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  1. Quisoves Potoo
    From Sahmad's Tale: An implant makes sense. After all, if the Great Beings can make biomechanical creatures and masks with telepathy and dimensional-abilities, it seems plausible that they might make implants which can do the same.
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    Additionally, Rahi Control doesn't seem to work on intelligent Rahi. Not that we have seen, no This begs the question of whether or not Rahi Control is merely a very powerful form of low-level mind control.
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    This answers some of what's said to be unknown in the firstpost, but I don't have time to review & edit it right now. Thanks Bonesii. Sorry about not putting the quotes there in the first place. I shall not make that mistake again.
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    The story is well written, if not exceptionally so. It fares well enough until the Toa reach Spherus Magna, when the sense of reality fades. It's not that the quality of what is written decrease, for the most part, but that not enough is written, resulting in the reality of the story suddenly feeling shoddy, like a dream. As I implied above, there is an area in which the quality of the writing does decrease: Gresh's dialogue. To him, the Toa are strange biomechanical beings to whom he must explain the wholesale extermination of their universe's population, and yet he does so as if he is discussing something much more mundane and commonplace. This detaches the reader from the story. All in all, an interesting side-step, though I don't see how it can be satisfactorily resolved in five chapters. The last one will need to be astounding. Also, a bit of a nitpick, but the Great Beings were well aware of their creations sentience. The word you are looking for is "sapience." Finally, I would like to address this in regards to the canon of Bionicle. You state that you "thought the Spherus Magna Alternate Universe wasn't an accurate depiction of what would have happened had Mata Nui completed his mission, so I set out to write one myself." However, the whole story seems to rest on a flawed understanding of Marendar's function. "The Yesterday Quest" makes it quite clear: Your story has him cleaning up the Matoran universe, which he certainly was never intended to do. Another question: When does this story take place for Takanuva? Presumably, he's the Core Universe version. He seems to have lived through Makuta's takeover. And another: How does Mata Nui repair Spherus Magna in this universe? After all, Teridax is dead, and the second robot of Mata Nui's model was never built, unlike in the "Spherus Magna Alternate Universe." How does he achieve this without communicating with the inhabitants of Spherus Magna and consequently revealing his sapience? In conclusion, your story is an admirable and intriguing attempt, albeit with one considerable narrative flaw and rather poor characterization on Gresh's part.. However, I am confident that you can overcome these problems. I look forward to seeing how it ends. Best of luck.
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    That seems somewhat circular. They were set up to be killed because Teridax did not want them to discover that he had set them up to be killed? He killed them because he saw them as potential threats to his universal supremacy. If he could overthrow Mata Nui, one of them might do the same to him.
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    I think there's more to his morality than that. While he may not be up to the standards of the Toa Code, he seems to genuinely care about unity, duty, and destiny, three things that the Core Universe Teridax had little regard for. As for the Takanuva, they were threatening his life. Perhaps it's not a good thing that he's matter-of-fact about killing them, but is he really showing an outright disregard for life? I think that this exchange from "Reign of Shadows" is telling: He resembles the Core Universe Teridax in some aspects of his personality, but he seems to think himself rather different morally. He read Vultraz's mind, and has talked with Mazeka, so he likely knows a lot about his counterpart. So he has an idea of what the Core Teridax is like, and he seems to think that he's not as wicked. Perhaps he has deluded himself, but I think it's worth something.
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    So basically headshot means dead for real. Unless the killed being has already been killed and revived. So for a majority of characters, yes. I wonder, which characters were killed in such a way that their brains were not intact? *Checks BS01* Let's see: All who have been disintegrated or similarly killed: Possibly Lesovikk's team, Carapar, Ancient, the Matoran slaves who were knocked into Valmai, possibly Guardian (depending on whether or not Teridax crushed him underground.) I'm probably missing quite a few.
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    I'm not certain whether this is new information or not, but I haven't seen it anywhere else. Greg has recently given some clarification on the Red Star's functions. For a being to be revived, his AI needs to be downloadable, requiring his brain (Greg says head, but unless MU brains cannot be separated from their heads, I assume that he is referring to the brain) the first time he dies. If he dies again, and a sufficient record exists from his previous revival, he may be revived sine brain, albeit with a gap in memory. Confirmed via pages 309 and 311, fourteenth and eighth posts from the top, respectively.
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    I'm not certain whether this is new information or not, but I haven't seen it anywhere else. Greg has recently given some clarification on the Red Star's functions. For a being to be revived, his AI needs to be downloadable, requiring his brain (Greg says head, but unless MU brains cannot be separated from their heads, I assume that he is referring to the brain) the first time he dies. If he dies again, and a sufficient record exists from his previous revival, he may be revived sine brain, albeit with a gap in memory. Confirmed via pages 309 and 311, fourteenth and eighth posts from the top, respectively.
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    I put an end to all this gratuitous violence by planting a field of Acme Intsta-Grow! Oz-Poppies. You are all pacified. Sedative pollens have a way of doing that. I take the mask and leave in my handy-dandy Jaggarothian spaceship. My Ignika.
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    That assumes that only the Core Dimension has such a pocket dimension attached to it. It seems to me that parallel universes like the Kingdom and the Toa Empire, being versions of the Core Dimension that took a different path at one point in history, would also have the City of Silver pocket dimension and the Zone of Darkness. The Kingdom seems to me to be particularly strong evidence, as its history was for all appearances identical to that of the Core Dimension until the events chronicled in Downfall. Surely even something as seemingly minor as the residence, and prison, of the Zivon would have noticeable effects on history?
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    Actually, that brings up another question: does the Pit Mutagen mutate corpses? Given that Alt. Tuyet wasn't mentioned as mutated, I'm inclined to think not. If Tuyet died before she ended up in the mutagen, that is...although it wouldn't matter in terms of story, seeing as she was dead... Also, keep in mind the rate of the flooding of Karda Nui: it took a thousand years to make a swamp. Jovan could have landed and then been teleported out while the water was still a puddle. Or he could have landed on the Southern Continent. Silly me, I'd forgotten about the time period. And having looked at "Into the Darkness" again, I see that no-one remarks on her in any way which would suggest that she was mutated. So it's probably safe to say that Jovan's not mutated.
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    And let's not forget the Toa-izing beam fail-safe, which was, if I recall correctly, supposed to protect Matoran outside the robot, since they weren't supposed to be there. It seems odd to me that the Red Star could turn Jaller and company into Toa on Voya Nui, but can't revive anyone there. Back on the subject of Jovan: It occurs to me that if his corpse left Voya Nui, it seems likely it would have wound up in Karda Nui. Now, given the magnitude of the Great Cataclysm, I imagine that the Red Star was probably quite busy teleporting bodies up. And if Jovan's was in the center of the MU, it might take a while to get him. Now, given that Karda Nui was flooded with mutagenic waters, and if his body was indeed in Karda Nui, it seems to me that the mutagenic waters, if they do mutate cadavers (or bits of cadavers, given the fall to the bottom of Karda Nui) might actually get to his body and result in the revived Jovan being somewhat mutated. Just a thought. I have no idea of whether life is a requirement for mutagen to work. Come to think of it, the dead alternate Tuyet may poke a rather large hole in my idea
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    According to BS01 "The Noble version [of the Kadin] also allows the user to fly, but not as fast or as long as the Great version." So if he was near enough the volcano, he could reach a point where it was visible. And to clarify what I was saying, my hypothesis was that he flew to a point where he could safely view it, only for it to move rapidly towards him. Additionally, in my hypothetical scenario, he is investigating the possibility of an abnormally severe eruption, not a normal one that would only threaten those in the vicinity of the volcano. I think we could make much more educated guesses if only we knew more about Voya Nui's separation from the MU. I seem to recall a topic concerned with exactly how any living thing survived the trip, and another one concerning how the island left the robot. However, I don't recall any definite conclusions being made.
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    Maybe he wound on the Red Star because of his Kanohi. I imagine the scenario could something like this: *Ground starts shaking* Jovan, oh dear, something's wrong! I'll go see if it's Mount Valamai again. *Flys off towards the volcano.* "Oh my Ussal crab! The volcano's moving! No, the whole island! I've got to-" *Get's incinerated by a spout of lava, falls to the moving island, hits the tip, and bounces into the silver sea.* No Angel Bob, you're not a horrible person, there is something amusing about this. It probably helps because he's not human, even if he's very humanoid.
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    Certainly! Perhaps it could be done in the MNOG style? I'd be up for any script revision if necessary.
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    I think it is worth noting that Teridax did not have such an active role in the story until 2007. He appeared once in MNOG, briefly in Tales of the Masks, briefly in the Mask of Light ("let's play kohli! Whoops, we fused!") in Legends of Metru Nui mostly disguised as Dume save for the end, prominently in Time Trap, very discretely in 2006 (in his gaseous form,) prominently in 2007, in a major way at the very end of 2008, prominently in the 2009 story serials, and prominently in 2010. But what am I getting at? My point is that, of all his appearances, the ones which give the character depth are the ones in which he actually features for longer than an end of story boss-battle (except 2010, in which, for the most part, he took part in a boss-battle.) Even MNOG, which portrays him wonderfully, doesn't explore him much, merely showing his confrontation with the Toa. I think that the appearances for which he is criticized are the ones in which he merely serves the function of being the ultimate antagonist. Which, prior to Time Trap, is all he was. There was always some potential in the idea that he was Mata Nui's "brother." But this was not really used to any great effect, though the idea of him being a protector was used well in the case of the Toa Hagah's story (in which he never actually got any "screen time," if I recall correctly.) After Time Trap, whenever he made an appearance, with the exception of 2010, he was handled with some sensitivity, as a palpable being who nonetheless lacked morals, but possessed intelligence, wit, charm, and certain distinctive playfulness.
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    He wasn't a megalomaniac. According to Wikipedia, by way of the Corsini Encyclopedia of Psychology, Megalomania is "Is a psychopathological condition characterized by delusional fantasies of power, relevance, omnipotence, and by inflated self-esteem." Terridax did not consider overthrowing Mata Nui until the Barrakis' attempt, and even then, not on account simply of his power, of which he had plenty, but of how close the Barraki came. Nor did he have delusions of relevance. In fact, he didn't realize how relevant he was to his universe. And he certainly didn't think that he was omnipotent. As for self-esteem, I certainly values himself above others, so he fits that requisite, but I don't think that fitting only that one makes him a megalomaniac. He was arrogant, ambitious, and callous, but he never aimed for power unless he was certain he could achieve it. He was incredibly patient with his plans. My mind is not terribly clear right now, so this is not the most eloquent of arguments, but I think I make my point. Megalomaniacs can be interesting, but any proper discussion of Makuta's personaiity requires a proper understanding of his personality traits.
  19. Quisoves Potoo
    After my resurrection, I goes and gets me a cucumber. Life is good. Especially when its a ten-foot tall giant sentient Cucumber with eyes, a nose, and teeth like scimitars. I sic it on you. It finds you and devours you. Gulp. Gulp. GONE! Fortunately it had the sense not to eat the Ignika. I pick it up. My mask.
  20. Quisoves Potoo
    I use a teleportation device, purchased from the local hardware store, to transport your Moonship to a lifeless solar system. I then use an inter-stellar manipulator, made by yours truly using a handy-dandy pocket guide to making manipulators, to make the star there go supernova, destroying your Moonship. I then don a spaceship and retrieve the Ignika from the wreckage using my teleportation device. My mask.
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    But why are you going after Drakmanka? He doesn't have the Mask. A pan-dimensional entity materializes, looking rather like a sheepdog right now, and sends you to the Land of Fiction for your cruelty. It then bellows in triumph, leveling the hills in which Toa Smoke Monster currently resides. While he is dazed from the experience of the hill on which he was standing crumbling, I take the mask from him. My Ignika.
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    I reclaim the mask and pick you up too. I fetch my Spear of Fusion from my Capsule, and proceed to fuse you to the Ignika. Old hat, I know, but a man can't be bothered all that much when he's relaxing in New Wala Wala. Can a Kanohi function when it's made out of wood and protodermis? I don't know. And seeing as I'm on vacation, I feel no incentive to go to the nearest computer and look up the answer. Not that I'm lazy, I'm simply enjoying my Thoreau moment. My mask/Toa Onaku.
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    A booming voice welcomes you all to the Celestial Toyroom. The speaker, who identifies himself as "the Celestial Toymaker," points out that all of you who have stolen the mask since post #1928, with the exception of Toa Onaku, have lost the game, the objective of which was to resist the allure of the Ignika and the power used to obtain it. Immediately, Ringabell, Toa Smoke Monster, Drakmanka, Kitteh Wubbins, Toa_of_Regret, Fekoro, and Kopaka's Kool Kompanion are turned into wooden dolls, doomed to stay in the Toymaker's realm and serve as decorations for his various games. I soon turn up in my type 150 Time Capsule, and the Toymaker materializes. He is quite imposing, dressed as a Chinese Mandarin, and demands that I play Toa Onaku and a fellow calling himself "Jack Sprat" in a game. I suggest Monopoly, and thus we begin a surreal, life-sized version of the well known cut-throat pro-trust boardgame. Fortunately, I have a miniature infinite probability drive hidden in my coat pocket, and I soon have hotels on both Board-Walk and Park Place. As soon as possible, both of my opponents land on both those properties, then do so again, and again, until they are bankrupt. Toa Onaku is turned into a ventriloquist's dummy, and Jack Sprat is revealed as a puppet of the Toymaker. I claim the Ignika as my prize, and as the Toymaker considers the next game, I suggest "Hide and Seek." The Toymaker agrees, and I flee into my Time-Capsule with the Mask, and dematerialize. I land my Time-Capsule in New Wala Wala, where I relax, listening to the cries of the Speckled Howling Kiwis performing their mating calls. The Mask is mine.
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    Would there really be that many more entries? Tell me, as forum moderator, how many members who entered the contest were active in this forum? I understand that have the final word on the matter, I am simply making one last (probably) futile attempt to persuade you otherwise. I apologize if I am being annoying.
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    Seeing as the judging is indefinitely delayed, might new entries be accepted until you finish your story? After all, the point of a deadline is to allow for judging, but since we have no definite idea when judging will be, the deadline seems pointless. I understand that the judges may be busy with other things, but then, since the final judgement is on hold, the judges could take their time. I suspect that most people who want to submit stories have already done so, which leaves a few (I think) newcomers to add to the collection. This may not be feasible, but I think it's worth asking about.
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