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#1 Offline ManiacToaLaco

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Posted Oct 14 2011 - 10:55 PM

Well, it's been a while since I've posted anything, and it's been longer still since the original Transonicle was posted. Now, the original twelve chapters were written rather poorly (they were done using the reply button -_-) , and I'm sad to say I'm not quite proud of how badly they were written. Jokes, plot and point were lost do to the fact it looked like I wrote it with my earlobe. So, I well repost the redone, redeemed and respell checked Transonicle and Transonicle 2, but wait, THERE'S MORE! That's right! I will add new chapters, new parts, new plots and more background, including: -That chapter taking place on Metrutron I promised but never delivered-Getting rid of ridiculus goofs-A fun little commentar-And getting myself back into mode for writing Transonicle 3. After off course, I actually watch Transformers 3... I will post Transonicle 3 in a different topic, for clarities sake. This isn't just me reposting work I've already done. This is me reposting it so you can actually read what I wrote. Not to mention, reading Transonicle and Transonicle 2 will let you know who's who in Transonicle 3, considering I have a lot of characters.. Not like many of you actually read the original anyways... Besides, I don't want to lose my work all-over again. Our old computer with all of my stuff broke and I lost the original chapters, so this will give me a chance to save them all once more, as well a rewrite them better than ever. Lo and Behold, Transonicle, the original chapter! Fun Commentary: This chapter, as well as the following eleven, were written using the reply button, meaning my spelling, grammar and puncuation were worse than ever. I'm not proud of how it all looks, so perhaps now it will be passable work..This chapter originally contained lots of preliminary stuff, like calling the Autotoabot's Autotoa, the Deceptikuta Deceptiikuta and more unsitly errors. And now, the adventure (re)begins. TRANSONICLEThe Transformers Chronicle"A long, long, long, long, long- you get the picture- ,long time ago, there existed a world. This world, was very different from the one you know. There were two factions, we, the Autotoa, and are enemies, the Decipikuta. For millenia, our race covered the planet in war, to the point that there was almost no life left on the planet. The Decipikuta, led by Makutatron, were hoping to captured the item that brought our race into being, the AllShiny. I led our forces to one last stand off, which ended when my spy and recon specalist, Pohatubee, launched the AllShiny into space. In rage, Makutatron destroyed his vocal wires/tubes/things. I have no idea what there called, but the point is, Makutatron transformed into his Metrunuian jet mode. I don't even know what that is called and he's my brother. Anyways, he flew off the planet, in search of the AllShiny. The Decipikuta went into hiding, and we left the planet to try and find the AllShiny before Makutatron. Little did we know, we were already to late.........." End transmission.Ko-Wahi, 1897........"Come on, Matoran, it 'ill freeze before your finished at this point!" Rang out Captain Ithinkimbald. He looked at the Matoran digging away at the ice, trying free the S.S Find Me. They had been trying to go though a frozen lake, but had failed. One of the reasons was probably because the crows nest guy was blind, or it was that the S.S Find Me was a boat, so they had to go though the ice. Whatever the reason, it played apart in the destiny boardgame that the great spirit was playing on them.Captain Ithinkimbald walked to the front of the ship, and was suddenly sent flying in the air. He hit the ground with a thud. The thud then ran away after being thrown into the air. Captain Ithinkimbald got up and watched as the Ski-Ussals, skittled away. Captain Ithinkimbald wondered how they had gone fast enough to throw him in the air, then ordered his Matoran to follow the crabs.They chased the Ussals to a spot in ice. The Ussals started digging at the ice, as if there was a treat in there. As Captain Ithinkimbald got there, one Ussal broke the ice, falling in, with the captain in tow. As they hit the ground, the tow-line broke, letting him walk on his own. The Ussal skutteled away into the darkness as Captain Ithinkimbald took out his handy-dandy pocket flashlight, which was just a light stone with a rod sticking though it to make the handle. He looked around and saw something that made his jaw go though his mask and hit the floor. He picked up his jaw and locked it back into place. Before him, laying frozen in ice, was a giant man. He was red and siler, was covered in in frightining armor, had what looked like two lights on the side of his head. There was a sort-of mask on his chest, with five pointy sides and two evil looking eyes. His mouth was open in a silent scream, like someone had stood on a sore toe of his. Captain Ithinkimbald looked around him, and realized that he was standing in a massive, three fingered hand. He walked to the frozen mans chest and touched the mask. There was a bright flash of light, then everything went dark.Ko-Wahi 1897, the next day.........They found Captain Ithinkimbald the next day, as they were all to scared to go down on there own. They had decided to all go, and had found him, frost bitten, hungry, thristy and blind. The light had blinded him, and put little cracks in his glasses. He was taken to hospital by airship, and why they hadn't taken it with them to Ko-Wahi in the first place I don't know, but it was probably because Captain Itinkimbald was to cheap to buy himself one. In the following months, Captain Ithinkimbald drew pictures and talked about the man he had seen in the ice. Eventually he was called "That crazy blind guy that no one cares about or likes and his expirey date better come soon or I will drown myself in a toilet" or "TCBGTNOCAOLAHEDBCSOIWDMIAT". When you think about it, neither is that short. As what happend to the "ice man" as he was soon called, was unknown other than that he was taken away by the goverment. Any other info mistereously disapeared and any one that knew stuff about it vansihed to. Soon, it was forgoten about. That was bad. Really bad. It was our only warning.Voya-Nui Milatary Stronghold, Present Day....."So whats your perfect day sarge?" asked Hafu. Hafu's squad leader, Hewkii took a moment to answer, but he finally said "To hold my baby girl for the first time."The Matoran in his squad started laughing at him. One of them said though tears of laughter" OH!! What a wimpy one!! HAHAHAHAHA!! Hewkii the sissy!!Are you for real sarge!!" He wiped tears from his face with a shrit sleave that was full of sand. Then he put his hands to his eyes to try and get the sand from them."No, im just pulling your leg" Said Hewkii."Really?" asked Hafu."No." answered Hewkii, disapointed with his team, especially the one that got sand in his eyes.They soon landed at the base. Hewkii, had somehow gotten sand in his boots, but how he did that when BIONICLE's don't were boots I don't know. Hewkii was emptying his boots when a young Onu-Matoran came to him with a water keg."Thanks Taipu" Hewkii said as Taipu handed it to him."Your 'elcome sir" said Taipu, happy to see Hewkii again. Taipu had an accent if you were wondering. As they started talking about somthing that I was to lazy to write down Hewkii remembered something he was going to do. He said bye to Taipu and ran of to go to the contact building, which was made up 'cause I couldn't think of a better name for it.Nearby........A Sikorsky MH53 Pave Low 3 Helicopter flew silenty over the parched land scape. It wasn't your usaul Pave Low 3 helicopter though. It was unusauly large.It also had a destination. A milatary base. The one Hewkii's team was at. Either that it was on the attack or the pilot wanted some nachos. But both of those seem impossible, right? Right? RIGHT? WHY AREN'T YOU ANSWERING ME!!?? I- oh, right, computer. Sorry.Back at the base....Hewkii looked at the screen. On it was his wife, Macku, and his newborn daughter. Even though that entire sentance was impossible in BIONICLE, it was as real as a pig flying out of my nose right now. Hewkii was about to say "I love you" when the srceen started to go fuzzy. "Macku, Macku whats going on?"Hewkii asked Macku. She just opened her mouth when the screen went dark. Hewkii slaped the screen when all the lights went out. Hewkii got up and went outside when he heared a intercom. It was the general."Unidentified aircraft, you are in a restricted zone. Power done now." He asked the copter.******* (thats means static)The general ordered two jets to go see the copter. The jets took off right away. Soon one radioed back "This thing is massive!! It looks like a Sikorsky MH53 Pave Low 3, but twice the size!! Oh, and the tail number is 2L13KT1K1. This thing is massive, oh wait, I said that already."Now if you changed the numbers there to the letters they reperesent, the numbers would be b,a,c,a,a in that order. Now get a piece of paper and switch them. What does it spell? Prepare to find out.The general told one of the computer Matoran next to him the tail number. After a few beeps, boops and bops, the matoran finally said, "Sir, 2L13KT1K1 was shot down 17 months ago, on Mata-Nui."What!?" Exclaimed the general" That can't be right!! This thing must be broken!"The General gave the computer a good kick."Well, its broken now." Said the techie. They looked up and saw that the copter had landed. The General got to his microphone and said" Have your crew step out now or we shot you so many times you'll have more holes than swiss cheese."*********The pilot ignored them. In fact, he just stared at the general.The general stared back.The pilot stared back at the general.The general stared right back at the pilot.The pilot stared back.The general stared back.The pilot became fuzzy, then started to shimmer, then disappeared.The general tried to copy this, but just then realized that becoming fuzzy, then starting to shimmer and then disappearing wasn't normal.Yes, it took about a minute for him to figure this out.He watched the Sikorsky MH53 pave low 3, atonished, and fricked out.Then, the scary thing happend.Yeah, as if a pilot disobeying orders froma army general and then disappearing into thin air weren't scary enough.First, the helicopter blades went up and folded back. Then the parts on the Pave Low 3 started to move around, flip, rearrange and attached other places. The sides turned into what looked like arms, and pushed the front of the plane up. The cockpit turned so the front was touching the ground. the arms pushed the helicopter higher, and somthing that resamblbed a leg came up. Then another one. The cabin of the plane turned into a body, the cockpit turned into a large, spiked head. Soon, it was finished, standing way higher than anything else in the facility. It raised an arm, and shot a beam of blue light. the beam hit a row of planes, blowing them up rreeaall good. A cannon came out of the helicopter robot thing's chest and blew up a building. Useing a hand, it took the rotore off its back and sent the tanks around it flying with a mighty swing.It walked forward, blowing up tanks, planes, buildings and other army stuff.At the robots feet....Hafu ran for his life, trying not to be smushed into pulp like his dump truck he left under the robots right foot. No, it wasn't a real dump truck, just a toy one.He watched as the robot blew a tank to pieces. The fires from what it had done were lighting the sky, giving unwanted veiws of its frightining face. Hafu was running when he tripped and was nearly smushed. He looked up, the robot had stopped it was straing Hafu in the face. Hafu took out a heat sensative camera and took a pisture of the monsters underbelly. The robot didn't like that. Its chest cannon came out and prepared to fire.Hewkii yelled out to Hafu" Run man!! Run for your life!!!"That was all the encourage ment Hafu needed. He ran as fast as he could away from the monster as it blew the ground Hafu had just been. It watched as Hewkii's group ran away. A pile of wire came out of its back, and landed in the sand. It turned around and stuck it hand though a roof, inside was a power terminal. It stuck it hand to it and started to drain the files. The general, who had just happend to be there, watched as the robot drain a file called "Project: Frosty"."Cut the power!! Cut the Power!!" He yelled to a techie.The techie tried to pull the power, but the switch was broken."It wont buge!!" The Matoran yelled."I see that!!" the general yelled back. He looked around and saw a axe that just happend to be there. He grabed it and hit the switch repedeatly. Soon, the power was cut and the robot couldn't hack the files. The robot, now angry, after being sssooo close to victory, now no were within reach, took out it's chest cannon. The general and the techie stared in horror as the cannon, now aimed at them, fired.The Decipikuta had come.And were closing in one the AllShiny.Fast. Hopefully this isn't against the rules to this sort of thing, otherwise I just wasted an hour... MTL
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Posted Oct 15 2011 - 08:30 AM

Oh, you're back! I completely forgot about this. I'm going to enjoy reading this again. :PAre you working on the third one?
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Posted Oct 15 2011 - 07:40 PM

Oh, you're back! I completely forgot about this. I'm going to enjoy reading this again. :PAre you working on the third one?

I actually haven't yet seen the third movie... MTL

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Posted Oct 16 2011 - 01:34 PM

Well, I still haven't seen the third Transformers... I should do that.... Fun Commentary: This chapter introduced Jaller, who would subsequently appear in almost every other chapter of the series. This chapter was originally called "Spinok Attack", but since said scorpion Deceptikuta only appeared for 3 sentences in this chapter, that title was decided to be cut for the re-mastered edition. TRANSONICLECHAPTER 2MAIN CHARACTER INTRODUCTION! Ga-Metru High school, 10 minutes before home time, family history reports being done. "And that’s how my great, great, great ,great, great, great, great, great grandfather's neighbour’s cousins, best friends great uncle twice removed found out that two plus two doesn't equal four, it equals fish!!! Any questions?" said Takua, Jaller's best friend. The class stared at Takua as Jaller covered his head with a book. The teacher, whose name was unknown, was just called Mr. Teacher, or Betty, shook his side in disappointment. Mr. Teacher took a piece of paper, wrote something on it, stuck a piece of tape on the top of it, got up, and stuck to Takua's forehead."Go to your seat Takua." he said.Takua walked to his seat beside Jaller and asked him "Did Takua do good?""No," Jaller answered, “Takua failed miserably and made Jaller wonder why Jaller Takua's friend and why Jaller and Takua talk in third person." "So, did Takua do good?" SLAP! "Takua have odd feeling Takua didn't do so well." "Would Takua be quite while Jaller get read-” Jaller was cut off by Mr. Teacher's high pitched, squeky voice. "Ehem. Would Jaller please come up and do his report before Mr. Teacher has to be mean and come over and slaps him?" interrupted Mr. Teacher. Jaller quickly grabbed his bag and started running to the front. He was stopped when Mr. Teacher said "No running in MY classroom hooligan!" Jaller stopped and said "Sorry Betty, I mean Mr. Teacher." The Matoran in the class giggled and laughed and snickered and blew milk from their noses. Betty, I mean Mr. Teacher gave the class the "hairy eye". It was suddenly silent. Jaller continued walking to the front when someone threw a gumdrop onto his head. Startled, Jaller did a back flip, but not on purpose, and landed on his head, his mask going one way and his backpack the other. The class started laughing again, and Mr. Teacher sighed and put his head in his hands. In orbit... Translated from, well, whatever giant robot language they speak before they speak Matoran. "Any news from Pohatubee, Wipeout?" "No, nothing, but we did find a disturbing transmission in the Matoran radio programs." said Wipeout, the smallest of the Autotoabots. "Then play it soldier!! "Now now, Hydraxhide. You can play it now Wipeout." Wipeout turned around and hit a switch. "This is an emergency distress call from SOCKS base in the Voya-Nui desert, we need help!! A MH53 Pave Low landed and turned into a - BOOM!!! KABLAM!!- Ohmygoodnessohmyohmyohmy!! The Laundromat!! It’s a robot!! Look out for the EMPs its shooting!! It’s shooting!! It just dropped something!! We need air support!! We- Oh No! Oh NO! OH NO! NOOO- SWOOM! *********” "That didn't sound too good, who do you think it is?" said Wipeout "Well, to me it sounds like Blacktaka, Wipeout." “What makes you think it’s that giant?” asked Wipeout, who was the only human sized Autotoabot. "I think he’s the only one who thinks EMPs make good destructive weapons.” Galcee, the next smallest Autotoabot said. "Enough. Blue Flame, get the scanners ready, we need to know if Pohatubee is going to send the message soon." "Aye, aye Cap'n" said Blue Flame. "Tahkan Metra, get us closer to the planet. I suspect we will be forced to relocate ourselves to it soon." "Sure thing sir." said Tahkan Metra. “Now, let’s hope that Blacktaka and Spinok are the only Deceptikuta there....... “ BACK AT THE SCHOOL Jaller has finally got to the front of the class, and dumped his trash, I mean junk, I mean his crazy ol' great grandpa's trash, I mean junk, I mean stuff sailor people use to sail- Anyways, Jaller picked up a piece of paper and explained what it was."This is a drawing my great, great grandfather Captain Ithinkimbald drew after his, "accident", that made him go crazy for the rest of his life and stuff. And this is his old pair of glasses, his half eaten shoe, his pyjamas, a potato, his golden compass, a few frozen turtle doves and a mini wooden partridge in a pair tree. Now, I’m selling all this stuff on bBay for the low, low, low price of just $67 dollars each. Any takers? C'mon, not even one!?" One student raised his hand. "Yes, you in the purple!" he said. "First, it’s really dark blue, and second, what’s a dollar?” the Matoran in purple, I mean blue, said. "Oops, I meant widgets, so any takers now?" he corrected himself and became a salesperson at the same time. Another Matoran raised his hand. "Yes, you in the pink." Jaller called out. “It’s really, really, reeally light red, and there’s a big black fikou spider on your head." the Matoran in odd colours said. "Well, sorry, and its purple not black. Wha- WHAT!" Jaller became a snob and a scaredy cat at the same time. He screamed like a 5 year old girl who had seen a spider, and he ran around the room crying and screaming. When he got back to the front of the class he noticed the spider had fallen off his head. He picked it up and noticed it was a plastic spider. He looked to the class and said "Hey, it's plastic."Someone yelled "Burnage!!". The class had been laughing the whole time. Then the bell rang. Suddenly, the class was deserted except for Jaller and Mr. Teacher, who was already heading for the door.Jaller ran to Mr. Teacher and asked him "So, what’s my mark?" Mr. Teacher looked at him and said "A solid C minus." "Teacher say wha?" Jaller said, almost through tears. "Why," Jaller asked him, “Why! What have I done to deserve this horrible mark!? What was the reason for this, this, this atrocity!!! What!! What! Please tell me!!! And how may I fix this blot upon my person?” Mr. Teacher stared at Jaller with cold, unforgiving, frightening eyes. "Because you made a mockery of my classroom, called me Betty and dropped your great grandfathers trash all over my classroom." he yelled, spit flying onto Jaller’s mask. Jaller wiped away the spit and prepared a speech he made in case of this situation. "Ehem," he clear his throat and started his speech. Jaller went flying out of the school. He saw his dad, an old turaga with a eye for cheapness, in his car. He got in and said "Guess what?" "What?" his dad said. "A minus, that’s what!!" he exclaimed. "Great!! To the used car lot!!" his dad said. "Wha?" was Jaller's answer. IN THE VOYA-NUI DESSERT, I MEAN DESERT, 7 HOURSE AFTER SOCKS BASE ATTACK "It be jest ova tat 'ill." said Taipu said with his accent. They walked over the hill to see Taipu's village.“Good work Taipu, I knew we could count on you.” Hewkii said.“After tat ting tat attacked te’ base, I hope you lot will leave us alone fer good.” Taipu responded.“Er, ok..” Hewkii said, a bit taken back.As they walked, the Matoran who got sand in his eyes walked over near a big sign that said "SIGN SAYS VILLAGE IS THAT WAY". "Now that’s a bad sign." the Matoran who got sand in his eyes said. Just then, something moved under the sand. Out of fear, he took his machine gun and fired into the sand, and, after a minute of shooting, he thought he got the creature in the sand. Then he did something really stupid. He stuck his hand into the sand to feel what was down there. He felt something alright, but it grabbed him and pulled him under.The other Matoran spun around as they heard his scream. Then, his broken mask came out of the sand, something wet and slimy on it. The Matoran started walking backwards towards the village. As they walked, something was heading for the surface. Hafu yelled something before it broke though the sand. A giant, metal scorpion jumped up, sand and dirt flying everywhere. The frightened Matoran ran toward the village as the scorpion flew though the air towards them. This was certainly a bad day for the Matoran. END OF CHAPTER Maybe I'll do the Metrutron chapter next, maybe I won't. I'll see how I feel... MTL

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Posted Oct 18 2011 - 09:44 PM

Not much news, other than I still haven't bothered to see Dark of the Moon. Fun Commentary: This chapter introduced Phoenix Prime, the Autotoabot from the future, sent forth from the AllShiny. We never find out why, or how really, other than he did. Frankly, I should have made more of this, but it is mentioned apon a few times, such as when a certain Autotoabot is killed by Makutatron in Transonicle 2, Phoenix says "This wasn't supposed to happen," or something like that, showing that perhaps the past isn't set in stone afterall. Phoenix also has the ability to teleport, which he does (to great importance in Transonicle 2) use a few times. He is also a Prime, which makes him important to the plot of Transonicle 2..... And now... TRANSONICLECHAPTER 3SPINOK ATTACK! Hewkii jumped over a teeny, tiny, little, itty, bitty wall as a missile flew over his head. He hit the ground with the same thud Captain Ithinkimbald had landed on all those years ago. It angrily got up and ran off, hoping I wouldn't catch him again. He looked around at the sandy landscape. He saw his troops running away, screaming in high pitched, squeaky voices. He also saw Taipu running towards a Matoran with a mask that looked like it had a goatee. Hewkii searched his pockets for his cell phone. Finding that he didn't have it, he looked back to see that the giant metal scorpion that came out of the sand last chapter had just stood on it. Annoyed, he got up and ran towards the goatee Matoran, oblivious to the machine guns of the giant metal scorpion. "Mr. Goatee Matoran!" Hewkii said, jumping over a potato shaped rock, "Mr. Goatee Matoran!" he repeated, "I need to use a phone." The goatee Matoran looked at Hewkii like he was a crazy Matoran. "Sorry, I don't have Gieco, and my name isn't Mr. Goatee Matoran, its- ." said the goatee Matoran. "Who cares!" yelled Hewkii over the sound of the scorpion robot’s machine gun claws. The goatee Matoran took a minute to think about this. "Fine, but I think you might wish you took someone else's cell phone." he finally said. Hewkii happily took the phone and found that the goatee Matoran had the army on speed dial. He looked up at the Matoran in shock. The goatee Matoran's only response was "Ya neva’ know brotha’." he said, in the same accent as Taipu. Ignoring the remark, Hewkii dialled the number. "Hello, is this SOCKS control?" He asked. "No, this is the SOCKS Laundromat. We clean your socks, socks, socks with cleanness, cleanness, cleanness!" the Matoran on the other end of the line said. "Ok, bye." Hewkii hung up. He looked at the goatee Matoran and the goatee Matoran said " Ya neva’ know brotha’." again. Hewkii dialled another number that said SOCKS on it. ''Hello, is this SOCKS control?" Hewkii asked again. "No, this is Socks and potatoes sushi. Can we help you?" said the Matoran on the other end of the line. "No," said Hewkii, hanging up once more. He again looked at the Goatee Matoran. The goatee Matoran again said "Ya neva’ know brotha’." Hewkii again found another number with SOCKS on it. He again dialled the number. He again asked if this was the SOCKS control headquarters. This time the response on the other end was "No, this is Socks banana shop. We sell bananas for you banana lovers out there!" Hewkii hung up before he said anything. “Why do you even have all these?” Hewkii said angrily. “Ya nev-“ the Goatee Matoran began. “Quiet!” Hewkii spat. Hewkii repeated the process, and this time the answer on the other end was "Yes we are the SOCKS-" Before they could finish Hewkii yelled "Thank you!! You don't know how long I've been calling people to get this number!!!" "Like I was saying," the person on the other end said, "Do you have Gieco?" If you do, that’s good because that’s the only way you can-" Hewkii threw the phone at the metal scorpion. The scorpion dodged it, and blew it apart before it even touched the ground. He turned around to the Goatee Matoran and said "Sorry, I'll get you a new one," He dodged another missile, "one with Gieco." METRU-NUI Jaller kicked a lime green punch-buggy that had an ugly yellow spot and race car markings on it. A Po-Matoran who had an afro walked towards Jaller and his dad. "Ah, gentlematoran, Bobby Ahkmou at your service. How can I torm- I mean sever your head- I mean serve you." he said. The frotastic Po-Matoran shook hands with Jaller's dad. Jaller's dad pulled his hand away and said "My son here is buying his first wagon, I mean car." The Po-Matoran walked towards Jaller. Jaller walked a bit back. Ahkmou walked forward. Jaller walked back. Ahkmou walked forward. Jaller walked back again, but tripped over a banana peel left on the floor. You see, it was a large banana peel for it to be tripped over. Jaller got up just as Ahkmou grabbed him. "You see son," he started saying, "Drivers don't buy the cars, cars buy the drivers, then take control of their lives, then get them arrested and-" noticing he was going the wrong way with that, he said "Forget the last part. Just listen to the part where the cars buy the drivers." Jaller looked around at the cars. He saw a relatively good looking black Porsche that had (what he hoped) red dots on the hood and a dent that looked like a chain-saw mark. Jaller walked towards it. Ahkmou ran towards him. "Ah no, not that one!" he said, pointing him at a beat up yellow Camaro that had black stripes and dents in it. He ran his hand over it. "This one is nice." he said as he sat inside of it. He looked at the steering wheel that had a sort of mask thingy on it, which looked a bit like a Kanohi Hau. He looked up to see his dad talking to Ahkmou. "How much is that yellow thing?" his dad asked. "For the low, low, low price of 5000 widgets, you can own this yellow thing that I’ve never seen before and don't know if there's a bomb planted on it." Ahkmou answered. "Not going above 4999." Jaller's dad said. Ahkmou looked at Jaller, his face cross. "Get out of the car boy." said Ahkmou. Jaller got out of the Camaro. "But you said cars pick the drivers!" Jaller protested. "No," Ahkmou said, "I said cars BUY the drivers. Read my lips. B, U, Y, BUY!" Just then a massive screech that would have left a Matoran deaf and mentally insane went off. Fortunately for the three Matoran, it was ultrasound, so it was too low for their ears to hear. Unfortunately, the other cars in the lot heard it. The windows shattered, leaving the ground covered in glass and no windows in all of the cars in the lot, except for the Camaro. Ahkmou looked around, and in horror, he managed to stammer “4999, your lucky day!! Please, take it!!!" Jaller’s dad handed Ahkmou the money. In excitement, Jaller jumped in the Camaro and drove off, leaving his dad in a cloud of black exhaust. "Does it have brakes?" Jaller's dad asked Ahkmou. “I dun know " Ahkmou responded. CRASH! "Here’s extra money for the repairs." Jaller's dad said to Ahkmou. IN A PLACE SOMEWHERE ELSE ON METRU-NUI A Massive cube was in a room. All the Matoran in the room were wearing special suites as they studied it because, well, it was really shiny. Yes, the powerful cube was the ......THE ALLSHINY! TM. One of the Matoran studying part of the AllShiny noticed some lightning or something on one part of it. He took his power measuring thing and found that the power level was going off the charts, and then some. Considering it was normally only off the charts, he thought this might be bad. He yelled something, but was sent flying by an explosion. The workers on the ground looked up to see a giant, red and gold, robot thing step out of the cube, which one side had turned into a massive portal thing. The robot yelled "Hi everyone!!” He jumped up, and transformed from a robot, to a phoenix. It flew out a nearby tunnel, one that would later be taken by a much more sinister member of the same species. Speaking of which, that very sinister robot was just a turn to the left, right up the stairs, back down the stairs, into a elevator, down the golden road, and around one final corner, frozen almost solid. OUTSIDE Tanma flew his jet on the trail behind the flying phoenix. Him and his squadron had been out practicing flying drills when they the call, that off all things, a giant flying phoenix was flying around nearby. They flew as fast as they could, and could only just catch up to the big ol’ bird. When they were less than 100 feet away (which is pretty close when you’re flying a 66 foot long F-22 raptor) the bird did, of all things, transform into a robot. It held a weapon out towards them, but it transformed the gun back into its arm before it did anything. “You stay on guard now, you hear? There’s going to be some evil afoot soon, and I have to help prepare to stop it.” It said, before transforming one more time and flying up, up, and away. As the people flew back to base, they wondered about the robot’s warning (and how they had even heard the robot speak up there anyways). They would be better off if they had prepared, for very much was there going to be evil afoot. Very dangerous evil. END OF CHAPTER MTL

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Posted Oct 19 2011 - 05:47 PM

Read about this on the wiki during the downtime, and have decided to follow! Sounds like a pretty sweet idea. Good chapters so far. -ibrow
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Posted Oct 19 2011 - 06:48 PM

Read about this on the wiki during the downtime, and have decided to follow! Sounds like a pretty sweet idea. Good chapters so far. -ibrow

Thanks! In the begining when I started this, I was was quite tired of stories that were just actual transformers characters meeting actual bionicle characters. They just couldn't really get a plot. Now, personally, the biggest problem I have with doing a spoof is that I'm not making my own plot, which bothers me. That's the reason that, as I progressed with this, I followed the actual movies less and less. While I do love the action scenes in the films, let face it, plot was not Michael Bay's strong suit. So I "tried" a bit more with the plot. A bit. I mean, I still have to spoof the bloody thing. MTL

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Posted Oct 19 2011 - 08:03 PM

xD By the way, anyway I could guest star in this, since it's the remastered version?I could just be some random Autobot that appears every now and then, and just oh, I said a leet word - contact a moderator to take proto from me! anyone he fights. -ibrow
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Posted Oct 19 2011 - 10:20 PM

Ofcourse! I'll PM you the stuff about it. Since this is the re-mastered version, there will be scenes added, as with all good re-mastered version stuff. That means flashbacks to the Autotoabot and Deceptikuta's planet, Metrutron. And anyway who guest stars now pretty much is confirmed for Transonicle 3.. I'll considering doing the next chapter tonight, but it'll probably be tommorrow... MTL
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Posted Oct 19 2011 - 11:36 PM

I decided tonight. Also, check the BZP comedy wiki, I've added some guest stars who will appear in Transonicle 3. Althougth, it's on my blog thing on there, so you may not be able to. And the link in my sig is broken, so I guess you can't really check it after all. EDIT: link fixed Neat. Fun Commentary: This chapter was a little short, and I don't know why really. It also contained Blacktaka dancing to "Sunshine, lollipops, rainbows" for some reason. I don't know why. So I made him listen to a far more dangerous song... TRANSONICLECHAPTER 4SPINOK ATTACK: PART 2 A VILLAGE IN THE VOYA-NUI DESERT, 7 HOURS AFTER SOCKS BASE ATTACK, NOW IN THE VILLAGE ATTACK Duck. Roll. Shoot. Scream like little girl. Duck. Roll. Shoot. Scream like little girl. Duck. Roll. Shoot. Scream like little girl. Hewkii repeated this as he headed towards Hafu when all of a sudden, BOOM!!! Hewkii went flying and landed beside Hafu. Hafu crouched down behind a little wall and said to Hewkii "What are you, crazy? Ducking, rolling, shooting, screaming like little girl? Your gonna get hit for sure!!" "Well, I must be crazy with an "r", because I’m pretty sure Flintstones vitamins don't make you see giant metal killer scorpion robots appear out of nowhere land!!" Hewkii said angrily at Hafu and the scorpion, "Do you have a cell phone with you!!! One that has Gieco?" "I thought Gieco only did cars?" "Well, they do cell phones too." "Well, I’m pretty sure I have Gieco then. It’s in my back lef-" Hafu was cut off by the explosion of an abandoned car. “As I was saying, back left pocket. You get it while I shoot!" As Hafu started shooting again, Hewkii grabbed his cell phone. Hewkii opened it up to see Hafu had the army on speed dial as well. He gave Hafu the same look he had gave the goatee Matoran last chapter. Hewkii was sure if Hafu had the time to talk to him he would have said "Ya neva’ know brotha’, ya neva’ know." Hewkii then dialled the number, hoping he wouldn't to have to repeat last chapter's barrel full of phone calls. He put the cell phone to where a Matoran would have a ear. Ring, ring, ring ringa-dinga do. Hewkii was a little surprised with the ringtone of the SOCKS command base, as it wasn't that last chapter. Hewkii waited for somebody to pick up the phone. AT SOCK CONTROL Ring, ring, ringa-dinga do. "Answer the phone before I slap you!” "Ok, don't blow a gasket sarge." Ring, ring, ringa-dinga do. "Pick it up all ready!! I can't hear my soaps!" "I’m going, I’m going." The Matoran went and picked up the phone. "Hello, this is SOCKS control, how may I help you?” The Matoran heard a yell of happiness on the other end of the phone line."This is sergeant Hewkii of the 501st legion. We need help. Repeat, sergeant Hewkii of the 501st!! We need help!!" "Could you tell us your coordinates please?" He heard muffled voices, screams, explosions and shooting. Finally, Hewkii said "We are 8 bios east away from the military base that was destroyed last night. We are the only survivors of the attack. We are now under attack once more by.. something.." Writing this down, the Matoran asked Hewkii, "Can you give us a thermal image of your attacker." "WHAT!! HOW CAN I DO THAT YOU NINCOMPOOP!! WE ARE TALKING ON A PHONE!! SEND SCOUTS TO GET A THREMAL YOU MORON!!!" Hewkii yelled back. "Opps, sorry. Forgot. Hehehe. I'll get some predator drones over." Officially sick of getting yelled at, the Matoran got an intercom to the other Matoran in Voya-Nui military bases. Soon, a predator drone was on its way. The Matoran on the computers watched their screens, waiting for a thermal image. When the drone got there, it snapped a thermal and sent the pictures back. The cries of horror where something like this. "ZOMG!111 Like, oh my gosh. I just spelt my coffee!! Mother..." There were very weird people in SOCKS control "Send a attack plane thingy to shoot it! And another one two!!!" yelled the commander. Back with Hewkii's group.... In Spinok’s eyes, these fleshy things were putting up a good fight. They shot at him, yelled at him and said put down words, although he thought those last two were the same thing. He would enjoy killing them. But then he heard a noise in the blue, blue sky. He looked to the direction behind him. Although he wasn't much smarter than an average scorpion robot thing, he could tell when he was in trouble. He saw two flying things, much faster than his master Blacktaka's vehicle mode. He saw little dots fly towards him. They got bigger and bigger as they got closer. As he found out what these were, his massive lower jaw fell to the ground. Just before they hit him, he thought these ouchies might not hurt. They did. When the smoke cleared, the Matoran saw the scorpion struggling in the sand. Hafu gave a signal to return fire. The two jets came back, firing sabot rounds this time instead of missiles. As the sabots hit the scorpion, the robot flipped and rolled and tried to crawl away, but got hit again and again.After two whole minutes of pain for the robot, he finally called on the last of his energy and crawled back under the sand, a leg and the end of his tail falling off in the process of escape. The Matoran walked towards the spot where the scorpion had escaped. Doing disco for a few minutes, Hafu decided that it was gone, maybe for good.Probably not.The heard a sound that sounded (that sounds a little odd, doesn't it?) like helicopter blades, then looked up, hoping it wasn't the giant robot that attacked the base coming, to help its little comrade.Fortunately for the Matoran, it was an Osprey 22 coming to pick them up, not a giant robot of destruction. As the Osprey landed to pick them up, Hewkii looked back at the desert of Voya-Nui, hoping he wouldn't have to come back here and fight more giant robots.Ahehehehehheeh Or get the goatee Matoran another cell phone. NEARBY Blacktaka watched a good distance away as the Osprey landed to pick up the little fleshies that hurt Spinok.He was mad, not just because they hurt Spinok, but also because they made him run under the sand, and when Spinok went hiding, he was almost impossible to find.He considered firing upon the Osprey, but decided against it. Others might be able to track them and use them to help them with their mission.He turned back and headed to spot where he could wait in silence until he was needed, or whenever Spinok showed up. As he flew, he decided to see what the little fleshies had for music. He found a spot in the desert where no one would see him, and started his radio-thingy. The noise of it almost sent him crashing to the ground in agony. He decided whatever a “Friday” was, it was among the most dangerous of all this planet’s creatures. How right he was. END OF CHAPTER MTL

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Posted Oct 20 2011 - 02:51 PM

Another nice chapter. Friday part at the end was pretty cool, though I feel sorry for Blacktaka. Nobody- nobody, should have to endure Friday.*Shudder* -ibrow
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Posted Oct 20 2011 - 06:28 PM

Personally, I always thought this chapter was a little weak, but thanks. Friday was cruel, but he is a bad guy..... MTL
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Posted Oct 20 2011 - 08:28 PM

Excellent. Just as good as I remember it...I certainly don't remember the Friday part. Thank you for reposting this and KUTGW.

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Posted Oct 20 2011 - 10:44 PM

:lol:I certainly don't remember the Friday part.

I changed that, and if I had heard Friday at the time, it would've been used to kill all of them, then the Autotoabots, then the matoran and everyone else. Hearing that song, played at full volume.... does things to a person... EDIT: Chapter! Fun Commentary: Really, not much with this one, but I added a lot of Matoran dialogue. This chapter introduced Nixie, who would go on to have only a minor role in the Story. She, Nuparu and Nuhrii all reappear in Three Matoran, Three Deceptikuta, some crabs and a bucket, which none of you probably read. TRANSONICLECHAPTER 5IS JALLER INSANE? JALLER’S HOUSE (his parent's really if you want to be picky), METRU-NUI Jaller, trying to sneak across the yard, was about to fail. He had just stood in his father’s petunias, meaning his dads "someone is stepping in my petunias!" sense was tingling. His father, who had been working on the lawn, turned around, throwing his garden fork at Jaller, getting him by the collar of his imaginary shirt. He jumped an amazing 7 meters across the yard, which is amazing if you’re a fat, middle age turaga. He landed right in front of Jaller, putting his hand on Jaller's shoulder. "Jaller, Jaller, Jaller," He said, well, more like scolded, "Jaller, you know not to step on my petunias." He pointed to a sign by the petunias. "They are almost more important to me than you are." "Thanks dad. I love you a lot too." Jaller said sarcastically. "You’re missing the point Jaller. I'll tell you once and I won’t tell you again,-“ "Don't step on my petunias" Jaller said with his dad. "How did you know I would say that?" Jaller's dad asked him. Despite what Jaller's dad had just said to Jaller, this was what he always said to him. In fact, it was the 26th time today. Jaller's dad just had bad memory. "Never mind that," Jaller said, "I was just going to pick up girls; I mean take Takua to the lake." He pulled the garden fork out of his imaginary shirt and started walking away when he tripped over the family Ussal, Pewku. Pewku scukkled away, ignoring a spelling error in this very sentence. Jaller's Parents ran towards Pewku, picking her up and cuddling her and making feel good. With this distraction, Jaller got to his feet and ran to his new car, just getting in as his dad turned around and yelled after him. "Get back here boy!!" Jaller’s dad yelled as Jaller drove away in a cloud of exhaust fumes that turned the yard black. "You are such a cheapskate. Or a bad father." Jaller's mom said. "A boy’s first car is supposed to look like they were driven though Karzahni a few times." Jaller's dad said. "The neighbours’ kid got a new car worth more than our house." She said back to Jaller's dad. "Yeah, well, Jaller didn't say thank you when I gave it to him." Jaller's dad said to Jaller's mom. "Well, you put your greasy feet on my kitchen table." was Jaller's mom’s comeback. "I, don't have a comeback to that one." “That’s good. You’re washing the dishes tonight.” Jaller’s mom said as she walked back inside the house. Jaller’s dad was sad. TAKUA’S STREET, JUST AFTER SUPPER Geez, where did the day go? As Jaller went up to Takua's house, He wondered why he was friends with this weirdo. After all, before the lake was the place for EVERYONE to hang out, there was the mall, a wondrous place right outside the Coliseum. It was, at least, until Takua had set it on fire. How? You ask, how did a dunce like Takua set the mall on fire? Well, he dropped a steaming hot hotdog into a gas tank of a car they were selling at the mall, just as some Po-Matoran with a mask of translation and an afro, kind of like the one Bobby Ahkmou had, was stealing it and about to drive away. He was stopped because the tank of the car exploded and set the mall on fire. When everyone was outside, the firefighters asked if they had seen anything. When asked, Takua pointed at Jaller and said "HE DID IT!!" Instantly, Jaller had gone from most popular Matoran in school, the Matoran that every Ga-Matoran wanted date and sports superstar to least popular kid in school (in Jaller’s mind, when in reality he was a bit less than all of those), the Matoran that no Ga-Matoran would want to date and public enemy number one. And all because of Takua. And now he was Takua's best friend. He has no idea how that works and neither do I. Let’s just get on with the story now. Jaller pulled up into Takua's driveway, crushing a bike on the way. He honked the horn and Takua peered out the window. "Dude," he said, "Were did you find that thing. It looks like you drove it though Karzahni a couple times." "It doesn’t look that bad!” Jaller complained. “Dude,” Takua said as he slid down the drain pipe near his window and landed in front of the car, “Yes it does.” “Say it again, and I’ll turn you into a pancake.” Jaller said angrily. Takua walked beside the car. “Fine, I’m just expressing my most important opinion.” He then tried to climb in through the window. “Hey! What are you doing! Use the door! The handles right there!” Jaller yelled. “Dukes of Hazard, dukes of hazard!” Takua said as he climbed back out. “Never liked it.” Jaller said. “What? Dude! You missed out!” Takua said as he tried the handle. “Did you lock this or something? I can’t open it.” Takua almost fell over he was pulling so hard. “I don’t know,” Jaller said as he opened the door for his moron friend, “I think this car has a mind of its own sometimes.” Ahehehhehehe “Uh-huh. Let’s just go to the lake.” Takua said, finally sitting down.“You know, I never realized there were lakes in Ta-Metru before.” Jaller said.“Mm-hmmm.” Takua said, already looking aimlessly out the window. Jaller sighed and cranked the tunes. KO-METRU Nixie, trying to get a taxi to stop, was nearly ran over twice, was late. “Matoran just don't appreciate Ga-Matoran Smarty pants these days." She said, even though she was not much older than Jaller. She started walking to a cross walk when two Onu-Matoran came out wearing really cool looking sun glasses. "Are you Nixie-" She cut them off before they said her last name. "W-who are you?" Then she randomly yelled out "HOWDOYOUKNOWMYNAMEIDIDNOTHINGYOUCANTPROVEANYTHINGNOBODYSAWMEIHAVETHERIGHyOMAINSILENT!” This caught them of guard and she ran off, hoping they wouldn't follow her down a straight sidewalk that had no one else on it and nothing to hide behind. It was an ingenious plan.Except for what I just wrote down. Just as she was about to get away behind a corner, another two Onu-Matoran came in front of her. Then the other two came up behind her. "NO!! Don't kill me!! I have um, well, nothing to regret and no friends.. Well if you do kill me at least do it fast!!" She screamed. "Don't worry, be happy little girl." One said. "Yeah," another one said," We just want to give you a free watch!" "Oh, sure why not!" She said. She took one and continued walking toward a taxi. While she walked away, one of the Onu-Matoran turned around and said into his watch "The Ruki has taken the bait; repeat the Ruki has taken the bait!!" LATER AT NIXIE’S APPARTMENT Nixie sat down in her chair. The job interview hadn't gone well since she hadn't even gotten there. As she was taking off her shoes, a bunch of Onu-Matoran and Po-Matoran burst through her door. She looked at them as they blindfolded her and took her away. TA-METRU/GA-METRU BORDER Jaller finally got to the lake. After an entire hour of driving, he was there. But when he got there, the entire beach laughed at them!! Then all the people laughed at him!! Then the Matoran laughed at him! He got out, and realized they weren't laughing at him, but his ugly Camaro!! It was truly embarrassing. And stereotypical of these situations, but you would’ve thought it weird if they accepted him as an individual. "Um, I can explain!" He yelled, but the entire beach had already forgotten about him. Then The People and Matoran forgot. He was happy, that was until he saw them. It was Nuhrii and the Ga-Matoran he had a crush on, Hahli. He watched as they walked to his car, silent giggles coming out of there masks. "Were did you find this, Karzahni junk dealership?" Nuhrii laughed. "Actually," Jaller said, "Bobby Ahkmou's finest trash." Nuhrii burst out laughing, coughing up a gut in the process. "Ew." Hahli said. Nuhrii got up and stuffed the gut back down his throat. "That was gross." Jaller said. Jaller looked around for Takua and saw him wwaayy up in a tree. "Get down here Takua!!" He yelled up. "What!" Takua yelled down. Jaller decided Takua was better up in the tree.“So what brings you here, little man?” Nuhrii asked, his gut nicely back in place. “Well, uh, Takua wanted to climb that tree, and, uh, I decided to help him out.” Jaller said, looking for an escape route. “You know, I totally respect you for deciding to help a friend in need.” Nuhrii said. “Really?” Jaller responded, wary of traps. “Yep. We have no business disturbing him. Come along Hahli.” Nuhrii, spinning on one foot and walking away. Hahli looked at Jaller for a moment, then followed Nuhrii. Jaller almost fainted. That was close, he thought. Takua then fell out of the tree and landed beside him. Jaller ignored him. THE COLIESEUM Nixie walked down a hallway into a large room full of people. She was shown a seat in the aisle and sat down. All of a sudden, the talking that had been making the room noisy, ended. They looked up to the stage and a turaga walked out. "That’s secretary of defence Turaga Vakama!!" Said her friend, Nuparu, who had just happened to be there. "I am secretary of defence Turaga Vakama, and you all know why you are here." Vakama said. "No." Said the audience. “He copied what I just said!” Nuparu said angrily. Nixie ignored him. "OH!! I have to explain it!! This will be a long day." Vakama complained. “Well, earlier yesterday morning, on Voya-Nui, a SOCKS military base was attacked by an unknown force. The base was completely destroyed. There were no survivors. Until we found some. We’re bringing them back to Metru-Nui now." “So, it wasn’t that long. In fact, I fail to see why we are actually here.” Nixie said. Other’s murmured in agreement. “We believe the assailant to be a giant robot, and we need you, the smartest Matoran Metru-Nui has to offer, to help us stop them.” Turaga Vakama said. “Oh.” Said Nixie. END OF CHAPTER MTL

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Posted Oct 22 2011 - 10:25 AM

Another good chapter! Can't wait to see the Transonicles appear! -ibrow
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I'm putting this up, so you will all have something to read while I write the first chapter or Transonicle 3, right after this! Guest star sign up to be an Autotoabot in it is limited to the next three days, so if you want to be in it, hurry up! I also need an idea for who is to be Wheeljack.... Fun commentary: Really, not much to say. This chapter introduced Frendox and Barritax, who are rather important over the next few chapters. TRANSONICLECHAPTER 6FRENDOX IS IN TURAHA DUME’S AIR PLANE ONE, SOMEHWERE OVER ONU-METRU A Le-Matoran placed his boom box under his chair and took out a news paper and sat down, reading an article titled "We are the only newspaper in the world not afraid to tell the truth, that everything is just fine!" The article below it read "Base attack disastrous, only 7 survivors." Matoran can be a little weird, don't ya think? Forgetting about his boom box, he read the first article, trying to figure out what was with Matoran these days. The boom box though, had others plans. The speakers on it started to separate, the CD player flipped, the bottom started to form tiny feet, the little screen on it disappeared, the inside went out, the speakers turned into arms, the largest parts started to form a body and head, and then it stated to get taller. In a few seconds, there was a little, blue and gunmetal robot under the chair. But, for once in its life it was too tall to get out from underneath something, the something in this case being the chair. That, was a glaring flaw in its plans. THE LAKE Jaller watched as Hahli and Nuhrii walked to Nuhrii's massive, black truck. Jaller sadly tried to get back in his car, but he left the keys in and the doors locked themselves. That was also embarrassing. He looked up at Hahli and Nuhrii. Just as Hahli asked Nuhrii "Peanut butter cups, can I drive the truck this time?" "No way women,” he said, ”I love this truck more than I love you.” With that, Nuhrii started cooing and petting his truck, "I love, yes I do, yes I do!" It looked really odd. With a look of shock on her face, she smacked him in the face, and kicked him in the stomach. She then pushed him to the ground and said, "Feel a woman’s wrath." She then took her purse and dented the truck. "NNOO!!" screamed Nuhrii, his face filling up with tears. He jumped up and hugged the truck saying, "My poor, poor baby! Don’t worry, daddy's here, daddy's here." With that, Hahli hit him in the head with the purse. Suddenly, Jaller’s car’s radio turned on. <Here’s your chance! Get on your feet!> Jaller, slightly frightened, turned around, ignoring his car, and looked in Hahli’s direction. It was time to face his destiny. AIR PLANE ONE The spindly robot finally got out from under the chair, and looked around. No one had seen him, which was good. He started to play a really low Mission Impossible theme in his small radio. He ducked, rolled, jumped, froze and repeated the process. If anyone was paying attention, they would have seen a really odd looking robot doing really odd moves. The following will be played in this little robot eyes, or in other words, first person.... Frendox hid behind a chair, trying hard not to be noticed. The fleshies had a good eye once in a while. But not often. He opened a door, and found himself in a so called "kitchen" as he had heard the fleshies call it. Making sure no one was there, he walked around, hoping he would find what he was looking for. He opened a drawer and found a knife. He was about to open another one when he heard footsteps. He was more than able to kill a fleshie, but he knew he needed to find the information and not reveal himself. He looked behind and saw the perfect hiding spot... The middle of the kitchen counter. BACK AT THE LAKE Jaller watched as Hahli walked away, wondering how she would get home. After all, she lived on the other side of Ga-Metru. As she was about to pass his Camaro, the door to the Camaro unlocked itself, opened up, hit Jaller and sent him flying. He landed on Hahli with a thud. The thud got up and ran off, hoping it wouldn't get hit again. Jaller got up and helped Hahli get onto her feet. "ItwasanaccidentIdon'tknowhowithappendimterriblysorry!" He stammered. "It’s alright, I saw your door attack you." she replied. Jaller gave a sigh of relief. He wasn't going to be pummelled like Nuhrii. But then he meekly asked, "Well, um, ya know how you live fa-ar away, maybe you could drive me home, I mean I drive you home?" "Um, okay, just, don't talk like a Le-Matoran." Hahli said. "Oh Me? Speak Treespeak! Haw! NeverNo!!" He said in Treespeak. Hahli laughed at this. Jaller felt sweat going down his forehead. So he said to Hahli "So, let’s go!" The two got in the car, leaving Nuhrii unconscious by his truck and Takua at the bottom of the tree. AIR PLANE ONE Frendox watched from the kitchen counter, intently watching the fleshie. Luckily, the fleshie hadn't noticed him. He saw that she looked like a female, with the blue look she had. When she left, she had a box filled with some kind of round treat the fleshies ate. When she was out of view, he burst off of the counter and ran down the hallway, turned a corner and was finally in the room he wanted to be in. He looked into one computer and saw what he wanted. Sticking his claws into the computer, he downloaded the files, finally finding what he needed. Where Blacktaka failed, he succeeded. "Sm11313 9s 1817w6r7u1313!!" the robot said, activating a virus he would implant to prevent anyone from tracing him. He found the exact project, and a wicked evil smile formed on his "face". He heard footsteps and saw some fleshies. He let go, having found what he needed. His prepared his mini machine gun, and prepared to face them. THE COLISEUM COMPUTER ROOM Nixie sat at a computer with Nuparu, trying to decipher the code thing the first giant robot had created to try and hack their networks. She managed to open something about it and gasped. A pop-up for a free car had come up! Using all here mental and physical willpower, she exited it out. Her once in a lifetime chance to get a free car gone, she tried hard not to cry. She did manage to open something about the code, and gasped again. It wasn't a pop-up; it was something far more sinister. She looked at all the technological advanced stuff in it, all the pretty colours and the numbers going up and down on the screen. The numbers were going in faster as she watched them. All of a sudden... SSSSSSRRRRRRRRRRCCCCCCCCCEEEEEEEEHHHHHHHHHH! !!!! !!!! !!! The computer screen went blank for a second, and then was filled with more numbers. Then the screen went black again. "We've been hacked!" Nixie yelled, and as soon as it was heard, the room went into panic. It was chaos. No one couldn't get on their computers, systems where dying and no one had a clue what was happening. She did, however, find it came from Air plane one, which was scheduled to land in a few minutes. She ran to Turaga Vakama. "Turaga!!" She yelled. "What is it!" he snapped. "Sir,” she said, " the virus, it came from Air plane one!!" "OMG." he said, in utter disbelief. AIR PLANE ONE, LANDING IN A TA-METRU AIR STRIP As reinforcements arrived, they saw the Onu-Matoran and Po-Matoran lying injured on the floor. They didn't see any attacker, but they did see the computer had smoke coming out of it. Sounding the alarm, they began their search. OUTSIDE AIR PLANE ONE Frendox slid out the plane, making sure no one saw him. He activated a hologram around him, to insure he was invisible. He walked to a Saleen Mustang police car and got inside. Deactivating the hologram, he sat down and spoke to the hologram beside him. Translated from Metrutronian. "Stupid fleshies nearly dented my armour, but I got the data." A screen came up and the bBay page of a Ta-Matoran came up. "Some fleshie by the name of Jaller has the artefact." "So we will be in possession of the AllShiny soon, Frendox?" "Of course Barritax, we will soon have it, and crushing any Autotoabots or fleshies that get in our way!!!" "Can we order a pizza to celebrate our victory?" “Sure Barritax, but what exactly is a pizza?"“I assumed it was a Matoran phrase meaning “share great amounts of joy at an successful endeavour.” “What a stupid thing to say. Stupid language. Stupid species. Makutatron will kill them all!” With that the police car drove away. END OF CHAPTER MTL

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Posted Oct 22 2011 - 08:10 PM

Hmm... Wheeljack... how about... Nujack? Nuju + Wheeljack.Unless Nuju has been used, in which case Lesojack. Lesovikk + Wheeljack. Also, I am beginning to like Frendox. He's cool. Kinda weird though, because it sounds like Barritax listens to him, not the other way around. :P -ibrow
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Posted Oct 22 2011 - 10:54 PM

Hmm... Wheeljack... how about... Nujack? Nuju + Wheeljack.Unless Nuju has been used, in which case Lesojack. Lesovikk + Wheeljack. Also, I am beginning to like Frendox. He's cool. Kinda weird though, because it sounds like Barritax listens to him, not the other way around. :P -ibrow

Nuju? iBrow, you are a genius! How did I forget him! Also, just posted Transonicle 3! It get's its own topic, so we don't get confused as to whats going on in this one. I will continue this at the same time as Transonicle 3, just so you all know. Also, I need Wreckers, so if you have ideas for them, or want to be one, tell me! ibrow, your character shows up in the next chapter of Transonicle 3. And Frendox was fun to write. And about Barritax listening to him, think about this: You pretend to listen intently to a 6 year old talking to you, think of Barritax doing the same thing here with Frendox... MTL

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Posted Oct 23 2011 - 10:43 AM

Awesome! I have named Wheeljack! I've sent you a pm regarding me leading the Wreckers, but not as a replacement. Some ideas: Roadbuster - Roadini (Iruini + Roadbuster), Krakubuster (Krakua + Roadbuster)Leadfoot - Leadvikk (Lesovikk + Leadfoot), Norifoot (Norik + Leadfoot)Topspin - Gelspin (Gelu + Topspin), Lhispin (Lhikan + Topspin) -ibrow
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Posted Oct 23 2011 - 03:13 PM

Awesome! I have named Wheeljack! I've sent you a pm regarding me leading the Wreckers, but not as a replacement. Some ideas: Roadbuster - Roadini (Iruini + Roadbuster), Krakubuster (Krakua + Roadbuster)Leadfoot - Leadvikk (Lesovikk + Leadfoot), Norifoot (Norik + Leadfoot)Topspin - Gelspin (Gelu + Topspin), Lhispin (Lhikan + Topspin) -ibrow

Those are good... I may in fact use them...however, lets try to keep the Transonicle 3 stuff in that thread. This is thread is for the other 2 stories. Chapter 7 will probably be down later today, and the next chapter of Transonicle 3 will probably be tommorrow.. MTL

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All I had time for tonight... Fun Commentary: Short chapter, that's all TRANSONICLECHAPTER 7FRIGHT NIGHTDRIVING BACK FROM THE LAKE, SOMEWHERE IN TA-METRUAs Jaller drove around a corner, he heard a small whistle noise. He hoped it wasn't his car breaking down, as he was driving Hahli home. If it did break down, it would be truly embarrassing. Trying to turn to the side of the road a bit more, his car suddenly took control of itself. It drove off of the road and headed for a little cliff overlooking Ta-Metru. It stopped right before it went off the ledge, and backed up, actually making it a would be romantic spot, if it wasn’t for the fact the car had just drove itself there."Um, I can explain this.... maybe." Jaller said, hoping it was a valid excuse."This is an odd car. Let me get out and look." Hahli replied. “Look at the cliff?” Jaller asked, worriedly. If Hahli was going to throw herself off of it, he wanted to know it wasn’t his fault at least. “No, the engine!” Hahli said as she started to open the door.Hahli tried to open the door, but the little, yellow, car of death had locked the doors, trapping the two Matoran inside. She kicked the door, but then the side airbag activated, and launched her at Jaller, and his seatbelt went down and locked the two up.“Well, uh, this is not fault.” Jaller managed to say."Look, um, I don’t even know your name here..." She asked him."Oh, sorry, my name is Jaller-""HHHHOOONNKK!!!" The cars horn honked.Jaller kicked the car, hating it so much. It was rude to interrupt someone when they were trying to say their last name. So very rude indeed."I hate this car." Jaller said. Then the door they were next to opened and the two Matoran fell out, masks and all. Jaller got up and helped Hahli onto her feet."Um, thanks." She said, dusting the dust off. She walked up and tried to open the car’s hood, but it was stuck. "Unlock the hood for me Jaller." She said to him."You said my name- Right away sir, er, ma’am!”"Just open it." Hahli said with a little bit of annoyance and a lot of attitude... or something like that. Jaller went and unlocked the hood. The hood popped open, and hit Hahli in the mask. She fell backwards, a scream escaping her lips and going though her mask. Jaller raced over and grabbed her before she fell off the cliff. When she was back on her feet, she said to Jaller "Thanks, I owe you. But I can repay it by fixing your car.""Y-yo-you can fix cars?" Jaller asked, or stammered."Oh, yeah, my old man was the greasyiest grease brakas for kio around." she gloated.Jaller emoticoned."Um Jaller, your making a puddle on the ground.""Oh, sorry." Hahli looked at the engine. “Amazing,” she said, “This is like, a super amazing race car engine. And it’s perfectly clean, like the car doesn’t use it or something.” “Weird. Can you fix it?” Jaller asked. “I don’t think it’s broken. Look, thanks for the ride and all, but I think I’ll walk the rest of the way to my house. Bye.” Hahli said, walking away. “Uh, bye.” Jaller said, disappointed he had failed her. He slammed the hood and was about to open the door when the radio came on. <BABY COME BACK!> That one line was all that played, but it was enough. Jaller got in the car, turned around, and drove up beside Hahli. “Need a ride?” Jaller asked. Hahli raised an eyebrow, then got in. “I love this car.” Jaller whispered to himself.JALLER’S HOUSE (his parent’s really if you want to be picky) TA-METRUJaller was dreaming that he weighed 600 pounds and Hahli was carrying up a hill, when he heard a roar of an engine, a click of lights being turned on and the screech of tires. He got up and looked out the window. He saw his car driving out of his yard."My car!" Jaller screamed, "Get back hereeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Jaller screamed as he stuck his head out too far and fell out the window. What a clutz he is, don't ya think? He landed perfectly on his Bicycle and started to roll down the driveway, following his escaping car of death. He realized what was happening, and started to peddle after the automobile, barely conscious of what was going on. The car made a sharp turn to the left, and Jaller just barely made it, nearly getting smushed into a pancake by a police car making a turn though the inter section. Jaller knew a little bit about the local police, and somewhere in his subconscious he realized that the local police did not use Saleen Mustangs. Ignoring this, he followed his Camaro. As his car went into a power plant, Jaller’s bike hit a rock and he went flying through the fence, hit the ground, rolled and landed on his stomach. He got up and limped after his car, watching as it disappeared around a corner. He tried to follow, but was startled when the guard Ussals woke up and barked at Jaller. Well, more like hissed, but you get the point. He backed off and went around the corner, trying to see his car. When he finally saw it, he saw the shock of his life. It was less than a kilometre away, but Jaller saw clearly through the night. He watched where his car once was, a big robot appeared. His car had, of all things, TRANSFORMED!!! AMAZING!The robot car thing sent a big signal thing into air. It was in the shape of a Kanohi Hau, which in pure coincidence was the same mask he wore. Neat, huh? Jaller watched as it rose into the air, disappearing into the night sky. Then he heard a bark/hiss thing. He turned around and saw the Ussals had broken free of their chains and had escaped, running at him. He took out his cell phone and dialled 119, the police Matorans number. He held the phone to his ear, running away from the Ussals, hoping they would answer. The Police, not the Ussals. Although, I’m pretty sure you figured that out. Then finally, he heard the voice on the other end of the line."Hello, who is this?" the voice said."You gotta help me!! Someone stole my car, and it transformed!!! Now I am being chased by evil Ussals of doom!!" Jaller cried into the phone."Sir, can you tell us your location please?" the voice said."Oh, um I’m at the power plant." Jaller answered, running out of breath."Good, we have someone on patrol right near there."Then a police car drove out right in front of Jaller and knocked across the hood. Somewhere in his subconscious he noted how it was not a Saleen Mustang. He looked and saw that the police Matoran had gotten out and pulled out guns, and they said "Sir, put your hands behind your head and lay on the hood.""But?""No ifs ands or buts."" What if-""Sir, you have the right to remain silent." They took Jaller and stuffed him in the back seat. From the window next to him he looked around saw the Ussals scuttling away, but the demon car was nowhere to be seen.SOMEWHERE ELSEFrom inside Barritax's police car mode, Frendox watched as the police put the Matoran in the car. They had watched the entire event.TRANSLATED FROM METRUTRONIAN"Those law enforcers have taken the Matoran away. Do we still continue with the plan?" asked Barritax."Barritax you weak minded fool, of course we do. The enforcement fleshie will let him go. And once Pohatubee isn't watching, we strike!" Replied Frendox."How do know its Pohatubee?" asked Barritax..... again."Because he transmoced right there you piece of-"Barritax transmoced and picked up the little Deceptikuta. “It could’ve been another Autotoabot.” Barritax said emotionlessly."I mean, we attack when the Matoran is alone!" stammered the frightened little robot."Good plan, I don't crush you now.''With that, Barritax transmoced and drove off, Frendox in the trunk. 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Fun Commentary: This was always one of my favourite chapters. The interrogation scene always just tickled my funny bone. TRANSONICLECHAPTER 8JALLER’S WORST DAY YET SO FAR "Alright kid, where’s the sugar?" the Ko-Matoran asked. "Sugar!? You think I ate a bunch of sugar?" Jaller yelled at the Ko-Matoran. "Yeah, we know you Ta-Matoran have sugar obsessions. So hand it over, we don't want M&Ms on the floor." "You must be talking about sugar crazed Bohrok, not sugar crazed Ta-Matoran." Jaller protested. "Ok, search his pockets." Two Onu-Matoran wearing fancy sunglasses came and prepared to search his pockets, but Jaller didn’t have any. Confused, one put his hand behind Jaller’s ear and pulled out his cell phone. He took it and searched through Jaller's recent calls. He found one and showed it to the Ko-Matoran. "Ah," the Ko-Matoran said, "Your mommy's cell number. Very nice, a big teenage Ta-Matoran who phones his mommy." "Hey, that’s, um, my girlfriends number!!" Jaller stammered. "Your girlfriends number is 899-I-Love-My-Mommy-232?" “It can’t be! That wouldn’t even call properly!” Jaller said. “Good man, I believe it would, in this little world of nonsense.” The Ko-Matoran responded. " :( " Jaller emoticoned, ignoring the fact that it was impossible on a mask and that it was a joke used oh so many times in a lot of other comedies. "Oh, joke stealing now, Mr. Moma's Boy? Well it time to get what you deserved." The Ko-Matoran said as he took out a glove and pulled it over his right hand, snapping it on his wrist, a scream of pain coming from the inside of his Kaukau. "No don't kill me! Wait, you’re wearing a Kaukau, as in a mask usually put on hot Ga-Matoran?" Jaller said. "Well, um, I can explain, you see I-" He quickly took his mask off and took one of the Onu-Matoran’s masks off and stuck the white Kaukau on the Onu-Matoran, taking the Onu-Matoran’s Kakama onto his own face. "There, who’s the one wearing the girly mask now?" Before Jaller could answer, he took the gloved hand in his other hand and stuck it in Jaller's mouth. He took out one of Jaller's teeth, waved it in front of Jaller’s face, then motioned to the Onu-Matoran. The Onu-Matoran picked Jaller up and threw him outside. Jaller crawled away, feeling hurt, embarrassed, sad, lonely, and hurt. Mostly hurt. Jaller didn’t like pain. He looked up and saw his mom’s car parked in front of the police station. "Jaller! You are in so much trouble young man!!!" his mom said. JALLER’S HOUSE (his parent’s really if you want to be picky), 11 A.M, DRINKING FROM A CARTON OF APPLE JUICE Jaller had drank about half of said apple juice when Pewku started, um, I don't really know what sound Ussals make, so now they yipp. "Yappity yapp yapp!" Pewku yapped, which I assure you it sounds as weird as I wrote it. Jaller, who didn't like it when Pewku yapped, threw the apple juice carton at the yapping Ussal. As Pewku scuttled away and Jaller grabbed a napkin, he saw just what the crazy crab had yapped at. A yellow car of doom had just parked itself in the driveway, and was just sitting, err, parked there, as if it was watching him. He walked slowly away to the back door, opened the door, grabbed a bike, and peddled out the garage as fast as a Matoran on a bike could possibly go. Unfortunately, he grabbed his dad’s pink bike with its little bows and flowers in the front basket and generally whatever else five year olds put on their bikes. He peddled down the street, his evil Camaro of doom following, ready to run him down. He peddled though the town on his escape vehicle, passing Matoran from school on the way. As he passed McNocturns, he hit a speed bump and landed on his face, pretty flowers flying everywhere. He got up and was about to get away when he heard a voice. "Jaller?" Hahli said. "Um, I can, oh I can't explain. My Camaro is just trying to kill me, the usual. Bye!" Jaller responded, peddling away. "Jaller, wait I- Your car's trying to kill you?" she said, surprised at this. Cars do not usually partake in acts of murder. She turned around to her friends, but saw Nuhrii walking towards her. Hahli jumped on her moped and was about to follow Jaller when the Camaro Jaller had driven her in the other day went passed her. When she was about to follow it, a police car went passed her. It was heading in the same direction as the Jaller and the Camaro. Hahli finally got onto the road to follow the three, starting the engines on the little bike and followed. A CONSTRUCTION SITE PARKING LOT Jaller went between two cars, nearly squashing himself in the process. He stayed silent for a few minutes and waited for the car from Karzahni to pass. It finally did, but very slowly. When he couldn't hear the engine or see it, he peddled out, but a Saleen mustang police car, a very family looking one, was in front of him and Jaller peddled into it, and was sent flying across the hood of car. He landed on the thud from earlier. The thud ran off with a limp that was really starting to bother it. Jaller got up and went to the mustang. "You gotta help me my car is trying to ki-“ he started saying when the mustang drove forward and almost hit him, sending him running across the parking lot, just missing the thud as it ran away. The police car started to drive over to him, and stopped, just inches from his face. “STOP! STOP!” Jaller screamed. This day was really going south. Then something frightening happened. The lights on the police car changed, going from light into claw things/camera lookalikes.They inspected him for a few seconds, but then went back in. Then the car stayed still for a second. Jaller got up to run off when the hood of the car started to separate, the splitting off at the sides, the windows raising into the air, claws coming from the back tires. In just a few seconds, the car transformed into a giant robot, towering way above him. It lowered and grabbed Jaller. "Are you Hotstud232?" It asked. Jaller screamed. This day was really bad. END OF CHAPTER MTL

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Fun Commentary: This chapter has Pohatubee has a main character, all though he's not named. Frendox and Barritax are there aswell. I combined this chapter and the next one, since they were both rather short and were about the same thing really. TRANSONICLECHAPTER 9PLOT TAKES A STEP FORWARDJaller screamed like a little five year Ga-Matoran. This day just got worse and worse. As the little Matoran screamed, he looked up at the thing that picked him up. It was big, metallic, frightening monster robot thing that a few seconds ago had been a police car."I ask you again meatbag, are you Hotstud232? Where is the online auction number 9897604?? Tell me the answer!" it said, it’s frightening features scaring the Karzahni out of him.With the robot's rambling on about telling him the answer, Jaller got a good look at the face of it. The face was flat and had two spikes going down the middle. It also had bright red eyes and large mandible claw things, with many little teeth in between. He then looked at the body. The hood was now it’s chest, and it looked like the trunk had turned into legs, the doors and back tires had become big long arms that ended with massive claws, four on each hand. As Jaller inspected it, the robot got cranky. It smashed Jaller into the hood of a minivan, and held him down, bringing its massive face right up to Jaller and saying "Answer me!!! Are you Hotstud232??""My, my, my bBay account?! How do you know about it?" Jaller said back, hoping it wouldn't kill him."Yes your bBay account fool!! Tell me where it is!" it yelled, nearly crushing Jaller with its mouth."Where what is?" Jaller asked."The artifacts!!" It snapped."Um, I sold it!!" Jaller lied.“Your page indicates you had 0 bids and no views. You did not sell it!” it yelled. “I have it! I have it! I’ll give it to you! Just don’t kill me!” Jaller cried."No," it said, "I’m still going to kill you." With that it raised its claw into the air, hoping to smash Jaller. Jaller noticed that the robot had let go of him. He slid off of the car and under the robot. The robot's claw hit the minivan, but like a see-saw (Or tetor-toter, whatever you call it), the back of the minivan went up into the air and hit the robot in the head. The robot slipped backwards and hit his head into a pole, making him stumble and fall back onto the car, the car’s horn blazing in the robots ears.In Barritax's eyes...Barritax managed to get up, but with considerable pain. He saw Hotstud232 running off. Barritax got up and ran after him, slipping and sliding as he ran. He heard a crunch under one of his footsteps, realizing he had crushed the fleshie's two-wheeled motion vehicle. Barritax continued running, almost catching up to the meatbag. But a car that was in front of him was too big and Barritax tripped over it, landing on his face. Again.Back to the meatbag, I mean Jaller.....Jaller had heard the robot crush his dad's bike. He kept running, just escaping its claw. He ran around an SUV and ran on, the robot tripping over the SUV and crushing it as well. He ran out into broad daylight, straight into Hahli, knocking her off her moped."Jaller?! What are you doing?" She asked, getting up and hearing crashing sounds from the garage."We gotta run!! That thing is-" Jaller tried to explain, but was too late. The big robot had gotten up and ran outside, Hahli screaming as it ran at them, crushing her moped with one foot. As it was about to kill them, Jaller heard an engine roaring and a split second later, his Camaro had knocked the monster robot down. One of the Camaro's doors opened, as if it was a signal to get in or something."Get in!" He yelled."Don't have to tell me twice!!" she said back to him. As they drove off in the Camaro, Jaller looked back at the robot and saw that it had transformed again and was driving after them. Jaller looked back forward only to be thrown around on his seat as something bumped their little yellow saviour. Jaller looked and saw that the robot/police car had caught up to them and was bumping them with its front. Jaller took control of the wheel for a second and drove them onto another road. The sudden twist had the robot car drive off, hitting some garbage cans on the way. Jaller looked back to see if it was following them, but noticed it was already night, and the police car was gone."Great, I’m going to miss supper." he said.'How is this possible? I just had lunch 15 minutes ago!" Hahli asked."I don't know! We were just attacked by a giant robot car thing! I don't think I know anything anymore." Jaller responded, though it wasn't all that helpful. The Camaro turned a corner and turned its lights off, making the car totally silent. After a minute or so, the police car passed them. As it was passing though, the Camaro suddenly came to life and drove into the police car, sending the Camaro and police car off the road and into a small construction site, Matoran and all. The police car transformed before it hit the ground, giving it a softer landing, but not by much. The Camaro launched Jaller and Hahli out of their seats before it hit the ground, giving them a very painful landing. The Camaro landed perfectly on the ground, but that wasn't all. The Camaro started to transform like it did that one night, and like how the police car had done. Jaller watched as the top of the Camaro turned into arms that touched the ground and pushed the changing car higher. The front started to disfigure, and something resembling a head came up. The doors went up into the air, the back started to form legs, and the rest flipped, switched, rearranged, and disappeared. Soon, another robot had appeared, yellower than the police car one, and much friendlier looking. Meanwhile, the police car had gotten to his feet, and stared the Camaro-bot in the eye. The Camaro-bot jumped at the police car robot and the two collided, flipping and punching. The police car robot pushed the Camaro robot to the ground and turned around, launching something at Hahli and Jaller. It was a smaller robot that was shorter than the Matoran, but almost scarier than the two big robots. Jaller, for some strange reason, felt he needed to save Hahli. He jumped on the little robot, trying to fight it. But then a Ko-Matoran by the name of iceyto1 came out of a small building nearby and said, "Yeah, run TOWARDS the crazy robot. Well just twiddle our thumbs as it rips out your spleen."Hahli looked angrily at the Ko-Matoran, just as Jaller came running back screaming like a little girl, the mini robot on his head. Then the police car robot threw the Camaro robot at the shed icytoa1 came out of, crushing the shed, and potentially the Matoran. Pow!! Whack, flip, CRUNCH!! The Camaro-bot kicked the cop-bot back as it ran at him, then stood up and posed in an epic battle stance. The Cop-bot got back up, dodged a punch from the Camaro-bot, and punched him in the face. The Camaro-bot fell to the ground. He rolled back up, sent an uppercut at the cop-bot, and prepared to hit again when the cop-bot body slammed him. The Camaro-bot stumbled back a bit, and the cop-bot hit him a few more times. Suddenly, the Camaro-bot brought his fists down on the cop-bot’s head, and then kicked him in the face. Grabbing hold of the cop-bot’s shoulders, he flipped the enemy robot onto his back. He transformed one hand into a cannon and fired a few shots onto the cop-bot. He then jumped down to beat the cop-bot with his own fists, then the Camaro-bot’s fists.Jaller managed to throw the little robot to the ground, and took a second to look what had happened to his Camaro robot. He just managed to see his Camaro jump onto the robocop when he heard Hahli scream, "Jaller!!" Jaller looked back to see the little robot jump onto his face, it’s frightening little head hitting Jaller's forehead and then crawling onto the top of Jaller's head. When it finally got up there, it started to beat Jaller with its four fists."OWOWOWOWOW!!" he screamed as it hit him, hearing a crack in his mask start to form. Then he heard Hahli's footsteps going off into the distance...Hahli ran to the remnants of the shed. She looked at the pile of wood for a second and saw what she needed. She grabbed a power saw out off the rubble, but it broke in her hands."Stupid flimsy Megablocks power saw." She said. Then she saw something, not as good, about a smidge worse, but not too bad. She grabbed it and ran back, almost screaming as she was nearly hit by a stray missile from one of the two fighting robots.Jaller tried to hit the robot, but one or two of its little arms would hit his hand back while the other hands continued to beat Jaller's head. The whole time the little robot made high-pitched schrieking sounds. Jaller managed to see Hahli coming towards him with a....... butter knife. A dull, broken butter knife. With something green on it. The little robot made a sound that vaguely resembled laughter. Then Hahli hit it in the neck. The head fell to the ground, sparks coming out of the spot where it was hit. It struggled on the ground, barely able to move. Then Hahli took her purse and started to hit the robot with it until its struggles stopped. Then Jaller came over and kicked its head, the head landing in the pit where the bigger robots had been fighting. That was when the two Matoran noticed that the big robots were gone. Hahli turned around and screamed. The two robots had gotten' out of the pit and had ended up right behind the Matoran. Jaller and Hahli ran in two directions, Hahli dropping her purse, which had her cell phone in it.The two robots tussled and rolled and such, punching a kicking, until the yellow one rolled off. The cop-bot got to its feet and punched at the other. Dodging the punches and running back, it got away from the cop-bot. The Cop-Bot dropped everything and ran at the Camaro-bot. Prepared for this, the Camaro-bot stepped aside and tripped the Cop-bot. The Cop-bot fell head over heels into a deep pit, and disappeared.Jaller and Hahli ran over to the edge of the pit. The Cop-bot could be seen at the bottom lying there, motionless. The Camaro robot came up and looked down to the two little Matoran. Then they heard the sound of radio being switched to different stations.<HA, HA! YOU BIG WINNER!!" ~~~~"YOU HAVE WON A FREE" ~~~~~"Guardian for the battles to come, for I fear that" ~~~~"AHH! THE ALIENS THEY ARE-">"Um, okay. Who are you? Where are you from? Why are you talking though a radio? Can you talk?" Jaller asked, being a little annoying.<HO, HO, HO!! You ask a lot of questions little boy." *~~~~ "And the great beings came from the heavens," ~~~~ "He can't talk-"> This time there was no radio station being switched, but a disgruntled, ugly sounding, frightening, yet somewhat friendly and warm sounding voice that ended up sounding really, really odd, "mI N1m3 1s P0hat0b._^_".Jaller and Hahli couldn’t understand anything that the robot said. After a good minute or so, the robot turned back into the ugly, yellow Camaro. One door opened, as if a signal to get in."I’m not getting into that thing," Hahli said, "Especially since I know it’s a giant robot."Then the cars robot's radio activated again. <You must follow my lead, my young padawan.>"Hahli, you have to, if you want to do something exciting in your life, something different, some-""Jaller, no speeches please. I will only get in if you don't have any more of those speeches, okay?""But it was gonna be a good speec- fine. Let’s just get in the car.”As they were about to get in, Hahli remembered something. "My cell phone! I gotta go back for it!" she yelled. As Hahli ran to where she had dropped her purse, Jaller shrugged at the Camaro.Frendox climbed out of the hole. He had heard the Matoran female scream about her listening device. He crawled over to where her bag had fallen. Seeing it, he transscand it, and turned into an exact copy, just as the Matoran feel got there and picked up her purse, throwing the fake phone inside of it. “Kay, we can go now.” Hahli said, turning back to the car and Jaller.ON A HIGHWAYAs they drove somewhere, Hahli thought of something."Say, um, Mr.Car? If you can change your shape, why did you choose such Karzahni-mobile?''Then the car stopped and launched Jaller and Hahli out on the side walk. "Oh great! The second time I lose my car THIS week! I hope your happy Hahli." Jaller snapped at Hahli."Well sorry Mr-" Hahli started to say, but stopped. That’s when they saw a brand new, 2009 concept Camaro drive back to them. It stopped in front of Jaller and Hahli and opened its door. <Need a ride?> the cars radio sang out."Oh, I take it back, this is awesomeness!" Hahli exclaimed. Jaller and Hahli got in, and the car continued driving. Soon, they were in a park. The car stopped, got Jaller and Hahli out and Transformed back into a robot. It pointed into the sky, where a large, fiery thing was splitting up in the night sky. <We got friends here now, boys> the radio said. The Autotoabots were coming to town, and they were ready for Deceptikuta and junk. END OF CHAPTER MTL
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Fun Commemtary: Ah, the introduction of Autotoabots, one of the msot important chapters in the first Transonicle. Aside from all the others. This cotained old information, as well as technically started the "forget Wipeout gag" since I forgot what his alt mode was, then forgot to give him any lines. Actually, what does Wipeout transmoc into? Some sort of small Metrutronion scout vehicle. I have been planning on having Jaller escape a few times on Wipeout, but have never gotten around to it. Just so you know, the Autotoabot cast for Transonicle 1 was: Matanui Prime = Optimus PrimeLezz = JazzHydraxhide = IronhideKopatchet = RatchetPohatubee = BumblebeeGalcee = ArceeDakama Prime = Guest star (KohlidudeandDakama)Phoenix Prime = Guest star (Toa Phoenix)Wipeout = Guest star (Boxorak the azure noob)Tahkan Metra = Guest star (Xykena)Blue Flame = Guest star (Master of Madness)Vakama Maximus = Guest star (Vakama Montana) TRANSONICLECHAPTER 10THE ARRIVALJaller, Hahli and the Camaro starred into the sky. A fiery rock was breaking up in the sky, splitting into 11 large smaller meteors. The passed overhead, continuing into the night sky. <Follow me, kiddies!> the Camaro’s radio said as its doors opened."I have a bad feeling about this." said Jaller in an obvious Star Wars parody, evening mimicking Han Solo's voice.ON A FARM SOMEWHERE The first flaming rock landed in the field. As it turns out, it wasn’t a rock, but a small, metallic pod, big enough to hold a Matoran. The pod transformed into a small, Matoran height-robot. It looked around, saw nothing, then transformed into a small speeder thing and zoomed off.AT THE TOHU MEMORIAL The next pod landed near the statue of Tohu sitting in his chair. By near, I mean in a near-by pond. Annoyed, it crawled out. This robot was larger than the first, about 23 feet. It looked around, saw a blue sports car parked nearby, scanned, then transformed into a direct copy of it. To the dismay of the Matoran and Turaga in the park, it drove across the grass, mercilessly destroying it. It got onto the street and headed for the destination.MIDDLE OF TA-METRUThe next pod fell in front of a police station. This was an odd police station, with only G8 GT Sedan’s for police cruisers. This robot was 25 feet tall, and cared very much about his appearance. Scanning one of these sleek vehicles, it too headed for the destination, sirens blazing, ignoring the accidental fire it had set on the police station.THE SIDE OF A HIGH-WAY IN GA-METRU This time, two pods fell, just 100 feet beside a highway. One pod was not a pod in fact, just a simple protective shell around a certain Phoenix robot. This fellow, who had just come from the future, was not aware that Phoenix’s were not present here. This 30 foot tall red and gold robot with wings on his shoulders helped up the being beside him, who was 35 feet of silver, spikes and weaponry. “You know where we’re supposed to meet up?” the red-gold bot asked. “No idea Phoenix.. Prime? Is it? Phoenix Prime. Sounds weird I think.” The silver one said. “Well, where I come from, it’s perfectly normal.” Phoenix Prime said. “And you come from the future, sent by the AllShiny? I really don’t believe it.” The silver one said. “All true however.” Phoenix Prime said. “Still sounds weird. Well, now we need alt modes I guess. Matanui said so.” The silver one said. “I’m keeping my phoenix mode. I just like it.” Phoenix Prime said. “Gee, Phoenix Prime. I wonder why.” The silver one said. “Alright, Tahkan Metra. You haven’t taken one yet.” Phoenix said. “I don’t see any I like. So I’m keeping my original mode.” Tahkan said. Phoenix looked puzzled. “The pod?” he asked. Tahkan shot him an angry look. “No, my Ussanui! Let’s just go to Matanui..” and they transmoced into their alt modes, a phoenix and a large, weapon covered Ussanui. The two flew towards the destination, Matoran in cars below screaming as they passed. TA-METRU AGAIN One pod landed in a car dealership, one much nice than Bobby Ahkmou’s finest trash. He looked around, and saw a nice silver Pontiac Solstice. “Kickin’.” The 18 foot shiny silver robot said, transforming into it and driving to the destination.ALSO IN TA-METRU Another pod landed by a motorcycle store. This robot was barely 11 feet tall, and raised a weapon as it looked around. Seeing no enemies, it picked a blue Motorcycle, scanned it, and drove off. Although, it did not have a driver, which seemed perfectly normal to her.A TRUCK YARD, SURPRISINGLY, IN TA-METRU The two largest pods landed in a truck yard. One robot was 39 feet, the other 44. They looked, saw no enemies, and were pleased. “Seems like a peaceful planet.” The taller one said. “So far.” The shorter one said “I sent the others a rendezvous point about 8 kilometres away. We must hurry.” “Hmm. Most of these are not large enough for us to compact into... ahah, what about these two?” The taller one said. Before them was a Purple Peterbilt 739, and a red and blue version of the same truck with flame deco on it. “What’s with the fire decorations?” the taller one asked. “I do not know Dakama, but I feel like it should be mine.” The shorter one said as he scanned it. “Alright sir.” Dakama said, transmocing into the purple version. The two new trucks drove off to the destination.NUHRII’S HOUSE, TA-METRU One pod landed at Nuhrii’s family’s home, right in their pool. At the sound, Nuhrii and his little sister ran out of the house to look at the disturbance. Suddenly, a large robot, 33 feet tall with cannons on his arms, rose out of the water. Nuhrii screamed “Don’t hurt me or my truck! Here, take my little sister! Just leave me and my poor truck alone!” The robot eyed Nuhrii with disgust, and seriously considered exterminating it. Nuhrii’s little sister ran up to the robot and asked it “Excuse me, are you the Naming Day fairy?” The robot looked at Nuhrii, who was crying in fear, and back at the little Matoran. “Yes, but don’t tell anyone, or I’ll turn your brother to dust.” It said. The little Matoran ran off giggling, while Nuhrii cried. The robot walked off, leaving huge foot prints behind it. It stepped into the front yard as Nuhrii’s parents ran out of the house. “My poor babies! Are you okay?” Nuhrii’s Mom asked. “We’re okay,” said Nuhrii’s sister, “but Nuhrii ask the Naming Day fairy to kill me instead of his truck.” Then the little Matoran giggled, “Whoopsies, now it’ll have to turn Nuhrii to dust!” Nuhrii’s parents looked angrily at Nuhrii, but then Nuhrii’s dad looked at the wrecked yard and pool. “My pool! My yard!” he cried, dropping to his knees. Suddenly, they heard a large crash. They ran to the front where they saw that Nuhrii’s GMC Topkick and been violently destroyed, while an identical copy of it drove off in the distance.GUESS WHERE? TA-METRUThe last pod landed in the middle of a street. Having violently miscalculated his landing, the explosions and fires that followed it, and the otherwise embarrassment, he quickly tried to find an alt mode. Luckily, he had landed in front of a hospital, and quickly scanning an ambulance, transformed and drove away.A TOTALLY DIFFERENT YET NEARBY PART OF TA-METRUThe Camaro with Jaller and Hahli went into an alley, which was pretty wide by alley standards. Jaller and Hahli got out of it as the Camaro transformed into a robot again. They looked around and waited, wondering why they were here, and how would they explain to their parents why they were out so late. Then they heard the horn. It was booming, and a cat’s Rahi equivalent hissing somewhere in the distance could be heard. Two long-nosed Peterbilt trucks came down the alley and stopped in front of them. They heard more engines roaring, a sound that sounded like a hawk screech, some brakes activating, then a loud noise that was too indescribable for a lazy author to describe. They looked around them. They were surrounded by cars that had all begun to transform. This included a hawk thing and two vehicles that were out of that world. They watched the red and blue Peterbilt transform, rising higher and higher until legs could be seen on it, then arms, then a large, window chested body, and finally the head, which looked like a grey Kanohi Hau. They looked at the other vehicles and bird. They had all become massive robots, the smallest being one of the unknown vehicles, who's robot form was the same size as Jaller and Hahli, to the largest being the massive purple Peterbilt that stood behind the red and blue one. Then the red and blue robot bent down on one knee and looked at them and started to speak, "I am Matanui Prime, leader of the Autotoabots, from the planet Metrutron. Are you Jaller-" CRASH "Hydraxhide! What did you break?"Nothing, just a little Matoran person in this building." “Hydraxhide! I look away for a second and already you contaminate our presence of this planet with senseless violence!” “It was an accident. I’m sure it was going to expire soon anyways.” Hydraxhide said, who was 33 feet tall, black, transformed into the GMC Topkick and had cannons on his arms. He was a tiny bit violent."Err, anyways, are you keeper of the bBay auction number 9897604?""Um, the glasses?" Jaller said to the robot known as Matanui Prime. “Yes, the glasses. Do have them safe?” “I do, but another robot sort of wanted them..” “We know. That was a bad robot. We’re the good guys.” The small, silver Pontiac Solstice robot said. “Uh-huh.” Hahli said."Great, Now I can introduce everyone. First, my first lieutenant, Lezz." Matanui Prime said, pointing to the silver Pontiac robot."This is a kickin' pad we have here." said Lezz, as he tried to jump on the car behind him, but missed, and landed in a pile of garbage."This is my violent and rather uncharismatic weapon specialist, Hydraxhide." Matanui Prime pointed to Hydraxhide."You feelin' lucky runner?" said Hydraxhide as he pointed one of the massive guns on his arm at Jaller and Hahli."HYDRAXHIDE!!!" yelled Matanui Prime.“I just was going to show him my guns! Is there anything wrong with that?""I know about your lose trigger finger." Matanui Prime scolded."I told you last time was an accident?""Apparently, destroying a planet is an "accident".""It was gonna' blow up anyway." Hydraxhide protested."I’m sure it was. Anyway, this is our medical officer, Kopatchet.""The boy's feeling levels for the girl suggest he wants to make out with her. Other way, not so much." Kopatchet said. He was large, 30 feet at least, white and had a telescope thing in place of his right eye. He transformed into the ambulance. Jaller and Hahli scratched their heads at his statement. This really wasn't something they needed to know."Easy there Kopatchet. This is our special operations commander, Galcee." Said Matanui Prime. “You don’t happen to know where the Deceptikuta that attacked you went, do you? I could shoot his head off if you like.” Galcee said in a feminine voice. Galcee was tiny, 11 feet tall and turned into a motorcycle. She was also blue."Why is she a girl? You’re robots aren’t you, meaning you don't genders?" Jaller asked.“You are over thinking things. This is Tahkan Metra, our main air cover.” Matanui said, pointing to the large, spiky, 35 foot tall silver Autotoabot that transmoced into an Ussanui. Tahkan growled at Jaller. “What’s his problem?” Jaller asked. “Doesn’t think we should be here.” Said the shorter blue robot beside Tahkan. “This is Blue Flame. He is our sniper. Although we never have him snipe anything really.” Matanui said. “I’ll watch your back in a fight.” Blue Flame said. He was 23 feet tall, blue, transformed into a sports car, and had one arm transformed into a large sniper rifle. He turned it back into a hand. “And this is Vakama Maximus.” Matanui said, pointing to the red Autotoabot beside Blue Flame. “Like my armour? I do, nice shiny red.” Vakama Maximus said. He was 25 feet tall, red, turned into the G8 GT that accidentally destroyed a police station. He was a bit self-absorbed, but one of the Autotoabot’s best fighters. "Odd names in my opinion." said Jaller."Well no one cares about your opinion." said Tahkan Metra. Matanui shook his head at him. “This is my second in command, Dakama Prime.” Matanui said, pointing to the large purple Autotoabot behind him. “Pleasure to protect your planet.” Dakama said. He was 44 feet tall, a bit thinner that Matanui, and had a very large axe on his back. He also transformed into a Peterbilt truck. “But I thought Lezz was your second command.” Jaller said. Lezz laughed at this. “I wish as much!” he laughed. “Second in Command is higher rank that First lieutenant in the Autotoabot military.” Dakama explained."That’s Phoenix Prime, who is our newest member. He is from the future apparently.” Matanui said, pointing to the large red and gold Autotoabot with wings on his back and his Phoenix alt mode’s head on his chest. “I am. The AllShiny sent me back in time to help in your fight against the Deceptikuta and protect this planet.” Phoenix Prime said. “Uh huh.” Jaller said, “Wait, Decepti-what? Allspark?” “No, AllShiny.” Kopatchet said. “The Deceptikuta are our enemies, the traitors of our people, who tried to take the AllShiny for their own purposes.” Matanui said. “Oh. Of course.” Jaller said, very confused. “And you already know your guardian, Pohatubee.” Matanui said, pointing to the Camaro robot. Pohatubee's radio sang out <Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee~~~ it’s a bumblebee!> Then Pohatubee's arm turned into a gun and shot a building. Once more Matanui shook his head. Hydraxhide laughed."And I do believe that’s everyone!!" said Matanui Prime. “AHEM!” a voice said. Everyone turned to look at the source, which was the Matoran-height Autotoabot. “Oh, Wipeout, how could I forget!” Matanui said. “Yes, how could you. I do hope you don’t proceed to make a running gag of this, sir.” Wipeout said. “I wouldn’t dream of it. Never again. I’m sorry, my friend.” Matanui apologized. Wipeout nodded his head. “Well, now I guess you want to get those glasses.” Jaller said. Matanui was about to respond when Hahli spoke up."What, who are you again?" said Hahli, who wasn't paying attention the whole time because I didn't really have her in this part."Fine, I'll say it again."He ended up saying it about three times again, actually.END OF CHAPTER MTL
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Fun Commentary: This was the last chapter before my great, year long hiatus. I'm still sorry about that. Also, Hahli, is in fact, playing with a Hahli Mahri when they get to Jaller's room. Paradox? Coincidence? You decide. TRANSONICLECHAPTER 12AND SO IT CONTINUES THE VERY LARGE ALLEY WAY, TA-METRU, METRU-NUI"Opps, my bad." said Dakama Prime, crushing a dumpster as they Autotoabots walked out of the alley.A very large problem concerning the Autotoabots was that they were very large. Moving a dozen or so very large robots takes considerable skill. In which case they did not. Jaller led the way out of the alley, and a Police car drove by. In this police car was the Ko-Matoran who had interrogated Jaller several chapters ago. Upon seeing Jaller, he assumed Jaller was up to no good. So he turned his car, got out and held his pistol up at Jaller. And Hydraxhide promptly shot at him. The police car was blown to pieces, and the Ko-Matoran ran for his life. Hydraxhide would certainly have killed the Matoran if Jaller hadn’t yelled his head off for Hydraxhide to stop. Once they were all out of the alley (and Hydraxhide firmly reprimanded), the light around the corner went green, and 50 cars turned the corner. Where the Autotoabots stood. Screaming, backing up, calling the police and generally going insane, the Autotoabots took the confusion as an excuse to escape. “Autotoabots, split up and head for Jaller’s home establishment. We will meet up there and continue with our operation. Transmoc and roll out!” Matanui yelled, transmocing into his flame deco-ed truck mode and opening his doors, letting Jaller and Hahli in. Pohatubee, Galcee, Lezz and Kopatchet drove up behind them. Hydraxhide (with Wipeout inside of him), Vakama Maximus, Blue Flame and Dakama Prime took another way, while Tahkan Metra and Phoenix Prime flew above, keeping an eye out for potential dangers.Lower down the street, a Harley Davidson “Fat Boy” had watched all of this. Surprised at this parade of robots, he sent a message to others of his kind, warning them of impending trouble... INSIDE MATANUI PRIMEJaller and Hahli sat (a little awkwardly) in their seats, looking out the windows. Finally, Hahli made up the courage to speak. “So, uh, you can turn into cars huh? That’s cool.” Hahli said. “Our race has the ability to turn into anything mechanical we chose, as long as it has the appropriate mass equal for us to convert into.” Matanui answered. “Ah. Of course.” Hahli responded. This time Jaller wanted to ask a question. “Where did you guys come from again?” he asked. “Metrutron. It’s out of this solar system. It’s much smaller than this planet, however it is higher density. We had no knowledge of any other life forms on it other than ourselves, and we had turned it entirely into sprawling cities. Our history says that the first of our race was created millions of years ago, by the AllShiny. The very first of us was Metrutron Prime, and they named the planet after him. They travelled the universe, using the power of dying stars to help power the AllShiny and our planet. Then one day Metrutron Prime was betrayed, and lost to us. Our race continued however, and prospered, learning to rely less on the AllShiny, which stored its power for years. For approximately 9000 of your Matoran years, my brother Makutatron and I ruled our planet. Until Makutatron betrayed us all.” Matanui said. “Makuta-what?” Jaller asked. “Makutatron. Upon reflecting, I realize now that I meant “brother” in a non-literal way. Our species regards such things differently than you. Makutatron was always rash and head strong, but he began to change at one point, creating Drones and other machines of war. Then he attacked, surprising us. In resistance we fought back, until failed hope after failed hope, we took the most desperate choice and launched the AllShiny into space. Makutatron followed it, and we left Metrutron, our once glorious planet but a memory now, made nigh unliveable by storms and decay. Without the AllShiny, it lost the energy to power our cities, and they fell, weakened by war. We are a spread out race now, left in groups strewn across the galaxy.” “I appreciate the info, but the explanation was a bit... long winded.” Hahli said. Jaller agreed, but did not wish to annoy the giant robot they were sitting inside of. “I understand. We Primes have a specialty for long speeches. You may ask simpler questions now.” Matanui said."How do you know how to speak Matoran?" Hahli blurted out."Your planet’s world wide fikou web." Matanui replied. “You mean the internet?” Jaller asked. “I believe so.” Matanui said. Jaller wanted another question. “How do you know where I live?” “Again, the word wid-er, the internet.” Matanui said, learning quickly. “Awesome.” Jaller said. “Where’d you learn to drive?” Hahli asked, noticing that Matanui drove better than most Matoran. “Common sense, natural instinct and once more, the internet.” Matanui answered. “You drive better than Jaller.” Hahli told him. “Ya-HEY!” Jaller said. “Thank you.” Matanui said. There was another awkward silence after that. “So, uh, what’s a Decepticon?” Hahli asked. “Deceptikuta. Makutatron’s followers. Many are weak and not very capable, but there is a percent that even all of us Autotoabots together can barely defeat. They thrive on war, death and destruction.” Said Matanui. “Oh, how nice.” Jaller said, wondering if the cop-car Deceptikuta who attacked him had been a competent one or not. “Uh, how did you know I had the glass- er, artifacts.” Jaller asked.“Your bBay account.” Matanui said, accidentally running a red light. “That’s what the Deceptikuta who attacked me said.” Jaller said. Hahli nodded, even though she hadn’t even been there until after that particular segment of story."If they found out about your bBay account, then we may already be too late.” Matanui warned. “Oh, this just keeps getting better and better.” Jaller said. “No it is not.” Matanui said. “What?” Jaller said, confused. “Nothing about this situation is improving.” Said Matanui. Jaller understood why the Autotoabot leader got confused. “Ah, no, it was sarcasm.” “Oh.” Said Matanui. Once more, there was an awkward silence. “Soo... what’s Hydraxhide’s problem?” Hahli asked. “Look, maybe you want to ask something that is easier to answ- ah look, we’re here.” Matanui said. And so they were. They had pulled up into the back way onto Jaller’s property. Matanui drove into the yard, transmoced and turned to Galcee, Pohatubee, Lezz and Kopatchet. He radioed Tahkan Metra. “Tahkan, any word from Dakama’s group?” he asked Tahkan. “Nothing. The Matoran police have sent them off course.” Tahkan responded. “I assume Dakama is making sure they’re not engaging?” Matanui asked him. “I’m assuming that as well. Normally, Hydraxhide would’ve just-“ Tahkan started to say. “I am well aware of what Hydraxhide would do. Keep an optic out for him. Matanui out.” Matanui said. He turned back to the other Autotoabots. “We will stay here and keep watch. Chances are the Deceptikuta are very much aware that we are already here.” “Matanui,” Lezz asked, “how is it we’re standin’ here in robot mode and no Matoran are runnin’ ‘round screamin’ at us?” Kopatchet answered. “I believe that radio contact revealed that there was some sports activity on tonight.” “Kickin’.” Lezz said. DOWN THE STREET Matanui, as it turns out, was correct. The Harley Davidson “Fat boy” rested against a tree down the street, its main headlight extended and turned into a camera thing. “Are you getting this Nihiscream?” it radioed. “Good work Enderth. I was not expecting Matanui himself here. With his entire army too, I suppose. How many are there? Have you found out?” Nihiscream, Deceptikuta second-in-command, radioed back to Enderth. “Twelve or more. They moved so fast I could not count!” Enderth replied.“Quite. Is this the Matoran who holds the artifact’s home?” Nihiscream asked. “I’d bet on it. Say, did you see that cute little Autotoabot there? She’s a two-wheeled vehicle as well!”"ENDERTH YOU COOL DUDE!"" I mean- wait, why did you just call me a cool dude? Is it because you love me? 'Cuz I love you too bro! Air hug!""It’s because of this Matoran radio programming. I meant to insult you. Lets continue this in Metrutronian, s811212 w5?" Nihiscream replied bitterly."I like this planets radio programming better actually. You can't insult me with it.'' “Oh really?” Nihiscream said.BOINK!"What was that Nihiscream?""Some Matoran came and hit me with a rubber weapon. It has taken a great amount of concentration to not exterminate it on the spot.""Then why were you standing there in your robot form? You tell us not to change forms uselessly and yet you do it!”"No! I was in my vehicle mode you cool dude!""Aw. You care me! I care for you as well my brother!” Enderth replied happily.Nihiscream then terminated the link.“Well then, I guess you’re not really my brother after all.” Enderth said. And so it was that the subject was never mentioned again.SOMEHWERE IN HYRULE"Take this Ganon!" Link yelled as he swung the master sword at the fiend. "Hah, foolish little, er, fool! You cannot defeat me! I am Ganon! Muhahahaha! Now quaver in fear as I destroy you!" the evil guy yelled preparing to destroy Link when a missile from nowhere came and hit Link. "NOOOOOO!" Link yelled as he disappeared into oblivion.Game Over.5762 points.You Have Failed Miserably.Hahahahahaha JALLER’S HOUSE "Prime! The police!" Lezz yelled.Matanui looked in the direction the police were coming. “I see.” He said. Then, picking up Jaller and Hahli, he placed them inside an open window to the house. They crawled off his hand.Jaller turned around to Hahli and said "So, this is, um, my room and, um, my dad, sticks his LEGO Bricks in here. Yeah.." Truth be told, it was actually all Jaller's LEGO, and it was all over his room. In the corner of the room there was a stack of letters all titled To Greg Farshety. On his bed was a pile of Lego magazines from back when his dad was a wee Tohunga. There was a massive army of BIOINICLE figures near his door and he had a chair made out of Lego. There was Star Wars Ships hanging in mid battle on his ceiling, some as old as the original Millennium Falcon, which was there as well. It was all impressive enough, except it was all in the way of the search for the artifacts that would determine the fate of his world. But Hahli was actually playing with one blue Toa that had wings and a three bladed weapon on one hand and a Cordak blaster on the other."This one is cool. But I think you need to get rid of this Cordak blaster. And maybe give him blue joints instead of green-""Um, it’s a girl." Jaller said, not actually knowing what was going on."Oh, then I have alot of work to do on this.""I can show you were my parts box is!" Jaller said happily, feeling quite good with himself that she would help him make that set look feminine, as the set’s past incarnation had a moustache, and as we know that’s not too girly.."Hurry up in there! You don’t want me to have to come in there!” Matanui told them through the window. They then heard Lezz’s voice. “Prime!” he said, “Tahkan just found Dakama and Co., with their own set of police followin’ them, comin’ dis way! We’re gonna have too many for us to escape cleanly soon!”"Great! All the more reason for you two to hurry up!" Matanui Prime told the Matoran as he turned away.Jaller and Hahli got up and started to look. About a minute later Jaller, with horror, said "It’s not here.""What!" Hahli said, horribly surprised, her face turning white behind her mask."See! It was in my backpack which I’m sure I put in here today-" Then Hahli hit him. He got up asked why she did that and she pointed at the window. Jaller looked and saw that the yard was smashed up; the Autotoabots had transmoced and parked right in the middle of it. There also were police and Vahki coming down the road.'Oh, what the-" Jaller was about to yell something profound when he heard his dad at the door."Jaller, what did I tell you about language! And how did you get in the house?"Jaller turned to Hahli. This didn't look to good.END OF CHAPTER MTL
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Fun Commentary: Ah yes, this was my comeback chapter, after my great year long hiatus. In this chapter, I originally made the mistake of having Transraga be an Autotoabot. Which he is not. And he wasn't even supposed to be introduced yet. How embarrassing.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 12GOVERMENT CONSPIRACIES AND SUCHTA-METRU, METRU-NUIJaller couldn’t believe it had happened so fast. One second they were in his room, trying to jump out a window and slide to safety on a telephone wire, when all of a sudden his parents came through the door with a Vahki battering ram. After some rather... embarrassing conversation, Jaller’s parents were introduced to Hahli. Then a bunch of Onu and Po-Matoran came in and took them into a mysterious black SUV. At some point during this, the Autotoabots had disappeared.“What do you freaks want!!?” Jaller shouted at the Onu and Po-Matoran sitting in front of him and Hahli. His parents and Pewku had been taken into a different SUV.A Po-Matoran with a smooth mask turned around and smoothly said “Well, that took a while. I mean, we had to get them all into vehicles before they even started yelling at us!” The Onu-Matoran sitting beside him laughed at this and then put his iPod on.“Don’t ignore the question!” Jaller said. Hahli shook her head.“Son, I don’t ignore questions. I evade them.” The Po-Matoran said, putting sunglasses on. Keep in mind this is taking place at about 11 o’clock at night. And he already had sunglasses on.Jaller thought this was awesome, but Hahli decided she’d had enough of this. “Who are you guys?” Hahli asked.The smoothly, I mean the smooth masked Matoran cleared his throat and said “We’re special confront and recovery agents from Sector Six. You’ve been in cahoots with NEMOTERTS that we’ve been sent to apprehend. I am Agent 12345. You can call me 12345.” 12345, while telling them this, was turned around in his seat facing Jaller and Hahli. He was also the driver, take note of this.“What’s a nemotert?” Jaller asked.“It’s pronounced NEMOTERT, and I’m not obliged to answer that kiddo.” 12345 responded.“What’s Sector Six?” Jaller asked again.“I’m not obliged to answer that as well, kiddo.” 12345 responded again.“Is your name really 12345?” Jaller asked once more.“Now you’re just being stupid.” 12345 responded once more.Hahli, apparently having had enough of pointless arguments, decided to keep the plot moving. “Why did you take us? We were playing with Jaller’s Lego Bricks” Hahli started to say.Jaller interrupted. “Its pronounced Lego, with a capital L” he said.“Whose side are you on?” Hahli spat at him.“Look, you tell the story right, and I’ll cooperate. Say, why am I acting like Takua?” Jaller said.“Enough breaking the fourth wall!” Hahli exclaimed, really getting mad “Why did you take us? What does NEMOTERT stand for and where are we going?”“Unfortunately for you, I can’t answer that. Any of that for that matter, but I have some questions for you two.” 12345 responded.“Lay ‘em on me.” Jaller said with utmost confidence“Very well,” 12345 started, “we found your cellular phone, and you stated-"Jaller once more interrupted. “FALSE!”12345, confuzzled, continued with his questioning “And you stated that your car “transformed”. Is this statement true?”Jaller, worried, srateted, started to say a highly thought-out and intelligent response that would have 12345 and all the other agents crying for their mommies. “Er, um, er, aaa, LOOK! A purple Bigfoot!”Then he jumped out the car window.Hahli gasped. 12345 was shocked. The Onu-Matoran in the front was still listening to his iPod.However, instead of ‘ker-splatting on the road, Jaller landed in a pretty yellow Camaro.“POHATUBEE!” Jaller exclaimed with utmost happiness.12345 was shocked. Hahli cheered. The Onu-Matoran kept listening to his tunes. 12345 turned around to see if they were still on the road. Instead of another vehicle, he saw a giant, blue, red and silver leg in front of them.KERCRUNCH!!The car hit the leg, compressing the entire front of the vehicle. Then a pair of giant hands lifted the hood off the SUV and 12345 and Hahli looked up at the 36 foot giant.“I am Matanui Prime. Step out of the vehicle before I am forced to do something I’ll regret.”12345 and Hahli got out of the car. No idea on what happened to the One-Matoran. The other vehicles in the squad stopped behind them.“Pohatubee, Hydraxhide, Kopatchet, Lezz, Phoenix Prime, Galcee, Blue Flame, Wipeout, Tahkan Metra, Vakama Maximus, and Dakama Prime, rid the Matoran of their weapons!” Matanui Prime called out.And that’s just what the Autotoabots did. Lezz used some magnet thing. Wipeout grabbed the weapons out of their hands. Hydraxhide pointed his cannons at them, and the guns magically dropped out of the Matoran’s hands.Matanui Prime bent down and said to 12345 “You do not seem afraid. Are you not surprised to see us?”12345 said nothing. Wipeout went up and kicked the Matoran.NOTE: Wipeout is human sized, other wise, 12345 would have been pancake mix.12345, in pain, still said nothing, but he did press a button on his watch. Pohatubee then, er, decided to spring an oil leak all over 12345. 12345 gasped, but still didn’t talk.“Agent 12345, I’d like to introduce you to some friends of mine.” Jaller said to 12345.“You sort of missed the cue for that Jaller.” Wipeout said to Jaller.“Fine.” Jaller said, disappointed. Hahli patted Jaller on the back.12345 still did not talk. Phoenix Prime did however.“Matanui, they got back up!” Phoenix yelled. The other Autotoabots turned and prepared their weapons“Can we bust ‘em up?” Hydraxhide said, hoping for a chance to use his guns.“No! We must not harm the Matoran! Autotoabots, Transmoc and rollout! Phoenix, blind them for a minute!” commanded Matanui Prime. The Autotoabots promptly transmoced and drove off. Phoenix Prime raised his wings and a bright light shot forth. The Matoran back up stopped, unable to see anything.“Stupid Matanui Prime and his stupid rules about stu-” Hydraxhide was saying to himself when he was interrupted by Matanui Prime.“Hydraxhide!” Matanui snapped.“Yes sir…..” Hydraxhide said as he transmoced, clear disappointment in his voice.Matanui then noticed that no one had bothered to pick up Jaller and Hahli.“Matanui! My parents and our Ussal are in one of those vehicles! We got to save them!” Jaller told Matanui.Matanui Prime picked up Jaller and Hahli.“No time, we must get you out of here!” While they were being carried away by Matanui (who had put them on his shoulder) Hahli had a question.“Matanui, why didn’t you let us ride inside of you? We’d probably go quicker.” Hahli said.“Probably.” Matanui responded. The Sector Six helicopters had recovered from Phoenix’s blast, and were now following Matanui. Matanui dodged cars, ducked behind buildings and tried to evade them. This went on for five minutes until Matanui went under a bridged, pulled himself up to the bottom of it, and stayed still. Somehow, somehow, this worked. The helicopters passed by without seeing him. Somehow.Under the bridge, Matanui Prime watched the helicopters pass. He could see Pohatubee off to his side.“Don’t say a word!” He said to the mute Pohatubee, who didn’t look too happy with the statement. Sector Six vehicles zoomed by, looking for the Autotoabots.“Matanui! I found the glasses! They were in my pocket all along! We didn’t have to go to my house!” Jaller said to the Autotoabot leader.“WHAT!?!” Matanui Prime said, surprised, which the surprise of Matanui’s surprisement (along with a surprise movement) made Jaller and Hahli slip and fall. The two Matoran screamed as the fell. Luckily, Pohatubee was on the move. He managed to catch the Matoran before they went squish against the ground. However, a timely net toss by a nearby Sector Six agent had the Autotoabot caught and disabled. Jaller and Hahli fell out of the ’bee’s hands, tumbling away.Matanui Prime could only look away as the trio was carried away by helicopter, Jaller protesting violently as he and Hahli were handcuffed. Pohatubee, tangled in the net, was sprayed with some freezing stuff, and his movements began to slow.The other Autotoabots drove up on the top of the bridge. Lezz transmoced first.“Let me handle this.” He said.“But I’m second in Command.” Dakama Prime said.“If you think you can fit yourself over the side like I’m gonna do, go ahead.” Lezz said, going over the side to where Matanui was now on the ground. Dakama crossed his arms.“Don’t be such a tin head about it.” Tahkan told Dakama. Vakama Maximus thought this was hysterical.Lezz landed beside Matanui “We’re just gonna stand here and do nothin’ as they take our bros away?” Lezz said to Matanui.“We cannot harm the Matoran. Freedom is the right of all sentient beings.”Matanui Prime said, not looking at Lezz.“So what’s that over there, that sure looks like a lack of freedom to me?” Lezz snapped.“We have the glasses, we can continue our mission. Pohatubee is a brave soldier. He would want us to find the AllShiny. If we can, we’ll rescue him later. Have hope.” Prime said, sadness in his voice.“We can’t lose any ‘bots. We can barely take on the Deceptikuta if they show up now.” Lezz said.“Jaller had the glasses here. Get Wipeout down here.” Matanui responded.“Oh, so you’re just gonna ignore me?” Lezz continued his snappiness. Sighing, he turned to the bridge. “Yo, Wipeout, get down here. We need you to find the glasses!”Wipeout transmoced into his little flying alt mode thing, flew down, transmoced again and stood. Matanui and Lezz towered over him.“Uh, what do they look like exactly?” Wipeout asked.“I imagine like a cup.” Lezz said.“There is glass in them, I know.” Matanui said.“Well...” Wipeout said, scanning the ground. After a minute of searching, he found them. “Are these them? They got Metrutronian lettering all over them.”“That’s them. Read what the inscription says.”Matanui said, kneeling down to get a better look.“It says... 179 miles away from here. South-west.”Wipeout said.Lezz did some quick calculations in his head. “That should bring us to Po-Metru.”Matanui looked in the direction the Sector Six vehicles were going in. “Then perhaps we’ll be able to rescue Pohatubee after all. Lezz, alert the others.” Matanui said. Lezz motioned for the others to come down. After a minute of crashing and such, they made it. Dakama actually did make it over the side like Lezz did, but broke off part of the bridge while doing it.“Autotoabots, we have our destination.”Matanui said.“You know where the AllShiny is?” Blue Flame asked.“Uh, guys, I hate to spoil everything, but that’s how I got here. I knew where it was the whole time.” Phoenix said.“Then why didn’t you tell us!” Tahkan said.“I did, but you ignored me. Said we had to meet up with Pohatubee first. Look how well that turned out.” Phoenix said.“I don’t believe it..” Vakama Maximus said.“So, Po-Metru, right?” Lezz asked Phoenix.“Yep. I assume we’re finally going to go there now?” Phoenix said.“Yes, and hopefully that is where they’re taking Pohatubee. Autotoabots,” Matanui said, turning to the direction they had to go in, “Transmoc, and ROLL OUT!”The Autotoabots drove (and flew) off, hoping that they would be in time to prevent the same destruction that happened to their home, Metrutron, from happening here.They also hoped that the Deceptikuta weren’t already aware of the AllShiny’s location. Little did they know, the Deceptikuta were being led there by Jaller and Hahli. Inadvertently of course, I mean if they had known that Frendox was in Hahli’s purse, well she would’ve thrown it out the helicopter.AAAANNNNNYYYYYYWWAAAYYYYYSSSS.END OF CHAPTER.MTL

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Posted Nov 08 2011 - 04:32 PM

Some good chapters- not sure why I haven't replied, but I guess I haven't.That's a lot of Autotoabots... a very many.Also, I think I might write my own Transformers thing. Not a comedy; sort of like a re-writing of the movies.So thanks. :P-ibrow
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Posted Nov 08 2011 - 07:00 PM

Some good chapters- not sure why I haven't replied, but I guess I haven't.That's a lot of Autotoabots... a very many.Also, I think I might write my own Transformers thing. Not a comedy; sort of like a re-writing of the movies.So thanks. :P-ibrow

I'm perfectly fine with no replies with this; I got them already when I originally wrote it. I'm writing this so that you can all read what I wrote, considering it seems like I wrote some of the parts with my ear...There are a lot of Autotoabots; I'm tryiing to give more parts to each of them as I re-write this. For instance, Dakama Prime was always intended as the second-in-command (I decided most of these things after the introduction chapter of the Autotoabots) of the Autotoabots, I just never did a good job of it. It was implied that he was... And Phoenix is from the future. No one really seems to notice, really... And a re-writing like Bionicle spoof rewrite, or an actual novel rewrite sort of thing? (like an epic?) If so, then I may very well read it...MTL

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Posted Nov 15 2011 - 04:15 PM

Some good chapters- not sure why I haven't replied, but I guess I haven't.That's a lot of Autotoabots... a very many.Also, I think I might write my own Transformers thing. Not a comedy; sort of like a re-writing of the movies.So thanks. :P-ibrow

I'm perfectly fine with no replies with this; I got them already when I originally wrote it. I'm writing this so that you can all read what I wrote, considering it seems like I wrote some of the parts with my ear...There are a lot of Autotoabots; I'm tryiing to give more parts to each of them as I re-write this. For instance, Dakama Prime was always intended as the second-in-command (I decided most of these things after the introduction chapter of the Autotoabots) of the Autotoabots, I just never did a good job of it. It was implied that he was... And Phoenix is from the future. No one really seems to notice, really...And a re-writing like Bionicle spoof rewrite, or an actual novel rewrite sort of thing? (like an epic?) If so, then I may very well read it...MTL

An actual novel re-write; when I do it, it'll be in COT. The only thing holding me back at the moment is how scary Transformers fans can be when a character isn't EXACTLY like their generation one counterpart.-ibrow

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Posted Nov 15 2011 - 09:23 PM

An actual novel re-write; when I do it, it'll be in COT. The only thing holding me back at the moment is how scary Transformers fans can be when a character isn't EXACTLY like their generation one counterpart.-ibrow

Hmm, sounds good. I don't think you'll really have to worry about here on BZP; we have a really chill communtiy here compared to other forums. As long as the story isn't about Skids and Mudflap, you should be fine :PFun Commentary: This chapter was orignally 812 words. It's now 1818. I consider that an improvment.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 13LOST AND FOUND Nixie and Nuparu sat in the helicopter staring at the other two Matoran sitting across from them. They had all been taken captive by Sector Six agents, for unknown reasons. "So, what you in for?" said the Matoran with the yellow mask. “No idea.” Nixie said, which was the truth."Stole some top secret government files, bet ja can't beat that." Nuparu proudly said. That was not true, but they had deciphered the code that had been used to hack the Metru-Nui mainframe network thing."Got a car, turned out to be a giant alien robot. Then found another bunch giant robots who are fighting a bunch of other giant robots in a several thousand year old war. And they’re looking for a giant shiny cube." the yellow masked Matoran stated, crossing his arms. The Ga-Matoran beside him shook her head.Nuparu, with uneasiness in his voice, responded “Yeah, well, I had donuts for breakfast!" "You did! I mean, uh, interesting." the yellow masked Matoran said, somehow more impressed with Nuparu’s boast than his own. The Ga-Matoran beside him shook her head again and face palmed. “Jaller,” she said, “Why do you sometimes act like the most competent Matoran, then the next moment you’re acting.. well, like that?” “Hahli, Hahli, Hahli, Hahli, I’m a complicated man.” Jaller said. Hahli slapped him."MMhmm." Nuparu said with pride. Then Nuparu looked at Nixie with a smile so stupid looking she slapped his masked right off."ENOUGH!!" Hahli shouted, "I’m Hahli. This is Jaller." “I figured.” Nixie said, “I’m Nixie.”"And I'm Nuparu. I’m beautiful. And so are you." Nuparu said to Hahli. "HHIISSS!" Jaller hissed. Nuparu backed off. "Entering Po-Metru in, er, 2 minutes or something. Just thought you might like to know. I hope you guys have a great day. That’s important. I wish I was in your conversation." The pilot said. MEANWHILEWipeout stood on Matanui’s shoulder, showing him the glasses."The AllShiny is 4.6 kilometres North-East of us." Wipeout said “Wait, wasn’t it south of us last chapter?” Vakama Maximus asked. “Uh, yep.” Wipeout said. Matanui nodded. “So we passed it.” Vakama Maximus said again. “It appears so.” Matanui said. “How did we do that!” Lezz said, annoyed, “This Po-Metru we’re in is basically all straight roads, and we just went and passed it completely!” “I know where it is, you guys just won’t listen!” Phoenix Prime said. “We didn’t ask you where you have been Phoenix. You didn’t bother to remember what the place even looked like, so you’re useless.” Tahkan Metra said. “I could guess the vicinity..” Phoenix protested. “Stop arguing, we must focus.” Matanui said. Dakama Prime walked up beside Matanui. “Matanui’s right, priorities, Autotoabots, we must focus.” Dakama said. "Alright, is that where they’re taking Jaller, Hahli and Pohatubee?" Blue Flame asked.“We assume so.” Galcee said. Tahkan stepped forward. “Why do we need to rescue the Matoran? They’re stupid, violent, angry little beasts, who just went and captured Pohatubee for no reason other than because they could. If the AllShiny is there, they’re probably using its power for microwaves or weaponry.” Matanui looked a bit taken back by what Tahkan said. “Tahkan,” he began, “The Matoran are a young race. They’ve yet to suffer like we did. We should do our best to prevent them from having to. We are an unknown race to them, a species of giants, of war machines, to them. We must show them that we’re not. We must protect them from the Deceptikuta, and the power of the AllShiny.” Tahkan was unimpressed with that. “If Blacktaka was the one who introduced Metrutronians to them, then I doubt they’re going to be asking for our help. And they’re power obsessed; the AllShiny will drive them mad.” “The AllShiny’s power is beyond measure. It will corrupt them. And were we so different? I always thought it was the AllShiny that drove Makutatron to start this war; I know that it could have the same effect here. Our races are one and the same in this, that both of our people could become victims of one being trying to raise himself to his own self-absorbed ideals.” Matanui said.Kopatchet spoke up now, “We must go to this canyon for the AllShiny, and hopefully we will find Pohatubee, as well as Jaller and Hahli, there. We must rescue them.” Hydraxhide surprised everyone and agreed to this. “I agree with Kopatchet and Matanui. We get the AllShiny, Pohatubee and our Matoran out of there, then we...” Hydraxhide started to say, but broke off. Blue Flame finished for him. “Then what do we do, Matanui? What can we do once we actually get the AllShiny? We know its power signal will attract Deceptikuta as well, so we’ll have a fight on our hands.” Vakama Maximus talked next, “We can’t get back to Metrutron either. We detonated our only ship, and I doubt the Matoran have anything we could to get back there.” “Matoran will die in this, no matter what. We’re only breakin’ things by bein’ here. But it’ll be worse if we let the Deceptikuta get their claws on it.” Lezz said. Matanui let Wipeout onto the ground, and then looked solemnly at his friends. “Autotoabots,” he said, “If it comes down to it, I will unite the AllShiny with my spark and sacrifice myself to destroy it. I will not let its power fall to the Deceptikuta. I will protect this planet, no matter the cost.” There was much uproar with that. “No Matanui, that’s suicide! We can find another way!” Kopatchet said. “And how? Launch it into space? That would only continue our war even longer. I fear we may have no choice.” Matanui said. “We could put it into my chest! I’ll do it! We can’t go on without you, Matanui, but we can always lose one nameless Autotoabot.” Blue Flame said. Matanui looked at Blue Flame. “There are no nameless Autotoabots. Every loss I hold dear to me, and I will not stand for it. Our war must end, and too many have died for me.” Matanui said. “No,” Dakama said, “Too many have died because of Makutatron. We will find a way. We must.” “Aye, and I’ll blow a hole through the head of any Deceptikuta who says otherwise.” Hydraxhide raised a cannon as he said this. “I may not care for the Matoran, but I won’t let the Deceptikuta have what they want of this planet, or the AllShiny.” Tahkan said. “I know there is another way.” Phoenix said. Once more everyone more or less ignored his comment. Matanui once more looked to the Autotoabots. “You inspire me with your bravery. All of you. It is an honour to have led such Autotoabots.” Matanui said. “It was an honour to have you for a leader, sir.” Galcee said. “So, we gonna go get us that AllShiny or what?” Lezz asked. “And Pohatubee.” Kopatchet said. “And the Matoran.” Blue Flame said. Matanui nodded again. “Autotoabots,” Matanui said, “transmoc, and ROLL OUT!”MEANWHILE12345 stood in front of Jaller, Hahli, Nuparu and Nixie. "Well, I have to say I'm surprised you all came. I thought you wouldn't show." The smoothly smooth agent said. Jaller looked mad. "You kidnapped us! Of course we would show up!" 12345 smiled "A simple misunderstanding. You only came in contact with giant robots, that’s all." Hahli growled."Hmm,"12345 said, "Well, I think we got up on the wrong foot. How 'bout a smoothie? A coke? An Iced coffee? A Latte? Some tea? Some normal coffee? There’s an awesome milkshake caramel thing with sprinkles on it the coffee shop nearby sells. It has this whip cream on it that has real milk in it.. Anyone?" The captured Matoran stared at 12345."Oh!! Can I has donuts?" Nuparu called out. Nixie sighed. “Son, you can have whatever sick grease-with-sprinkles on it you want. However, I suddenly remembered why I invited all of you. We have this thing we want you to have a peek at...”LATERThe Matoran, led by 12345 walked inside the Sector Six complex. They walked until they came upon the Secretary of Defence Turaga Vakama, and a group of army Matoran including Hewkii and Hafu, who looked less than thrilled to be there. “Why are we here?” Hewkii said. “They said there was a pool..” Hafu said, sad. 12345 walked to the center of the crowd."Secretary of Defence, army guys and Matoran, follow me." 12345 said. The group followed down a long hallway for a few minutes until they came across a giant room. Inside was a giant, 45 foot tall crimson and gunmetal gray giant robot, which looked like it had never smiled. He was frozen, with Matoran holding freezing things trying to keep it cool. They had chains on him too, but those looked like they were mostly for show."Gentlemen, ladies, meet NEMOTE 1, the iceman." "I bet that’s Makutatron." Jaller whispered to Hahli. “Who?” Hahli asked back, looking up in awe at the monster. “The really bad robot.” Jaller said. “Oh right.” Hahli nodded. “He was found just over 200 years ago by none other than Captain Ithinkimbald of the MNS Find Me, who was the great, great, great, great grandfather of Jaller here! He was moved here so we could keep him nice and cold, and away from anything, or anyone, who might want him. And we have found one who might, a nice Camaro belonging to none other than Jaller, again! Our agents have spent decades studying him, and reverse engineering life as we know it from him. Without this bad boy, we would not have such wonders as the TV, the Car, the Microwave and whet stones.” 12345 said. Hewkii looked confused at that last part. “Whet stones? As in the ones for sharpening knives and stuff? I thought those were made long before you found him?” Hafu nodded. Turaga Vakama nodded as well. “That sounds right to me.” Nuparu nodded enthusiastically as well. “Yea, I know, I know! They’re from like, 700 hundred years ago or something!” Nixie looked at him annoyedly. “It was a joke, geez. Have a sense of humour why don’t ya.” 12345 said. No one thought it was that funny, including you. Then Frendox slipped out of Hahli's purse, unnoticed. He crawled away until he was out of sight of the Matoran and Turaga. On a Deceptikuta radio channel, he called to the others. "Deceptikuta, I've found Makutatron! Repeat, the cats out of the bag!” “That’s not the code, Frendox.” Nihiscream radioed back to him, sounding not very pleased at all. “Whatever! Makutatron is here! Our glorious leader! Here! I detect more! AllShiny! AllShiny! AllShiny!” Frendox said excitedly. “Why must they all be cross wired in the head... I’ll alert the others. Continue your reconnaissance. Nihiscream out.” Nihiscream said. END OF CHAPTERMTL

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Fun Commentary: I added lots of dialogue to this bad boy. It was more or less random before, but now.. Oh, now it is Transonicle worthy. I also changed the Metrutronian language a bit. It's now just numbers, and a real pain to write.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 14MAKUTATRON RISING SECTOR SIX HEADQUARTERS, THE CANYON OF UNENDING WHISPERS, PO-METRU, METRU-NUI Just in case you thought the story was in America or something. Because it’s not.The giant figure watched the little meat bags hurry around his body. They had little ice things trying to keep his giant mass frozen. He would one day get a chance to kill the little meat bags. Oh, how he wanted to escape his icy prison. But soon, he would, he could feel it in his, well, wires.DOWN BELOW!!!!!Jaller, Hahli, Turaga Vakama, Nixie, Nuparu, Hewkii and Hafu, as well as some of Hewkii and Hafu’s squad, continued to stare at the gunmetal giant, while 12345 blabbered on about something or another.“He stays in cryogenic refrigeration, keeping him locked up-“ 12345 was saying. Turaga Vakama didn’t like that. “You mean it’s still alive?” he said, clutching his cane “It’s been here for several thousand years, and frozen, and it’s alive?” 12345 ran a hand over his smooth mask. “Don’t worry pops, this guy ain’t going nowhere. As I was saying, he’s frozen right good. A giant popsicle. Icicle. Bicycle. Whatever floats your boat. And, he probably isn’t even conscious. If he does break out, we’ll tell him we’re friendly.” He said. Turaga Vakama wasn’t buying it. “You’ve been keeping a giant alien robot in the basement of our island, and you didn’t think it prudent to tell us you had a living weapon of mass destruction in an ice cube?” The good Turaga was losing his patience. “Until now, we had no reason to mention our little friend. He’s not the sorta guy we invite people over to have photo-shoots with. Am I right? Or am I right?” 12345 said, trying to sound friendly. It wasn’t working. “And what if he woke up?” Hafu asked. “He won’t. And if he does, as I already said, we’ll tell him we’re his rescuers. Easy-peasy!” 12345 was selling, but no one was buying. “He won’t believe it.” Jaller said, still looking up at the body. “Ooohohoho, look, the prodigal son is speaking. You don’t know squat about what he’ll believe.” 12345 was totally in his element. Too bad this element was an uncomfortable cross between unbelievable and weird. “That’s Makutatron.” Jaller said, finally looking to 12345. “Euy? Look, kiddo, you get a robot as a car and make some metal wookies as friends. Does it make you an expert on giganto robots? Nope! Not one bit! We’ve been studying this guy for years, we know more about him than he even did.”“Did you know he’s the big bad leader of the Deceptikuta? The bad guys! My car? Yea, he was one of the good guys. The guys that aren’t trying to kill us! And the bad guy will find him. No questions asked.” Jaller said. Hahli nodded. Hewkii, Hafu and Turaga Vakama didn’t look very happy about the confirmation of their fears. Nuparu had found a yo-yo and was playing with that. 12345, however, laughed. “We’re inside a mountain! All the energy being given off is trapped by the natural rock. And we got concrete in front of that. And any that does get out just gets stuck in the canyon and bounces back and forth on the walls. There’s a reason it’s called the canyon of unending whispers, kid.” “I don’t think canyons would do that.” Nuparu whispered to Nixie. Nixie ignored him, however. Something that 12345 just didn’t sound right somehow. Jaller and 12345 were still going at it, however. “Makutatron came here looking for a cube or something. An AllShiny I think it was. With it he could rule the universe, instil chaos and use our machines as weapons of war. He’s the literal harbinger of death.” Jaller said. 12345 tilted his head when Jaller said that. “Well, a cube? Uh, now that’s the craziest thing I’ve heard all day.” He said. Hafu looked at Hewkii. “About as sane as I think it’s gonna get..” he said. Hewkii agreed. “I wouldn’t mind leaving now and seeing Macku.” Of course, no one paid them any attention. “Wait, how much energy can a frozen robot give off?” Nixie said, finally pin pointing what 12345 said that irked here. Something about a frozen robot giving off giant amounts of energy didn’t sound right to her.“What?” 12345 said, “Well, not very much ya see.” After he said that he realized what he had just done, but it was too late; Jaller had clued on.“Then you have something else making lots of energy..” Jaller then, as if a light bulb appeared above his head, went in for the kill “You have the AllShiny here, don’t you!” 12345 looked taken back. “Well, there’s a chance we have one. It’s very nice.” Turaga Vakama didn’t like this either. “You mean you have a power source capable of basically turning our world into Karzahni itself, and your keeping it in the same complex that you have a giant death machine in?!” MEANWHILE, IN A DIFFERENT ROOM Frendox’s head crawled to the AllShiny, which sat, magnificently, on a massive pedestal. “21-21-21-21-21-21-1-1-1-1-8-8-8-8!1-12-12-19-8-9-14-25! 1-12-12-19-8-9-14-25! 1-12-12-19-8-9-14-25!” he said, jittering as he said each word. A shot of energy from the cubeish thing returned the head to its former glory. A 3 foot high robot of twittering death. Frendox decided it was time to contact Nihiscream. “14-9-8-9-19-3-18-5-1-13!!! 14-9-8-9-19-3-18-5-1-13!!! 1-12-12-19-8-9-14-25!! 13-1-11-21-20-1-20-18-15-14!! 12-15-3-1-20-9-15-14 16-15 13-5-20-18-21 3-1-14-25-15-14 15-6 21-14-5-14-4-9-14-7 23-8-9-19-16-5-18-19!!!” Frendox, er, said or something. In actual Metrutronian. Wow.“Copy that Frendox. Your pronunciation of -18- is weird.” Nihiscream said.IN AN AIRBASEAn ordinary F-22 Raptor fighter jet lay in wait. Having just talked to his sources, Nihiscream began the call to the other Deceptikuta. The jet took off, heading towards Po-Metru.FLYING OVER ONU-METRUAn alien jet, not Nihiscream, flew over the rather empty landscape of Onu-Metru, when she received a call.“Sleedat! Head to Po-Metru and the Canyon of the Unending Whispers! Frendox has located the AllShiny. Head there and begin the attack.” “Very well Nihiscream. Has Frendox found Makutatron as well?” she asked, already heading towards the destination. “He.. might of.” Nihiscream answered. “I’m sure he’ll be happy to see you. He always was such a kind being.” Sleedat said. “I do not appreciate sarcasm, Sleedat.” Nihiscream said.IN AN ARMY BASE (in Po-Metru!)This army base contained a yard, which contained several vehicles considered either unsafe or not in top working condition. These vehicles contained Deceptikuta.“ Wreckdak, Krekkacrusher, Bradak, do you read me?“Wreckdak reporting.“ said the troop carrier.“REATREATKREKKACRUSHERRETARETARETA“ said (maybe. It was more of a growl if anything) the tan mine clearing vehicle.“Bradak rolling along“ said the tank. “Excellent. Head to the Canyon of Unending Whispers. Attack at once.”I DON’T KNOW WHERE“I’m afraid to ask this, but Enderth, where are you?“ “I’m already at the Canyon, and I’ve a tunnel right into it!” Enderth said.“How productive.” Nihiscream said.IN PO-METRU AS WELL“Barritax, Daedulus, head to the Canyon of Unending whispers. Keep an optic out for Autotoabots, and attack at once.” “Barritax en route.” Barritax, the police car from before, said. “I’ll bump ‘em stomp ‘em KILL THEM!” Daedulus, a beat up old Ford truck, said. “I highly doubt it, but ok.” Nihiscream said.AND LASTLY OVER THE PROTODERMIS SEABlacktaka, in his helicopter form, flew near the coast of Po-Metru. “Blacktaka, head to the Canyon of Unending Whispers. The AllShiny has been located.” Nihiscream. “I’m on my way. ALL HAIL MAKUTATRON!” Blacktaka said. “Of course. Why wouldn’t I?” Nihiscream said. BACK IN THE CANYON “It’s not as bad as it looks, ya see?” 12345 said, his grave dug. “Look, nothing will break that ice! I swear!” Just then a frightened Pohatubee ran into the room, followed by Sector Six soldiers spraying cold stuff at him. Pohatubee didn’t look where he was running, ran past 12345 and company, and went right into Makutatron’s leg. Pieces of ice rained down as Pohatubee realized what he just ran into. His radio screeched, then he ran for life once more and hid behind a large dumpster in the middle of the room.The Autotoabot’s radio cried out <Now get that freaka thang away from meeee!!> Hewkii’s soldiers (who still had their guns for some reason) raised their weapons. Considering their last encounter with a Metrutronian had been Spinok, it was excusable. Jaller ran in front of them as Sector Six soldiers surrounded the dumpster. “No! He’s good! He won’t bite! He doesn’t even have a mouth!” Jaller said. Nuparu looked terrified as he hid behind Nixie.<Guilty as charged> Pohatubee’s radio said as he looked over the top of the dumpster.“Thank the great beings.” Hafu whispered to himself. “Look kid, one of those things attacked us in our base in Voya-Nui and killed our dudes. I’m not taking any chances with this thing.” Hewkii crossly said. He looked serious. Jaller was frantic to keep things getting anymore wiggity-wiggity-wack. “He wouldn’t hurt a fly!” Hahli rushed to his side to help. “Doesn’t he look harmless?’’ Jaller and Hahli turned around to show them. Pohatubee had his arm cannon and shoulder guns out, a mean look on his face and his other hand clenched in a fist. When he realized that Jaller and Hahli were looking, and that he did look pretty menacing, he put his hands behind his back sheepishly.Jaller face palmed.“Pohatubee!” Jaller said, his tone shaky. Pohatubee pointed to Makutatron. “I know, but he’s frozen, he can’t do anything.” <I trust that about as far as I could throw you~~~~~ wait a minute there> Pohatubee’s radio said. Suddenly, the ceiling shook. An explosion could be heard, and an alarm went off. Jaller turned back to 12345. “You have to get us to the AllShiny.” As he said this, Pohatubee looked at him, recognizing the name of the AllShiny. “Maybe with it Pohatubee could take it to Matanui and get it out of here.”“Whoa whoa whoa! Mata-who? Look, we just can’t take this thing out! There’s papers to fill out to do and I just don’t know if I can trust your robo-buddies.” 12345 said. <Ain’t no need to fear> Pohatubee’s radio said. “Matanui Prime is the leader of the Autotoabots.” Jaller said. “The Good guys.” Hahli said. “And we can trust him. We can’t let the Deceptikuta get the AllShiny!” Jaller said. 12345 stomped his foot. “No! No! No! NO!” he said. Hewkii walked up and threw 12345 to the side of the dumpster and held his gun to his head. Sector Six soldiers raised their weapons, and Hewkii’s soldiers either knocked the guns out of their hands or held up their own, much larger and dangerous looking, ones. “Yes. Yes. Yes. We’ve fought these robots, and if some of them are good, I’d like them to be on our side. Besides,” Hewkii said, looking up at Pohatubee, “if we can’t trust them, then at least we can try.” Pohatubee nodded at him. “Look, I’m going to count to three, and your gun will be gone from my head.” 12345 said. “And I won’t count.” Hewkii said. 12345 gulped. Turaga Vakama walked up. “I’d do what they say. These guys are as tough as tough gets,” he looked up at Pohatubee, “for Matoran, at least.” 12345 gave up, as another explosions shook the complex. “Fine. You want to rest the fate of the world on the kid’s Camaro? Fine with me. Not like I live here or anything.” Hewkii let 12345 get back to his feet. Turaga Vakama looked at Hewkii. “Why don’t you and your men go find the ammo room and get loaded up. I don’t think this’ll be clean.” He said. Hewkii nodded as 12345 motioned to a Sector Six Soldier. “Go show ‘em the way. I’d hate for them to get lost.” He said. The soldier nodded and led Hewkii away.Frendox, meanwhile, had found the cooling control room for Makutatron. The Matoran in there had hardly proved a challenge. And now Frendox was pressing buttons, and the heat raised. “MakutatronMakutatronMakutatronMelting!” Frendox said.12345 led them into the room where the AllShiny was. Pohatubee looked amazed to see it. “There, our crown jewel. And you’re going to go and take it away. Oi vey.” 12345 said, sitting down.“Now, how do we get it out of here?” Jaller said, walking close to it, but getting zapped by the powerful light. The cube was at least 80 feet tall. “That’s part of the problem, but had any of you listened..” 12345 said. They ignored him. Pohatubee walked up to the cube and touched it. It shrank and shrank and shrank until Jaller could have held it. Pohatubee took out a little holder thing and put the AllShiny inside.<The Matrix of leadership!> Pohatubee’s radio boomed out, in an obvious reference to 25 years ago. “Naw man that’s the AllShiny!” Nuparu said, running up. Pohatubee looked at him, and Nuparu turned around and hid behind Nixie.As Pohatubee gave Jaller the Cube of AllShiny, an explosion rocked the building, and the power went out. “And here we go.” 12345 said.OUTSIDE THE CANYONNihiscream and Sleedat fired rockets, lasers and machine guns at power generators at the outside of the canyon. Blacktaka went around shooting stuff in his vehicle mode.“We must free lord Makutatron!“ Blacktaka yelled out.“Tunnels done!” Enderth said. “This is a great day, a great victory under MY leadership!” Nihiscream boasted. “Oh shut up you chicken legged freak.” Sleedat said, transmocing and doing a bombing run of the complex.INSIDE THE CANYONThe giant robot looked around. His icy prison was loosening. He could feel his power returning. The Matoran ran around trying to keep him cool. It was of no use. Almost. Just about…….KAKRACKMakutatron jumped out of the ice, metal beams, chains, ice and Matoran fell in his wake. He looked around, a little dizzy, but now he knew exactly what to do. After years of being called things like “frosty” and “NEMOTE 1”, the Matoran needed to know his real name.“I AMMAKUTATRON!!!!!!!” And then they knew. END OF CHAPTER
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Posted Dec 01 2011 - 09:16 PM

Fun Commentary: I always enjoyed this chapter, as well as the scene. It's alot better if you imagine the scene's music during it, as well as imagine Wreckdak and Krekkacrusher making those indecipherable noises the Deceptikuta made in the film. Also, Wreckdak only has one line in the entire comedy, possibly the least of any named character.Neat.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 15ROAD KILLCANYON OF UNENDING WHISPERS, PO-METRU, METRU-NUIMakutatron stumbled a bit. He looked at the destruction he had caused the fleshies. It felt like toasted goodness. However, the metal tyrant had places to be, people to crush. Transmocing into his super-duper jet thingy mode that even he wasn’t sure what it was, he flew through the tunnel that Phoenix Prime used several chapters ago. The massive Deceptikuta flew out and landed on the outside of the canyon. He looked around and waited. He had a feeling that soon, his loyal subjects would return to him.“Lord Makutatron.”Makutatron stumbled and almost fell off his ledge. “Nihiscream” he said, just regaining his balance. “You try to fall me again.”“I wouldn’t call it that, but ok. We have returned for you” Nihiscream said, pointing to Blacktaka and Sleedat, who walked up behind him.“Excellent. For too long my prospects have been grim, locked in that frozen prison for years untold. Tell me, where is the AllShiny?” Makutatron said, walking up the trio.Nihiscream took a step back, staying out of punching range. “The Matoran have eaten it.”“WHAT.” Makutatron said, surprised. Nihiscream sighed. “Oops. I can’t use this Matoran Interlingua system right. They have taken it, and they have sided with the Autotoabots. Matanui Prime himself is here.” Nihiscream took several steps back as he said this.“Autotoabots,” Makutatron growled, “And Matanui Prime here, himself,” Makutatron clenched one of his long fingered hands as he said Matanui’s name, “Then our war shall end on this planet. I will kill Matanui myself. Now then, who is getting the AllShiny for me right now,” Makutatron then pointed one finger at Nihiscream, “Assuming you have been smart enough to send some of our warriors after it.”Before Nihiscream said anything, Blacktaka used this as an excuse to talk “We’ve sent Enderth, Bradak, Wreckdak, Daedulus, Krekkacrusher and Barritax.”Nihiscream then spoke up, “The AllShiny is actually still in the building, I believe.” Nihiscream said, and then realizing Makutatron wouldn’t be happy to hear this. Makutatron grabbed Nihiscream by the neck, and growled his growely voice right into Nihiscream’s face. “You fail me yet again Nihiscream. Get it before they leave this compound!” Makutatron then threw Nihiscream to the ground. The ground where they were standing, not the one several hundred feet below. Sleedat walked forward then. “Lord Makutatron, will you take the time to rest and recharge your energy levels first? You have spent a long time-“ she started to say. “I am fine, Sleedat. You’re more competent than Nihiscream, but not by much. Do not test me.” Makutatron spat. Sleedat probably would’ve said something rude, had it not been Makutatron standing there. “Lord Makutatron!” someone yelled from behind them.The three turned around to see a huge dinosaur, a Spinosaurus to be exact, start to transform into a 47 foot robot holding its dinosaur tail as a sword.“I live to serve you lord Makutatron” the new Deceptikuta said. “Welcome Dreaddude.” Nihiscream said to Dreaddude. Nihiscream wasn’t sure why Dreaddude had chosen an extinct animal as an alternate mode, but Nihiscream was aware of Dreaddude’s love for history. And violence. Dreaddude looked up angrily at Nihiscream. “I was not talking to you, Nihiscream. I also notice that you forgot about me when you were alerting us all to lord Makutatron’s location.” He said. “I must apologize then. It appears you slipped my mind.” Nihiscream said. Nihiscream, you see, didn’t really like Dreaddude. Or any other Deceptikuta, really. It was ok. None of the Deceptikuta were especially fond of Nihiscream.Makutatron grabbed Nihiscream by the shoulder and pushed him down. “I highly doubt that, Nihiscream, however, I have more important things to deal with, like,” Makutatron said, turning around to the Canyon’s valley, “MY ALLSHINY!!!!BACK INSIDE THE CANYONPohatubee stood around the Matoran hurriedly trying to load guns and vehicles. He watched as Jaller and Hahli took turns holding the AllShiny, not sure who gonna take the MacGuffin to Lego City, a nearby city.“The Deceptikuta have cut all communications. We’re sitting ducks here people. We can’t the military to help at all.” Hewkii said, loading his gun. His soldiers from the desert looked grim, not looking forward to fighting more robots. “Oi! You, Nupary and Dixie!” 12345 yelled to Nuparu and Nixie. “It’s Nuparu and Nixie, thank you very much.” Nuparu said. “It could be Tom and Jerry for all I care. Come with me, we gotta try and get communication back up. Or at least a paper air plane going.” 12345, walking to the communications room. Turaga Vakama walked up and grabbed him by the arm. “Whoa there.” 12345 said. “Look here now, I’m going to go with you.” Turaga Vakama said. “Don’t mind me asking, but why? You should be out playing golf or somethin’.” 12345 said. “And besides, I doubt you know how to work our fancy equipment and all.” Turaga Vakama held firm. “For the past thirty years, all I’ve done is sign papers and make a few press conferences. It’s about time I do something real for my island. And besides, I used to be a communications officer. And I can make a mean paper airplane.” Turaga Vakama said. 12345 took off his sunglasses, and wiped a tear from his eye. “Sir, that was the most beautiful speech I’ve ever heard. Let’s go save our country.” 12345 said as he led them away.“What about Makutatron?” Hafu asked.<Run away!> Pohatubee’s radio said, basically wording everyone’s sympathies. “So we’re going to lead the Deceptikuta into a city?” Hahli asked. “Uh, well, when you put it that way..” Hewkii said, scratching his head.A sudden explosion rocked the complex. “Autotoabot, come out to plaaaay.” The Enderth jumped from the rafters, crushed a vehicle in the process. The 15 foot tall robot dropped a smaller robot, which ran off. Enderth turned his hands into saws and ran at Pohatubee, but a shot from the ‘bee’s laser sent him back, knocking him into a wall.“Were running out of time. Let’s get out of here.” Hewkii said as he got in a vehicle, looking at the knocked out Deceptikuta.LATERThe convoy of vehicles, with Pohatubee in front, sped toward the city. Inside the yellow Camaro of awesome, Jaller, Hahli and The AllShiny sat inside Pohatubee, buckled in for safety. While speeding ahead, they saw a new convoy of vehicles lead by a familiar red and blue truck.“Sweet Mata-Nui! It’s Matanui Prime!” Jaller said, happiness in his voice. And there they were, Matanui Prime, Dakama Prime, Hydraxhide, Kopatchet, Vakama Maximus, Blue Flame, Lezz and Galcee. Tahkan Metra and Phoenix Prime flew overhead, while Wipeout road inside Vakama Maximus.Matanui Prime turned, allowing the other Autotoabots to get into the convoy. The massive group of vehicles sped heroically toward the city, all the Autotoabots as well as several Matoran humvees. Can’t you just hear the awesome music? In fact, it was going so well that it took almost 5 minutes for them to notice a police car, a mine clearing vehicle, a tank, an armoured troop carrier and a black Toyota driving up behind them.“Deceptikuta!” Wipeout yelled when he looked into Vakama Maximus’ rear view mirror.Krekkacrusher and Barritax went ahead of the group to get the Autotoabots. Barritax used his siren to get cars out of the way while Krekkacrusher simply crashed into them, sometimes using his scoop to throw them away. Barritax, who Daedulus (the black Toyota) followed, went ahead of Krekkacrusher, and tried to make the Autotoabots pull over, and they had a vain hope that the Autotoabots wouldn’t recognize them. They did.“It’s that police car that tried to kill me!” Jaller yelled.“Pohatubee, Go ahead with the others. I’ll hold them off.” Matanui Prime told him through the radio.<roger roger> Pohatubee’s radio went back to Prime.Barritax got up alongside Hydraxhide, attempting to slow the weapon specialist down. Instead, Hydraxhide rammed him right off the freeway/bridge. The police car fell and got busted up below.“Not bad, if I do say so myself.” Hydraxhide said. Daedulus was next. He drove as fast as he could forward, got directly behind Blue Flame, and tried to transmoc. He flipped and rolled several times, not managing to get to his feet, and went to the side, knocking Galcee over. Galcee quickly transmoced into her robot form, and Daedulus made it to his feet. Krekkacrusher had had enough. The massive vehicle transmoced, sides becoming arms, legs being formed from the underbelly and the main body forming from the front. A ghastly head appeared from the twisting mass of metal, completing the monstrosity. “RETARETARETAKREKKACRUSHERHATEBUSRETARETARETARETA!” he screamed, making a horrible sound. Krekkacrusher then body-slammed a bus, exploding it into a million flaming bus pieces.The troop carrier then came up and transmoced, forming the white, red and gray Wreckdak. Wreckdak took out his swords and chopped up a few passing by vehicles as Krekkacrusher focused his sights on Matanui Prime. “RETARETARETAKREKKACRUSHERHATEMATANUIPRIMERETARETARETA!” Krekkacrusher growled.Matanui slowed down and transmoced into his robot mode, sliding back and punching Wreckdak in the face, causing him to flip, roll and crash into the tank form off Bradak, which slowed the Deceptikuta tank down. Krekkacrusher skated into Matanui Prime, knocking him back. Matanui kicked Krekkacrusher back as the giant tried to jump on him. Wreckdak got back to his feet and ran at Matanui. Wreckdak swung his swords, and only the unsheathing of his own blades allowed Matanui to slice back. The two parried and struck for a little bit until Wreckdak tackled Matanui instead. Matanui grabbed him by the shoulders, spun, and threw him away.Just as he let go of Wreckdak, Krekkacrusher ran into him, sending them both off of the freeway/bridge thing and into another one below.“Hey, giant robots!” The white Matoran said. Krekkacrusher took Primes head and slammed it into the car Icytoa1 was in. Prime turned back and uppercutted Krekkacrusher so hard one of his eyes fell out. In epic slow-motion too.“RETARETAKREKKACRUSHERLIKEDTHATEYERETARETARETA!” Krekkacrusher screamed. His massive scope arm hanging from his back came down and smacked Matanui in the head, and Matanui hit the ground with a thud. The thud crawled away, pain everywhere. Prime then pushed himself into the Deceptikuta and again they fell of the freeway/bridge. They landed on the ground and Prime managed to get away for a second.“RETARETARETAKREKKACRUSHERHATEEAUTOTOABOTRETARETARETA!”Prime decided drastic measures needed to be used. One arm turned into one of his mighty swords and he jumped at Krekkacrusher.“RRRAAAAAHHHHH!” Matanui screamed as he sliced into the Deceptikuta. Krekkacrusher made several painful noises as his arm, foot and head got sliced off.“ReTAREtaKrEKKaCRUSHERHAte Being heAD….” were the last sounds the evil Deceptikuta made. Prime walked away from the body and was about to head back to the other Autotoabots when Wreckdak jumped down. In an act off awesome, Prime turned his hands into guns, shot Wreckdak in the face and brought part of the road down on the Deceptikuta.Matanui turned his weapons back into his arms, and made his way back to the other Autotoabots.END OF CHAPTER MTL
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Posted Dec 10 2011 - 05:52 PM

Fun Commentary: The exchange between Hewkii, Hafu and the Turaga at the beginning will always be one of my favourite parts. It just felt so well done to me. Originally, I forgot about Galcee in this chapter, but remembered her in the next one, so I wrote her in as having been busy fighting Daedulus. And I do not remember why I called it Lego-City, other than I did. Weird.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 16THE BATTLE OF LEGO-CTIY, PART 1 ENTERING LEGO-CITY, PO-METRUThe massive convoy of Autotoabots had finally made it to Lego City, minus Matanui who was delayed with taking down Krekkacrusher and Wreckdak, and Galcee, who was fighting Daedulus. Hydraxhide and Dakama Prime transmoced to take control of the situation. “Alright, Phoenix, Tahkan, you’re going to take control of the skies. Lezz, Vakama Maximus, you head to the road where we came from and see if we were followed here.” Hydraxhide ordered. Phoenix, Tahkan Metra, Lezz and Vakama Maximus went to their posts.“Pohatubee, Wipeout, Kopatchet and Blue Flame, you stay here with the Matoran.” Dakama said.“What are you guys going to do?” Wipeout asked.“Stay here of course.” Hydraxhide said as he walked down the street. Hewkii and Hafu went to a nearby pawnshop to try and get a radio. The owner looked unimpressed with their sand covered clothes. Wait, what?“Alright, vhy iz you all ov ze sand covered in mein shop?” the old Turaga asked.“We just came from Voya-Nui. But that’s not important. What is important is that we need some communications software or something.” Hewkii said with a stern tone.“’Cuz we forgot to bring any.” Hafu said, a little sheepishly. They’d brought weapons, Matoran and Autotoabots aplenty, but they didn’t have a single cell phone between them. Hahli had thought she had one, but it had at some point jumped out of her purse or something.“Vat iz important iz zat you need sum ov mein Metru famoose jaAm. Iz good, ja.” the shop Turaga said. Hewkii face palmed.“Can I has some jaAm?” Hafu asked. Hewkii face palmed again and then slapped Hafu. “Ouchies.” Hafu said, rubbing his sore face. Hewkii turned back to the turaga.“Look, we need some communications stuff, like, like, that old phone behind you!” Hewkii said, frantically pointing at the phone.“Vat, zat old thing? You have to be kidding me. Have some jaAm instead.” the Turaga said, ignoring the fact she would get much more money from the phone.“Enough with the jaAm!” Hewkii said angrily, knocking the jaAm out of the old Turaga’s hands. “Fine! Have ze old thing. But jaAm vould ve better. Vere iz joor money.” she said.“Finally! Hafu, lend me some money.” Hewkii said, not looking at his comrade. Hafu didn’t answer.“Hafu?” A FEW MINUTES LATER“You moron! I had to sell my watch for this stupid phone!” Hewkii yelled at Hafu, slapping his friend in the back of the head.“Sorry.” he said. Hafu took the radio from Hewkii, starting to call for some help. “SOCKS military, do you cop-” Hafu stopped before he could finish.“What is it?” Jaller asked, running up to the two.“They’ve already sent an F-22.….and a jet whose make I can’t tell.” Hafu said, staring at the sky.“That’s not a Matoran jet!” Hewkii cried out.“Sleedat!” Blue Flame yelled running at the Matoran. Pohatubee, Wipeout, Dakama Prime, Kopatchet and Hydraxhide ran up behind the blue sportster. “Get back! All of you! That’s probably Nihiscream with her!” Hydraxhide yelled, readying his cannons.“<Phoniex! Tahkan! Sleedat and Nihiscream heading your way!>“ Dakama said to them through a com signal.“<Is it now? I got a score to settle with ‘screamer.”> Tahkan sent back to the giant Autotoabot. Tahkan sped ahead of Phoenix and fired his own weaponry, but Nihiscream and Sleedat were far more agile than the Ussanui alt mode of Tahkan. Nihiscream personally fired his missiles at Tahkan, which sent the silver Autotoabot careening down. Phoenix grabbed onto Tahkan, and in a burst of light, disappeared with his fellow Autotoabot. “Did they get blown up?” Jaller said, worried. “No, I think they teleported....” Kopatchet said, a bit unsure. “Teleported? How?” Jaller asked. “Phoenix is from the future. I guess he can do that.” Kopatchet said, then noticing that Sleedat and Nihiscream were heading for the Autotoabots now. “Get back! Back!” Hydraxhide yelled to the Autotoabots and Matoran. The Autotoabots and Matoran forced their ways into alleys, trying to get out of view of the Deceptikuta jets. Pohatubee ran up and lifted up part of a semi truck, for some unexplainable reason. Perhaps a distraction? How heroic. Hydraxhide thought it was less so. “No!” he yelled, running towards Pohatubee, but it was too late. The missiles from the Deceptikuta blew the truck to pieces, sending Pohatubee flying one way, and his legs another. “Pohatubee!” Jaller yelled, running to his friend. Nihiscream and Sleedat zoomed past. “Kopatchet! Get over here!” Hydraxhide yelled to Kopatchet. “Oh my, it appears he has suffered some damage to his lower body.” Kopatchet said. “Of course he has you tin head! His legs got blown off!” Hydraxhide said rather angrily. “Hey, no need for that kind of language. Blue Flame, help me try and get Pohatubee out of harm’s way.” Kopatchet said. He and Blue Flame moved Pohatubee off of the street, all the while Jaller tried to comfort his friend. Wipeout ran up tried to help, but all he could really do was say words of encouragement. Hydraxhide and Dakama surveyed the skies. “They’ll be back, with the rest of their tin-headed friends.” Hydraxhide said. “We’ll need to get the AllShiny out of here. We shouldn’t have come to a Matoran city with it.” Dakama said. “Yo!” Lezz yelled from behind them. They turned to see Lezz and Vakama Maximus running over, each covered in burn marks.“What happened to you guys?” Hewkii asked.“Giant, fire-breathin’ dinosaur-thing, blowing up main street.” Lezz said, limping a teeny bit.“Giant what?” Hafu asked, looking out for the scary monster. Just then Dreaddude ran out, flipping one of the Matoran’s vehicles.“RRROOOOOAAAAAARRRRRR!!!!” Dreaddude, well, roared. Kopatchet pushed Vakama Maximus and Lezz back to the others, and raised his machine gun, and was about to fire when he was hit by a rocket.“AARRGH!” Kopatchet yelled as he flew into a parking lot. Dakama, Hydraxhide, Wipeout, Lezz, Blue Flame, Vakama Maximus and the Matoran turned to see where the source of the rocket came from. A tank drove up, crushing vehicles as he closed in on the Autotoabots.“Bradak!” Blue Flame yelled out, turning one arm into his sniper rifle.“Battle positions!” Dakama yelled out. He looked up and saw a massive, MH-52 pave-low helicopter fly up to the group. The giant Deceptikuta transmoced and walked towards the group, his rotor blade weapon spinning.“Blacktaka too!” Dakama yelled again.“Well, this should be fun.” Hydraxhide said, raising his cannons.All Karzahni was about to break lose.END OF CHAPTER MTL
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Posted Dec 17 2011 - 04:33 PM

Fun Commentary: As I look back at this chapter, I realize how much my writing style has changed, and how bad some of the dialogue was that I gave some characters. THe fight scenes have changed alot too. I also never realized just how little Lezz actuallz did in story, although I can't say he did much more in the movie. And I also can't believe how corny most of Makutatron's lines were.I also couldn't believe he said "Hah! I took out the trash!" when he threw Lezz's body in the dumpster. He's been frozen for a million years, how'd he know about trash? Luckily, I've decided to change that, just for you guys.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 17THE BATTLE OF LEGO CITY PART 2NOT ACTUALLY IN LEGO CITY Galcee could not believe she had missed the group heading to the city. The rest of the group had somehow missed her when Daedulus had pushed her over, and now she was stuck fighting the much larger Deceptikuta by herself.“BRAWWHAHA!” Daedulus laughed, launching missiles at the Autotoabot. Galcee dodged the rockets, and fired a shot of her own at Daedulus.“GAHH!” the Deceptikuta yelled in pain as the shot pierced the armour in his leg. He hobbled back. Galcee ran at him and attempted to push him of the freeway/bridge. Instead, she did almost nothing to him. He kicked her back and she landed on an upcoming car. He limped toward her, one hand turned into a chainsaw. He brought the chainsaw arm down on her, but she rolled out of the way at the last second. He cut through the car and part of it flipped up and hit him in the face, like what happened to Barritax several chapters ago.The Deceptikuta hobbled back again, and this time Galcee curled up behind him. The bad guy fell over as he hit her, landing on the edge of the freeway/bridge. She ran up and kicked him over the edge.“AAHHH!” Daedulus yelled as he fell, crashing onto the edges of freeway/bridge thingies as he fell. Galcee watched him fall until she got bored and she transmoced and drove away. While driving, she looked up and saw a giant alien jet flying by, very, very slowly.“Makutatron!” she said to herself, driving faster to the city.IN THE CITYHydraxhide dodged a shot from Bradak, only to be hit by a rocket launched from Blacktaka. He skidded down the road until he hit a building. He tried to get up but was whipped by the tail of Dreaddude. Hydraxhide rolled until he stopped in front of Dakama Prime and Blue Flame.“I was flabbergasted by how much that hurt.” Hydraxhide said, barely managing to get up.“It’s not the worst you’ve ever had, I’m sure.” Dakama said, firing at Dreaddude, who roared angrily. Suddenly Lezz drove by all fast like. The little Autotoabot was going down the street, towards the Decepti-tank Bradak. Lezz dodged rockets from Bradak, speeding towards his goal. Upon getting close enough, Lezz transmoced and jumped on the Deceptikuta.“You won’t be needin’ this.” Lezz said, knocking off one of Bradak’s rocket launchers. Bradak however, transmoced and grabbed the little Autotoabot by the shoulders and threw him across the street. Bradak looked back at the Autotoabots and saw Blue Flame and Hydraxhide driving towards him. He raised his one arm with the gatling gun, and began to fire when Kopatchet jumped from off screen and cut that arm right off at the elbow. Bradak winced and went back for a moment, only to have Dakama and Hydraxhide transmoc and jump him. Bradak knocked them off and got up again, only to have a tiny Wipeout land on his face and open fire. With one arm, Bradak tried to throw him off, but his armour blocked proper arm movement. Kopatchet came back and cut the back of one of the tank-bots’ knees up. The massive Deceptikuta came crashing down with a thud. The Thud only barely managed to get away this time.Vakama Maximus came up to see their handiwork.“Pretty impressive.” he said, not watching out for the other Deceptikuta.“Yeah, all in a day’s work.” Wipeout said, dusting his hands off. The Autotoabots stood around Bradak, when Dreaddude came out and grabbed Vakama Maximus by the arm, ripping it right off.“SWEET MOTHER OF PEARL!” Vakama Maximus yelled out, falling to the ground with a thud, cradling his injured stub of a right arm. The Thud crawled away with his teeth, getting annoyed with these robots. “I’ve had enough of this Dinosaur!” Hydraxhide yelled, firing away with his cannons.The assembled Autotoabots opened fire upon the killer Dino, tearing away his fake skin. Dreaddude charged at the Autotoabots, but they dodged and he slammed into a building, allowing the Autotoabot more shots on the Deceptikuta dinosaur. Kopatchet picked up Vakama Maximus and carried him out of fire.Dreaddude transmoced and attacked the Autotoabots, using his whip and blaster, plus his sheer brute strength and size to plough them down. The Autotoabots still shot, with Wipeout ripping out wires in one of Dreaddude’s feet. Dreaddude was about to kick him off when Dakama yelled something about his axe’ then brought down said 20 foot long axe on Dreaddude.Dreaddude straightened his whip into a sword and briefly parried with Dakama Prime, but shots from Hydraxhide forced Dreaddude to retreat, transmocing and running for cover. Blacktaka firing on the Autotoabots helped considerably with this.ONE KIO AWAYPhoenix Prime and Tahkan Metra appeared on top of a building, blasting apart a billboard.“What was that?” Tahkan said rather angrily to Phoenix.“We teleported, that’s all. No big deal.” Phoenix said casually.“No big deal? How far away are we? I wanted to kill some Deceptikuta, and for all I know you’ve put us back on Metrutron!” Tahkan spat. The two looked up to see Sleedat fly past, heading for the sounds of battle. “I don’t think you’ll have to worry about that.” Phoenix said, getting ready to shot.“She’s mine.” Tahkan said, transmocing in his Ussanui alt mode and opening fire as only he could.“What the?” Sleedat said, as she suddenly spiralled to the ground.“Deceptikuta! Incoming!” Vakama Maximus yelled, holding his severed arm in one hand. The Autotoabots ran out of the way as Sleedat crashed into the ground and skidded into a McNocturns.“We’re doing way better than I thought. No dead Autotoabots yet.” Kopatchet said happily. Then a massive metal crunching sound was heard. The group turned to see Bradak getting up, most of him badly damaged, but he was still in the fight. Blacktaka landed on top of a building nearby, sending a volley of rockets at the assembled Autotoabots.The Autotoabots spread out, firing what they could the Deceptikuta. This time Bradak got a chance to shoot, and shoot he did. Single handily (no pun intended) he forced the Autotoabots to run for cover, while Blacktaka transmoced again and strafed them. Nihiscream performed a fly by and the Autotoabots got separated, pinned down by the concentrated fire power of the more powerful Deceptikuta.Then Galcee drove up, delivering some great news. “Makutatron incoming!” She yelled, transmocing, and barely dodging a shot from Bradak.KER-CRUNCH!The Autotoabots looked to see Makutatron land in an alley, walking out of it crushing everything in his way, and otherwise being terrifying.“Come here Autotoabots! I will feast on your sparks!” The Deceptikuta leader yelled at them, sounding very scary. The effect he had on the Autotoabots was astounding. Even trigger happy Hydraxhide and defiant Dakama Prime couldn’t stand before him (but that might have been because of all of Bradak and Blacktaka’s shooting. Makutatron being there certainly wasn’t helping)Then, of all the Autotoabots, Lezz jumped out of nowhere, attacking the tyrant.“YOU AIN’T TOUCHIN’ MA BUDDIES FOO’!” Lezz yelled, bravely shooting and slicing at Makutatron. Makutatron, with one arm and a ghastly smile, grabbed Lezz and flew off with him.“Lezz! Get down here now!” Hydraxhide yelled as Lezz was carried off by Makutatron. What a stupid thing to say.Makutatron landed on top of a building, holding the little Autotoabot in one hand.“You want a piece of me? Huh? C’mon, I ain’t afraid of you punk!” Lezz said bravely, continuing the fight.Makutatron snarled as the puny little Autotoabot shot at him. “No, I want,” rrrrrrrrrrrrippppppp “TWO!”And with little to no effort at all, Makutatron ripped Lezz in half, ending his life. Lezz only made a half-hearted sigh as he died. So weak.” He said, throwing Lezz’s body to the ground, landing in a dumpster.“Lezz! NOOO!” Hydraxhide yelled as he ran to dumpster. Kopatchet followed, but only shook his. The two Autotoabots then had to retreat due to over-whelming fire being sent at them, but Hydraxhide vowed to kill some Deceptikuta, just for Lezz, before the day was done.END OF CHAPTER MTL
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Posted Dec 27 2011 - 02:25 PM

Oi!Fun Commentary: This was one of my favourite scenes from the movie, although I saddened by how short it was. So I made it longer.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 18SIBLING RIVALRYLEGO CITY, PO-METRU, METRU-NUIMakutatron was really happy. Not only had he killed his first Autotoabot on this planet, but he no longer had the munchies.“Deceptikuta, slaughter the Autotoabots!” Makutatron yelled out, laughing a hardy laugh. He heard the sounds of weaponry being fired and screams, oh the screams which he cherished so.He looked around happily until he stopped. A massive red semi was ploughing through an alley, until it got on to the street. When it was in the middle of the road, parts detached and moved away. Two arms formed from the cab and pushed it up as two legs formed, pushing the giant truck higher. The part with the windows moved up, connected with the legs and arms. More parts found home on it until a head popped up and the last parts stopped moving.“Makutatron.” Matanui Prime said epically, his fists raised high.Makutatron turned his hands into fists. “Matanui.” He said angrily. He jumped from his perch on top of the building, transmoced into his Metrutronian jet mode, and flew at Matanui, firing some missiles.Matanui jumped onto a nearby store, then vaulted himself off of it, dodging Makutatron's rockets then landing on Makutatron's jet mode. Makutatron spun uncontrollably, flying down the street but still Matanui held on. Makutatron went through a building, where finally Matanui lost his grip. The two leaders went out the other side, Makutatron transmocing back into his monstrous robot mode and wrestling with Matanui down the road, until Makutatron got on top. Grabbing Matanui by the face, he spoke to his brother for the first time in millenia."Matoran don't deserve to live!" he said to Matanui.Matanui pushed back at Makutatron's face. "They deserve to choose for themselves!" Matanui said in defence of the Matoran. Makutatron growled, then grabbed Matanui's shoulder's and threw him down the street. "Then you will die with them! JOIN THEM! IN EXTINCTION!" Makutatron said, turning his arms into his much feared fusion cannon.Matanui was ready, however. He got to his feet and fired at Makutatron wiht his own weapon, sending Makutatron spinning around. He fired again, sending Makutatron spinning once more. Then again."RRAGGGHHH!!" Makutatron spat as he finally fired his weapon. The shot from it sent Matanui flying down the street. "Geeeaaggh!" Matanui said as he was sent flying.INSIDE THE BUILDING“Thank you for calling SOCKS military headquarters. We value your call and will make sure you get some annoying papers that do not help you at all.” A Matoran at a desk said into his phone, drawing a funny little comic strip on a piece of paper.“No Ms, I do not want some jaAm. No, it is not important. Sign the papers you already have and we might get back to you.”“No, I already told you I don’t want some jaAm. Now-”The Matoran at the desks sentence was cut off when a giant robot slammed into the wall behind. The Matoran spun around on his chair and looked the giant robot in the face.“Uh, welcome to SOCKS military?” the matoran said to the massive robot.“UUaah.” Matanui said as he fell out of the building.“Icytoa1, do you have that paperwork finished yet?” Icytoa1’s boss yelled at him.“Sure, but aahhh..” Icytoa1 one said, still in shock at the giant robot that came within a meter of his face.“Aggh!! Such a maniac, that toa. Always goofing off. He’s probably going to tell me a giant robot crashed into the building after being shot at by another giant robot. Always with the stupid stories.” The boss said, walking away.One of the secretaries walked up to him and worriedly said to him “Uh, Mr. Laco sir, the wall..”“Is purple? Yeah, I know. We need to change it.” Mr. Laco, who was devilishly handsome if I might say, walked to his office.BACK OUTSIDEMakutatron picked up Matanui Prime and threw him across the street, landing in a Burger Turaga. Makutatron ran at Matanui, but Matanui shot him as he ran, and the Deceptikuta flipped and landed on his face.Matanui Prime ran at the Deceptikuta leader, but Makutatron, keeping him low, ran back at Matanui, grabbing him and throwing him to the ground once more. Matanui tried to get back up, but Makutatron put all his strength into a kick to Matanui's side, sending Matanui rolling.Makutatron grabbed him again, and pushed him into a wall.“Your weak Matanui! You always have been!” Makutatron said, attempting, atemptting to rip open Matanui's chest. Matanui kicked Makutatron away and the Matanui got on top of Makutatron this time.“Your overconfident Makutatron! You've always been!" Matanui said, turning an arm into a sword and going for the face.Makutatron grabbed Matanui's sword arm, and threw him off. He punched Matanui in the face, but Matanui rolled to his feet.Growling, Makutatron ran at Matanui. “You and the other Autotoabots will fall today, because you all fight for the weak. THAT-”Makutatron rammed Matanui into another building, shaking up the expensive pots and vases that lay inside.“IS WHY-”Makutatron pushed Matanui to the ground.“YOU LOSE!”The manic Deceptikuta kicked Prime onto his back, and attempted to grab the spark of the Autotoabot leader. Matanui reacted at the last second, bringing out his sword and slicing open Makutatron arm. Makutatron howled at the gash in his arm, then swung his other arm, hitting Matanui back.Matanui was dazed, but not out. He looked back up to see Makutatron's fusion cannonTM aimed at him. A split second later matanui was once more sent flying down the street, crashing into an oncoming garbage truck.Makutatron was about to make his way towards Matanui, when he sensed an energy pulse from the AllShiny. With one last look at Matanui Prime, he transmoced and flew towards the signal.Matanui watched him fly away, then fell into unconsiousness.END OF CHAPTERMTL
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Posted Jan 13 2012 - 08:20 PM

Well, haven't updated this guy in a while, so I thought I'd do so.Fun Commentary: This is a brand new chapter! In the original topic, Turaga Vakama, 12345, Nixie and Nuparu (and Hewkii and Hafu, really) don't really do anything after the first chapter of Lego City. And since this scene was missing, too, I thought I'd throw it in. And I also needed to reintroduce Transraga, who didn't really have a true introduction in the original either. Also, I never mention Enderth and Transraga escaping the Sector Six headquarters,except in the final chapter, so I thought that would work well as well. I also finally explain how the air force shows up too. This chapter's reintroduction of Turaga Vakama is because he's in the next chapter of Transonicle 3, and I needed him back.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 19LEADERSHIP SKILLS AND SUCHLEGO CITY, PO-METRUHewkii and Hafu fired what they could at Bradak (who they just called "that tank thing"), and weren't doing much. Bradak wasn't moving fast, and as such, was getting hit with alot. Bradak was missing one arm, one of his shoulder mounted missile launchers, and severla pieces of armour, yet he still kept going. Firing missiles at the Hewkii and his soldiers, Bradak was hit with a few shots from Blue Flame, how ahd to dodge some rockets from Blacktaka flying above."It would be nice if we could do more than TICKLE THEM!" Hafu yelled, firing all he could. Bradak concentrated back on them, firing a tank shell at them."If we could tell someone to send the air force...." Hewkii said, ducking under some rubble. Suddenly, he remembered soemthing. "Hafu! Where did that radio we bought go to?" Hewkii asked him.Hafu thought for a moment, then looked down the road. It was lying, unscathed, nearly 10 feet from Bradak."If you want to run for it..." Hafu said."Where's an Autotoabot..." Hewkii asked nobody, looking around."'Sup." Wipeout said, standing behind them. Hewkii and Hafu nearly jumped out of their masks."Right, uh..." Hewkii was about to say, but then realized he didn't know Wipeout's name."It's Wipeout, don't forget it. Although you probably will." Wipeout said, firing at Bradak, which was a little useless."Look, you see that radio right there?" Hewkii said, pointing to it.Wipeout looked at it. "I do." he said."We need it!" Hewkii said."Why on earth would you want that artifact?" Wipeout asked."To contact back up." Hewkii said.Before Wipeout could say something, one of Bradak's missiles landed nearby and sent some Matoran flying."Perhaps we do need it." Wipeout said, running over the rubble they were hiding behind, doing a flip, transmocing into his little hover-bike-thing mode, and sped to the radio, dodging some shots from Bradak. When he got to it, he transmoced, fired what he could at Bradak, grabbed the radio/walkie talkie thing and went back to Hewkii and Hafu, who provided what cover they could.Somehow, somehow, Wipeout made it back unhurt, handing the radio to Hewkii."Well, that was a bit too close for my liking." Wipeout said.Hafu and Hewkii fumbled with the radio thing, trying to figure out how to contact Sector Six."How do we work this thing?" Hafu said, basically paraphrasing what I just wrote."Turn it on!" Hewkii said."Oh, that might work." Hafu said. Flipping a switch, the radio started to make a buzzing sound. "Right, now to call Sector Six." Hafu said."Why not the military?" Hewkii asked."You got stuck with some guy trying to sell you Geico. I don't think we're gonna make it through this time." Hafu said. Hewkii shrugged. There was an explosion right behind them, sending debris raining down."Hurry up!" Wipeout said, firing a mini-missile at Bradak. The missile spun and struck Bradak in the knee and did... nothing."I'm gettin' through!" Hafu said.THE CANYON OF UNENDING WHISPERS12345, Secretary of Defense Turaga Vakama, Nixie and Nuparu ran into a small, fikou-web covered room, filled with computers and such."Why are we in here? Don't you have stuff that was made in the last 30 years?" Nixie said, looking at the old computers."Can't use 'em, can't use 'em.." 12345 said, looking through old junk. Turaga Vakama held his cane, eyeing the room."Didn't that motorcycle thing drop off some little robot back there?" Turaga Vakama said, refering to Enderth a few chapters back."Doesn't matter, won't follow us.." 12345 said, reaching into an old trashcan. "Ahhah!" he said, lifting out a device that looked older than Christopher Lee. "A morse code thing-a-magig?" Nuparu said."Exactly! The Deceptikuta can presumably monitor our other lines, but I bet you my mother that they can't do didily-squat to one of these!" 12345 said."Awesome!" Nuparu said, fist-pumping the air."Great! So do you know morse code?" Nixie asked. 12345's smile faded."Well this is just great." Turaga Vakama said. Suddenly, there was a crash from out in the hallway."Is that the pizza guy?" Nuparu asked hopefully. A shurikan went flying though the ajar door, hit a post behind Nuparu and exploded."It's the pizza guy from Karzahni!" 12345 said, tossing the morse code thing to Nixie. "You kids contact the military! There's a morse code dictionary behind the desk, use it!" 12345 said as he reached into a fish tank and pulled out... a fake castle."Thought there was a gun in there.." 12345 said, sad."I got all the gun we need." Turaga Vakama said, pointing his cane up, revealing it to be a cane/shotgun. Awe-some."COME GET SOME YOU ROBOTIC DEVILS!" Turaga Vakama said, firing it once. "YEA!" 12345 said, pushing a desk infront of the door in an effort to barricade it.Outside the door, Frendox and Transraga, who had been dropped off by Enderth a few chapters back, dodged the shots from the shotgun."These vermin have teeth!" Transraga said."Theydietheydietheydietheydie!" Frendox said, launching shurkians at the door. They made dents in it, but didn't break it.Turaga Vakame fired through the small hole in the door. "METRU-NUI!" he cried. 12345 pulled a pistol out from his belt.Nixie and Nuparu worked with the morse-coder, the dictionary open in front of them."Right, two beepities for this.... another for that.." Nuparu said, tapping at it furiously. Nixie hooked it up to the computer, which turned on faintly. "I think.. We're doing it! We're through and receiving!" she yelled to Turaga Vakama."Excellent!" Turaga Vakama said, stepping back and firing a few more times. "They're scurrying off!" 12345 said. Turaga Vakama went over to Nuparu and Nixie. "Send everything I say!" Turaga Vakama said, opening his mouth to speak. Suddenly there was a banging in the air ducts above."I didn't even know there were any of those in here.." 12345 said."Let 'em have it!" Turaga Vakama said, firing at the duct. A few holes appeared in it, then Frendox fell through, landing in a fish tank. Transraga went through the unguarded door, firing his meager assortment of weaponry.Turaga Vakama stood unfazed as a shurikan passed by him, nearly taking off Nuparu's head. He fired at the Deceptikuta, letting them have it."Killthemkillthemkillthemkillthem!" Frendox said, taking cover behind a pillar."Holy pants Frendox, I'm a doctor not a soldier!" Transraga said, shooting the best he could. A shot from 12345's pistol hit Transraga in the neck. "Ach! Ach! Myn, mein vocal processors, zey are damaged!" Transraga said.Frendox launched another two shurikans, one of which was shot right out of the air by Turaga Vakama, making it explode and blocking Frendox's view. The other went around the room, spinning, spinning, spinng, until it came back..And hit Frendox in the head. Frendox was surprised in that one second before the shurikan exploded, destroying the Deceptikuta scout. Transraga was too close to the explosion, and it sent off one of his arms. Clutching the wound, he began to retreat. Turaga Vakama continued shooting, the shots weakening Transraga's neck joints until his head gave way, and it rolled off."Ow." Transraga said, still alive. Small drones can handle such losses. He crawled on as the Matoran celebrated their victory."We sure showed those suckers, huh?" 12345 said, fist bumping Turaga Vakama."Most fun I've had in a long time." Turaga Vakama said."Right, what do I need to send?" Nuparu asked Turaga Vakama.Suddenly the phone rang."Yellow." 12345 said, picking it up."Is this that Sector Six guy with the sunglasses?" Hafu said."I am." 12345 said."Well, we got friendlies mixed with bad guys over here, and we're being owneded." Hafu said."Consider it fixed." 12345 said, relaying the words to Turaga Vakama.PO-METRU AIR FORCE BASEA Matoran general was playing solitaire on his computer when another Matoran brust into the room. "Sir, we got a message. Lego-City's under attack from giant robots, and they can't fight back!" the Matoran said."I always knew this day would come." The Matoran general said, looking at a painting of a window. "Assemble the Avengers!" the General said."Uh, sir?" the Matoran asked, confused."Get the jets ready!" the General said."Oh." the Matoran said, walking out."Oh, and officer." the General said.The Matoran turned to the General. "Sir?" he asked."BRING THE RAIN!" the General shouted."Uh, ok." the Matoran said, walking out and not looking back.THE CANYON OF UNENDING WHISPERSTransraga's head crawled along to the main room where he had entered with Enderth, whose body was lying ahead-Heheheheh- of him now, surronded by Sector Six agents. Enderth's head moved a bit, saw Tranraga, then the larger Deceptikuta jumped to his feet, his hands turned into saws, and got rid of the Matoran surrounding him. He picked up Tranraga's head, transmoced into his motorcycle form, and escaped the complex.END OF CHAPTERMTL
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#37 Offline ManiacToaLaco

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Posted Jan 22 2012 - 08:20 PM

Oi!TRANSONICLECHAPTER 20CLASH OF TITANS LEGO CITY, PO-MTERUJaller and the other Matoran sat silently until Vakama Maximus signalled to them that they could move. Hewkii and his fighters went out first, then Jaller and Hahli. Jaller looked and he saw a yellow and gray Autotoabot curled up and damaged, with Blue Flame and Kopatchet helping him up."Pohatubee!" Jaller yelled as he ran to his fallen friend.<OH! The paain! How it hurts me so!> The ‘bee’s radio sang out."What happened to him!" Jaller asked Kopatchet. Kopatchet looked down. Wipeout suddenly crawled on top of the white Autotoabot’s head. Kopatchet shook him off and looked at Jaller again."Got hit with some missiles. Legs are gone. But other than that he's fine. Hydraxhide faired a bit better than him." Kopatchet said, waving a scanner thingy ma-bobber over Pohatubee. Just then Hydraxhide went flying through a building, landed on the street and skidded into a Toa-Mart."Rassa-frassa dinosaur with its……" Hydraxhide was saying, ending with something that I certainly can’t put on BZPower.Kopatchet and Blue Flame dragged Pohatubee back into the alley they found him in, not sure why they had pulled him out."Pohatubee!" Jaller said, "Where’s the AllShiny?"Pohatubee stopped for a second, then activated his radio <By the power of the lord, I summon thy~~~~ It’s cubelar!>Jaller, Kopatchet, Wipeout and Blue Flame looked at Pohatubee with blank faces.Pohatubee sighed and took the AllShiny out.‘Yeses, my precious." Jaller said, walking away, and hitting Hewkii in the process."OOOOFF!" Jaller said as he walked into Hewkii and plopped on his bottom. Hewkii looked over Jaller. He grabbed Jaller by the shoulder and hoisted him up."Look kiddo, these things are fighting over that thing, and if the meaner ones get it, well, I don’t think we’re think going to win even if they don’t get it." Hewkii said to Jaller, not letting the little matoran go."And?" Jaller asked, trying to get away."DON’T LET THEM GET IT!" Hewkii yelled. It scared Jaller so bad he flew out of Hewkii’s grip. This was a strong grip if I might add."Ok, ok, ok! Geez, spaz." Jaller said, rubbing the dirt off of him."You're a soldier now, you got that? You're gonna fight your way out of this, just we're going to." Hewkii said. Beside him Hafu nodded."Do we have to go back and fight that tank thing?" Hafu asked Hewkii."Not until we know the air force is showing up." Hewkii said."I like that plan." Hafu replied.Jaller looked back at the cube, then looked back up. Hahli stood before him."You better not mess this up, or you're going to have ruined my day." she said, walking over to Pohatubee."Right, fun day." Jaller said.ELSEWHEREBradak looked around. He couldn’t see any Autotoabots. But he could smell their circuitry. He could also taste plastic in his mouth. With a hint of liquid nitrogen.What a peculier taste, he mused.He took a step forward, and felt a small explosion at his side. He turned and saw some Matoran with grenade launchers shooting at him. He raised his remaining arm with a gun on it and prepared to shoot, only to feel another explosion on his back. He turned and saw Vakama Maximus and Blue Flame shooting at him. When he turned the two shot at his face, knocking him back. His tank turret unfolded from his back and shot back at them. They were knocked back form the explosion, and Bradak fired somemore.DOWN THE STREETHahli stood by Pohatubee, watching the group down the street shoot at Bradak, not doing much.<They will be crushed soon, my lord.> Pohatubee’s radio startled Hahli. She jumped and looked back. Pohatubee pointed at a tow truck. Hahli smiled behind her mask."Brilliant! You can transform into it and we can drive away!" She exclaimed, not getting Pohatubee’s idea.<stooped monkey.> Pohatubee's radio said.BACK UP THE STREETBradak was having trouble shooting the Matoran. They kept ducking up and down and moving around. All he had left was rockets, and an ammoless gatling gun. Rockets were hard to kill Matoran with, that’s for sure. He prepared to launch a shell from his turret when he heard some engines or whatnot. He looked up and saw Tahkan Metra and Phoniex Prime launch several missiles at him, and then Bradak realized he wasn’t as good as dodging rockets as the Matoran.BOOMBOOM KABOOM SPALOSION KRAKKBOOM BAYSPLOSIONSBradak hobbled back and watched the Metrutronian jet and the phoenix fly away, then he aimed his shoulder rocket and was about to fire, when once more Matoran shot at him, and Blue Flame and Vakama Maximus shot at him again.BACK DOWN THE STREETHahli finally hooked Pohatubee up to the tow truck, while Kopatchet watched."That'll never work." Kopatchet said."If you had helped us set it up you might have more faith in it." Hahli said."You had Pohatubee's help." Kopatchet replied."You aren't even out there fighting, and you can't help Pohatubee here! What sort of fighter are you?" Hahli yelled at him."Darn it Matoran I'm a doctor not a soldier!" Kopatchet replied.<And not a very good one either.> Pohatubee said through his radio."Watch it no-legs!" Kopatchet said. There was an explosion above them. Nihiscream did another fly by."Look, you either help us now, or die like we all probably are going to!" Hahli pleaded.Kopatchet looked at her, sighed, and turned an arm into his machine gun. "I never was that much of a doctor anyways." he said.<Not many people realize, but that's common knowledge.> Pohatubee's radio said. Kopatchet looked at him, and Pohatubee shrugged."Whatever. Now, you ready to blow that bad boy outta here?" Hahli said as she got in the vehicle.Pohatubee unveiled so many weapons that Bradak, Hydraxhide and Blacktaka would have looked like the Naming Day fairy.<I'm here to take names and chew gum, and I've got some gum left.> Pohatubee's radio said.BACK UP THE STREETBradak noticed that all of a sudden no one was shooting at him. He took a step forward and stopped. The Autotoabot known as Pohatubee was hooked onto a tow truck, which was going backwards towards him. Kopatchet ran behind them, firing with all he was worth. Bradak prepared to fire, only to realize he was out of ammo, on all of his guns."Oh slag." he said, as the Matoran decided to fire again, just as Pohatubee and Kopatchet fired their weapons. Bradak was hit many times from all angles, as Vakama Maximus and Blue Flame started to fire again, as well as Phoniex Prime and Tahkan Metra. The concentrated fire power turned Bradak to Swiss cheese, and the armoured giant fell into the Matoran stronghold as Pohatubee’s last shot hit him.KERCRUNCH!The Matoran and the Autotoabots went over to check out the busted up Bradak.<And another bites the dust!> Pohatubee's radio said."We did it! We did it!" Hahli said, looking out the door of the tow truck. Wipeout, Hewkii and Hafu ran up."Wow, way to do that without us." Hafu said."That was fun." Kopatchet said "I much like taking things apart than putting them back together."Vakama Maximus and Blue Flame stepped over Bradak's body."And that's not what you want to hear from your doctor." Vakama Maximus said, still missing an arm.SOMEWHERE ELSE ON THE BATTLEFIELDDakama Prime grimaced as he slammed into a building, drywall and bricks falling."We are invincible!" Blacktaka yelled out, firing stuff at Dakama. Dakama Prime rolled out of the way, the missiles blowing apart most of the lower building.Dakama Prime jumped forward and transmoced, ramming Blacktaka, knocking him over. Blacktaka rolled and looked back, one arm turned into a propellar/saw thing. Dakama Prime turned and transmoced, facing Blacktaka. Dakama took out his huge axe, his favoured weapon, and looked at the titan. Then Blacktaka bent over, and a bundle of wires flew from his back."SSHHHKKKSHHKKKSHHKKK!" The little death ball of death screeched, knocking Dakama Prime over."Stupid Spinok!" Dakama yelled as he tried to peel the pincher’s of the Deceptikuta scorpion out of his armour. Spinok fired his machine guns into Dakama’s armour. Dakama took it like man, er, bot, and threw the scorpion away. Spinok jumped back landed on Blacktaka. Dakama clutched his wound, shortened the handle of his axe, and swung, Blacktaka moxing back, then stepping forward and hitting Dakama with his saw. Dakama stepped back, his chest heavily damaged from Spinok and Blacktaka.Blacktaka unfurled his chest cannon and shot Dakama, sending the huge Autotoabot into a building. Firing another weapon into the building, Blacktaka set it on fire, and part of it collapsed on Dakama."All hail lord Makutatron!" Blacktaka yelled as he turned and transmoced, flying away.As Blacktaka flew away, Dakama pulled himself form the rubble, his armour heavily damaged. He looked for Blacktaka, but the Deceptikuta helicopter was gone. Angry with himself, he collasped.END OF CHAPTER FUN COMMENTARY: This chapter originally focused mostly on Pohatubee killing Bradak, like in the movie (but with Bumblebee and Brawl) but I changed it so Kopatchet did something for once. I also changed up Dakama and Blacktaka's fight, so it stopped being quite as silly. Dakama is also using his axe now, which is his weapon prefernde. Or however it's spelt.Also, this chapter had a "Trailer" for Transonicle 2 (which will also be in this topic), so I thought it would be good to include it here."Pohatubee, I got to talk to you about the college thingy, okay?" Jaller said. <I'm so exicted! I just can't hide it!> Pohatubee's radio said, while he snapped his fingers."Your not going with me." Jaller replied.<Say wat?>FROM MANICTOA INDRUSTRIES "Can't you just smell the smartlyness?" Jaller's mom said, doing a spin."No, not really. And stop making up words, it makes us look bad." Jaller's dad said, not getting out of the car. AND PARTICIPATION FROM THE BZP COMIDIES FORUM "Hey Hahli! I got you and me an webcam so we can talk and stuff so you won't dump me or anything." Jaller said with his cell phone stuck in his ear, unable to get it out. "Sounds... interesting." Hahli said, breaking a bike with a hammer. SCENE CHANGE!Jaller put a box and a container on his table. Suddenlly, everything went slow. Jaller suddenly saw a horrible face of a massive robot, (which looked like an upside down Deceptikuta symbol, which looked like the Kanohi Krakhaan, and on this bloke looked like a pharoah's mask thing sorta) and symbols from the Metrutronian language.SCENE CHANGE!Jaller sat in class when all of a sudden he saw bunch of wierd symbols from earlier appear in his text book. He ran to the front of the room and started writing on the walls with a piece of chalk.SCENE CHANGE! "I just saw a bunch of Metrutonian symbols! In the middle of class! Then I wrote it on the wall! I think I'm going crazy like old Ithinkimbald!" Jaller yelled, terrified. SCENE CHANGE!Many, many pods entered the Matoran planet's atmosphere. "We've kept much from you Jaller." Dakama Prime said, walking towards the Ta-Matoran. "This isn't my war! It wasn't last time! And it won't be this time!" Jaller yelled at the massive Autotoabot. SCENE CHANGE!A pod hit a building, sending debri everywhere. BACK TO THE SCENE PREIVIOUS TO THE LAST ONE!"I'm afraid, it is going to be." Dakama Prime said grimly. SCENE CHANGE!Several pods landed on an aircraft carrier, sending aircraft and debri everywhere, while Nihiscream flew above. SCENE CHANGE!Hafu looked at the monstous Deceptikuta rolling down the road, breaking things. SCENE CHANGE!Pohatubee, Mataus and Onewaflap drove down a road very fast like.SCENE CHANGE!12345 picked up a bunch of papers. "What your about to see is really, really classified. Don't tell my mother." 12345 said, showing the papers to Jaller. "Any look like the symbols you've been seeing?" 12345 asked him. Jaller looked shocked and nodded."Where did you get these?" Jaller asked."They've been showing up all over the world in ancient ruins." SCENE CHANGE!Pohatubee, Mataus, Onewaflap and Gunmetal, along with several Matoran walked to a templeSCENE CHANGE!"These symbols, they mean something, like a map or something!" Jaller said. SCENE CHANGE!A few Constructikuta went to the body of the fallen Deceptikuta, at the ocean floor. "Makutatron." One whispered. BRIEF PAUSEMakutatron moved. He sped to the surface, anger in his eyes. SCENE CHANGE!Matkutatron showed up behind Hahli, growling something fierce.FROM WRITER MANIACTOALACO The Constructikuta leader Protomaster ripped apart parts of a dock while other Contructikuta followed him.SCENE CHANGE!Another massive Deceptikuta attacks the army troops. SCENE CHANGE!Jaller and Hahli ducked underneath some statues. SCENE CHANGE!Hakkannways ran through a building, transmoced and drove away. SCENE CHANGE"Makutatron wants whatever is in my mind!" Jaller yelled. SCENE CHANGE!Jaller and Hahli ran acroos the rooftops as Nihiscream fired rockets after them. SCENE CHANGE!"Im not leaving without you!" Hahli said to Jaller. AND EXCUTIVE PRODUCER, WELL, MANIACTOALACO Hahli put her hands to her face. SCENE CHANGE!Pohatubee's faceplate came down and he jumped at Ramzok. The Constructikuta punched but missed, hitting a wall. BASED ON HASBRO'S TRANSFORMERS' ACTION FIGURESThe Libary wall exploded, showering books and wood all over the crowd. BUT MOSTLY ON PARAMOUNT'S TRANSFORMERS' MOVIESJaller!" Hahli cried out from the car, dangling beneath Grindtaka. AND LEGO'S BIONICLE FIGURES Makutatron growled and stepped back as the Autotoabots shot at him. WITH SOME GUEST STARS Nihiscream kneeled down infront of Jaller and spat at him, mostly by accident.SCENE CHANGE!Matanui turned his arms into swords and jumped at Makutatron and Grindtaka, while in a forest.SCENE CHANGE!"MATANUI!" Jaller yelled as the Autotoabot leader was sent flying from a shot from Makutatron.SCENE CHANGE!Jaller only barely avoided being crushed by Matanui's falling body. SCENE CHANGE!"Fate rarely calls upon us at a moment of are choosing." Matanui said as he looked up. SCENE CHANGE!Jaller picked up the Sun Matrix. SCENE CHANGE!The F-22's flew near the pyramid with the floating rocks. The Zivonastater climbed up the side up the pyramid, ignoring the shooting from the jets. SCENE CHANGE!Gunmetal knelt down to speak with Jaller.*gasp for air* SCENE CHANGE!Jaller and Co. stared in horror as the Zivonastater ate some sand.GUESS WHAT? ANOTHER SCENE CHANGE!Matanui kicked Nihiscream, and the Deceptikuta flipped. SCENE CHANGE!Transraga crawled onto Jaller's face. SCENE CHANGE! Pohatubee shot something. SCENE CHANGE!Jaller and Hahli ran from explosions. SCENE CHANGE!Hafu yelled to Hewkii, while in a battle field. In a desert. With explosions.*sigh* SCENE CHANGE!Something exploded in a desert. SCENE CHANGE!Something else exploded in a city. SCENE CHANGE!Makutatron punched at Matanui Prime. SCENE CHANGE!Zivonastater walked forward, eating more sand.SCENE CHANGEA few flying planes transmoced and combined into the ginormous OMEGA KAITA! He landed in a quarry, and yelled "ZIVONASTATER! I HUNT YOU!"*bwaw bwaw bwaw bwaw*TRANSONICLE 2: REVENGE OF ICARAXA MANICTOA INDUSTRIES PRODUCTIONExciting, exciting indeed.MTL
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Posted Feb 03 2012 - 09:34 PM

Fun Commentary: Awww, this chapter has Jaller and Hahli kiss! So cute! And about as affectionate as I ever get with them. I much more enjoy fight scenes. Also, I revamped Dreaddude's death, so now it's much less corny.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 21FINALE PART 1 LEGO CITY, PO-METRUHydraxhide slid into an alley, making a whole bunch of sparks which looked pretty cool. He groaned, turned, and saw a Matoran staring at him, wide eyed."Shhh." Hydraxhide said to the Matoran quietly, "I’m hunting Spinosaurs."Just then the massive head of Dreaddude came out of nowhere and grabbed one of Hydraxhide's legs in his mouth. Hydraxhide grunted as he was lifted into the air, and was beaten violently as Dreaddude shook his head from side to side, smashing the Autotoabot weapon specialist into the surrounding buildings. The Matoran who had been staring ran for his life.Dreaddude pulled Hydraxhide onto the street, and threw him to the ground, then stood on him with one dino-foot. "Defenceless!" Dreaddude said, going to bite at Hydraxhide's head.Hydraxhide scowled angirily and raised his cannons. "Who YOU callin’ DEFENCLESS?" he said, then fired at Dreaddude, tearing away some fake dino-skin."ROAR!" Dreaddude, well, this one was pretty self explanatory. Dreaddude stepped back, eyeing Hydraxhide.Hydraxhide got up and finally got a decent look at the Deceptikuta. Dreaddude, in Spinosaur mode, was taller than Hydraxhide by a good 10 feet at least. Dreaddude's fake dino-skin was mostly torn away, revealing the Metrutronian parts underneath.Dreaddude charged at Hydraxhide, firing from his mouth. Hydraxhide took the shots, firing his own and hiting Dreaddude's side. Dreaddude took the shots aswell, and grabbed Hydraxhide in his mouth, throwing the weapon specialist back once more. Hdyraxhide rolled, and before he hit the ground he managed to fire once at Dreaddude, who did not enjoy the shot. Not at all.Hydraxhide rolled to a stop, then spoke "I have had enough of this." Hydraxhide said as he slowly got up, a few joints making sparks."I can end it then Autotoabot!" Dreaddude said as he charged once more. This time, Hydraxhide ducked just as Dreaddude tried to chomp at him. He missed, and went just above Hydraxhide. Hydraxhide held the Deceptikuta’s head in place for a split second and fired. Dreaddude fell to the ground, smoke coming from his spino-head." 'Bout time." Hydraxhide said, looking at his handy work.However, instead of a dead dino like Hydraxhide had hoped for, Dreaddude transmoced and towered over Hydraxhide, his gun raised at the Autotoabot’s head."No mercy." Dreaddude said. Hydraxhide acted, knocking Dreaddude's arm out of the way, firing once, disorientating the Deceptikuta, then grabbed his head, stuck a cannon to it, andBOOOMMM!!Dreaddude's body fell to the ground, smoke coming from where his head used to be. Hydraxhide stepped over his remains."No mercy at all." he said.ELSEWHEREKopatchet grabbed Blue Flame and Wipeout as Nihiscream’s rockets exploded nearby."You two must be trying to get yourselves killed! And you know I can't very well fix an injury like that!" Kopatchet scolded, waving a finger at the two."Last I checked, death is usually a permanent malady." Blue Flame said."Say, where's Pohatubee?" Wipeout asked."Hahli drove him somewhere away from the Deceptiktua." Kopatchet answered, not sounding like he really cared. Which is not what you want a doctor to soundl like.There was another explosion. The three of them turned and saw Nihiscream fly down and transmoc. Nihiscream looked around a few times, searching for them."Wow, he doesn’t look happy." Wipeout said as he looked through the burnt-out wreck of a building. It's easy to do that when you're Matoran sized.Nihiscream, was in fact, not happy at all. He wanted the AllShiny for himself, but he had no idea where to look for the Matoran running around with it. Not only that, he needed the AllShiny to kill Makutatron, and he didn’t know where the Deceptikuta leader was either. And now these Autotoabots were trying to stop the Deceptikuta's noble cause, and were actually succeeding, with Bradak, Wreckdak, Frendox and Krekkacrusher all being killed already and Dreaddude seemingly gone missing as well. He had no idea what had happened to Daedulus, Transraga, Enderth, Barritax or Spinok. Considering Blacktaka was the only one who ever talked to Spinok, that last one wasn't much of a concern.Suddenly Nihiscream was staggered, with Kopatchet, Blue Flame and Wipeout all shooting at him, and some Matoran presumabely doing so aswell.Firing back at them, he transmoced for cover, and flew for it. Annoyed witht he desparity of the Deceptikuta's situation, he saw something that only made things worse; Matoran fighter jets.Ducking behind some buildings, he decided it could be a useful tactic to hide among those jets...BACK BELOWKopatchet, Blue Flame and Wipeout watched Nihiscream run for it, which would've been funny if he probbaly wasn't going to go and kill someone."What's his problem?" Wipeout asked as Nihiscream disappeared."Probably too scared for his own good." Blue Flame said."That's silly now. He could've easily killed us right there if he felt like it." Wipeout said."Or he's actually scared. I jsut got a message from Hydraxhide; Dreaddude's dead." Kopatchet said."So that means..." Wipeout began to say."Were winning! Wow!" Blue Flame said."Well, that’s a change." Kopatchet said as he got out of their hiding spot.SOMEWHERE ELSE IN THE CITYVakama Maximus got slammed into the ground. His futile attempt to slow down Makutatron hadn't exactly gone well, especially considering he only had one arm currently.Makutatron grabbed him, his long fingers nearly wrapping all the wya around Vakama Maximus' torso."You will tell me where the AllShiny is, and your death will be quick." Makutatron said, growling right in Vakama Maximus' face "If not..." Makutatron said, taking a finger and putting it into Vakama Maximus' eye, making Vakama Maximus scream.Suddenly, a small explosion happened right on Makutatron's shoulder. He turned and saw Galcee firing at him."Let him go Deceptikuta." Galcee said, firing some more. The shoots all hit Makutatron, moving him slightly, but doing nothing to him really."Fine," Makutatron said, facing the female Autotoabot, "You can have him." And with that he threw Vakama Maximus at Galcee. Galcee ducked and Vakama Maximus crashed into a building."Thanks, I think." Vakama Maximus said as he went all rag-doll like.Galcee ignored him and watched as Makutatron looked at the air."The AllShiny, it calls to me. I MUST HAVE IT!" Makutatron said as he transmoced into whatever he transmocs into, and flew away. Galcee looked back and checked on Vakama Maximus, while giving a heads up to the other Autotoabots.IN THE DIRECTION MAKUTATRON WAS HEADINGJaller nodded as Hewkii gave him the last of his directions."Okay, so you got it kid, light the flare when you get to the top of the building, and the copter will pick you up." Hewkii said as he gave Jaller the flare."Sure, kinda, not really, no." Jaller said, looking confused."Good enough for me. Hydraxhide?" Hewkii said, looking up at the Autotoabot."You don't need to worry about me." Hydraxhide said, loading his guns. Kopatchet, Blue Flame and Wipeout drove up, Kopatchet transmocing first."Did you get Galcee's message? Makutatron is on his way!' Kopatchet said.Suddenly, a massive screech was heard, causing the Matoran to cover their ears."AHH! What is that?" Jaller said, holding the AllShiny and flare up to his face."Makutatron! We’ve got to move!" Hydraxhide said, starting to move towards the building. Kopatchet followed, while Blue Flame and Wipeout stood with Hewkii, Hafu, and the remainder of the Sector Six and actual Matoran military soliders."WAIT!"The group turned to see Hahli running up towards Jaller."Jaller, I just want you to know, getting into the car was the best thing to ever happen to me." Hahli said, holding Jaller’s hand."Really?" Jaller asked."No." Hahli responded, "But I actually do hope nothing bad happens to you." Then she kissed Jaller."Hiaayhhickhick." Jaller said, his teeth spreading apart in a stupid grin."Awwwww." Hafu said, watching."C'mon Jaller! We will protect you!" Hydraxhide said, picking up Jaller and running towards the last steps of the battle.END OF CHAPTERMTL
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Ah, the final chapter of the original Transonicle!FUN COMMENTARY: I almost completely re-wrote this chapter to resemble the movie more. originally, it was very cheesy, so I made it better. And you may ask "wow, there sure is a lot of Deceptikuta left" well, they all return for Transonicle 2, which will also be posted in this topic.TRANSONICLECHAPTER 22FINALE PART 2LEGO CITY, PO-METRU, METRU-NUIHydraxhide and Kopatchet ran down a street towards the rendevouz, Jaller running between them. Both Hydraxhide and Kopatchet had their weapons out and ready, eyes on the sky and expecting Deceptikuta at any moment. Blacktaka attacked first, flying in and strafing them in his helicopter mode. Hydraxhide took a shot that would've hit Jaller, while Kopatchet fired at Blacktaka. Blacktaka transmoced and spinning his rotor blade weapon, swung at the Autotoabots, sending half a taxi flying."Move Jaller!" Kopatchet yelled, shouldering the taxi as it came by. Hydraxhide rolled along side Jaller, providing cover from the shrapnel being sent by Blacktaka's rotor weapon. The shots from Kopatchet and Hydraxhide were enough that Blacktaka transmoced and took off, just as Sleedat flew by and shot at them. Hydraxhide once more rolled in front of the shots, desperate to keep Jaller safe. Jaller held the container containing the AllShiny close to him as he was almost struck by a stray shot from Sleedat.Sleedat turned back to shoot at them again, but a phoenix jumped on her Metrutronian jet-mode. Phoenix Prime, using his bird mode feet, brought her to the ground, and teleported away."We're gonna make it! We're gonna make it!" Jaller cried, as once more he, Kopatchet and Hydraxhide ran for the building."Keep going!" Kopatchet said. Suddenly another jet was heard. Nihiscream flew at them, shooting some missiles. Hydraxhide rolled and dodged while Kopatchet side stepped, and the missiles blew up behind them. Nihiscream transmoced and skidded along the road, sending cars flying at them. Hydraxhide jumped over Jaller, shielding him from flying automobiles, while Kopatchet began to shoot at Nihiscream.Jaller heard the three Metrutronians yelling at each other in their language, an mess of nonsense to him. Hydraxhide fired his two cannons and Kopatchet fired his machine gun, sending Nihiscream back a little bit, but he struck back with his own machine guns and rocket launchers, his deadly array of weaponry basically all he had going for him. Hydraxhide once more took a shot that would've killed Jaller, but it was enough to send him rolling back with pieces of his armour falling off. He got back to his feet and fired some more and Kopatchet was hit as well, then Hydraxhide took another shot to the chest. Nihiscream continued to fire all he had."Run Jaller!" Hydraxhide said as fluid leaked from his chest wound. Jaller nodded as he ran into an alley.Tahkan Metra swooped in just as Jaller began to run. Nihiscream was making a move for Jaller, saying something about insects, as Tahkan's weaponry hit Nihiscream, sending the chicken-legged Deceptikuta back. Tahkan transmoced and tackled Nihiscream, and the two rolled down the street. Nihiscream crawled away a little bit and tried to get to his feet, but Tahkan punched him back and hit him a few times with the blades on his arms. Nihiscream swung wildly with his saw, and the arrival of Blacktaka forced Tahkan off of Nihiscream. Nihiscream transmoced and flew for it, as Hydraxhide and Kopatchet got back to the feet, and the three Autotoabots retreated, not knowing where Jaller was.IN THE ALLEYJaller ran down the alley and leaned against a dumpster, huffing and puffing. He heard the sounds of battle around him. He looked into the dumpster, ready to throw up. Before he could empty his stomach, he saw half of the body of Lezz laying in it, torn and ruined. Swallowing what would've been messy and un-needed to the plot, he shook his head, saw the rendevouz building where he would be able to escape, and ran for it. H readied the flare that would alert an army helicopter or something to his presence. As he ran, he thought about how flimsy this plan really was.IN THE BUILDINGJaller was running in the lobby of the building and just reaching the stairs when suddenly the wall burst down behind him. Turning, he saw Makutatron roaring after him, the Deceptikuta leader's clawed hands breaking down whatever he felt like."I smell your fear, bbboooooooyyyy!!!" He roared. Jaller screamed and ran up the stairs. Flight apon flight of stairs he ran, still hearing the voice of the Deceptikuta leader."Come out boy! We all have to die sometime!" Makutatron said. Jaller heard him destroy something. Closing his eyes and breathing heavily, he grimaced and went for it.Jaller ran faster, almost tripping twice. He was almost at the top when Makutatron’s head broke through the stairs, sending debris everywhere."Neagh!" Jaller yelled as he almost fell down the stairs."THE ALLSHINY! GIVE IT TO ME!" Makutatron yelled, his hand breaking through the floor behind Jaller, reaching for him. Jaller ran forward, going over Makutatron’s head and running through a door."OOF!" Jaller yelled as he fell to the ground, little bits of door lying beneath him. He got up, and suddenly realized the flare had set itself off when he fell."Oh boy." Jaller said as he ran to the edge of the building. He heard the propellers of a helicopter below."Right here!" Jaller yelled. He looked over the edge and saw the helicopter coming up. He didn’t know what kind it was, but it was really big and it had the numbers and letters BL13KT1K1 on its side."Finally! I’m saved!" Jaller said as it appeared in front of him. He was about to step forward when it transmoced into a massive robot, about 55 feet tall, and pulled itself onto the building."Oh snap! I shouldn’t have gotten in the car!" Jaller said as he quickly turned around, only to see Makutatron push himself through the building's roof."My AllShiny, give it to me!" Makutatron said, walking towards Jaller. He heard a sound and looked to see Nihiscream fly by and transmoc, landing on a building beside them. Jaller was surrounded by three giant Deceptikuta, and he had no escape. He ran back to the edge of the building and prepared to jump, when he saw that the drop was about a hundred feet too many. He leaned against one of the statues the surrounded the building's edge."I won't give it to you! Never!" Jaller yelled, dropping the flare, and clutching a statue and the AllShiny's container.Makutatron made a sound that might've have been laughter. "Is it courage or fear that compells you?" Makutatron said, kneeling down and knocking a statue off the rooftop. He put his head close to Jaller, showing off his startling array of teeth."Give the AllShiny now, and you may live to be my pet. And I shall name you Flufskiron." Makutatron said, laughing at that last bit and walking towards Jaller. Blacktaka stood nearby, watching Jaller carefully."No... no!! Never!" Jaller said defiantly."Oh," Makutatron said, turning a hand into a mace, "So unwise." And with that, he swung, destroying the corner of the building that Jaller had been hanging onto. Jaller, the statue, the AllShiny, it all fell, with Jaller just managing to keep the AllShiny in his hands. He screamed, pieces of rubble hitting him as he fell. He saw the ground, and closed his eyes."I've got you Jaller!" a voice yelled. Jaller opened his eyes just in time to see Matanui Prime running off of a lower building, jump, and grab him, then grab onto the building opposite of them."Hold on Jaller!" Matanui said to him. Jaller clutched the AllShiny's container to himself, looking at Matanui. Matanui's faceplate went across his face just as they heard Makutatron's voice."MATANUI!" Makutatron yelled, jumping down after them. Matanui grunted once and let go, and Jaller screamed. Matanui jumped between the two buildings as they fell, trying to control their disent, but Makutatron dropped right for them. The Deceptikuta tackled them in mid-air, and the they rolled through the air, but Matanui escaped his grip and landed a bit away from Makutatron when they finally hit the ground.Makutatron pushed himself up onto his knees, saw a Kakama-wearing being looking at him, said "Disgusting!", and flicked him away.Matanui let Jaller out of his hand and retracted his faceplate. "Jaller, you would sacrifice yourself for the AllShiny?" Matanui asked him.Jaller looked up at Matanui. "Nothing lost, nothing gained." Jaller said."I do not understand that." Matanui said, turning onto his side. "Jaller, if I cannot defeat Makutatron, you must push the cube into my chest. I will sacrifice myself to save your world." Matanui said."Matanui!" Makutatron said, finally getting to his feet."Run Jaller!" Matanui told Jaller, getting to his feet. As Jaller ran, he looked back for a moment; Matanui stood before Makutatron, his fists raised."At the end of this day Makutatron, one shall stand, one shall fall." Matanui said. Makutatron didn't even respond, instead just attacking Matanui. Jaller steeled himself and continued to try and run as Makutatron threw Matanui down the street. Makutatron ran at Matanui, and Matanui got to his feet and punched Makutatron in the face. Makutatron retaliated, throwing Matanui into a building, pulling him out and throwing him to the ground, where he kicked the Autotoabot leader in the face. Matanui rolled down the street, and once more got to his feet, and blocked a hit from Makutatron. He even managed to get a few good hits in.Jaller kept running, but a helicopter showed up in front of him and transmoced, and Blacktaka stood before him, reaching for the AllShiny. Jaller ran past him.DOWN THE STREETHafu poked Hewkii. "Look, its that thing that attacked the base!" Hafu told him.Hewkii looked at Blacktaka, who was chasing Jaller. "Let’s finish it." Hewkii said, taking Hafu's grenade launcher thing. Hewkii looked around and saw Galcee, helping the damaged and one armed Vakama Maximus nearby. Looking up he saw F-22s flying in."Hey, you! Girl robot! I need your help!" Hewkii yelled as he ran towards her."My name's Galcee." Galcee said."Ok, Galcee," Hewkii corrected himself "You see the helicopter guy over there?" Hewkii asked her. Galcee looked at Blacktaka, then looked back to Vakama Maximus and said something in Metrutronian."Got it!" Vakama Maximus said, taking his pistol out. Behind them Blue Flame ran up, and Galcee repeated the Metrutronian to him."Sounds good!" Blue Flame said, kneeling down, turning one arm into his sniper rifle and taking aim. Galcee grabbed Hewkii and transmoced into her motorcycle mode."Get ready to shoot!" she told him "His armour's weak underneath!" she told him. Vakama Maximus told Hafu and the other soldiers the same thing."Bring the rain!" Hewkii said to Hafu as Galcee drove off.Hafu nodded and took his radio-thing out. "Yo, F-22s, this is our guys on the ground here talking. We got a big nasty who's marked and ready for you to wreck." Hafu told them."Copy that. Is it the helicopter guy I see there?" the pilot said."You got it." Hafu responded."We're golden then." the pilot said. By now Galcee and Hewkii were almost at Blacktaka."No-one shoot until my signal!" Vakama Maximus said, aiming his pistol.BACK WITH JALLER AND BLACKTAKAJaller kept running, Blacktaka running up behind him, in his awkward way of running."LOOK OUT KID!" Hewkii yelled. Jaller saw Hewkii and Galcee, then jumped out of the way. Blacktaka looked and saw Galcee and Hewkii driving to him, then saw all the Matoran, and then saw Blue Flame and Vakama Maximus aimed at him too. Unveiling his chest cannon he fired at the Matoran soliders.Galcee transmoced just as she got under Blacktaka, and both she and Hewkii fired."Now!" Vakama Maximus yelled, and he, Blue Flame and the Matoran soliders fired."Lock and load!" Tanma, the F-22 pilot, said, and the F-22s fired.Blacktaka was struck by all the shots, missiles and such. Pieces of his armour flew off and he finally died. His huge body collapsed in a mangled heap on the ground."YEAH! We did it!" Hewkii yelled, as he did a happy jig. Jaller wiped his brow, and Galcee cheered. Hafu fist bumped the Matoran next to him. Blue Flame and Vakama Maximus smiled and hollared at their combined kill.Just then Wipeout ran up. "Did I miss it? Actually?" he said, looking at Blacktaka's body."We're not done yet." Vakama Maximus said, pointing his pistol to Matanui and Makutatron fighting down the street."Let's go then! Fire at will!" Blue Flame yelled, aiming his sniper rifle and taking a shot at Makutatron. The shot hit Makutatron in the shoulder, pausing him long enough for Matanui to get a few good hits in on him. None below however, noticed an extra F-22 joining the group above.UP WITH THE F-22S Tanma the F-22 pilot was quite pleased that they had succeded in killing a robot right there."Alright Matoran, let's double around and hit what's left!" he said. As he began to turn his jet, he took a moment to have a look at his squadron. Suddenly he noticed a new F-22 get into their formation."What in the world?" Tanma said just as the F-22 fired, hitting one and sending it down. The F-22 traitor then transmoced into Nihiscream, who struck out at another, just missing it, then fired at it, sending it down."Kill it! Kill it!" a pilot yelled. Some of the F-22s pulled back and fired on Nihiscream, hitting him a few times. He fired at them, then transmoced and sped ahead into the city.The other F-22s followed, firing when they could and dodging around a large building. Nihiscream transmoced again, which slowed him down just enough that he ended up right in the centre of the group. He fired at one F-22, severly damaging it, and struck another one, sending it careening down into a building. He was hit several times more, mostly by Tanma himself, until he transmoced again and sped off, too fast to be caught.BACK BELOWJaller watched as Makutatron continued to beat on Matanui. The Matoran soliders had come up and were firing what they could at Makutatron, who shrugged the shots off. Galcee and Wipeout got close and fired, which Makutatron responded by swinging at them with his mace. Vakama Maximus and Blue Flame continued firing, with their shots doing something. Not much, but something."Move! Move!" Hewkii said as Makutatron got too close. They retreated."MY! ALLSHINY!" Makutatron said, throwing Matanui back down when he saw Jaller. He made his way towards the Matoran. Suddenly, Hydraxhide and Kopatchet returned, firing their weaponry, with Hydraxhide getting in front of Makutatron, taking his cannons, and at point blank sticking them into Makutatron's chest and firing. Makutatron fell, but got back up and back handed Hydraxhide. Kopatchet turned his one hand into a saw and swung at Makutatron, which was doing stuff until the saw broke."Oh." Kopatchet said, and then Makutatron spun and punched Kopatchet in the head, sending the medic back. Wipeout and Galcee tried to get the Matoran away, and Makutatron went for them again, but shots from Hydraxhide, Vakama Maximus and Blue Flame slowed him down. Falling, he got back to his feet and ran after the Matoran.Suddenly, a purple semi-truck drove down the street, transmoced into Dakama Prime, and taking his axe swung at Makutatron. The axe lodged itself into Makutatron's shoulder. Makutatron growled and removed it, hit Dakama with it and threw the axe away. Dakama got back to his feet and tackled Makutatron, the two rolling. The Matoran only just got into an alley, avoiding being crushed by the two. Makutatron threw Dakama off of him.Phoenix and Tahkan Metra flew by, shooting at Makutatron. Makutatron fell to his knees, turned, and transmocing his arms into his fusion cannon, shot down Tahkan Metra. Tahkan fell, transmoced and rolled, and Phoenix swooped down to hit Makutatron with his sword. Makutatron grabbed him and tore his phoenix-wing off, then hit Dakama Prime with the wing when the Autotoabot tried to get back to his feet.Vakama Maximus and Blue Flame fired for all they were worth, and now Makutatron was actually showing signs of damage. But he would not -he could not- stop now, so close to his prize."Run!" Galcee yelled, as she, Wipeout, Hewkii, Hafu, Jaller and the other Matoran soliders tried to run. Galcee and Wipeout fired at Makutatron, and the F-22s returned and fired their missiles at him. Makutatron was sent to the ground, but still he crawled after them."GIVE IT TO ME!" Makutatron roared, crawling after them. Wipeout shot Makutatron in the mouth, to no avail. I mean, some of Makutatron's teeth did fall out, but he didn't seem to care. World domination and all."I WILL KILL YOU ALL!" Makutatron roared again, almost reaching them. Blue Flame and Vakama Maximus still fired at him, but Makutatron ignored them. Victory, he thought, was at hand."NNOO!!"Suddenly Matanui Prime was there, picking up Makutatron in a bear hug. Makutatron roared, and in seconds he had removed himself from the hug and had thrown Matanui to the ground, just as the F-22s made another pass, firing at Makutatron, all the while most of the Autotoabots doing the same. Makutatron struggled against their shots, looking like he was about to die. But out of the smoke and fire he went forth, Matanui getting knocked down before him. Makutatron slammed his fist infront of Jaller, and Jaller was once more face-to-face with Makutatron."Jaller! Put it into my chest!" Matanui yelled, Makutatron's hand pushing Matanui's head into the ground."MIINEEE!" Makutatron roared "ALLSHINNYY!"Jaller didn't want to push the cube into Matanui's chest and kill him, but he didn't want Makutatron to get it either. Everyone was still shooting, yet still Makutatron persisted."Run boy!" Dakama Prime yelled to Jaller, pulling on Makutatron's shoulders, but Makutatron back handed him without even looking. Dakama stumbled back. "Get out of there!" a female voice yelled.Jaller looked and saw Hahli standing down the road, and beside her was Pohatubee, hooked into the back of a pickup. Pohatubee was desperately firing at Makutatron. Hewkii, Hafu and the other soliders had made a line in front of them, shooting at Makutatron's head. Wipeout and Galcee looked like they were going to run to Jaller."GO JALLER! GET OUT OF THERE!" Hahli screamed again.Jaller looked back at Makutatron's awful mouth, which was less than ten feet from him. He raised a hand above his terrifying head, clenched into a fist and was ready to crush Jaller."GIVE! IT! TO! MEE!" Makutatron said, about to bring his hand down on top of the Matoran. Jaller looked down momentarily and saw how torn apart Makutatron's chest was."You want it, you can have it!" Jaller yelled, his best possible one-liner for the moment, as he opened the AllShiny container, took the AllShiny in his hands and aimed it Makutatron's chest."Jaller, nnooo!" Matanui yelled, even as the AllShiny glowed red, then seperated and shot itself into Makutatron's chest, right into his spark."RREEAAAGGHHHH!!!!" Makutatron screamed, tearing at his chest as the AllShiny burned away in his spark.<You got the touch! You got the power!> Pohatubee’s radio sang out as Makutatron compulsed, and his body began to turn a bad shade of grey. All the red that had been on him, like his face for instance, turned grey, the parts of his armour that had been gray turned black, and looked all brittle and such. Makutatron made one gurgling noise, shivered, then his spark exploded, sending a pulse wave through the city. He fell on his back, right beside Jaller.And finally, Makutatron was dead.Matanui Prime, Dakama Prime, Vakama Maximus, Kopatchet, Blue Flame, Wipeout, Tahkan Metra, Phoniex Prime, Galcee, Hewkii, Hafu and the rest of the Matoran soliders all stood around Jaller and the body of Makutatron. Hydraxhide walked up, the halfs of Lezz's body in each hand."Matanui, we couldn't.." Hydraxhide said "We couldn't save him." Then he handed Lezz's remains to Matanui."Ah, Lezz. Your music was annoying, yet you will be missed just the same." Matanui said with a heavy heart. "There never was a more faithful first leutenant."Matanui handed Lezz's body to Dakama Prime, who took it solemnly. Matanui kneeled down and looked into the remnants of Makutatron's chest, where it still burned a dull colour."You left me no choice." Matanui said, reminescing of old times "brother." Reaching into Makutatron's ruined chest he pulled out a sliver of the AllShiny.Then Matanui Prime turned to Jaller. "Jaller, your bravery has ended Makutatron's tyranny.We are forever in your debt." Matanui said, "All of you, thank you." he said, looking at Hewkii and his soliders, then to his own Autotoabots."What about Metrutron? We can’t save our planet now that the AllShiny is gone." Dakama asked Matanui.Matanui thought for moment, then finally said "Metrutron isn’t our home now." "So we're living here now, huh?" Tahkan Metra said, not sounding too pleased.Jaller walked up and sat beside Pohatubee, staying away from Makutatron’s body. "So, you guys are staying here now? That's great!""Permission to respond, sir?" Pohatubee asked Matanui. Pohatubee speaking shocked Jaller so bad he fell off of the towtruck, and startled the Autotoabots."Permission granted, old friend." Matanui responded, so happy it took his mind off of Lezz."I wish to stay with Jally." Pohatubee said."It's Jaller." Jaller said."Got you!" Pohatubee said, lightly hitting him in the shoulder."Wait, so why can you talk now?" Jaller asked him. Hahli walked up and held Jaller's hand, and they waited for Pohatubee's answer."Yeah, my laser did wonders for him." Kopatchet said, poking at the stump where Vakama Maximus' right arm used to be."You never even looked at his vocal processor you lier! Now it's going to be Hdyraxhide or someone who has to fix Pohatubee's legs!" Vakama Maximus said."Shhh." Kopatchet said, "accidentaly" pulling something loose in the stub of Vakama Maximus' shoulder. Vakama Maximus watched as bolts and gears slid out of where his arm had been."Whoopsies." Kopatchet said."Anyways, I think the AllShiny may have fixed my vocal processors." Pohatubee said."Oh... Ok." Jaller said, not really liking that explanation.SOMEWHERE ELSEBarritax. Transraga. Sleedat. Daedulus. Enderth. Nihiscream. These were the only living Deceptikuta, out of the 15 that had come to get the AllShiny and rescue Makutatron, only 6 survived the final battle. Adding to that, most were badly damaged."Well, since mighty lord Makutatron is gone, I guess that makes me official leader of the Deceptikuta." Nihiscream said. Lord Nihiscream had a nice ring to it, he thought. Emperor Nihiscream sounded even better."Why can't I be leader? Can I be second in command?" Daedulus asked, walking up to Nihiscream. Nihiscream turned a hand into rockets and aimed it at Daedulus' face. Daedulus backed off."Honestly Nihiscream, you're not fit to lead a parade." Sleedat said."And you're not you're fit to insult me like that. So don't." Nihiscream said. "Besides, Makutatron would've wanted me to lead the Deceptikuta."No he wouldn't." Sleedat said."QUIET!" Nihiscream spat. Calming down a bit, he added "I'm going to find the Deceptikuta fleets, come back, and kill these Matoran. Until I return, you all must stay here and continue our conquest." And just like that, Nihiscream transmoced and flew away. "What a cool dude." Enderth said."Vhy am I talking like zis?" the head of Transraga said. Everyone ignored him.THE COLISEUMTuraga Vakama began his little announcment to the most important members of Metru-Nuian government."Gentlemen," he began, even though the proper term would be "gentle-toran", but anyways "the events that transpired this last week have opened our eyes. Now we know for sure that we are not alone in this universe. Steps are now being taken to prepare ourselves incase of more such events. First of all, Sector Six's information is to revealed to us, and to the Autotoabots. By the end of this month, Sector Six and all its divisions are to be dis-banded. The military, air force and navies are to be equiped with weaponry capable of harming Deceptikuta. The bodies of the Deceptikuta will be disposed of in the deepest place on our planet; the Pit, where hopefully the mutagen and pressure will destroy them, leaving no trace."One of the Matoran in the room nodded. "I like it. I like it." he said.AT A HILLSIDEThe Autotoabots, Dakama Prime, Phoenix Prime, Hydraxhide, Kopatchet, Tahkan Metra, Vakama Maximus (with a new arm!), Blue Flame, Galcee and Wipeout all stood at the edge of the hill, looking down on Metru-Nui, the Coliseum standing tall in the distance. Nearby Pohatubee was in vehicle mode, with Jaller and Hahli sitting and holding hands on his hood.Matanui stood a bit back, watching, then looked up to the sky."With the AllShiny lost, we cannot restore our home. Yet fate has yielded us a new reward. A place to call home. We may have defeated the Deceptikuta once already, but they will return. And we will fight them. We will protect this planet's people, the Matoran, who like us, have more to them than meets the eye. I am Matanui Prime, and I send this message to all surviving Autotoabots taking refuge among the stars. We are here, we are waiting."End transmission.ENDMTL
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Posted Feb 21 2012 - 04:18 PM

So when are we getting Transonicle 2 Re-Mastered?-ibrow
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