those ones had also been much larger.He stepped out of the vehicle as a large red and blue semi with flame deco drove up beside. Slowly, it transmoced in Matanui Prime, leader of the Autotoabots. “That’s it?” Hewkii asked. Matanui looked down at him, confused. ‘What do you mean?” he asked. “Well, usually you make some huge entrance with massive amounts of description then do a pose and say something awesome. Or something.” Hewkii answered. “I highly doubt it was necessary here.” Matanui responded. “No, no, it only was your first appearance in this one..” Hewkii said to himself. In the distance, there was a little bit of lightning. Beside Matanui, driving up and transmocing, was Dakama Prime, Blue Flame, Pohatubee, Galcee, Kopatchet and Crashinator. Am I forgetting someone? Tahkan is watching Sleedat, Wheeldax is with Jaller, Hydraxhide and the others are doing that other thing in Po-Metru... Oh right! The 112 foot tall Omega Kaita was standing there too. That guy always just slips past me. Arggh, who else? Uh, uh, uh, WIPEOUT! Yes, Wipeout was there to, standing beside Blue Flame, looking awfully annoyed at being forgotten about. Again. “There is a point when you cross the line, you’re at the point where you crossed the line and kicked sand in the other guy’s face.” Wipeout said. Wipeout was the only human sized Autotoabot, and was often forgotten about. I really do not know why. Yea well, he’s short. AAAANNNNNYYYWWWAAYYYYSSSS, Matanui walked to the ship, the other Autotoabots in tow. “Matanui, you sure this is safe? How do we know these are Autotoabots?” Dakama said, the tallest Autotoabot (aside from Omega of course) his giant axe at the ready. “I feel I know just who’s in it.” Matanui said. He stopped 40 feet in front of the ship, and raised his arms. “Autotoabots, welcome home.” He said. Then a ramp opened in the front, and out walked six Autotoabots, one of which had a short creature on his shoulder. “Matanui, long time no see sir!” the one in front said. He was 23 feet tall, very cut up with a plethora of weapons on him and his utility belt, which included three knives. “iBrow, it’s a joy to see you and your team again. I had thought you were dead.” Matanui said. “It’ll take more than Makutatron and his goons to stop us!” the Autotoabot beside him said. This one was slightly less beat up, about the same height as iBrow, and carried a large cannon in his arms and also had a knife, although this one was blue. “Matanui, you remember the Wreckinators?” iBrow said, pointing to the two scared Autotoabots beside him. “Of course. I see LesoSpinn and JackaL.”Matanui said. “G’day Sir!” LesoSpinn said, saluting. He was taller than the other two, with claws sticking out above one hand and a rifle in the other. He was also missing an eye. “At your service!” JackaL said, who was the Autotoabot I mentioned above. “Do you all have weird capitalization your names?” Crashinator, the small ex-Deceptikuta who transmoced into a wolf, asked. “Quiet!” Kopatchet the white and red Autotoabot medic (although not very good at it)said, elbowing Crashinator. He meant to hit him in the side, but due to the height difference he hit Crashinator in the face. “Well, little one, that’s our motif.” JackaL said. LesoSpinn nodded. “They don’t look like much..” Galcee said, one of the smaller Autotoabots, who transmoced into a motorcycle, said. “Why would you even say that? They’re covered in weapons and scars and have Scottish accents! We should be getting them on our good sides instead of making meaningless commentaries!” Blue Flame, who was blue, ranted. He turned into a blue sports car. Thought you might like to know. “We brought a few others along as well.” iBrow said, ignoring the other discussion. Matanui looked up to see a large black Autotoabot and a shorter (about the same height as the Wreckinators) white-ish one standing beside him. The other Autotoabot was gray and black, with a gray Agorian standing beside him. “Jodkra! I thought you were dead as well! Who do you have with you?” Matanui asked. “I can’t believe more of us aren’t dead. This is my targetmaster, Johnson. He transmocs in my rocket launcher.” Jodkra said. In the background, Pohatubee radio made a choking sound. He did not quite understand what Jodkra just said, but he knew Jodkra to be a good fighter and (usually) made good choices, so he let it go. “You are a magnificent Metrutronian from what I’ve heard, Matanui Prime sir.” Johnson said respectfully. Matanui Prime thanked him, and Wipeout couldn’t believe even this Agorian was taller than him. Johnson was 11 feet tall, 6 feet taller than Wipeout. “Matanui Prime sir! Honour to meet you! I’m Ramembolt! I can turn invisible, want to see?” the taller Autotoabot said. And with that he turned invisible. Then he reappeared. “OOOOHHH! It’s Omega Kaita! He’s huge!” Omega Kaita silently waved. Considering his voice is loud enough to pretty much make you go deaf, that was probably a kindness. “Welcome to the home of the Matoran.” Matanui said. He looked to the other Autotoabot. “Nujack.” “Matanui! I made a-“ Nujack began. “I’m sorry, but I do not to see it. The last time I saw one of your experiments, I nearly lost my memory.” Matanui said. “Ya, one of his experiments on the ship nearly blew me head off!” LesoSpinn said. “I liked the one that washed the floor until it broke and burst into flame.” Ramembolt said. “He tried to make a copy of Johnson that turned into that washer thing! It screamed as it burned!” Jodkra said, “I’ve killed Deceptikuta who weren’t as freaky as that thing!” Johnson said. “It was tough telling him to just stop making them. He just...” JackaL began. “He didn’t stop making them with parts from the ship!” iBrow said. “It is my ship, and I don’t like it being torn apart from the inside out.” “Fair enough.” Nujack said. “My work has always been better. See Omega right there? I fixed him up.” Kopatchet said. “Oh! I got a story about Nujack too! Onc-“ Wipeout started to say. “Not now Wipeout, we have introductions to do.” Blue Flame told Wipeout. Wipeout was annoyed. Pohatubee, meanwhile, was not really needed here, and wasn’t quite sure why it had been important for him to show up. “Autotoabots, I am pleased with your appearance. More Autotoabots are always welcome. Tell me, how goes things on Metrutron?” Dakama said. “We haven’t been there in millennia. War ruined it, but I’m sure you know.” iBrow said. Matanui looked sad. “Very well. I would’ve liked news all the same.” He straightened his back, “iBrow, LesoSpinn, JackaL, Jodkra, Johnson, Ramembolt and Nujack, I would like to introduce you Dakama Prime, Pohatubee, Galcee, Kopatchet, Blue Flame, Wipeout, Crashinator and Omega Kaita. We have others, but they’re out on missions right now. I would also like to introduce you to PEST commander Hewkii. We’ve allied with the Matoran to help stop the Deceptikuta.” “We saw a lot of Deceptikuta have stationed themselves on the moon.” iBrow said. “We know.” Dakama said. “Any idea what they’re doing?” Matanui asked. “Not a clue.” JackaL answered. “Hmm. Well, Dakama, Galcee, you and some of Hewkii’s force will find a place for iBrow’s ship-“ Matanui started to say, “No need.” iBrow said. “It turns invisible.” And with a press off a button on his arm, the ship behind them turned invisible. <Neat> Pohatubee’s radio said. “Excellent. Come, let us return to base. Autotoabots, transmoc, and roll out!” Matanui said. And they did so. THE TERRAGATOR. The Terragator was 300 feet of black, spiky metal covered in guns and hangers for the Deceptikuta’s smaller ships. Dreadinock was immensely proud of it. Except right now he was annoyed. Before Shockvak would agree to take the leadership, he wanted something. “You know how there are abandoned villages on Metru-Nui?” Shockvak asked inquired. “No.” Dreadinock responded. Nearby, Blitztran sat in a chair, spinning around in it. It’s a rather dangerous habit for a 40 foot tall robot to do. “Well, there is,” Shockvak said, “And inside one is an old laboratory of mine.” “What? Why is it so many of our species stuff is on THIS planet?” Dreadinock said angrily. “It’s only been there for 50 years. Well, this laboratory is underneath a Matoran village, and I believe it was abandoned because of me, or rather, an experiment of mine.” Shockvak replied emotionlessly. “Oh, was ist es? Did you make an oven zat shot fire at ze locals und poisoned zere vells? Zat vould be hilarious! AHAHAHAH!” Blitztran laughed wildly to himself. Shockvak and Dreadinock ignored him. “What did you make, Shockvak?” Dreadinock asked, almost worried to hear. Almost. “A drill-bot.” Shockvak said simply. “A vhat?” Blitztran said. Dreadinock wasn’t sure what he said either. “It is basically a large snake that is made out of saws that drills through things.” Shockvak explained. “Oh, of course.” Dreadinock said. “Oh, oh, let’s call it Daffodil! Zuch a pretty name for zuch a pretty monster!” Blitztran said. “Dreadinock, I required us to take a ship there and you can drop me off. I only need myself to get it.” Shockvak said. “Good, because I don’t want a giant snake drill-thing aboard the Terragator.” Dreadinock said, relieved. “It would fit.” Shockvak said. “Of course it would! The Terragator is the largest ship in the Deceptikuta fleet!” Dreadinock said. “My drill-bot is 1000 feet long.” Shockvak said. Even Blitztran did not laugh at that. END OF CHAPTER NEXT TIME: LET'S SEE SOME DRILLLLLBBBBOOOOTTTTT MTL

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Posted Oct 25 2011 - 05:49 AM

Drillbot needs a name. Another good chappy, and invisible ships..... well, invisible means they can't be seen but they are still there, right? So...... if somebody just walked into it, what would happen?
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Posted Oct 25 2011 - 02:33 PM

It wasn't named in the film; why do so here? The chapter was alright; the next one will probably be better, since there shouldn't be so many intros. This one was still good, though; I liked the raid done by Hydraxide's group. -ibrow
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Posted Oct 25 2011 - 02:47 PM

Nice chapter. I've noticed you've made a running gag of "Everybody forgets Wipeout because he's tiny". :PAh, whatever, maybe it'll help me to not get killed when the slag hits the fan. :D Also, is Mataus speaking in a british accent?
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Posted Oct 25 2011 - 08:33 PM

Drillbot needs a name. Another good chappy, and invisible ships..... well, invisible means they can't be seen but they are still there, right? So...... if somebody just walked into it, what would happen?

For the love of me, I could not come up with a name for it. I was think about something to do with the Kanoho Dragon or- WAIT! What was the name of the giant green thing that attacked Metru-Nui in the legends books? It was a contest winner's creation..

It wasn't named in the film; why do so here? The chapter was alright; the next one will probably be better, since there shouldn't be so many intros. This one was still good, though; I liked the raid done by Hydraxide's group. -ibrow

It should have a name... maybe.. This next chapter will go back to Jaller, then Nihiscream, then we'll see the Autotoabots back at base where the Wreckinators will show off and Nujack will do some technical stuff as well, in a way Kopatchet will be annoyed by. Then it'll be Shockvak going to the village for the Drill-bot thing, and then the chapter after the next one will be Matanui Prime and the new recruits checking at a distrubance that may or may not be a 1000 foot long drilling machine.That chapter will also let us see just what Sleedat has planned, and Soundprah will have done things of his own... I feel like I could've done more with Hydraxhide's group, that part was written last and it was late. Although, I did enjoy bringing Bobby Ahkmou back after a few years.

Nice chapter. I've noticed you've made a running gag of "Everybody forgets Wipeout because he's tiny". :PAh, whatever, maybe it'll help me to not get killed when the slag hits the fan. :biggrin: Also, is Mataus speaking in a british accent?

The Wipeout gag is almost getting old. Almost, I still have a few things for it... In all due respect, a 5 foot tall robot is easy to miss when it's surrounded by 20+ foot tall robots.. Mataus had kept his accent, all though I did not really show it. I imagine he's gotten a bit serious or something since Onewaflap died. That'll do things like that to you. I'll start the next chapter tommorrow, don't know if I'll get it posted though. These last two were 3000 words a piece, I should really shorten them.. MTL

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Fun Commenttary: 70 words short of 3000. Listen to my own advise? Naaawww. Also, I decided to call it the Drill Dragon. Why? I like alliterative names for monsters. TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 3IT’S WHAT I LIKE TO CALL “A PLOT” METRU-NUI, NEAR THE COLISEUM Jaller sped through traffic as fast as his car could travel, which was not very much. And due to the lack of, uh, competence, that Matoran suffer from, traffic was bad. Jaller made half a kilometre in 10 minutes. Knowing that Hahli had been right about him being late, he realized he needed a new approach. Using skill reminiscent of drowning cow, he turned his car onto the sidewalk, where there was no one. For some reason, no one in Metru-Nui used the sidewalks except for driving on. Jaller made better time using the sidewalk and made it to the building his job interview would take place at, only 1 and a half hour late. Parking violently in the parking lot, he ran out to the entrance, where a large Onu-Matoran stood. “Let me through, I have an interview to get to!” Jaller said, packing some papers back into a brief case he had brought for no discernible reason. The Onu-Matoran did not answer. “Come on!” Jaller pleaded. Still, the Onu-Matoran was silent. “Fine.” Jaller finally said, attempting to walk around the Onu-Matoran. “None shall pass.” The Onu-Matoran said. “Oh NOT THIS!” Jaller screamed, “Be serious, just let me go to the interview.” “None shall pass.” The Onu-Matoran responded. “I’m really not in the mood for this! Just move over a bit..” Jaller said. The Onu-Matoran turned his head slightly and looked Jaller in the eye. “I move for no man.” “But I’m a Matoran!” Jaller exclaimed. “Then you shall die.” The Onu-Matoran said. He then took the briefcase from Jaller’s hands and swung at Jaller with it. Jaller, knowing what I was doing, quickly karate-chopped the Onu-Matoran’s shoulders and knees. The limbs promptly fell off and the Onu-Matoran dropped. “Ah right, we’ll call it a draw then.” The Onu-Matoran said sheepishly. “Just look on the bright side of life.” Jaller said, not believing he actually just had to do that. He continued into the building as the Onu-Matoran threw taunts at him. Jaller walked to the Matoran at reception. “Uh, yea hi I’m here for the job interview?” Jaller said. “Are you Mr. Ithinkimbald?” the Matoran asked, not looking up from the computer screen. Jaller looked around embarrassed. “I prefer Jaller..” he said. “Sir, this is a professional environment and we work on a last name basis.” The Matoran responded. “How can I sound professional when I’m being called Ithinkimbald? Huh?” Jaller asked. “While your point is valid-“ “Look, just tell me where to go for the interview!” Jaller said, starting to get angry. “You do realize you’re almost a hundred minutes late?” the Matoran said. “If your door man hadn’t gone all Holy Grail on me I would’ve gotten here sooner.” Jaller said. “I’m sorry, he usually does Blackadder.” The Matoran said, “Well, it looks like you’re on the fourth floor. Go to Mr. Awesome’s office.” “Mr... Awesome?” Jaller said. “Mr. Awesome’s. He prefers the plural, Mr. Ithinkimbald. Good luck.” “Ok then....” Jaller said, going to the elevator. He walked into the elevator, where a short Ko-Matoran stood watching him. “Oh hi icytoa1.” Jaller said. “Who?” the Matoran said. Jaller took a closer look at the Matoran. “Oh sorry, confused you with another Ko-Matoran.” He then turned around and pressed the “4” button on the flour selector thing. There was an awkward silence for a few seconds. “That’s racist.” The Ko-Matoran said. “The 4?” Jaller asked, surprised. “Confusing me with another Ko-Matoran. That’s like me confusing you with a Le-Matoran.” The Ko-Matoran said. “Considering I’m a Ta-Matoran, I don’t see how.” Jaller said, quickly getting tired of this conversation. “I do.” Said the Ko-Matoran, who got really close to Jaller as he said it. Jaller leaned back away from the Ko-Matoran. “It’s my stop.. I gotta get off here.” He said. “I’ll be watching you, punk.” The Ko-Matoran said, watching Jaller as he walked out. Jaller turned back, and the Ko-Matoran continued to stare at him as the doors closed. Worried about this job already, Jaller walked on. He paused near a desk with a Po-Matoran. “Excuse me,” he began “Can you point out where Mr. Awesome..’s office is?” he ended Po-Matoran, without saying a word, pointed down to the end of the hall, where a door, painted light blue and red, stood. “Uh, thanks.” Jaller said. He walked down the hall, and got strange looks from equally strange Matoran. He reached the door and opened it. “Oh no.” Jaller said. “Oh yes. Welcome Mr.. Ithinkimbald, is it? I’m Mr.Awesome’s.” Said Takua. “I really wish you would stop appearing in this train wreck.” Jaller said. KO-METRU You know last chapter how I said there was abandoned villages in the Metrus? Well, there’s some in Ko-Metru too. And one of those was Shockvak’s destination. After leaving the Terragator, talking to Nihiscream for a little bit about Norik Prime, and then getting onto a small ship and flying to Metru-Nui, Shockvak looked down through winds full of snow. “We cannot get much closer! Our advanced technology can only do so much!” the pilot said. “Is that so.” Shockvak responded “Very well. Return to the Terragator with news of my success.” “But you haven’t gotten the drill-bot yet!” the pilot asked. “Do not fret. Chances of success for this is 98.9%. I will not fail.” Shockvak said, who then jumped out of the ship. The pilot shrugged and headed back to the Terragator. Shockvak fell, snow blowing wildly around him. Suddenly, he hit the ground. Standing up, he looked around. Snow, snow and more snow. However, his advanced eye looking things were advanced enough to allow him to find his way. It wasn’t hard, seeing as there was a sign saying “Abandoned village: stay away” pointing to the village. Shockvak walked forward, then decided speed would help here. He transmoced into his spiky purple tank alternate form, and drove on. After a few minutes of winding roads and snow, he came across a police vehicle stuck on the side of the road. How odd, Shockvak thought. The Matoran driver was waving frantically in the air for help, not aware of what he was waving at. Shockvak continued forward for a bit, and then the Matoran noticed that it wasn’t an SUV he was waving at. Shockvak fired his turret, and the car exploded. The Matoran ran for cover. Shockvak transmoced and stood over the Matoran. “Stop, stop!” The Matoran cried. Shockvak eyed him curiously. He then raised his cannon at the Matoran and fired. Shockvak continued on to the village, which was now in view. He transmoced once more and looked at the village. Somewhere below to earth nearby, was the Drill-Dragon. THE MOON Nihiscream walked annoyed-ly around the room. “That was so USELESS!” he cried. “Nihiscream, shut up.” Flufskiron said. “Why? All Shockvak did was tell us we need the Sun Matrix to revive Norik, and it was destroyed in the Sun-Eaterer by Matanui!” Nihiscream shouted. “So? Why do we even need Norik? He’s dead or deactivated, big deal.” Skystrike said. Nihiscream looked as him angrily, and was about to say something nasty, but Flufskiron was the one who spoke. “Because he’s the only one who knows how to use the pillars to control the space bridge.” “But why do we need a space bridge in the first place?” Skystrike said. “Imagine all the warriors we could bring in if we could! The forces we still have on Metrutron could be transported to the Matoran planet, and we could use that as our new home. There is nothing left on Metrutron for us.” Flufskiron said. “We have enough troops now! The planet could be ours! We have ships! We have drones! Bring the rain! The fiery rain of the DECEPTIKUTA!” Nihiscream ranted. “What about the Autotoabots and several million Matoran?” Skystrike asked. “Our we sure it’s even that many Matoran? It has to be a thousand at the most..” Thunderstrike said. “I don’t see how either poses a problem to us. Like Nihiscream said, we have to numbers.” Skystrike said once more. “Because, as Nihiscream knows, they work together in a way that destroys us. They support each other. The Autotoabots do the main hits while the Matoran attack from behind.” Flufskiron said. This guy knows his stuff. “As much as I hate to admit it, Flufskiron is.. right. Most of us don’t know how to deal with Autotoabots, let alone Matoran and our ex-brothers. But.. if the Autotoabots were to be removed, I will say the Matoran would fall much for easily.” Nihiscream said, pondering the basis of a new idea. “But how? Somehow they keep beating us in open combat. Our advantage is our ships, and they have Omega Kaita!” Skystrike said. “Ships, that’s it! The true weakness of the Autotoabots is their lack of ships, and the ones they do have are not made for ship to ship combat.” Flufskiron said, his own plan in the foundations of planning-ness. “So we get them into a ship, and destroy it while they’re all in it!” Nihiscream said. “How will we get them into a ship? They don’t even have one!” Skystrike said. “I think they fixed it themselves. It appears while Soundprah was off duty in here with us, a cloaked Autotoabot ship sneaked past us.” Nihiscream said. Quiet. “Soundprah?” Nihiscream asked again. It appears, at some point, the Deceptikuta had vanished. ON THE DINOBOT Soundprah walked silently. No one knew he was here, and he was fine with that. It would be better if no one did. There were enemies on the moon here, and Soundprah knew everyone of them. His target was far too precious and disliked to let it be seen by the average Deceptikuta. Turning corners, he found his location. His informant had not been wrong. Activating the pass code, the door opened. Soundprah walked in. “Soo, at least some of my warriors stay loyal..” Makutatron said. PEST HEADQUARTERS Matanui surveyed Ramembolt’s, Nujack’s, LesoSpinn’s, JackaL’s, iBrow’s and Jodkra’s new alt modes. Ramembolt had chosen a stealth bomber, Nujack chose a Mercedes Benz (fancy) LesoSpinn and JackaL took sports cars covered in weaponry, while iBrow took a Bugatti Veyron, also with weaponry (albeit more... streamlined weaponry). Jodkra took an SSC ultimate Aero, and Johnson remained Jodkra’s missile launcher. “Geez Matanui, why are doing such long explanations and such?” Hydraxhide asked, as his and his team had returned from Po-Metru. “Shh. Autotoabots, I’m glad you’ve chosen forms. These will help you blend in..” Matanui said, noticing the Wreckinators prominent weaponry “A bit, at least.” “These’ll help us blend Deceptikuta, all right.” iBrow said. “Blend ‘em into bits!” JackaL also said. “I like these guys.” Hydraxhide said. Matanui looked at the recruits. “It’s time we saw if they can fight as well as they say. Hydraxhide, and Vakama Maximus, supervise their skills against the practice targets. Kopatchet, you well then check to see if their systems are 100%.” Matanui said. “Alright, you lot follow me to my favourite room.” Hydraxhide, motioning for them to follow. Hydraxhide and Vakama Maximus led the recruits into the training room, which contained cardboard cut outs of Deceptikuta. “Hydraxhide, why’re they this flimsy material?” Nujack asked. “The Matoran couldn’t afford us to keep using more lifelike dummies. Lazy I think.” Hydraxhide responded. “You only did blow all of them up and half the room.” Vakama Maximus said. “Nothing that couldn’t be fixed with a little grease.” Hydraxhide said. He then turned around and looked at the new Autotoabots. “Alright, what you do if so us how well and fast you can wreck the dummy. Ramembolt, you first.” Ramembolt looked at the dummy at the other end of the room. Suddenly, he turned invisible, and instead of using his amazing robot weapons, he ran up behind it and pushed it over. “Did it!” he yelled. Hydraxhide and Vakama Maximus looked unimpressed. “Uh huh.” Hydraxhide said “You can go on recon with Tahkan Metra. Nujack, you’re up.” Nujack walked into position as the target was set back onto its feet by Vakama Maximus. When Vakama Maximus was back to a safe spot, he motioned for Nujack to begin. Nujack took out a grenade he made, and threw it. Nothing happened. “Y’know, it’s always my grenades that do not explode. Funny.” Nujack said. “I really don’t think so.” Hydraxhide said. Nujack took out a pistol and shot at the cut out. Every shot missed. “I’ve been out of practice for a while..” Nujack said. Hydraxhide looked bored. Nujack then took out a Frisbee and threw it. The Frisbee bounced harmlessly off the cut out, and rolled half-way down the room. It then exploded. “We’ve.. seen enough.” Vakama Maximus said. Nujack walked back. “Jodkra, you’re next.” Hydraxhide told Jodkra. “With or without Johnson?” Jodkra asked. Hydraxhide shrugged. “Whatever floats yer boat.” Jodkra motioned to Johnson, who jumped, transmoced, and was caught by Jodkra. Jodkra then transmoced and drove towards the target. Spinning, he transmoced again, and in mid-air, fired his rocket launcher (which was Johnson) at the target. The target promptly exploded. Jodkra posed. “Now THAT’S what we’re looking for!” Hydraxhide said. Jodkra walked back, to much applause. “Alright, Wreckinators,” Vakama Maximus said, “While I’m sure you’re all perfectly fit to blow open this wall, I still need to see you actually destroy the target.” “At the same time?” LesoSpinn asked. “Preferably one at a time.” Vakama Maximus said. “Aright, I’ll go first.” iBrow said. He turned to the new cut out. Running at it, he took out his shotgun, and fired. The shot knocked one of the cut out’s arms off. When he got right up to it, he took out his daggers and cut its knees out. While it was on the ground, he took out his hammer, and smashed its cardboard head in. “You just got wrecked.” iBrow said, the cut out bursting into flames. Vakama Maximus clapped. “Amazing, very great work, although points deducted for the pun.” Hydraxhide said. Vakama Maximus looked at Hydraxhide. “Actually, I think puns help with the effect.” He said. “Actually, I don’t.” Hydraxhide responded. “Next one up, LesoSpinn!” LesoSpinn fist bumped iBrow as they walked by each other. LesoSpinn then locked eye with the target. “Say, LesoSpinn,” Ramembolt asked “How did you lose that eye?” “That’s irrelevant.” LesoSpinn said, who then rushed at the target. He shot a smokescreen at it, and the target disappeared. He then took out his grenades, attached 3 to its back, and walked back, ignoring the massive explosion. Pohatubee, who had been watching, started playing “Cool Guys don’t look at explosions”. Nujack however, noticed this. “Hey, Pohatubee, why do you talk through that radio?” he asked. Before Pohatubee could say something on his radio, Vakama answered for him. “He got his talking bits ripped out by Makutatron, I remember, I was there. Kopatchet tried to fix it, but it didn’t work out to well.” Kopatchet, who had just finished his checkups on all the new Autotoabots, looked up at this. “Hey, I did a great job of fixing it. It just didn’t stay fixed. Several times.” Nujack walked over to Pohatubee and examined his neck. “Hmm, if I do this and that and more technobabble...” he said. Suddenly, a jolt went through Pohatubee. “I, I, I can talk! What’s more, I can sing without using that radio! Nujack! You’re amazing!” Pohatubee said excitedly. “Why, it’s nothing, it wasn’t very hard to fix, really.” Nujack said. “You are a miracle worker!” Pohatubee said. “I wouldn’t say that..” Nujack responded. “I would!” Pohatubee said. “Your right, I am!” Nujack said. The others looked on in disbelief. “I don’t believe it! And here I thought Kopatchet couldn’t fix it ‘cuz it was too broke.” Hydraxhide said. Kopatchet walked up to Pohatubee and Nujack. “It’ll probably burst into flame or something and Pohatubee will die!” he said. Nothing happened. “It’ll happen!” Kopatchet cried. “Wait, wait, wait! So, Kopatchet supposed to be the doctor, but he can’t fix anything worth scrap, but he can make things, while Nujack, who is supposed to be an inventor, can’t invent anything that works, but he can fix bots’ better than Kopatchet?” Jodkra said. “I guess so.” JackaL responded. “Wow. Didn’t see that coming.” Vakama Maximus said. Kopatchet, meanwhile, was fuming with rage. “JackaL,” he said “I believe it’s time you show them how well you can blow up the cut out.” “Uh, ok.” JackaL said. He turned around, took out his cannon and fired at the cut out, blowing it to pieces. “Done.” He said. “Well, that..” Vakama Maximus started to say. “Quick? It’s a cannon that uses super-magnetic coils to fire high-velocity, high density projectiles that hit so hard each shot creates a sonic boom that’ll turn most Deceptikuta into dust.” JackaL said as he put the cannon away. “Oh. Of course.” Vakama Maximus said. Suddenly, an alarm went off. Hewkii’s voice was heard on the loudspeaker. “Autotoabots, emergency call in Ko-Metru, Deceptikuta spotted, one Matoran fatality so far.” The Autotoabots readied themselves, and Matanui appeared in the door way. “Wreckinators, Jodkra, you’re with me. It’s time to see how good you do in the field. Pohatubee, Blue Flame, you head to Jaller. I feel it’s about time he’ll be in danger soon.” Matanui said. “Alright sir!” iBrow said. “Any news as to what it is?” Jodkra asked. Matanui shook his head. “No, but that’s a good point. Hydraxhide, come along, we might need the back up. Autotoabots, TRANSMOC AND ROLL OUT!” END OF CHAPTER NEXT CHAPTER: PREPARE FOR THE RETURN OF THE ACTION YOU'VE COME TO EXPECT FROM TRANSONICLE! MTL

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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 10:49 PM

Return from action! Aww yeah! Btw, you spelled sonicboom wrong. :0 Sonicboom = Somewhat physical explosion that can be felt, but all the feelings are be cause of the massive sound vibrations which happened because of something smashing through the sound wall, the smashing being created by JackaL's cannon fire. Its like firing a awesome weapon and then creating a energy pulse each time you do that can be felt by physical stuff. Aww yeah.
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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 02:45 PM

Sweet! Can't wait to see myself in action against Shockwave and the Drill Dragon... especially since Shockwave on his own is one of the few Deceptikuta that could survive a fight against me. >=D -ibrow

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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 06:49 PM

Return from action! Aww yeah! Btw, you spelled sonicboom wrong. :0 Sonicboom = Somewhat physical explosion that can be felt, but all the feelings are be cause of the massive sound vibrations which happened because of something smashing through the sound wall, the smashing being created by JackaL's cannon fire. Its like firing a awesome weapon and then creating a energy pulse each time you do that can be felt by physical stuff. Aww yeah.

I spelled it wrong? Arrgghh, Word corrected without me noticing..

Sweet! Can't wait to see myself in action against Shockwave and the Drill Dragon... especially since Shockwave on his own is one of the few Deceptikuta that could survive a fight against me. >=D -ibrow

Oh, I assure you, Shockvak will be much more a fight than he was in Transonicle 2, and in the movie. And with the Drill Dragon, things will not be easy for Matanui, the Wreckinators, Jodkra and Hydraxhide. Although, the Wreckinators will prove to be a bitmore than Shockvak bargained for aswell... Next chapter will probably be sometime on the weekend.. MTL

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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 06:55 PM

Another brilliant chapter. Now I wonder how Jaller and co. react to Johnson transforming. He is a rather large humanoid and not a giant robot, so that may creep them out. Now is Jodkra's pose similar to a certain blue-haired guy's pose when talking about going 'Beyond the impossible and kicking reason to the curb?'
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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 09:33 PM

Another brilliant chapter. Now I wonder how Jaller and co. react to Johnson transforming. He is a rather large humanoid and not a giant robot, so that may creep them out. Now is Jodkra's pose similar to a certain blue-haired guy's pose when talking about going 'Beyond the impossible and kicking reason to the curb?'

It's entirly possible... :P I'm glad you liked it. I actually haven't thought of what would happend when Johnson would meet Jaller and co. I may have to take that idea of yours... I probably haven't thought of it since Johnson really has to stay with Jodkra, what with being Jodkra's main weapon and all. Ofcourse, I imagine it wouldn't end well if a Deceptikuta decided to pick Johnson up while in rocket mode. Wouldn't end well for the Deceptikuta, that is.. MTL

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Posted Oct 30 2011 - 10:07 PM

Fun commentary goes at the end today... TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 4THERE’S NO SUCH THING AS PLOT HOLES METRU-NUI, NEAR THE COLISEUM “Well Mr. Ithinkimbald, what makes you think you’re qualified for this position?” Takua asked. “Takua? How’d you get a job as the owner of this company? How’d you even get over here? I thought we left you Voya-Nui?” Jaller said. “Please Mr. Ithinkimbald, we’re in a professional work zone. Refer to me by my name, Mr. Awesome’s, M.D.” Takua replied. “M.D? How? You didn’t even finish college!” Jaller argued. “Yes I did!” Takua said. “No you didn’t! We got attacked by that Deceptikuta girl 30 minutes into the first day! And then you got left on Voya-Nui!” Jaller said. “You have no proof! I am perfectly qualified for this job! This company! You are nothing! NOTHING!” Takua yelled. “Fine, what is the job then?” Jaller asked. Takua did not answer. “Ahah, that’s what I thought.” Jaller said. “Uh, you don’t know either I bet!” Takua said. “Yes I do!” Jaller said. “What is it then?” Takua asked. “Uh, it’s a company... that works in... stuff... and gets paid for it...” Jaller said, drawing a blank. “Well, while that is a very apt description of what we do, I still do not think you’re ready for this kind of work.” Takua said. “TAKUA! Why must you keep doing all this!” Jaller said angrily. “I will not respond unless you call me by my proper name.” Replied Takua. “Fine. Mr. Awesome’s, M.D, I’m sorry. Please, what can I do to get the job?” Jaller said, being quite fed up with this already. “Do a dance.” Takua said. Jaller walked out of the office. “Mr. Ithinkimbald, where are you going? We’re not done yet, you hear me? Ithinkimbald! You’ll never work on this island again, you hear me? NEVER!” Takua yelled after him. Jaller ignored him. Strange Matoran once more gave Jaller strange looks as he walked to the elevator. Just before Jaller got there, however, the creepy Ko-Matoran grabbed Jaller and brought him into a cubicle, slamming him into a chair. “I know what you did last summer!” he hissed into Jaller’s mask. “What?” Jaller said back. “Oh, I meant I know what you did last summer 3 years ago!” he hissed again. “Uh...” Jaller said. “Oh, I guess it would’ve been fall.. well, I know what you did last fall 3 years ago!” he hissed once more. “Who are you?” Jaller asked, looking for something to hit the Ko-Matoran with. “I’m your worst nightmare!” He whispered loudly. “What’s wrong with you?” Jaller asked him again. “Don’t act stupid! The pyramids in Voya-Nui, the robots, the explosions, the plot holes, you know what I’m talking about!” the Ko-Matoran got really close to Jaller’s face when he said this. “I’ll call the cops..” Jaller said. “You know they won’t do anything! The Vahki barely do anything! The police appear once in a while to make things difficult for you! It’s just me, you and your robot friends.” The Ko-Matoran said. “Well...” Jaller started to say. “Ha! So you’re not nearly as stupid as you look!” the Ko-Matoran said. “Really...” Jaller said, wishing it was Hahli getting mad at him instead of annoying Ko-Matoran here. “They’re plotting again...” the Ko-Matoran started whispering again, looking over his shoulder. A camera was stuck behind a wall mounted television. “What’s with the TV?” Jaller asked. “Oh, that? It just got put up. The camera was making people uncomfortable, so Mr. Awesome’s had a TV put up to increase productivity.” The Ko-Matoran explained. “Well, that would be like him...” Jaller said. “Anyways, you have the key to stop them!” The Ko-Matoran said. “I do?” Jaller said, surprised. “No, not really. This time they have nothing to do with you. But watch out! They’ll be watching, waiting..” The Ko-Matoran said, letting go of Jaller and slowly walking back, disappearing behind another cubicle. “There must be something weird in the water or something..” Jaller said to himself, getting up, taking one last look at the TV, then walking out. BEHIND THE TV The camera tried to watch the yellow-masked Ta-Matoran, but couldn’t turn because of the TV. So Rumdox transmoced quietly, went through the hole in the wall beside him, and scuttled away swiftly on his 4 tiny legs. “Master, the Matoran is on to us, oh no.. it was our Ko-Matoran who told him, oh yessss. He knows too much, can’t be trusted, oh nooo, so we must get rid of him, yesss we must.” Rumdox said to a tiny computer he had built inside the air duct. “Affirmative Rumdox. Lasorhawk will pursue him. Deal with the Ko-Matoran as you please. We will be arriving shortly.” Soundprah said on the other end of the line. “Yess master.” Rumdox said, turning back to the entrance of the air duct. The Ko-Matoran had walked into another cubicle, sat down in his spinny chair, and stayed there. “I’ll deal with him, oh yess I willll....” Rumdox said to himself, chuckling softly. NEAR THE TOHU MEMORIAL Tahkan Metra stood on a building, watching the Tohu Memorial park. The Deceptikuta had put up large black walls made of some Metrutronian metal, and had placed turret-combiners all along it, watching the skies for any one foolish enough to fly over. Luckily, Tahkan Metra was not foolish enough to fly over. Tahkan was not overly fond of the Matoran, but he could not bring himself to let the Deceptikuta kill them. Although, with the absolute failure of the Matoran military to actually do anything about the Deceptikuta army inside those walls, he couldn’t understand why Matanui seemed to love them so much. Nothing was happening, so Tahkan sat down, and contemplated life. Then a large black stealth bomber flew by, transmoced, and landed beside him. Before the being could say anything, Tahkan’s rifle and heavy machine gun was against its head. “Move, and it’ll be the last thing you do.” Tahkan said. “Uh, ok. But Matanui said that-“ the being started to say. “Oh, you’re the new recruit. Ramembolt, was it?” Tahkan asked, lowering his weapons. “Yes it was. Matanui said-“ Ramembolt started to say. “Matanui said you would need work before you were ready for battle. And I can see that.” Tahkan said. “Yes, well, Matanui said-“ Ramembolt once more started to say. “Do you even have any weapons?” Tahkan asked him. “I have this cannon thing and some bombs, but Matanui said-“ Ramembolt, well, you get the idea. “That’s all? And you have the know-how of a protoform to go along with it. What can you do aside from that? Can you fight? Have you ever fought?” Tahkan said. “MATANUI WANTS ME TO DO RECON IN THE DECEPTIKUTA BASE!” Ramembolt yelled. Tahkan laughed. “He what? You could barely sneak up on me while I was resting, how will you get in there,” Tahkan said, pointing to the base, “Without being turned into scrap?” “I can turn invisible.” Ramembolt said. “You what?” Tahkan said, unbelieving. Then, before his eyes, Ramembolt turned invisible. “And then I go in, see what they’re doing, and go back out, report, and stay on watch with you. I could also bomb them up a little bit as well if we so choose.” Ramembolt said. “Oh. Was that what Matanui said?” Tahkan asked. “Yes.” The still invisible Ramembolt responded. “Did it not occur to you that the Deceptikuta might have radar or something?” Tahkan said. “My invisibility and such lets me avoid radar.” Ramembolt said. “Ah, of course it does. Well, you seem to actually have all the bases covered, so...” Tahkan started to say, then looked up, “What if I create a diversion, just in case?” “Then I guess that would be most appreciated.” Ramembolt said. “Excellent! Finally I get to do something!” Tahkan said. The two turned to transmoc, but stopped. A Deceptikuta ship was lowering itself into the base. “Well, that’s not good...” Tahkan said. Ramembolt turned visible. THE TOHU MEMORIAL Sleedat and a retinue of Deceptikuta approached the ship. It was a small one, barely large enough to hold 20 Deceptikuta. “Panrashot, report.” Sleedat said, motioning to the large, brown, tank Deceptikuta with a turret on one arm beside her. “I do believe it’s them alright.” Panrashot said. “NOT THE SHIP! OFCOURSE IT’S THEM!” Sleedat yelled, “IF I WANTED THE OBVIOUS, I WOULD’VE ASKED ENDERTH AND DAEDULUS!” Behind them, Enderth and Daedulus cowered. “What do you want reported, then?” Panrashot asked, not quite sure to be scared or what. “On anything! Were they followed? Are Autotoabots watching? Is it going to rain? Anything! Am I the only one competent enough to do anything?” Sleedat said. In the 3 years on this planet she had spent in charge of these Deceptikuta, she had grown more than a little annoyed at the sheer incompetence of them all. “Viewdok, how about you report!” Sleedat commanded the slim Deceptikuta nearby. Viewdok stood straight as he spoke. “There is nothing to report Commander!” he said. “There! At least someone is smart enough to at least give me an answer!” Sleedat said angrily. She walked forward, where the boarding ramp on the ship had lowered. “Soundprah, I trust you had a pleasant trip?” Sleedat asked the spiky Deceptikuta walking out of the ship. Sleedat tried for her best kind voice, and almost failed. “I detect anger in your voice.” Soundprah said, stopping at the base of the ramp. Sleedat’s smile broke. “Well thank you captain obvious!” she said angrily. “The ship’s name is not Obvious.” Soundprah responded, his monotonous voice as monotonous as usual. Sleedat ignored that. “Well, where is he? Where is our lord?” she said, feigning interest. She could care less about him or his cargo. “He requires assistance to descend. He has been heavily damaged and since neglected.” Soundprah said. “Enderth, Daedulus, go get him.” Sleedat said, motioning for the two Deceptikuta to go do it. Daedulus and Enderth nervously ran up the board ramp. Sleedat instantly realized she had sent only a medium sized Deceptikuta and smaller, much weaker Deceptikuta to go carry a very large load. “Ah, well.” Sleedat though to herself. Minutes later, Daedulus and Enderth, struggled mightily to carry Makutatron, once mighty leader of the Deceptikuta, down the ramp. Enderth gave out first, his spindly limbs sprawling out beneath him as he fell, Makutatron rolling down the ramp. Sleedat struggled not to laugh. The assembled Deceptikuta watched in horror. Soundprah watched emotionlessly. Daedulus tried to hold on to Makutatron’s arm. His only remaining arm, Sleedat realized. His right arm ended at the elbow, its stub violently cut or broken off. Probably happened when Matanui Prime wiped the floor with him, Nihiscream and Icarax. Sleedat thought that was also hilarious. In the time it took Sleedat to think this, Daedulus lost his grip, and he followed Makutatron down the ramp, landing on top of the Deceptikuta leader when they hit the bottom. Enderth struggled to his feet above. Makutatron, using his remaining arm, grabbed Daedulus and threw him off. Daedulus got up and ran behind Panrashot, who nearly almost killed Daedulus right there. Now Sleedat got a good chance to look at Makutatron. Aside from missing one arm, the treads on his right foot were broken and missing, he was missing pieces of armour on his chest, and part of his face was missing. No, more than that, part of his head. The entire top right part of his head was gone, as well as most of the lower right part, although his right eye was still there, barely. Most of the right side of his mouth was gone too, the blue liquid that flowed through all Metrutronians flowing out of it. Oddly enough, most of his left side was OK. “Lord Makutatron,” Sleedat said, bowing, “Welcome to the Deceptikuta headquarters on this backwater planet!” “Why haf you not conquered it alwady?” Makutatron struggled to say. It sounded pretty good, considering part of his mouth was gone. “Nihiscream ordered us not too. He said the order came from you.” Sleedat explained. Enderth quietly slipped off the ramp and walked away. Makutatron coughed. Or spat. It was a weird sound. “Do NOT mentwhun that trawaiters name! The fact you wistened to hiccmm is enough inwult to make me want to kell all of you!” Makutatron said. Most of the Deceptikuta now were trying hard to not to laugh. A snicker here and there could be heard. Panrashot still stood brave in front of his beloved leader, and as always Soundprah was emotionless. “Tell may, is Mataooeh still alife?” Makutatron said, trying to struggle to his feet, but failing. “He is.” Sleedat said, her leader’s predicament was hysterical. Makutatron, to say the least, was not pleased to hear this. “ARRRRRRGGHHHHHGHHGGHGHGH!” he yelled. This time the sound was considerably less funny, and the snickers stopped. “Sleeedat, repawr may, so I may kell him mayselv.” Makutatron said. Sleedat was about open the compartment in her arm that released the small repair robot, when Makutatron, in those 3 seconds, grew too impatient, grabbed the nearest Deceptikuta, ripped its arm off, and attached it to himself. Somehow, it stayed in place. This arm was black, with large fingers compared to Makutatron’s gray arm and spindly three fingered hand. “Hoorah up Sleedat, I graw teeered.” Makutatron said. Suddenly, a small voice spoke up. “Lord Makutatron!” Dr. Transraga said, “Let me be ze vun to repair your face! It vould be zuch an honour! I can make it better zhan before!” Sleedat had no idea where the small Deceptikuta came from. Makutatron was about to laugh, but all that happened was a ball of blue liquid came out of his mouth. “Go awead doctor, but if I do nawt like what you are doing..” Makutatron said. The small doctor quickly crawled up Makutatron’s arm and into his head cavity. “Ov course zir!” The Dr. Transraga said. Sleedat stepped forward. “The repair-bots sir?” she asked. “Yesss, now.” Makutatron said. Millions of tiny robots came out of the compartment on her arm, went to Makutatron, and began repairing parts of him, except for his face. “Go avay! I vill repair ze mighty Makutatron’s face myself!” Dr. Transraga said. The repair bots had already started on Makutatron’s mouth when Transraga scared them off. “Haagccchh, much better.” Makutatron said, rising to his feet. The Deceptikuta who Makutatron took the arm from bowed, and then Makutatron grabbed him by the head and ripped it off. “Now, I take my revenge! Where are the Autotoabots?” Makutatron yelled. Soundprah spoke up “Intel reports suggest they have gone to another part of the island to battle Shockvak.” “Hmm, Shockvak may have use still. What about Dreadinock? He survived our defeat, I was sure.” Makutatron said. “He is still on the island where we were defeated.” Sleedat said. “Ahh, and Nihiscream is still on the moon. Do we know what he is doing there?” Makutatron asked. “He and Flufskiron were trying to revive Norik Prime in order to gain access to the spacebridge pillars.” Soundprah said. “The spacebridge pillars? He has them? Why do you not take them Soundprah?” Makutatron yelled at Soundprah. “Norik is the only one who knows how to use them. He is currently offline as well.” Soundprah said. Makutatron brought a fist up and closed it. “And we know just how permanent that is, don’t we?” Makutatron said, “Now, where is my throne?” Meanwhile, Tahkan Metra and Ramembolt frantically went back to PEST headquarters. KO-METRU One of Omega Kaita’s components flew through the snow storm, looking for a place to land. Components you ask? Well, Omega Kaita, since he was so huge, was made of 7 very flying troop transport things, which Kopatchet had modified to fit all the other Autotoabots. In alt mode at least. So you could say, Omega’s alt mode was 7 troop transport things. But I think you figure that much out. Each transport, which we shall call FTTTs, (flying troop transport things), was 80 feet longs, 30 feet wide, 13 feet high, heavily armoured and covered in guns, missile launchers and all sorts of weaponry. 2 of the FTTT’s formed his torso, 2 his arms, 2 his legs, and the remainder was armour and extra weapons. Thing is, all of them could do this, in case one was blown down. They were heavily improved after Voya-Nui. You can see that Kopatchet had been busy. Inside it was Matanui Prime (without a trailer), Hydraxhide, the Wreckinators and Jodkra. Several Matoran, including Hewkii, were there as well. “Oh, this is going to be cold.” The New guy said. Actually, I suppose he could be the more experienced guy now, but that doesn’t sound a good. “Relax.” Hewkii said. The New guy waited for a minute. “Aren’t you going to say something reassuring?” he asked. “Well, I can’t really. It’s going to be cold, and I hope you dressed warmly.” Hewkii responded, checking his gun. “Cold? How so?” JackaL who was in alt mode nearby, asked. “About -30, not counting wind chill. And considering we’re in the middle of a snowstorm..” Hewkii said. The New guy shivered. “So not very cold then.” JackaL said. “What? Of course it is! It’ll be bloody freezing!” the New guy said. “Then you’ve obviously never been to Tetris.” JackaL responded. “The game?” Hewkii asked. “No,” JackaL said, solemnly, “the planet. Although, it’s gone now.” Nearby Matanui Prime decided to talk. “That would be because a weapon specialist, not naming anyone, blew it up.” Hydraxhide honked his horn. “It was about to blow up anyways! You saw it!” “After it was blown up.” Matanui said. “That was you? Why you little-“ JackaL said angrily. “If you want to battle, let me drop you off here first.” Omega Kaita’s voice said. He was sort of conscious in all his alt modes at once. Don’t think too hard on that. “We’ve landed?” the New guy asked. “No, we are still about 20,000 feet up.” Omega said. “Oh.” The New guy said. A little bit later, Omega lowered, somehow found a spot, and let them out. “I will wait here until your return.” He said. “Yea OK-holy pants it’s cold out here.” The New guy said as he walked outside. Matanui drove beside them. “New guy, Hewkii, get in.” The two Matoran climbed into Matanui, and other Matoran did the same with Hydraxhide and the Wreckinators. Jodkra, meanwhile, had Johnson, in rocket mode, on the top of his car. This is also irrelevant, since he let Matoran into his anyways. “I think it’s very cold up here.” Johnson said. “You’ll live.” Jodkra told him. “I hope so.” Replied Johnson. The company drove forward, Matanui leading them, Hydraxhide in watching the back. “How are you supposed to drive on this? I keep slipping!” LesoSpinn said. The Matoran inside of him looked worried. “Stop spinning, let go of the brakes, and make little spikes come out of yer tires.” Hydraxhide told him. There were some screams. “That didn’t help.” LesoSpinn said. “The tires are ones on the outside. Those were the seats.” iBrow told him. “Sorry.” LesoSpinn said. “I’m so sorry.” They continued on, and found the destroyed police car, surrounded by Ko-Metru police and ambulances, just as day was breaking. “Thank goodness you’re here! You must be from PEST!” a Ko-Matoran said to them as they drove up. Hewkii got out to greet him. “What happened?” Hewkii asked him. “He reported that he was stuck in the snow, then that he saw a car coming, then he said it was a tank, and then we heard an explosion, and I then when we got here I knew we needed to call you.” the Ko-Matoran explained. “How’d you know?” Hewkii asked once more. “There was big footprints.. I think they got covered by the snow... I can show you the way they went though.” The Ko-Matoran said. “Then lead the way. We’ll be right behind you. If anything happens, stay behind us.” Hewkii said as he got back into Matanui. The Ko-Matoran got into his cruiser and led the way. As they went, they began to see an abandoned village in the distance as the day grew brighter. They pulled up in front of it, where another destroyed police car could be seen. “We sent someone to follow the tracks. He said he saw a big two legged something that saw him, and that was the last we heard.” The Ko-Matoran said, beginning to cry. Hewkii and the PEST soldiers got out of the Autotoabots. “It’s OK; this guy won’t be going anywhere. Should you or us check out, Matanui?” Hewkii asked the Autotoabot leader. “Have your team check the buildings. We will wait here. If anything happens, get out of there.” Matanui told him. The Ko-Matoran looked shocked that the truck was talking. “You can head back now. It’ll be too dangerous to stay if we find it.” Hewkii told him. The Matoran nodded and drove back. Hewkii led his men forward. “Alright, look for anything big enough to fit a giant robot.” Hewkii told them, raising his weapons. They peaked behind corners, in buildings, under cars and in the sky, but they saw nothing. Up ahead was a large factory. “That looks as good a spot as any.” The New guy said. They advanced cautiously; any vehicle could be a Deceptikuta. Although all the vehicles here were totalled and rusted. “They got out of here in a hurry..” the Matoran beside Hewkii said. “I hope it was because gas prices were too high for them to keep driving to the city for everything..” the Matoran on the other side of Hewkii said. “Actually, I hope not. Rising gas prices would suck.” Hewkii said. “Yea, let’s hope that never happens.” The Matoran beside Hewkii said. “Yea.” They agreed. I bet you see what I did there. AAANNNYYYYWWAAAYYYS, by now they had made it to the factory. Lo and behold, there was a 40 foot tall hole in it. “Yea, it couldn’t have been a little guy..” the New guy said. They walked in cautiously. Looking around, they saw broken machinery, which grew stranger in design the deeper they pressed on into the factory. Finally, they found the hole. This hole was different than the first. In it was a tunnel. This tunnel was coated with metal. The tunnel was 50 feet wide and 50 feet high, at the least. It also had letters on the wall. And they weren’t Matoran letters. “Ya think it’s Metrutronian?” someone asked. “I would be on it.” Hewkii answered. He turned to his troops, “Alright, we’ll set up a perimeter around the entrance. New guy and I will continue exploring the factory with some of you. NO ONE goes into the hole, you understand? NO ONE.” They nodded in agreement. Hewkii, the New guy and 4 soldiers walked around, looking for anything else of interest. They found something. It was small, but obviously not Matoran in origin. It was light to hold, and one side was burnt clean off. It also had Metrutronian lettering on it. There were wires hooked up to it. “I guess the Ko-Matoran tried to do something with it.” The New guy said. “Like what Sector 6 did with Makutatron?” someone asked. “I guess so.” Hewkii said. A Matoran began to reach for it. He brushed dust off it. The dust was so heavy it made a thud when it hit the ground. The thud crawled away. “That was weird.” The Matoran said. “What, the thud? That happens all the time.” Hewkii said. “No, I thought I felt a rumble.” The Matoran said. The New guy looked sad at that. “And now we’re dead.” He said. A Matoran on guard at the hole yelled. “There’s something down there!” He yelled. Then they heard screaming, a very, very, very loud rumbling, scarping and otherwise not very good sounds. Hewkii grabbed the small object. “Get out of here! Move, move, move!” he yelled. The Matoran made a break for the exit, just as something huge burst through the room where the tunnel had been. Hewkii’s team ducked, rolled and ran to find another exit, as the giant thing slithered, slowly at first, then gaining speed, heading for the wall, not noticing the Matoran running from it. Hewkii’s team found a door, ran out and yelled for the Autotoabots. The Autotoabots transmoced, the 6 (technically 7 counting Johnson) of them standing with their weapons ready. Hewkii’s team ran for them, and then out of the wall behind them the Drill Dragon burst forth. Covered in saws, spikes, teeth and multiple little heads, each covered in saws, spikes and teeth, it was a thousand feet of ruin your day. It dropped, then went forward, the ground and bricks flying away from it practically. Hewkii’s team ran for their lives, and the Autotoabots opened fire. The concentrated firepower of the Wreckinators, Matanui Prime, Hydraxhide and Jodkra (with Johnson) made the Drill Dragon go back for a second, giving the Matoran time to get away. Then it stuck it’s head into the ground and buried itself, disappearing. “Did we make run away?” Johnson asked. “No, we just made it angry.” Matanui said, loading his gun. And then around them, the dirt started move. “SCATTER!” Hydraxhide yelled, and the Autotoabots did so just in time. The Drill Dragon came up out of the ground, roaring viciously. A thing opened up on its head. There stood a tall, bulky, one eyed Deceptikuta. “Autotoabots. I assume you are not familiar with my Drill Dragon. It is mine. It will kill you. I will also have you know that fighting it is unwise. It is nigh indestructible.” Shockvak said. Hydraxhide raised his weapons at the Deceptikuta. “Hey, I popped yer head off!” he said. “So you did. I imagine that the unwritten laws of combat say that I must kill you first. Very well. I must oblige.” Shockvak said. He disappeared back into the Drill Dragon, which turned itself towards Hydraxhide. Hydraxhide, in true Hydraxhide style, did the one thing we all expect him to do in any situation; shoot. And that he did. Firing both his cannons, he unloaded all he had onto the Drill Dragon. The Wreckinators transmoc and drove around it, firing their weapons as well. The Dragon still went for Hydraxhide however. It dipped its head, and sped forth, its saw-y mouth ready to kill Hydraxhide. Hydraxhide transmoced and drove. Towards the Drill Dragon. “Let’s play chicken.” Hydraxhide said as he drove towards it. “Hydraxhide! Don’t!” Matanui yelled, firing his weapon at the beast. Hydraxhide ignored him. The two sped toward each other, oblivious to shouts and shots. When it became obvious the Drill Dragon wasn’t going to turn away, (considering it’s a thousand feet long that would be pretty hard for it to do) Hydraxhide decided to have some fun. So when they got close enough, Hydraxhide transmoced, jumped and punched it right in the middle of its forehead. Somehow, somehow, this stopped it. Well, sort of. It stopped for a second, then as quick as it could, raised its head and threw Hydraxhide off, who just missed all its spikes and things. It then turned for the Wreckinators, who had not stopped shooting at it. They drove in reverse, still shooting at it. “If I kill it, can I keep its head?” JackaL asked. “Only if I leave you enough to keep.” iBrow responded. The unending firepower of the Wreckinators did not slow it down as it went towards them. Jodkra, who was nearby, raised Johnson, aimed, and fired. The shot hit it right inside the mouth. This just turned it off course. Towards Matanui Prime. Matanui fired his weapons, and saw what might be a chance. He shot at it, and when it got close enough, dodged the mouth, and went for some of the little heads. He transmoced his arms into his swords, and swung, chopping off two heads, damaging a third, and knocking several spikes off. The Drill Dragon spun, the Wreckinators concentrated in one spot, which sent a satisfying explosions forth, which in turn sent the Drill Dragon back again. Jodkra kept his firing up, as well as Hydraxhide, which began to take its toll on the Drill Dragon. Heads, spikes and saws flew off, and Matanui’s mighty swords sliced and diced whatever got close. Even the Matoran joined in, every shot helping. The Drill Dragon once more went under the earth, and everybody stopped, listening for where it would strike next. It came up right under Matanui Prime. Matanui had time enough to jump to the side, slicing off one of its teeth in the process. He rolled and transmoced away from it. “Omega, aerial assistance!” Matanui radioed Omega. “Right away sir.” Omega said back. The Autotoabots and Matoran continued to fire on the Drill Dragon, which kept getting closer and closer to sawing them into nothing. Then they heard Omega’s engines. The FTTT got close, and opened fire. Missiles, bullets and all that fun went to the Dragon, which did it a world of earth. Shockvak, who wasn’t expecting Omega Kaita, or any aerial assistance at all, commanded the Drill Dragon to retreat. It would do no good to lose it here. So it burrowed down once more, disappearing into the earth. Omega landed nearby, and the Autotoabots and PEST soldiers started towards him. “Do we have everyone?” Matanui asked. “Here.” Hydraxhide said. “Two for two.” Jodkra said. Johnson, who had transmoced into his robot mode, nodded. “Wreckinators all present.” iBrow said. Behind him was LesoSpinn and JackaL. “We lost some men in there..” Hewkii said. The New guy had a cut on his mask, but he was ok. “Very well then. If Shockvak still lives..” Matanui began to say. “Which he shouldn’t. I popped his head off and everything.” Hydraxhide said madly. “If Shockvak still lives, and he has that Drill Dragon of his, then I fear Makutatron may live as well, and that can mean only more destruction to this beautiful planet.” Matanui said as they boarded the ramp into Omega Kaita. “That Drill Dragon, what was it?” Hewkii asked. “Something Shockvak must have created. I’m not sure when, or how, but it cannot be allowed to remain. I can see that all it is made for is death.” Matanui said. “And what about Shockvak?” Hewkii asked again. “We’ve had a few run ins with him before.” iBrow said, “He changes bodies often I notice, so I guess it’s not your fault he still lives, Hydraxhide.” Hydraxhide grunted at this. “He’s a scientist, or inventor, but anyways, he is one of the most dangerous Deceptikuta, real tough to kill-“ iBrow started to explain. “If I just shot his head when I had the chance, we wouldn’t be in this mess. He wasunt that hard to decapitate once. Reckon I could do it again.” Hydraxhide said. “And his inventions are not usually for the better. I imagine the Deceptikuta are playing for keeps this time.” iBrow finished. “And they weren’t before?” The New guy asked. “Good point.” iBrow said. The FTTT flew towards PEST headquarters, where bad news awaited them. END OF CHAPTER Fun Commentary: Whew! That was a long one! 5103 words! I think I should stop doing such long ones... What do you guys think? Also, Makutatron, Makutatron, Makutatron. How the mighty have fallen. The whole point of the scene with him rolling down the ramp and his lisp (which will be gone now) was to show just how weak he has become. Remember when everyone was afraid of him in Transonicle? Well, now even the drones were laughing at him. He's died once, been brought back, and been beaten badly, had his arm chopped off and part of his face blown off, then thrown off a pyramid then left to rot, un-repaired, in the bottom of Nihiscream's ship. He will not be a happy camper, and things will onyl get worse for him from here on in. MTL

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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 02:24 PM

I enjoyed this chapter profusely. I would've preferred some actual combat between the Autotoabots and the Drill Dragon, but at this point I think it might've meant death. Also I'm alright with the longer chapters. -ibrow
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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 06:20 PM

I enjoyed this chapter profusely. I would've preferred some actual combat between the Autotoabots and the Drill Dragon, but at this point I think it might've meant death. Also I'm alright with the longer chapters. -ibrow

Hey, if you want to stab the giant drilling machine with your dagger of axe, go ahead! Lol, but I do believe the Wreckinators were being the smartest when they drove around it. Hydraxhide and Matanui, I'm not sure why I had them go up and hit, but it sure looked pretty in my head.. Well, longer chapters means, well, exactly what you've seen here. Shorter chapters would probably only contain two parts (i.e. First part about Jaller, second about, say, the Autotoabots, Shockvak, Makutatron, Nihiscream, etc.), but I would update more frequently. Also, shorter would be about 2500 words per chapter, instead of 3000-5000..... Next chapter will be Wednesday or Thursday.. MTL

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Commentary is at the end of this one today. Also, I tried a shorter chapter today, and wanted to see how it would be if I only focused on one group...TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 5THE IDES OF NIHISCREAM THE MOON Nihiscream sat nervously in his quarters aboard the Dinobot. Tapping his three-clawed foot against the floor, he stared at the computer screen aimlessly. All the cameras on the ship had been offline for about 32 minutes, long enough for his whole metaphorical world to fall apart. Makutatron was gone, so was Soundprah and Flufskiron was slowly winning over the loyalty of all the Deceptikuta on the moon. Only Nihiscream’s strikers remained loyal, and that was because half were programmed that way. Couldn’t they see that it he, Nihiscream, who had rightful control over the Deceptikuta? Apparently not. Nihiscream finally manned up the courage to go to Flufskiron’s summons. The nerve of him to summon mighty Nihiscream! Again! Nihiscream sent a message to Thunderstrike, Ramstrike and Skystrike to meet him at the bottom of the Dinobot’s boarding ramp. As Nihiscream walked there, he contemplated how he could work his way out of this. He had no clue. Perhaps if he killed Flufskiron... but no, that might look suspicious. Besides, someone had to fight the Autotoabots. He turned another corner, considering running away from it all. No, that would only cement his view as a coward before the Deceptikuta. Not to mention Makutatron would most certainly hunt him down eventually. And he had nowhere to go. Metrutron? No, that would be too obvious. Hide on the Matoran planet? No, when the Deceptikuta eventually take it over, they would find him. Nihiscream was still mulling these things over when he walked into Thunderstrike. “Agh! Watch you tinhead!” Nihiscream yelled at him. Thunderstrike took a step back from Nihiscream. “I apologize sir,” he said, “but I was just making sure you made it. Flufskiron wanted you to hurry up.” “Oh, did he now? So we listen to mighty Flufsk- wait a minute, how’d you know it was him we were going to see?” Nihiscream said. Thunderstrike tilted his head at this. “He informed me.” He said. “How interesting.” Nihiscream replied. “Let’s hurry up then.” They continued on in silence, meeting up with Skystrike and Ramstrike. They then transmoced and went towards Flufskiron, who once more was in the crashed Autotoabot ship. He spent a lot of time in there now. The four entered, and once more walked into the control room, the Autotoabot bodies still lying on the floor (along with the single Deceptikuta body). It added a certain.. ambience to the room. Norik Prime still sat in his chair, his sword and shield still propped up against, and the container containing the space bridge pillars still lying at his feet. Nihiscream and his three strikers walked in, and Flufskiron appeared. “Welcome again Nihiscream, I trust you had a pleasant trip?” Flufskiron asked him. “No.” Nihiscream replied. “Ah, very good. I’m terribly sorry about summoning you here again-“ Flufskiron started to say. “No you’re not. What are you scheming now, Flufskiron? I have a planet to conquer.” Nihiscream said, his patience having run dry. Flufskiron smiled. “Ah, well, I tried for an air of pleasantness. Very well. Scheming? No, I wouldn’t call it scheming...” Flufskiron said as Deceptikuta walked up behind Nihiscream and his strikers, aiming their weapons at them and surrounding them. “..... I’d call it my presidential campaign.” Flufskiron finished. “Traitor.” Ramstrike spat. Nihiscream thought that was terribly cliché. He also thought this was incredibly unnecessary. “Be quiet. I’d hardly call Lord Makutatron’s bravest warriors loyal.” Flufskiron responded. “What do you mean? I’ve never once ran away! I’ve fought Matanui Prime himself one on one!” Nihiscream said replied angrily. “You’ve been beaten by Matanui Prime when the odds were 6-on-1!” Flufskiron said, almost laughing. “That’s because Makutatron had me waste my talents trying to grab that infernal Matoran we didn’t even need!” Nihiscream responded. “Grindtaka and 1 of your Striker were killed and the rest of you were beaten have to death before you did anything to Prime! You didn’t catch the boy after that, and then your other 2 Strikers got killed, then you ran away!” Flufskiron said, enjoying this. “I did not! I was shot out of the sky, then Makutatron called for a retreat!” Nihiscream said. “Which I’m sure you led!” Flufskiron accused. “No! Makutatron did!” Nihiscream desperately tried to defend himself, but it wasn’t working. “And then there was the battle in the Matoran city, in which every other Deceptikuta died except for you. Why? Because you ran away!” Flufskiron said. The Deceptikuta who surrounded the Strikers laughed. “Sleedat survived too!” Nihiscream yelled. “That’s different.” Flufskiron said. “How?” Nihiscream asked. “She left because it was strategically impossible for her to win by herself at that point, as well as the AllShiny had just been destroyed with Makutatron. There was nothing left to fight for. You, on the other hand, had already left.” Said Flufskiron. “When the going gets tough, Nihiscream is already gone!” A Deceptikuta joked. The crowd laughed. Nihiscream clenched his fists. Nihiscream looked exasperated. “Makutatron was a fool! He led us to death for a hopeless cause!” Nihiscream said. There was an “oooohhhh” from the crowd. Flufskiron smiled. “So,” he said, “Our cause is hopeless?” “What!” Nihiscream said, “That’s not what I said!” “Is it now? May I also point out when Icarax had the Sun Eaterer and the Sun Matrix, ready to destroy the planet, Matanui by himself defeated you lot once more?” Flufskiron said. “He had other Autotoabots teleport in or something and surprise us!” Nihiscream said. “It was Icarax! You mean to tell me he was defeated by a surprise attack? The mighty Icarax, the original Deceptikuta, before there even were Deceptikuta?” Flufskiron said. The Deceptikuta captors nodded in agreement. “Yes!” Nihiscream protested. “And where were you?” Flufskiron asked. “I was shot down again!” Nihiscream said. “Again? Am I to believe that Nihiscream, leader of the Deceptikuta aerial forces, can’t fly to save his own chassis?” Flufskiron said. “Well, he’s here ain’t he?” A Deceptikuta said. There was laughing among them. Nihiscream looked angry. “I got it! He can’t fly to save his own superiors!” Another Deceptikuta said. There was more laughing. Ramstrike chuckled. “Heh, that was pretty good..” Skystrike elbowed Ramstrike as he said it. Ramstrike looked sad. “Hey, I killed an Autotoabot at that fight!” Nihiscream said, knowing all his efforts were in vain. “Really? I seem to have found out that said Autotoabot was barely even worthy of being called a scarp drone. And yet he prevented the Matoran and other Autotoabots to escape while he fought you, the mighty Nihiscream!” Flufskiron said. There was more laughing from the crowd. “And let’s not forget, immediately afterward, how when we had all finally arrived to this miserable planet, you take command of the Deceptikuta and tell us to pull back? Why is that? Where you to afraid to fight the little Matoran?” Flufskiron said, this one being the icing on the cake. “We needed to prepare, the Matoran and Autotoabots worked together..” Nihiscream tried to explain. He was telling the truth here, he didn’t want the Deceptikuta to once more be surprised by the Matoran and Autotoabot’s fighting ability. “And we’ve done no preparing! We have an entire army down there still, with Sleedat in command, and all the Autotoabots were on that island where Icarax died.” Flufskiron said. “They had Omega Kaita!” Nihiscream responded. “Who was half dead!” Flufskiron responded back. Nihiscream decided to strike back. “Didn’t you lead the attack on where the Autotoabots kept the AllShiny on Metrutron in the final days of the war? Tell me, how did it end?” Nihiscream never had found out how that battle ended. Flufskiron crossed his arms. He looked over to Swiftinock, who stood nearby. “Tell them, Swiftinock, how did we do in that battle?” he asked his second-in-command. There was scattered chuckling from the crowd. Nihiscream immediately realized how this was going to go. He began to think of a retort. “Complete Deceptikuta victory.” Swiftinock answered. The crowd laughed again. None of them cared for Nihiscream much, and even more hated him. They enjoyed his pain, either emotional or physical. “Yea, but what about the AllShiny? You didn’t get it..” Nihiscream said, knowing he was doomed already. “We all know how it goes!” A Deceptikuta yelled. “The Autotoabots launched it into space when Makutatron himself went for it. He followed it, and years later here we are.” Swiftinock said. Flufskiron nodded. “Please Nihiscream, you have no need to be stupid here. You and your remaining allies are surrounded, we’ve taken your ship-“ Flufskiron was saying. “My ship! You let your hounds inside the Dinobot!” Nihiscream yelled, his rage getting to boiling point. “The very same. So Nihiscream, if you will peacefully tell us what you’ve done with Soundprah..” Flufskiron said. “Soundprah? I’ve done nothing with the traitor!” Nihiscream yelled. “Have you now? Well then, I can’t say I have much use left for you.” Flufskiron said. He motioned to his warriors. “Kill them.” “After you.” Nihiscream, jumping at Flufskiron. He grappled the bulky Deceptikuta, and they fell back, floating back slowly in the moon’s low atmosphere. They rolled until they were in front of Norik’s body. “I’ll use the Prime’s sword to kill you! Consider it a finer end than you deserve!” Flufskiron yelled as he grabbed Norik’s double headed sword. Nihiscream grabbed the shield, which had one end on top of a wire. Nihiscream pulled the shield up and held it in front of him, just as a ZAP was heard. The two combatants, as well as every other Deceptikuta in the room, looked at the body. Somehow, somehow, in an act of incredibly cheap writing, the shield lying on the wire had prevented energy from flowing through it. With the shield removed, energy somehow stored in the wire flowed through it and into Norik Prime. First, the old Autotoabot’s eyes glowed. Then, in a burst almost too quick to imagine (but not too quick to write down) he was up, taking his sword and shield back from the surprised Flufskiron and Nihiscream, and spun his sword. “Stand back Deceptikuta, I’ll you all before you take these pillars!” Norik said, slicing off bits of Flufskiron and Nihiscream’s armour as they moved back. “Deceptikuta, subdue him!” Flufskiron commanded. 3 drones ran forward, weapons raised. One fired, while the other 2, with melee weapons, went in. Blocking a hit from the first Deceptikuta, then spinning and slicing off an arm, Norik moved to the second Deceptikuta, parrying the blow from it, then stabbing it in the chest. It fell to its knees, and Norik pulled his swords out, slicing the head and shoulder off of the first. He spun back around, using his shield to block the shot from the third Deceptikuta, then moving forward and slicing upwards, then stabbing down, and the third Deceptikuta fell. The remaining however, all aimed their weapons at him. “Come at me villains! One at a time or all at once, I don’t care!” Norik said. “Well Nihiscream, should I kill you first or should we deal with him?” Flufskiron said. “I’m intrigued with him. Let’s kill him first and go from there.” Nihiscream replied. “Very well.” Flufskiron responded. They turned to face Norik, who still stood there. “Well old bot, won’t you beg for your life?” Skystrike taunted. “Come here and we’ll see who begs what.” Norik responded, spinning his double headed blade. “How about you tell us how to us those space bridge pillars first, and we decide what then.” Flufskiron said to Norik. “Hah! Deceptikuta, tell me, where is Makutatron, I would like to see him here. Did he get the AllShiny yet? Or has he been too busying killing his own drones?” Norik said. Flufskiron stood up straight. “The AllShiny is destroyed, Makutatron is probably dead, and so is Icarax. The Deceptikuta are now a fully functioning army, without useless figures to lead us to defeat.” Flufskiron said. Nihiscream actually agreed with Flufskiron’s views on Icarax and Makutatron, but now wasn’t the time for that. He also thought it was almost funny that Flufskiron didn’t know Makutatron was still alive. Norik, meanwhile, looked shaken at this. “The AllShiny... Icarax? No...” Norik said, dropping to his knees. “I’m sorry master... I failed you..” And now Nihiscream and Flufskiron were frightfully confused. END OF CHAPTER. Fun Commentary: Shocking, huh? So Norik Prime has a secret master, and by chance could it have been Icarax? Maybe.... Also, remember that Nihiscream, Skystrike and Thunderstrike are the only ones on the moon who know that Makutatron is alive..MTL
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 06:39 AM

No, not Icarax.Makutatron.And I loved Nihiscream being picked on. If I hadn't had a half-split personality, I would have laughed so hard my stomach muscles would turn into a 6-pack.
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 04:06 PM

I hope Nihiscream rises to some sort of prominence/importance again.Also Norik Prime seems evil now.-ibrow
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 07:55 PM

No, not Icarax.Makutatron.And I loved Nihiscream being picked on. If I hadn't had a half-split personality, I would have laughed so hard my stomach muscles would turn into a 6-pack.

Makutatron? Maybe, maybe not... Icarac? Maybe, maybe not. I tell you what however, it is one of those two... I was worried that part might not have been all that funny, but it was fun to write, and was really easy to do. Nihiscream's track record hasn't exactly favored him...

I hope Nihiscream rises to some sort of prominence/importance again.Also Norik Prime seems evil now.-ibrow

I do too. Nihiscream is one of my favourite characters. In real life I am pretty cynical, and I channel that through Nihiscream. He's not as competent as he thinks he is, although he is much smarter than your average Deceptikuta. He also has a good ability to try to make the most out of every chance, although he's not exactly good about it...The next chapter might be a flashback, in which Norik Prime (and the war) would be explained more or less. Or maybe I'll go back to Jaller and Autotoabots and leave you all guessing :PFriday or Saturday will probably be the next chapter. Until then...MTL

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Norik Prime? With a master?WHAAT?My knowledge of the movie did not prepare me for this! Sentinel Prime did not seem to have any master in it! How can this be?However, I'm just going to subscribe to the 'Icarax is Norik's Master' Newsletter. It is the most logical.
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Norik Prime? With a master?WHAAT?My knowledge of the movie did not prepare me for this! Sentinel Prime did not seem to have any master in it! How can this be?However, I'm just going to subscribe to the 'Icarax is Norik's Master' Newsletter. It is the most logical.

I'll follow the basic plot of the movie, but I'm stirring clear of the confusing plot and plot holes. You see, I thought Megatron went there because the AllSpark was there, and he was following that for the Fallen, but no, apparently he was going to meet Sentinal there, and due to the oddest coincidence in the history of everything (or cheap writing) they both ended up trapped pretty close to each other.Icarac as Norik's master? I'm sorry to say, but it actually is the most logical choice here. Makutatron just isn't... enough of a talker to have someone like Norik be his master. Icarac got Makutatron to be his apprentice, who was able to turn most of Metrutron's population to the Deceptikuta, but I'll do a little spoiling here: Someone had to get Icarax to Makutatron....Oh, and I'm sorry, but this chapter is about Jaller. I know you want Robots, but you need to learn you can't get everything :PWell, the actual reason is that I was going to do a flashback scene to Metrutron, but I actually forgot to think about what I was going to write, so I decided to leave the Metrutron chapter for tommorrow.And remember, as Shockvak (or Shockwave) would say: Logic is the only answer TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 6JALLER AND THE MEANING OF LIFEMETRU-NUIJaller’s walked out of Takua’s company, past the Onu-Matoran from earlier (who yelled a string of taunts at Jaller as he passed) and down the steps.Once more he had utterly failed a job interview. But he didn’t blame himself for this. It was Takua’s fault. For some reason Matoran in Metru-Nui suffered from a sheer lack of competence, common sense and actual thought.Jaller continued walking through the parking lot to where he had parked his car, grumbling to himself. He then realized that his car was gone. In the spot where he had parked it was a note. Jaller, speechless, walked over to it and picked it up. He read it. It said “THX 4 CAR, WILL SELL 4 MOVIE TIX”Jaller shook his head, threw the ticket to the ground, and continued to walk back home.“Really? Of all the luck...” Jaller was mumbling to himself as he walked down the street, contemplating life. After the battle of Voya-Nui three years ago, Jaller, Hahli and his parents (as well as Takua apparently) returned to Metru-Nui. Once getting back to Jaller’s house (which was still partly destroyed from when Pohatubee rescued them from deadly kitchen appliances) Jaller’s dad remembered something.“Oh yea, Jaller, I just remembered something. Your mother and I decided it was time you moved out of the house.” Jaller’s dad had said. Jaller wasn’t allowed back at the college, either. They said it was because “he had helped to destroy half of the campus and caused complaints to be made about the competence of the local Police Department”.Jaller, who could slightly understand the complaints, was annoyed that all his belongings had been either destroyed by the Deceptikuta Ga-Matoran thing that attacked him, or stolen by Takua’s friends, the shadow children, who are never to appear in this comedy again.So he decided to move in with Hahli.Surprisingly enough, Hahli had basically an entire building, partly hollowed out, as a home. Jaller had not known this. So they had lived there, along with Pohatubee, (and Wheeldax) happily, for almost three years until a month ago Blue Flame had showed up and told them Matanui needed them. “Don’t worry Jaller,” Blue Flame had told him, “I myself found this vehicle for you. I read that it’s a classic!”The vehicle in question was a rusted, tiny, 2 seated, half-an-engine death trap that could barely make it down the street without something important, like the breaks, getting broken.Jaller did not appreciate Blue Flame’s charity, but if you want to tell the giant robot “no”, then go ahead good sir.And then what followed were several failed job interviews, culminating with the latest embarrassment at the hands of Takua.Perhaps the worst part was, however, for Jaller was that he had received no recognition from the whole thing. He had gone to President Turaga Dume, but all he did was tell Jaller “to stay in school” and remember to re-vote him next election.Jaller continued on to home, afraid of what Hahli would say. It was barely lunch time and already Jaller wanted this day done and gone. No Matoran gave Jaller as much as a second thought as he walked by, head down.But something else did. Gave him much thought, I mean. From on top of a rooftop nearby, lying low, was Lasorhawk. Lasorhawk was another of Soundprah’s minions, a hawk-like menace, barely 6 feet long, but made up for its lack of size with its subterfuge abilities. “The Matoran appears to walking back to its nest.” Lasorhawk told Soundprah exactly what we already knew.“Keep an eye on him. Rumdox is dealing with our Ko-Matoran traitor. Soundprah out.” Soundprah responded.Jaller gave a little thought to the Deceptikuta fortress at the Tohu Memorial. He didn’t know why they hadn’t decided to kill everyone in Metru-Nui yet, and it was slightly terrifying to think that there was an entire army of high-tech giant killer robots right in the heart of the island. He didn’t know why the Autotoabots and PEST hadn’t gone in either to get rid of them, but Jaller had once got a good look at the fortress himself. The walls of it were 80 feet high at least (which Jaller realized wasn’t very high for Metrutronian walls, but he assumed they were makeshift), and with the deadly turret Deceptikuta perched all over the top of the walls, watching the skies for air strikes (which had proved very effective against Deceptikuta) as well as anyone stupid enough to get close. PEST soldiers and Vahki (which Jaller couldn’t help but feel they were the things least suited to this sort of thing) enforced a 600 foot perimeter around it all times.Jaller would’ve felt a lot safer if there hadn’t been any Deceptikuta there at all, but hey, you can’t have everything, no matter how practical it seemed.Continuing on, Jaller passed a Ko-Matoran police officer. Jaller paid him no heed, but he noticed Jaller.“Hey you!” he yelled.“Of course..” Jaller grumbled to himself, “Hello officer!” he said as he turned around to greet him.“I know you!” the Ko-Matoran said. Jaller noticed that he wore a Kaukau, a mask commonly worn by Ga-Matoran. Jaller would’ve laughed if he had been in a better mood.“Uh, okay..” Jaller responded.“Don’t you recognize me?” he asked Jaller.Jaller didn’t recognize him at all, but he thought he’d give it a try. “Icytoa1?” Jaller asked.“What? No!” The Ko-Matoran said.Jaller didn’t know the names of any other Ko-Matoran. “The guy who was bothering me at Mr. Awesome’s company?” he tried. He remembered the name Ehyre from somewhere, but couldn’t place it.“Uh, no. I’m the guy who interrogated you like five years ago in a police station!” he said.Jaller vaguely remembered that night, and nothing good about it. That night he had seen Pohatubee transmoc into his robot form for the first time (from a distance), and then, after having called the police because he thought his Camaro had been stolen, the police came and arrested him. The next day he had been attacked by that Cop-car robot. Earlier that week he had just bought that Camaro from Bobby Ahkmou’s Finest Trash, and then given Hahli a ride home in it. It had been an odd week.“Yea, sure I guess.” Jaller said, not really caring at all.“So, how have you been?” The Ko-Matoran asked him.Jaller was not in the mood for this. “Look, I’d love to stay and chat, but I’ve got stuff to do.” Jaller told him.The Ko-Matoran looked broken hearted. “Oh, okay then. Carry on then, citizen.” The Ko-Matoran turned away. Jaller continued on, and Lasorhawk followed from a distance.Jaller, surprisingly, was making better time walking home than when he had driven in his car to the interview. He didn’t think that it was very funny. He noticed a RV parked out front of his and Hahli’s home.“Oh great.” Jaller said. He just then remembered that his parents were coming to visit. “This’ll be just super.”INSIDE Jaller walked up the steps in the house. He hoped Hahli had cleaned up the house while he was out.What was he thinking? No she wouldn’t. Jaller was the one who always had to clean. She was too busy at her job or something.He then remembered Wheeldax. He hoped that little robot hadn’t gotten himself killed or something. That would be embarrassing. “And here he is!” Hahli said as Jaller turned a corner into the main room.“Jaller!” Jaller’s mom said as she ran up and hugged him.“Boy!” Jaller’s dad said, throwing him an uncooked chicken. “Eat this, it’ll make you strong.” Jaller didn’t catch the chicken and rolled down the stairs, exploding into bits and pieces. “Son, I am disappoint.” Jaller’s dad said.“Come, come, sit down, make yourself at home.” Jaller’s mom said, bringing him to the couch.“Mom, I live here.” Jaller said.“Did you get the job?” Hahli asked him, changing the subject.Jaller looked to the floor sheepishly. “Uh, no, but I can explain...” “JALLER!” Hahli yelled at him.“Son, again I am disappoint.” Jaller’s dad said. Jaller’s mom shook her head.“I can explain! You see, Takua was running it, but he called himself Mr. Awesome’s, and there was this weird Ko-Matoran and-“ Jaller started to say.“Jaller,” Hahli said, “are you trying to tell me Takua is running that company?” “Look, I know it sounds bad, but it’s true.” Jaller said. This was a terrible day.“I remember when you first met Takua..” Jaller’s mom reminisced. “Yea, he burnt down the mall.” Jaller’s dad said.“That was Takua? Why the little..” Hahli said, surprised.“You oaf! You couldn’t get the job! Now the mighty goddess will have her wrath upon you!” Wheeldax yelled, driving up in RC truck mode, transmocing and jumping onto the coffee table.“Wheeldax, go to your box.” Hahli commanded him.“As you command, your highness!” Wheeldax said, turning around and doing the opposite of what I wrote above.“Jaller, I know things have been tough for you,” Hahli began to say, “what with Pohatubee going off to work with PEST and all..” “That’s not all!” Jaller’s dad said, “They took Blue Flame too! He was the best car I ever owned! He never needed gas, he was stylish and he was fast! And he talked when I kicked him!” “Look, I’ll find another job...” Jaller started to say.“I’m sure! Next thing you know Hahli’s kicked you out, you’re lying in a pile of your own vomit and you can’t count the fingers on your hands!” Jaller’s dad, his face shaking with every word.“Dad, I’m not sure that’s even relevant.” Jaller said to his dad.“Of course it is! Everything I say is relevant, always!” His dad responded, getting carried away. Jaller’s mom put a hand on his shoulder.Then they heard someone stopping out front. In a car. Wheeldax came driving back.“It’s a Metrutronian! I bet its Makutatron himself! He’s gonna come in here and kill me himself! I knew he would! Or it’s Soundprah! I knew he’d be angry with me if I left! Ooooooh.” Wheeldax whined.“Wheeldax, box.” Hahli said.“As long as there ain’t no Deceptikuta in it, then I’ll be good. See you guys on the flip side!” Wheeldax said as he went back to his box.The four Matoran walked down the stairs and out the front door. There, parked by Jaller’s parent’s RV, was a 2009 concept Camaro and a Blue sports car.“Pohatubee!” Jaller said, running to the Camaro.“My car!” Jaller’s dad said, running to Blue Flame.“The end!” Wheeldax said, hiding behind the front door.“Wheeldax! I said box! I will not warn you again!” Hahli scolded. “Okay...” Wheeldax said as he tried to go up the first step.Before them, Pohatubee and Blue Flame transmoced into their robot modes. Pohatubee was yellow and black, 23 feet tall and had a Kakama Nuva look-a-like for a face. His doors became wing like things behind his arms. But they weren’t wings. But I’m sure you knew that.Blue Flame was 23 feet tall as well, and blue. He had very little spikes or protruding bits coming off of him, and his chest was the back of his car mode.“Jaller! Hahli! Parents of Jaller!” Pohatubee said.“I see Matanui Prime has need of my services.” Wheeldax said.“Wheeldax! House! Box! Now!” Hahli yelled. Wheeldax once more tried to go up the step.“Pohatubee! You can talk?” Jaller asked him.“Nujack fixed my vocal processor! He’s amazing! He made this cool slurpee machine thing also, but it broke.” Pohatubee said.“Didn’t your voice come back at the end of the Lego City battle?” Hahli asked Pohatubee.“It did, then Kopatchet tried to find out why it fixed itself, but then he accidentally broke it again afterwards.” Pohatubee explained.“Oh, I see. Why do you think it fixed itself in the first place?” Hahli asked.“The AllShiny must’ve done it! I had it near me for half an hour or so, so I guess that must have done the trick.” Pohatubee said.“Makes sense, makes sense.” Hahli said.“Why are you guys back, anyways? I mean, I don’t think Matanui would let you just visit for the sake of visiting.” Jaller asked.“He felt you guys were in danger. Or going to be at least. It’s been a while since you last were.” Blue Flame said.“I haven’t been in danger.” Jaller’s dad said.“Neither have I.” Jaller’s mom said.“I’m good.” Hahli said.“I’ve done a good job of protecting them!” Wheeldax said, driving up to them in RC truck mode.“Wheeldax!” Hahli snapped. Wheeldax, without even transmocing, turned around and drove back to the house.They all then turned and looked at Jaller.“What?” Jaller asked.“Well, you haven’t said anything, which leads one to presume that you have in fact seen, or have partaken in, some danger.” Blue Flame said.“Well, a Ko-Matoran at the job interview today said the Deceptikuta were acting up again. But it would have nothing to do with me. So I kind of thought I’d be fine or something....” Jaller said. Everyone looked at him in a rather condescending manner.“...but I guess you think I will be.” Jaller said.“I think so too. Which means Pohatubee and I will stay here and watch you for a while. I’ll send a message to Matanui, telling him about this.” Blue Flame said.“It’ll just be like old times Jaller! You runnin’ away screaming while I bust up Deceptikuta! Biff! Bam! Pow!” Pohatubee said, punching the air.“Well, I actually do feel a lot safer now...” Jaller said.“You felt safe with me around, didn’t ya?” Wheeldax said, standing near Jaller’s feet. Hahli grabbed him by the eye and dragged him back inside the house. Wheeldax sobered, trying to apologize to her. She didn’t listen.On top of a nearby building, Lasorhawk watched all of this, expert technology and such hearing every word.“Soundprah,” Lasorhawk said, “Autotoabots have come to protect the Matoran. Blue Flame and Pohatubee to be exact. The Matoran’s parental units are there as well.” “Well done Lasorhawk. Continue to monitor them. Do not make contact.” Soundprah said.“I also couldn’t help but notice that Wheeldax is there too. He is their.. pet. Or slave. One of the two. Maybe both.” Lasorhawk said.“Acknowledged. Barritax shall be sent to monitor as well.” Soundprah said.“Permission to... liberate Wheeldax?” Lasorhawk asked.“Permission granted. Soundprah out.” Soundprah said. Lasorhawk chuckled, then sat down and watched the house.END OF CHAPTERFun Commentary: Barritax? Yep, he'll be back. And not at all pleased to see Pohatubee.MTL

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Posted Nov 05 2011 - 08:24 PM

'Tis another good chapter, but still I am disappointed by a lack of Brains. Where is Brains? He was like the best character in the entire movie.-ibrow
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Posted Nov 05 2011 - 08:53 PM

'Tis another good chapter, but still I am disappointed by a lack of Brains. Where is Brains? He was like the best character in the entire movie.-ibrow

I don't know who to use for Brains..... I was thinking of one of the Voya-Nui Matoran, but for the life of me I couldn't remember their names...MTL

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Posted Nov 06 2011 - 04:51 PM

Garan, Kazi, Dalu, Balta, Piruk, Velika.You could also just call him Brains. :P-ibrow
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Posted Nov 07 2011 - 12:31 AM

Garan, Kazi, Dalu, Balta, Piruk, Velika.You could also just call him Brains. :P-ibrow

If I get a name, I already know how to work him in.Fun Commentary: This chapter is not particualrly funny, but it explains ALOT of the plotTRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 7FLASHBACKS ARE NOT CHEAP WAYS TO MAKE BACKSTORYA long time ago in a Galaxy not too far away.....*Note that all dialogue is translated from Metrutronian intoEnglish Matoran because the author thought it would look bad to do the entire chapter in letters and numbersTHE MATORAN PLANETMILLIONS OF YEARS AGOIcarax holding his staff in hand, stood over the battered body of Metrutron Prime.“Now, my misguided brother, you finally see just how pathetic you really are.” Icarax said, raising his staff, “All your talk of protecting this miserable planet and the disgusting creatures that live on it, all your fighting, has proved for naught. You are weak. You are nothing.”“Wait, Icarax, our ideals! We were to be the light of the universe! Our race-“ Metrutron Prime started to say.“My race is all there should be! My Deceptikuta! My Metrutronians! My race,” Icarax said, bringing his staff through Metrutron’s body, “is all there will be.”Metrutron Prime cried in agony as his life began to fade away, his energies leaving him, going through Icarax’s staff, and into Icarax. Icarax stood straight, propped against the smoke filled sky, the mighty Sun Eaterer standing menacingly behind him.“You shall be remembered as the first of us, the name sake of our planet. And that will be all.” Icarax said.“And you will be less.” Metrutron Prime said, summoning the last of his powers, and blasting Icarax back. Icarax, who hadn’t expected this, was taken off guard and bounced down the hill. Metrutron Prime took Icarax’s staff out of himself. Beside him, landing and transmocing, was another Metrutronian.“When I’m done with him, take him to Metrutron and bury him away. None shall know of him and our war. Let us hope this is the last time our race must deface this beautiful planet.” Metrutron Prime said. He walked forward to Icarax, took his staff, and stuck it through Icarax as Icarax had just done to him. Icarax howled in pain.“I must end your evil, Icarax, but death is too good for you. Enjoy untold years to contemplate what you have done here.” Metrutron Prime said. And, using all the stolen energy that was in the staff from Icarax’s previous victims, he forcibly transmoced Icarax into a square shaped sarcophagus, with an engraved carving of Icarax’s face on it.“As long as a Prime still lives, you shall be locked in this prison. Goodbye, my brother.” Metrutron Prime said. He turned back to the being beside him. “Gunmetal, you know what to do.”“Aye sir, I suppose this’ll be the last time I see you.” Gunmetal said as he grabbed Icarax’s sarcophagus. Icarax screamed with rage from within it. “Oh shut up!” Gunmetal said, giving it a good kick.“Goodbye, Gunmetal.” Metrutron Prime said. Gunmetal waved silently, and activating his teleportation thing, took him and Icarax to their home, Metrutron. The planet’s namesake watched them disappear, and then called forth his surviving brothers.“Come, let us hide this where Icarax himself can never get it.” Metrutron Prime said. Then, taking it out of a compartment in his armour, he held the Sun Matrix. “The AllShiny may lose its power because of what we have done today, but better that than it be used for evil.”“Forsooth.” A nearby Metrutronian said.Together, they used their power to make a tomb around the Sun Matrix, and build a temple around their bodies, hiding the precious item from Icarax until he took his revenge.On Metrutron, Gunmetal found a single pit near a small hill. With as much power as he could muster, he tossed Icarax’s sarcophagus into the pit, then with used what little power Metrutron had given him to move the dirt of the hill into the pit.“There, that should hold him for a good long bit. I reckon I should not have to see him in my life time at least.” Gunmetal said, walking away from the site.If only he did.METRUTRON3 THOUSAND YEARS BEFORE THE MAKUTATRON’S WARDreaddude removed some dirt from the hole he just made in the ground. At the bottom of it, he could just see the corner of whatever it was he was digging up.“Overseer Blue Flame, come look at this.” He said to his overseer. Blue Flame, who was much shorter than Dreaddude, walked over.“What is it?” Blue Flame asked.“I do not know, but it looks old.” Dreaddude said, scooping more dirt out of the hole.“How can you tell it is old, when you can only see a corner of it?” Blue Flame asked.“I just can. I have a knack for these things.” Dreaddude said.“You have a fascination with it you mean. I have not met another being with such an inane love of history as you.” Blue Flame told him.“You like it!” Dreaddude said.“I like facts. I like truth, I like helpful information. I like relevant information. I cannot do anything with a corner of.. a thing.” Blue Flame said.Dreaddude rolled his eyes. “Which is why you were put in charge of excavation duties in this quadrant.” Dreaddude said.“This is a sector, not a quadrant.” Blue Flame said.“Sorry. I always get the two confused. I do not personally know the difference.” Dreaddude said.“The difference,” a voice said, “is that a sector is what we get when we divide a quadrant by 4.”*Please note I’m only saying that because it sounds smart. If I got that wrong, feel free to correct me. Or not. I’m fine with how it is, really.“Norik Prime! An honour!” Blue Flame said, bowing, then standing up straight again. Dreaddude bowed, and still towered over Blue Flame.“At ease. I am curious as to what it is you have discovered. History as always fascinated me.” Norik Prime said, stepping into the excavation site.“If you will sir,” Dreaddude said, “I have not yet removed it from the ground, but if you give me an hour, I shall have it ready for you and brought to your quadrant. I mean quarters.”*Again, please note I don’t know what the equivalent of hour would be for them. Different planet and all. I also doubt you would be able to confuse quadrant/quarters in an alien language.“Very well. Let me have a look at it here first.” Norik said. He stepped past Dreaddude and Blue Flame and peered into the hole. He saw the corner Dreaddude had mentioned earlier. “Fascinating.” He said. He turned to Dreaddude. “Tell me, what is your name?”Dreaddude straightened and saluted. “Dreaddude, sir!”Norik nodded. “You look strong, Dreaddude. Why are you in excavation duties when you could be a very able soldier? From what I can tell, I do not doubt your combat prowess already.”Dreaddude looked a little embarrassed. “I much prefer learning about different species and their histories than exterminating them.”Norik laughed. “Very well, a much nobler pursuit, although I resume you take the time to learn about ourselves first?” Norik said.Dreaddude nodded. “I have. That is why I chose to remain here on Metrutron and discover our own history before going on other-world courses.”Norik smiled. “Very well indeed,” he turned to Blue Flame, “Blue Flame, is it not? One of Matanui’s I presume?”Blue Flame nodded. “Yes, he is a friend of mine.”“I see. Well, I best be off, work to be done!” Norik Prime said. Norik was then off, and the next person he met was Matanui Prime himself.“Matanui! How has the day been for you so far?” Norik asked Matanui.“Norik! I have been very well. Makutatron has been angry again, but he always is. He said the AllShiny could be the target of an attack by some unknown race.” Matanui Prime said.“That is just Makutatron being himself. As High Lord Protectinator of Metrutron, the AllShiny is of course top priority. I think he just wants an excuse to attack something.” Norik said.“He is a soldier, not a politician. He would much prefer actually fighting enemies instead of fighting economies.” Matanui Prime said. They both chuckled at that.“That really was not all that funny.” Norik said.“I know, I do not know why we laughed.” Matanui responded.“Well, do not worry about Makutatron. He should not worry with things that probably will not happen.” Norik said.“I fear sometimes that Makutatron does not care for other species.” Matanui said.“No! That is preposterous! Why would you think that! He simply cares too much for our race, that is all! Remember my motto; freedom is the right of all sentient beings! Nothing could harm us!“I hope you are right. I will see you later.” Matanui, transmocing into his vehicle form and driving off.“Goodbye!” Norik said, continuing on with his day.LATER THAT DAYNorik Prime returned to his quarters, rather exhausted. After a day of meetings, planning and other wise boring but practical things that needed to be done, he just needed a rest. So when he found a giant square shaped statue thing in the middle of his home, he was rather confused, until he remembered.“Oh right, that Dread fellow.” Norik said to himself. He walked past the statue, deciding to check it out later, when he heard a voice.“Turn... around.”Norik was confused. Should he do it? Why not. He spun around, double headed sword at the ready, and saw no one there.“Show yourself! I am a high ranking official! I am not afraid to kill! You would best explain yourself!” Norik said.“I am showing myself.”Still Norik saw nobody.“Right here.”Norik looked from side to side, behind the statue and still saw nothing.“This is not funny.” Norik said.“This is not either.” The voice said, and suddenly Norik’s head felt like it was going to explode. He dropped to knees, dropping his sword and shield, and held his head.“Stop! Stop!” Norik cried.“I can be benevolent, but I can much easier be cruel.” The voice said. Norik looked up, fumbling for his sword.“The.. statue?” Norik meekly asked.“Not a statue. Coffin. Sarcophagus. Tomb. I am trapped inside this, and I need your help.” The voice said.“If this is a joke from that Dreaddude, he will have another coming..” Norik said, head swimming.“This is no joke. I do not joke. If Dreaddude was the one who brought me out of the ground, then I am thankful for his assistance, but he knows not who I am. Tell me, who are you?” the sarcophagus said.“Tell me who you are first? Then I will think to answer.” Norik responded. Not in the mood for this, the sarcophagus sent forth another burst of pain into Norik’s head. Norik fell again. Finally, he worked up the energy to speak. “I am Norik Prime, Protectinator of Metrutron.”“A.. Prime?” the sarcophagus said.“Yes.” Norik said, feeling woozy.“Tell me.. are there.. more, of you? More Primes? Are you the leader, of our planet now?” the sarcophagus asked.Norik tried hard to answer clearly. “Yes, Matanui Prime, I think he has someone he is training to be a Prime, ugh, there was a Manic Prime I think... No, not many. Right, Manic Prime is story character. Just me and Matanui Prime. And the one he is training.”“Interesting... very interesting.. do you lead this planet I asked. You have not answered.”Suddenly the pain stopped. “No, I do not. High Lord Protectinator Makutatron does. Then there is Lord Protectinator Matanui Prime, and then I, Protectinator Norik Prime.” Norik said.“Ah, I see. Well, I suppose you will want my name.” The voice said.“I would like to know it, yes.” Norik responded.“I, am Icarax the betray...ed.” Icarax said. Norik gasped and fell back down.“You mean Icarax the betrayer! Murderer of Metrutron!” Norik yelled, grabbing his sword.“Do not be hasty.” Icarax said. Once more pain racked Norik’s head, and he fell. “I was the betrayed. All I wanted was the best for Metrutron, to continue to empower the AllShiny. Metrutron prevented me from doing this, at some feeble excuse of a lesser species living on the planet which orbited a star we were going to use. He stopped me from serving my own planet! All I wanted was Metrutron safe for all eternity..” Icarax said, “and I have a feeling you want that too...”“Yes, I care for Metrutron, more than anything. It is my home,” Norik said, “But I do not think I can trust you at all.”“Why? Because Metrutron lied to all of you? He told you I betrayed him? He betrayed me! He betrayed us!” Icarax said.“I do not think I can believe you..” Norik said.“Whose word will you take? That of a long dead traitor to our noble home..” and here Icarax took a dramatic pause, “or the word of one of his victims?”Norik stopped, and looked over the sarcophagus. “So he trapped you in that for defending our home?” he asked.And then Icarax knew he had him.Over the following 40 years (not very long to Metrutronians) Icarax filled Norik’s head with lies, until Norik idolized Icarax. Icarax told him of the supposed superiority of their own race, of himself, and their planet. Personally, the last thing Icarax wanted was Norik Prime alive, but he needed his pawn. Eventually, Icarax made his move. He wanted Norik to bring his sarcophagus to Makutatron, where he would “convince”Makutatron to work on the continued survival of their planet, and they eventual release of Icarax from his prison.And to say the least, we know what became of that.Icarax turned the already anger prone Makutatron into a raging sociopath, who ordered a meeting of all Metrutron’s highest officials. He said that he needed the AllShiny’s power to help their race survive, and that if he couldn’t use it, then Metrutron would fall into ruin without his leadership.Naturally, everyone was divided in this. Lots of the more weak-minded fell for it, singing in the streets for “absolute power to Makutatron” and such. The smarter (and less back-stabby) saw the flaw in Makutatron’s logic, and said no.So in a rather bad show of leadership, Makutatron took one of the beings who defied him, and killed him before the planet.I think you can figure out how well that went.In the years before that Makutatron had begun building drones for “construction”, which was odd considering that what the Constructikuta were for. What I’m sure you’ve figured out was that these were for war. And he had just sort of released that info the hour before he killed that unfortunate detractor.Matanui Prime himself was the angriest, telling Makutatron there would be civil war if he kept this up. Makutatron then went onto the airways and told the whole planet that Matanui Prime and his “Autotoabots” had just declared war on him. Calling themselves “Deceptikuta”, after Icarax’s “betrayed freedom fighters” of old, (Hint: They weren’t really fighting for freedom) they fought.They fought for years and years and years and years, destroying Metrutron’s once beautiful cities, the Autotoabots moving the AllShiny away from the Deceptikuta as often as they could. Norik Prime secretly gave the locations of the AllShiny to the Deceptikuta every time it was moved, and the war kept going, for years and years and years and years. Norik pretended to fight for the Autotoabots, killing his own share of Deceptikuta, all the while selling the Autotoabots out to his master, Icarax.Icarax, meanwhile, was explaining to Norik how to make space bridges, so Icarax could bring his armies around the universe once he was freed. Of course, he needed Matanui Prime dead and the AllShiny in the Deceptikuta’s hands.And so, Norik built the space bridge pillars, Matanui kept the AllShiny moving, and Makutatron kept attacking. Norik ended up telling Matanui about the space bridge pillars, telling him “They can win us the war”,not telling him who had told him how to make them. Matanui believed him, as Norik had been Matanui’s mentor and oldest friend.The day came that Matanui told Norik that they were going to launch the AllShiny into space, and then using Norik’s space bridge pillars, transport it around the universe, keeping it away from Makutatron and his armies for good. Norik told this to Icarax who told this to Makutatron who told this to Flufskiron, who promptly (which Makutatron agreed with) decided to attack. And so the final battle on Metrutron began, which Flufskiron leading an attack on the place where the Autotoabots kept the AllShiny. The Autotoabots put up staunch resistance, however, and Flufskiron’s forces only advanced slowly. Makutatron grew bored of this and attacked by himself, going after the AllShiny building. Inside was Pohatubee and Wreckinators, where Makutatron destroyed Pohatubee’s vocal processor and killed two Wreckinators, and badly scarred the remaining three, tearing out LesoSpinn’s eyes, ripping JackaL’s arm off and nearly pulling iBrow’s spark thing out.Norik Prime, meanwhile, was going to activate his space bridge pillars and teleport the AllShiny into Deceptikuta hands, never got a chance. At some point, Deceptikuta ships had found out about, and the Terragator itself (captained by Dreadinock) shot Norik Prime’s ship out of the sky, and the space bridge pillars activated, and his burning ship teleported all the way to the moon above the Matoran planet.Matanui, having lost contact with Norik, feared the worst and launched the AllShiny anyways, much to the surprise of everybody. Makutatron saw it launch right before him and followed it immediately, which saved Pohatubee and the Wreckinators from being killed. The Wreckinators got Pohatubee off, and held back advancing Deceptikuta forces as Matanui Prime and the remainder of his forces boarded ships and moved out of there.The Autotoabot ships separated, hoping to find the AllShiny. They lost contact with each other, losing scouts on worlds and running into Deceptikuta. One of the last few ships was Matanui’s own, and he launched Pohatubee onto an unknown world in the solar system they were currently exploring.On that planet, Pohatubee found a clue; Project Frosty and Captain Ithinkimbald.What happened next you’ve already read.END OF CHAPTERMTL

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Posted Nov 07 2011 - 04:15 AM

Sectors are thirds of a circle. Quadrants are quarters of one. That was the simplest explanation I could give.Anyway, a good chapter which fills up those bloody plot-holes in the movie. It actually provides a logical reason on why Norik/Sentinel decided to betray the Autobot/Autotoabot cause.
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Posted Nov 07 2011 - 06:17 AM

.....Norik betrayed the Autotoabots because.... somebody turned into a box?
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Posted Nov 07 2011 - 07:08 PM

Sectors are thirds of a circle. Quadrants are quarters of one. That was the simplest explanation I could give.Anyway, a good chapter which fills up those bloody plot-holes in the movie. It actually provides a logical reason on why Norik/Sentinel decided to betray the Autobot/Autotoabot cause.

Then what I had was completly wrong. Well, I had the fourths idea right... ish.The whole Sentinel plot in the movie confused me to the point of no return. Megatron followed the AllSpark for the Fallen and just happend to land on the same planet that's moon Sentinel fell on? Coincidence or some very cheap writing...

.....Norik betrayed the Autotoabots because.... somebody turned into a box?

It was who was in the box that did it. Icarax (The Fallen) convinced Norik over a period of forty years or so to do his bidding. I know that I made the whole scene look a little cheap, but I had to give some (slightly) plausible excuse to it. Norik didn't believe at first (he was going to try and stab the box), apparently Norik was either very weak minded or Icarax has a better voice than Morgan Freeman.So to re-word you, Norik betrayed the Autotoabots because a box told him to.You were pretty close though...I must apologize though, this chapter was not very funny. This is also why I haven't written more Metrutron chapters. I've tried before, but they just never end up being funny at all.The next chapter will be either Wednesday-Thursday, or Saturday-Sunday. I'm pretty busy over the next fews days, so...MTL

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Posted Nov 08 2011 - 04:25 PM

A pretty good chapter, though Norik Prime listening to a box doesn't really make sense to me. :PLooking forward to the next chapter.-ibrow
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Posted Nov 08 2011 - 06:54 PM

A pretty good chapter, though Norik Prime listening to a box doesn't really make sense to me. :PLooking forward to the next chapter.-ibrow

Did you read Transonicle 2? If you did, it might make a little more sense. Although, now that I've reread the chapter a few times now, I've realized I wasn't very clear with it all.Ahwell, the next chapter goes back to the Autotoabots, where Tahkan and Ramembolt report back to Dakama Prime about what they saw at the Tohu Memorial, then Matanui, Jodkra, Hydraxhide and the Wreckinators come back, and Wipeout tries to explain what's going on to a Matoran from the goverment. Then Makutatron decides to send a message to the moon, demanding Nihiscream, dead or alive. Preferably dead in many small pieces. Or alive in many small pieces. Makutatron dosen't care which personally.MTL

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Right, sorry it took so long to get this one up! I have a valid excuse though; Skyrim. Amazing game, amazing game.TRANSONICLE 3: THE ULTIMATE DOOMCHAPTER 8THE REAL AUTOTOABOTS OF METRU-NUIPEST HEADQUARTERS, METRU-NUIWipeout leaned against the railing on a walkway, the New Guy standing beside him.Wait a minute, you ask, if a giant robot leaned against a railing, wouldn’t said railing break?Why of course, I would answer, except Wipeout is not a giant robot. He is the only Matoran sized Autotoabot, and due to his lack of height, he’s often forgotten about by the other Autotoabots.But wait a minute there, you might ask again, they remember Wheeldax, don’t they?Who? I would respond.ANNNNYYYWWWAAYYSS, The New Guy, who at some point (and never received an actual name, I mean, we don’t even know what type of Matoran he is..) had developed some sort of friendship with Wipeout, pointed to Tahuswipe, who was talking to Galcee.“Is he flirting with her?” The New Guy asked. Why he was still the New Guy after several years with PEST, I do not know. What I do know is he has a bucket load of actual common sense, a rare trait among Matoran these days.“What? Flirting? You think he wants to commence a relationship with her?” Wipeout responded. Wipeout thought the New Guy’s question was ridiculously silly, but he let the Matoran go on.“Yea, I mean, I see they always got each other’s back during a fight, and he’s always talking to her, and he’s leaning against a wall with one arm like this,” The New Guy demonstrated what he meant, “which we usually take to mean he’s flirting with her.”Wipeout chuckled, which was weird for a robot to do, I know, but I think you’ll accept him for what he is. “I’ll tell you what; our race doesn’t work that way. You see, Galcee developed this technology some while back that lets her auto aim when she shoots, which personally I find disgraceful, although Hydraxhide thinks it’s neat. Tahuswipe does too, and he’s been trying to find out how to get a version of his own for at least 3 thousand years.” Wipeout explained.“You mean he’s a giant suck up?” The New Guy asked.“I’m not personally familiar with the term, but I assume you mean “he’s just being nice to her so she’ll tell him how to make his own aim-assist thing?” Yes, sort of. She is also his best friend, in your Matoran sense of the word.” Wipeout said.The New Guy, probably like you, didn’t understand that at all, but he pretended to anyway. “Uh huh,” he said, “Y’know, I thought he would be better friends with Vakama Maximus. They’re both sort of obsessed with themselves.” Wipeout laughed at that. “Vakama Maximus? Tahuswipe? Best friends? Hah! Your comparison is humorous, although I assume you don’t understand why.” Wipeout said, wiping metaphorical tears from his eyes optics.“Uh, sure, I understand, but please, enlighten me.” The New Guy said.Wipeout continued on. “Vakama Maximus is more egotistical regarding his appearance, while Tahuswipe is egotistical regarding his skills in combat. Personally, I think Vakama Maximus fights better and Tahuswipe looks better, but that’s just me. Poor, poor, ignored Wipeout..” Wipeout said.The New Guy, again, (and probably like you again) didn’t understand. “But Tahuswipe has those swords, and he’s always going in and choppin’ things up. And he’s got that crossbow thing and that shoulder gun. I saw him kill like, 20 Deceptikuta in 3 minutes like that.” The New Guy said, “I mean, I guess Vakama Maximus is alright, but all he’s got are those two pistols and some mini blades I saw him use once.” “Look, there’s a reason Hydraxhide trusts Vakama Maximus to watch his back, and not Tahuswipe. Tahuswipe is good, but the difference between him and Vakama Maximus is very obvious.” Wipeout said.“Uh, what?” The New Guy asked.“Tahuswipe is red, Vakama Maximus is blue.” Wipeout said.“Tahuswipe is silver though.” The New Guy said.“It was a joke.” Wipeout said.“It wasn’t very funny.” The New Guy responded.“Neither are you.” Wipeout said.“Hey, look here buddy-“ The New Guy started to say.“Alright, here’s how it goes if you want. Vakama Maximus used to have a red paint scheme with his old alt-mode, right?” Wipeout said.“Uh, I think I remember.” The New Guy said, not really remembering or understanding.“And now he has a blue colour scheme, and a new alt mode, right?” Wipeout said.“Yea..” The New Guy said.“And Tahuswipe has kept the same alt mode, right?” Wipeout said.“Yep.” The New Guy said, still not understanding.“So hence the joke.” Wipeout said.“Oh. Of course.” The New Guy said, not thinking it was very funny, or understanding it, at all. “I thought you were referencing something else, but ok.”“Fine. I guess I’ve been spending too much time around Crashinator. He’s not very funny..” Wipeout grumbled.At that moment, the massive Dakama Prime walked in. “Open the doors. Tahkan and Ramembolt are flying in!” he said. He didn’t sound too happy. What you probably do not know, is that Dakama Prime is Matanui’s second in command. That’s right, not Hydraxhide, Dakama. Considering that Matanui has usually been around to be in charge (except for that time he died) which might explain why you’ve never really seen Dakama be in command. All well.The doors opened, and Tahkan’s Ussanui alt mode and Ramembolt’s stealth bomber alt mode flew in, transmoced into their robot forms, and stood before Dakama. Dakama was 44 feet tall, the tallest Autotoabot, at 44 feet. (aside from Omega Kaita, of course) Tahkan was 35 feet, so he looked at up (physically, at least) to Dakama.Wait, did I say Dakama was tallest? Well, Ramembolt was 44 feet as well, able to look tall Dakamas right in the face with a single turn of the head.That was lame, wasn’t it? Very well, going on.“You know, Tahkan, both of you leaving your post is not something I appreciate. Your reason better be good.” Dakama Prime said.Tahkan looked up at him, almost scowling. You see, Tahkan Metra was a very grumpy bot. A different sort of grumpy than Hydraxhide, but still a grumpy bot. Well, more like permanently angry. Not quite anger, but an emotion somewhere between grumpy and anger-AAANNNNYYYWWWAAAYYYSSS, Tahkan decided to talk. “I wasn’t about to leave a rookie there with what I saw.” He said.Dakama wasn’t impressed. “You could have sent him and stayed there yourself.” Dakama said.It was Tahkan’s turn to not be impressed. “Not with this info.”“Can I tell him? I know who it was!” Ramembolt said, sounding almost excited. This didn’t please Tahkan. “You shouldn’t be excited about having him here.” Tahkan said.“Him who?” Dakama said, sounding uneasy. At this point, Phoenix Prime, Kopatchet, Crashinator, Nujack and Vakama Maximus walked into the room. Tahuswipe, Galcee, Wipeout, the New Guy and anyone else who had already been there were paying attention.“Him.” Tahkan said, ominously.“Who?” Dakama responded.“Really, is it that hard to guess?” Ramembolt said.“Well, in his defence, there are lots of Deceptikuta.” Nujack said.“No one asked you!” Kopatchet said to him. You see, Kopatchet had taken a disliking to Nujack, ever since Nujack had taken Kopatchet role of Medic. Fixing Pohatubee’s vocal processors had been on Kopatchet’s to-do list. He just hadn’t gotten there yet.“Makutatron.” Tahkan said. The room went quiet.“He fell down the ramp getting out of his ship! It was funny!” Ramembolt said.“I don’t find anything about him funny.” Crashinator said. You see (I use that a lot, don’t I?) Crashinator was an ex-Deceptikuta. He had been one of Soundprah’s minions, and had gotten many chances to see Makutatron “interrogate” (hint: rip apart) prisoners. He had defected to the Autotoabots in Transonicle 2 when he was captured trying to capture a fragment of the AllShiny. The fragment was captured anyways (by Ravager), then Makutatron was resurrected, then Crashinator was interrogated by the Autotoabots (in the process getting an eye optic put out (by a stick none the less) (he got a cool eyepatch-battlemask thing from it though) before escaping from the cage he had been in (it wasn’t locked) and being found by Kopatchet. Kopatchet more or less took Crashinator as a pet, and along with Wipeout, had helped re-make Omega Kaita. During the battle of Voya-Nui, Crashinator came face-to-face with Makutatron (after Crashinator had managed to kill Ravager), and was thoroughly beaten half to death.That was a very long explanation, wasn’t it? But that’s what you love about Transonicle, isn’t it?The room was silent for a minute. They had all believed Makutatron dead, killed by Matanui during the final minutes of the battle of Voya-Nui and the failure of Icarax’s revenge. “You should.. have kept watch on him..” Dakama managed to say.“I’m asking for assistance in that. I don’t truly feel safe standing there by myself with Makutatron running around again.” Tahkan said.Dakama nodded. He turned around to Kopatchet. “Contact Matanui, tell him-“ he began.“Tell him what?”They turned around to see Matanui, Hydraxhide, the Wreckinators, Jodkra and Johnson ( as well as Hewkii and some soldiers) walking into the room.“What’s wrong?” Matanui asked. Matanui and Hydraxhide had some scars on them, and one of Hydraxhide’s hands was sparking (like he punched something spiky), although the Wreckinators were their normal, fine, beat up selves. Jodkra and Johnson were fine too. Matanui carried in his hand a small, broken pieces of metal.“Who wants to tell him?” Vakama Maximus said. As it turns out, Dakama was the one up to the task.“Sir, Makutatron. He’s back. Just showed up.” Dakama said.“Well this, is just a right dandy day, isn’t it then.” iBrow said. Matanui looked particularly unpleased with this news.“You saw some rather unlikeable stuff, I presume?” Tahkan asked.“Shockvak is back. And he has a new weapon, a Drill Dragon.” iBrow said.“I punched it. Right in the face.” Hydraxhide said, showing off his sparking hand.“Oh joy.” Vakama Maximus said. Vakama Maximus had watched Hydraxhide get stabbed, then turned around and rip off Shockvak’s head during the battle of Voya-Nui. He hasn’t been expecting Shockvak to, y’know, still be alive, but hey, whatcha gonna do?“And we found this.” Matanui said, holding up the object Hewkii’s team had found.“Hey, Matanui, what is that, anyways? You didn’t say on FTTT.” Hewkii asked Matanui.JackaL was the one to speak. “That there’s a piece of a Metrutronian ship. Autotoabot. By the looks of it, those Ko-Matoran had been trying to work on it, or re-engineer it.” “Like Sector Six did with Makutatron?” Galcee asked.“I presume so.” Matanui Prime, giving the piece of ship to JackaL.“Why would the Ko-Matoran be working on it?” Nujack asked. Kopatchet eyed him angrily. “I can answer that.” Hewkii said. “Up until about 80 years ago, the Ko-Matoran were a rather.. unfriendly group. They weren’t even part of Metru-Nui until we won over Ko-Metru in the most exciting game of Go-Fish ever.” Up with Wipeout and the New Guy, Wipeout noticed the New Guy trying to slip away.“Where are you going?” Wipeout asked him, not really caring.“Hewkii doesn’t know I got back early. The whole team was supposed to stop at McNocturns after we landed, and I didn’t feel like paying.” The New Guy said, opening a door.“Oh.” Wipeout said, turning back to the crowd. Kopatchet raced over to check Matanui’s wounds before Nujack got a chance to. “How would the Ko-Matoran have gotten the part anyways?” Jodkra asked.“I don’t know.” Hewkii said. His team shook their heads.“It doesn’t matter,” Matanui said, “for now, we have Makutatron to deal with.”“I’ll go check.” Dakama Prime said, “And I’ll take Vakama Maximus, Tahkan and Ramembolt with me.” “Very well. Find out what he’s up to, but do not engage.” Matanui said.“Hey, shouldn’t I go with you guys?” Phoenix said, walking up.“No, Phoenix, I want you to go to Voya-Nui. We’ve had reports that things might be going on there. You should go check it out.” Dakama told him, already making for the door.“That’s just because I can just teleport over there and you don’t feel like sending one of Omega’s FTTT’s over there, isn’t it?” Phoenix said.“Yes.” Dakama responded.“Maybe Omega would like to go see the island again?” Phoenix said.“I don’t think he would.” Dakama said.“He’s not just a 112 foot tall gun you know.” Phoenix said as he disappeared in a ball of flame, teleporting to Voya-Nui.Dakama stared at the spot where Phoenix had been, then turned to Matanui and Hydraxhide. “You two should stay for repairs.” He said.“Naw, I’m fine. I think I should go out and bust more Deceptichop. That’ll make me feel better.” Hydraxhide said.“No, Dakama’s right. Got to the medical bay, Hydraxhide.” Matanui said. He turned to Tahuswipe. “Tahuswipe, you know the way to Jaller and Hahli’s home, don’t you?” “I do.” Tahuswipe said.“Take Jodkra and Johnson with you to it. Inform Blue Flame and Pohatubee of Makutatron, and stay with them. I don’t think they’ll remain safe for long.” Matanui said.“RIghto.” Tahuswipe said. On his wheeled feet, he rolled over beside Jodkra. “C’mon, let’s see if you can keep up.” “Oh, I think I can.” Jodkra said, transmocing in his SSC Ultimate Aero alt mode, with Johnson transmocing into his rocket launcher on top of the car. He follow Tahuswipe out of the building.iBrow walked up to Dakama. “We’re fine. We’ll go with you. You can use all the extra weaponry.” He said.“Be alot easier to just send us!” JackaL joked to LesoSpinn. LesoSpinn chuckled at that.“Alright. But you follow me. We’ll keep an eye out, Matanui.” Dakama said. He turned back to his squad. “Let’s roll!” he said, transmocing into his purple version of Matanui’s truck mode. Tahkan, Ramembolt, Vakama Maximus and the Wreckinators followed.Matanui looked to Kopatchet and Nujack. “We need to study this object closely. I fear what it may imply. Also, I want you two,” Matanui started to say.“Three.” Crashinator said.“You three to work on my trailer. I had this idea for it...” Matanui said.“I don’t want to work with him.” Kopatchet said, referring to Nujack. Nujack looked hurt at that.“Why? What have I ever done to you?” Nujack asked.“Kopatchet, calm down. We must try to get along with each other. I fear Dakama has become slightly aggressive of late.” Matanui said.“I’ve noticed that too.” Kopatchet said, turning away from Nujack, “I’ve also noticed Hydraxhide has become considerably less aggressive.”“I’m less aggressive because I have nothing to shoot in here!” Hydraxhide said, spinning his remaining cannon and his hand held gun. He hadn’t been the same since he lost a cannon on Voya-Nui.Matanui, Hydraxhide, Nujack, Kopatchet and Crashinator walked into Kopatchet new lab, which contained some projects of his. Hewkii led his team to the cafeteria, while the New Guy continued to think of an excuse to explain where he was. Galcee walked off to do whatever it is she does, and the doors to the room closed, leaving Wipeout along in the room, still leaning on the balcony.“Predictable, so predictable. Not even a passing mention to me.” Wipeout said. Below him, Mataus ran into the room.“Sorry I’m late chaps! There was this lovely program on the telly and-“ The green Autotoabot noticed the room was empty.“Ah, good. I don’t have to keep this bloody accent up then.” Mataus said.Above him, Wipeout smiled. Good ol’ Mataus, he thought. He then realized that Mataus had been completely forgotten about during all that.“Heh.” Wipeout laughed.THE TOHU MEMORIALMakutatron sat in the chair that once had held a statue of Hapori Tohu. Since the chair was the perfect size for Makutatron, he had promptly ripped it out when he had first found this spot 3 years ago. Now, he had just finished carving “Makutatron’s throne” into the side of it when Sleedat walked up, followed by Panrashot, Soundprah, Daedulus, Enderth, Viewdok and Barritax, the cop-bot way back from Transonicle. “Lord Makutatron.” Sleedat said, bowing. Panrashot bowed too, and noticing Enderth and Daedulus weren’t, forced them to bow too.“Sleedat, my second most loyal servant. Soundprah told me the boy’s location has been found?” Makutatron said, Dr. Transraga busy working in Makutatron’s gaping head wound.“He has.” Sleedat said.“Good. Soundprah, come here.” Makutatron said. Soundprah walked forward. “You are now my second-in-command.” Makutatron said.“Soundprah acknowledges.” Soundprah said, who turned and stood beside Makutatron’s throne.Sleedat stiffened at this. “But lord Makutatron, I’ve held this planet in your mighty name for the past 3 years! Don’t I deserve some sort of reward?” Sleedat said.“DO not ask for rewards, Sleedat. All you will receive is pain. But do not fret, you shall have your reward. Once the traitor Nihiscream is brought to justice, you shall have his place.” Makutatron said.Sleedat smiled sarcastically. “Does that mean I get his Strikers too?” She asked.“I imagine so. Some use they’ve been.” Makutatron said.“Joy.” Sleedat said, truly disappointed with how things were going.Makutatron turned to Soundprah and Viewdok. “Open up a radio-frequency to the moon. I wish to speak with Nihiscream.” Makutatron said.“Of course mighty lord.” Viewdok said. He transmoced into his giant video camera alt mode, and Soundprah sent a wire form his hand to Viewdok. A small hologram appeared. On it was Flufskiron, who just pushed someone off screen as the frequency opened.“Flufskiron, who was that?” Makutatron asked in his usual cruel tone.“Uh, just an annoying drone, O’lord. And may I say, what a pleasure to see you again! I had feared the worst!” Flufskiron said.“Spare may your annoying prattle. Show me Nihiscream!” Makutatron said.“Of course.” Flufskiron said. He motioned to Swiftinock, whose spiky shoulders could just be seen in the corner, and Swiftinock walked forward, holding Nihiscream by the neck.“Nihiscream. I almost want to hear you beg for your miserable life.” Makutatron said, clenching a fist before him.“Ah, but lord, I was simply letting you regain your energy after our terrible defe-“ Nihiscream tried to say.“Shut up, Nihiscream. I’ll hear your whining when I kill you later. Flufskiron, bring Nihiscream to me, and you shall have his place.” Makutatron said. Nearby, Sleedat looked shocked at this.“Of course O’lord.” Flufskiron said, “Oh, and one more thing.”“What is it, Flufskiron?” Makutatron said, not pleased (not that he ever was) for more from Flufskiron.“Are you familiar with a certain.. Norik Prime?” Flufskiron asked.“I was. But he’s been long dead. Otherwise Icarax wouldn’t have been able to come back and die.” Makutatron said, spitting out Icarax’s name.“Hmm. Very well. I’ll see you soon, O’lord!” Flufskiron said as he terminated the link.“What do you think he meant by that?” Panrashot asked.“Be quiet Panrashot.” Makutatron said.“Of course glorious Makutatron!” Panrashot said.Sleedat stood before Makutatron. “You said I could have Nihiscream’s place!” She said.“Consider yourself lucky I let you keep this one. Panrashot, Enderth, Daedulus, Barritax! Regain your former glory and bring me the Matoran boy who has eluded me for so long! Kill his defenders, destroy his home, and make sure he knows just how happy I’ll be to see him. Take some drones with you as well. Now go.” Makutatron said.“Yes glorious leader!” Panrashot said, grabbing Enderth and Daedulus and pulling them along.“I will not fail you!” Barritax said, turning on his heel and following them.“Sleedat, tell me, where is Dreadinock?” Makutatron asked.“I’d assume Voya-Nui.” Sleedat said, her patience at its end.“Tell him to begin heading here. I will await his return. I can trust him to remain loyal.” Makutatron said, ignoring Sleedat’s tone.“As you wish.” Sleedat said as she turned away.END OF CHAPTERFun Commentary: Will Sleedat betray the Deceptikuta? I don't know. Why is Makutatron mad at Sleedat? He's always mad, he just likes ot have someone to yell at. Why is Dakama and Tahkan being so grouchy? I don't know. What does Galcee do in her spare time? I don't know. Isn't great I can answer all these questions!The word count for this one was 3333. Neat.MTL

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Posted Nov 18 2011 - 03:38 AM

“Up until about 80 years ago, the Ko-Matoran were a rather.. unfriendly group. They weren’t even part of Metru-Nui until we won over Ko-Metru in the most exciting game of Go-Fish ever.”

By this you mean that the United States bought Alaska from the Russians at two cents per acre.

“Sorry I’m late chaps! There was this lovely program on the telly and-“ The green Autotoabot noticed the room was empty.“Ah, good. I don’t have to keep this bloody accent up then.” Mataus said.

Telly. With a 'y'.Anyway, another good chapter. A bit two much dialogue, but that's okay.

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Posted Nov 18 2011 - 08:22 PM

“Up until about 80 years ago, the Ko-Matoran were a rather.. unfriendly group. They weren’t even part of Metru-Nui until we won over Ko-Metru in the most exciting game of Go-Fish ever.”

By this you mean that the United States bought Alaska from the Russians at two cents per acre.

“Sorry I’m late chaps! There was this lovely program on the telly and-“ The green Autotoabot noticed the room was empty.“Ah, good. I don’t have to keep this bloody accent up then.” Mataus said.

Telly. With a 'y'.Anyway, another good chapter. A bit two much dialogue, but that's okay.

Well, between fight scenes and the like, I really gotta fill it up with dialogue. If the whole story was fight scenes, you would all probably still read it, but...I'm sorry, what was the point I was trying to make there? :PI was wondering if anyone would get the whole Russia/Ko-Metru thing there.Telly? Oh, I better fix that..Anyways, next chapter will be... soon. Phoenix Prime will fight a Deceptikuta (guess who) on Voya-Nui, while Jodkra, Johnson, Tahuswipe, Blue Flame and Pohatubee end up fighting off a Deceptiktua attack. AWESOME! MTL

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Posted Nov 18 2011 - 08:33 PM

You appear to have "Massive Spacingitis" with your chapter.It is sad to see that. It's not fun to have.Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter.-ibrow
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Posted Nov 19 2011 - 05:26 PM

You appear to have "Massive Spacingitis" with your chapter.It is sad to see that. It's not fun to have.Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter.-ibrow

Actually, the font is wrong on this chapter for some reason. I have to fix it...EDIT: Should be fixed now. Now if you excuse, I must return to the Elder Scrolls 5: Skyrim. I have to chew gum and kill Dragon, and I have 5 sticks of gum left. But I should kill those dragons...Annywaayyss, there is a chance the next chapter will be this weekend. I'll give you a hint as to who Phoenix will have to fight on Voya-Nui: It's not Dreadinock, but someone who has previously appeared with him..MTL

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Posted Nov 19 2011 - 08:24 PM

You appear to have "Massive Spacingitis" with your chapter.It is sad to see that. It's not fun to have.Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter.-ibrow

Actually, the font is wrong on this chapter for some reason. I have to fix it...EDIT: Should be fixed now. Now if you excuse, I must return to the Elder Scrolls 5: Skyrim. I have to chew gum and kill Dragon, and I have 5 sticks of gum left. But I should kill those dragons...Annywaayyss, there is a chance the next chapter will be this weekend. I'll give you a hint as to who Phoenix will have to fight on Voya-Nui: It's not Dreadinock, but someone who has previously appeared with him..MTL

Huge spacing is still there. To my knowledge, not really any way you can fix it though; it seems to be a problem with copy-pasting stuff.Anyway, look forward to the Pheonix fight. No idea who he'd be fighting though.-ibrow

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