[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]Just a few criticisms: first of all, in the context-defining first panel, you give us all of the necessary information to establish the setting except for the day and month. It just seems a little odd to establish a setting and have the only time-related information be the time of day and the current year. Not a big deal, just a minor detail.[/font]
[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]Secondly, the first comic falls into a common trap: it's trying to be an introductory comic but it hardly gives the reader any introductory material. It feels like it should be the opening scene of a much longer comic. I don't know who these characters are, I don't know whether or not to root for them, and I hardly know what's going on. The first comic is humorless, actionless and honestly pretty boring. Now, I'm almost positive that the series will get better as time goes on, but the first comic has done nothing to hook me. [/font]
[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]With that said, you do get brownie points for putting your comics in .png form and for your use of speech bubbles and outlined text. Both of those things make the comic much more aesthetically pleasing. You also deserve props for your use of light and shadow to create atmosphere.[/font]
[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]I'm interested to see where this thing goes, and good luck on the future of the series![/font]
Edited by Shawn Spencer, Jun 06 2013 - 03:36 PM.