Takhamavahu

Wow. That came out even better than I expected. That's a great story, Exitium and good luck in the polls.The following comes from an authorized Contest Judge: No inaccuracies or errors were found in your entry. Unless another judge or member finds a problem later, your entry is likely to go on to the polls.

It is my opinion that in this story, the confidence with which Mimic handles himself is inconsistent with what we know about him and what the story says about him. If you'd like to take the opportunity to rework some of his dialogue to better fit his characterization, I think it would make for a stronger character, a better fit for what we know of him in established canon and a better chance of winning the contest. If you're perfectly comfortable with him as he is, then you are welcome to leave it unchanged and I'll approve it.The problem with the lightstones wasn't physically how do you turn one off, it was that they just seem to go out for some reason. Did the Dark Hunters sneak up and put them out? Do they have a weapon that can shut them off? Lights don't just go off when bad guys show up and, to me at least, it wasn't clear what actually happened there.Your current "someone doused the torches" is better. That works for me, but if you'd like to clarify further, you're welcome to.Those are my reccomendations, but they're not really mandatory fixes, so as soon as you post either saying you're going to make changes or you're comfortable as it is, I'll approve it.

As an authorized Contest Judge, I have read and judged this entry:Memory by ExitiumI see problems with this entry.Not a lot. just a couple of little things to clean up.

The following comes from an authorized Contest Judge: At least one inaccuracy or error has been found in your entry. After reading this judge post, you are authorized to edit your entry to fix these errors. After editing to fix these things, please post in the entry topic saying what you changed.This one is really good. You really did your homework on the little canon details and there are only a few loose ends to clean up.I love the sympathetic portrayal of Nidhiki. Too often in BIONICLE, the characters are either good or evil and there aren't nearly enough stories that look at it from another perspective. You've done that wonderfully in Nidhiki's justification of his betrayal and in his hopes for the future.How were the lightstones doused all at once? I can't find a source which specifies how a lightstone is turned on or off, but if the dark hunters needed the lights off to attack the village, I doubt they were stealth enough to go turn them all off one by one.Even if the Toa later figured out that the Kanohi Dragon was released by the Dark Hunters, they wouldn't have known at the time that they were called.Metru Nui didn't have its own Toa team untill the Toa Mangai, but they did frequently call on Toa from abroad, such as the Toa who defeated the Kanohi Dragon it's first time.Mimic's involvement in the Dark Hunters is a tragic story born out of love, and I think they way he talks in this story sounds like he's gotten too much into the rhythm of Dark Hunter life. He sounds like he enjoys being violent and aggresive they way most Dark Hunters do, but personally, I think given what we know about him, that attitude doesn't suit his character. I'd have played him as more sad and resigned, personally. What he says in your story reflects this, but (maybe it's just me) I think they way he says it and the way he talks and acts, do not.The Les Miserables quote is lovely, and if you'd like to put it alongside your entry, that's fine, but it does not belong as part of the entry itself.And I thought I'd found another, bigger problem, but it was actually a mistake on BS01!

As I understood it, When they fell in the lava, the Mask of Life, on a whim, decided to transform Fenrakk because that would be interesting to see what happens.

I don't think we've got anything on Nidhiki prior to the Kanohi Dragon.

Matoran absorb energy from food through their hands. They do not injest it.The first matoran were built by the Great Beings. Since Mata Nui's journey began, their population is maintain by being built by Mata Nui or Artahka. The process for this is a secret the Bionicle story team resolved never to reveal, but Matoran do not reproduce sexually or on their own in any way.Matoran can change masks as easily as you can change your hat, but they cannot operate for very long without one. If they go for too long without a mask they become weak and eventually comatose.

Thanks! Glad to help. I look forward to it.

Sorry it's such a late reply (I'm working in excess of full time these days) but by the time the contest is underway, I won't be, so I'm more than willing to judge. I've been a solid Bionicle fan for it's entire run, and I know my stuff inside and out. I was a very active member through BZPower's long heyday and wish still to be in our new era, so If you need a passionate, knowledgable, educated judge with a sharp eye for canon, continuity and grammar, you've got one!

That first question isn't really an opinion think. count 'em up and see how many are humanoid. It's much more objective.

AT HIS MIGHTIESTWith the addition of Artahka's new Adptive Armour, no terrain, no climate, no wind or wave will ever be his master.Tahu Nuva emerges to complete his greatest mission and fufil his destiny.For the art contest, FLASH FIRE - CHARACTER DESIGN CONTESTThis version of Tahu has been written of and featured in prose story, but it's never been seen in an official image, so I had to fill in the creative gaps myself.While the comics make it look like he just wanders around in swamp form all day, we've been assured time and again that this is a limitation of the business behind BIONICLE comics. The Toa's Adaptive Armour, in default forme, is said to actually resemble their original Nuva armour and masks, but (I'm afraid I don't have the Greg quote handy) in the colour scheme of their 2008 sets. We don't have an official image of that, and we will probably never get one, but its pretty simple. 2002 Tahu Nuva in 2008 Mistika colours. All that's really ambiguous is the arrangement of those colours.My first instinct of what that would look like would be to replace the red on Tahu Nuva with the darker "metru" red, and the orange with silver. But when I drew it, it was so... bland and dull. So instead I compared the construct of the Mistika set with the 2002 set. The mistika set had silver for the main parts of the arms and legs and a silver body, red feet and mask, black ankles, hands and every other of that particular piece, and red throughout on pieces which didnt seem to have an equivalent in the 2002 set. So, imagining the exact build of the 2002 set I applied the colours. Red feet, red mask, silver body, arms and legs, black hands and every other of that piece (hips, shoulders). and that wasn't quite enough red. The chest armour on the 2002 set didn't seem to have an equivalent on the Mistika set, so I made that red because it looked good and, for a fire guy, there wasn't alot of red on him so far. although the upper-arm armour on the mistika set is silver, silver didnt look any good on the nuva shoulders, and there still wasn't enough red, so I made those red too. when i looked at it (just a rough doodle at this point, it looked awesome. For the record, though you cant really see them in this drawing, I imagine the gears in the shoulders and on the back are black, the neck is black, the stoppers around the gear akles are black, the eyes are lime, like the mistika set, and the face under the mask is dark grey, like the metru head on the mistika set. The hands and those pieces are the 2008 redesign of the part (even though i hated that redesign, this makes is consistent; makes it look like this model could be a set that came out in 2008) and the 3x and 5x length plus rods are light grey instead of black, as is consistent with sets at the time.This entire thought process actually took place a long time ago, and I drew up designs for tahu, as well as unique equivalents for each of the other toa nuva. This drawing in particular, however, was done just for this contest.In this drawing, I made the hand pieces into actual hands, and filled in some of the lego-y holes in his arms and such, but other than that, left it pretty set-looking, which is how I like it, rather than stylized or movieish.Also new, is the fact that the flame in his hand is blue. I don't mean to imply that all his fire is blue now. Hes the toa of fire, he can make it whatever colour he wants, I'm sure. But Where as the old Tahu was bright red and orange, conveying an elemental, primal relationship to his fire powers, the adaptive armour in a darker red, and conservative silver instead of a secondary colour, to me looks more controlled, proffesional, and disciplined. It's a more mature Tahu than he once was. The blue fire looks better with this, I think, because it looks more artificial. Slick and man-made like an indoor grill. something the iron chef would use, to contrast the old tahu, who was hot-tempered and lived on a tropical island where wood burns red and orange and yellow. It shows a matured controll over his power, that in the palm of his hand he can make a cleaner burning flame.Even if I had access to the kinds of digital art programs and things to make a clean professional looking portrait, I don't think I'd use it. I like it when it's all done by hand. Its more real and honest. The spirit of the contest was "quick and dirty" and I did it just so."Tahu himself may be slick and clean, but his world and his mission is not, and the style of the art reflects that. Quick, dirty and scanned at Staples.Artistic justifications and long explainations side, Here he is, a mature Tahu Nuva, facing his greatest task more powerful and in control than ever before.Full Size mageBecause scanners are weird and confusing, a drawing which was 6 inches tall on paper came out huge in the scan.Your comments are appreciated.If you'd like to support this piece in the contest, you can try out this swell banner:Yo can also vote for it. That'd be nice too.And if you're interested, here is the Brickshelf Gallery here is the Brickshelf Gallery where I put the image, along with the old drawings I did, back when I came up with the colour arrangements.

Like i said before, the original drawing on paper is six inches from head to foot.The scanner made it much larger and, presumably to cut off as much empty whiteness as possible, tilted it.If you're going to cut it out anyway, the tilt doesnt matter I guess. And as long as it's six inches tall when it prints, you'll know that's how big it was meant to be. Let me know if there's anything I can do to fix the size if it's a problem.TakhamavahuTOATAHU NUVA (adaptive armour default)Entry URLTopicOn Brickshelf

What I'm worried about is it being too big, but usually when i print it again its pretty much the same size as the original.

My Tahu is about 6 inches on paper, but normally when I scan something, it turns up bigger than the original. should I just leave it as is?

It looks cool and all, buhy would they use black on the soulders and abdomen when green would have been just as easy and look better?and as usual, they don't care what the back looks like because you dont see it in any of the promotional pictures.

The Lord of the Rings has big scary monsters. Firefly has a Psychologist with Benefits.

There is one.

can you attach one half of the helmet to a Toa head to make a mask or is the + joint slanted?

Elemental Powers in a Toa aren't an inherent force in nature; they were designed subjectively by the Great Beings. They felt like making Ice and Water seperate because they thought their prctical uses were different enough however related they may be in nature. A Toa's body isn't designed to recognise ice as frozen water, so the elemental powers don't cross over.

The Legend Reborn and the TV ads are not the same.

This has been discussed at length before, as have all the other missing prefixes. We won't know until it comes up in the story.

They call them new if they've never been on Teletoon before, even if they've already played elsewhere.

Zoom waaaaay in. It's definately a Huna.

i always liked the original helmets best, and it looks like that means the glatorian heads are back too!

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