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  1. If it's a named character, probably not (that's been the answer for other characters so far, so I assume that it extends to your character as well). If it's an unnamed character that hasn't appeared in the story, however, then you can.
  2. It is known that lazy Matoran who sat on rock in Karzahni would be turned into statues. However, do you think that this applies to sand (specifically, a Matoran sitting on the shore of Karzahni)?
  3. Matoran can either eat or absorb energy from things through their hands, I believe. I think that they need to do that about once a month.The Matoran creation process has not been revealed, but it is known that that could be achieved on Metru Nui (I think that machinery was required and that it could be found on Metru Nui, but I could be wrong; also, it might have been possible to create Matoran in other places, I'm not sure) and I think that they are unable to create Matoran on Spherus Magna unless they move the machinery from the robot or create new machinery.They can change Kanohi, as others have said (they are magnetically attached), but it has to be done quickly because Matoran will enter a coma (or something similar to a coma) if they don't have a Kanohi on for too long (although a new Kanohi might be able to be placed on a comatose Matoran). I think that masks don't always fit on all Matoran's heads, though.
  4. Thanks, bonesiii.If the red doesn't match up with what bonesiii said, go with the latter. I think that a potential solution would be to replace Mezeka with Nidhiki: he lived on the peninsula, and he has been shown to be corruptible. Also, Mazeka was a bit rash in this story and we know that Nidhiki learned to strike from the shadows as a Toa, so that might be an interesting contrast.
  5. As an authorized Contest Judge, I have read and judged this entry:"A Matter of Perspective" by TheSkeletonMan939I see problems with this entry.I wasn't sure about all of my corrections, so do you think that you can look over the red ones, bonesiii (I asked him to just fix the other ones)?
  6. The following comes from an authorized Contest Judge: At least one inaccuracy or error has been found in your entry. After reading this judge post, you are authorized to edit your entry to fix these errors. After editing to fix these things, please post in the entry topic saying what you changed.Good job! There are some errors besides the one that TLH mentioned, though. Here are plot ones (and I'll put grammar ones here too if they are in the same passages, otherwise they are further down). Things that I'm not entirely sure about I'll put in red, so please don't change anything in red until I let you know that you can (because I'm going to check with bonesiii on those things). Also, please remember that I'm trying to be very thorough and that that doesn't mean that I dislike your entry, and that although the list is long, it has many trivial items:- I don't know if the Matoran knew that Mata Nui created the Makuta, so perhaps another research topic involving Mata Nui would be better.- I don't think that the Matoran ever referred to Gorast by name in Brothers in Arms, so I think that Gorast shouldn't ever be mentioned by name here, either. People might still be able to identify her without her being mentioned by name, and a more detailed description of her originally might clarify that a bit.- You mention faces at least twice: I think that it's a bit unclear as to whether or not facial expressions can be seen when you are wearing a Kanohi, so in the first one you might want to change that to describing how the rest of Mazeka's body looks. It might also be good to change "face" to "head" in the second one (but I don't think that it matters too much).- Your description of distance is a bit odd in the following quote: A bio is about four and a half feet, which is about the same as a few steps. Maybe if you change it to "a bit more than a bio away" it would work better.- You use the term "firespitter," but that is a Chutespeak (or Treespeak) word, so Mazeka probably wouldn't use it.- There are two things in this passage: The first one is that the "into" in the first sentence should probably be an "at," because the stab missed. Also, I don't know if they have nervous systems, so maybe if you word it another way it would be better.- You also mention stomaches multiple times, and I don't know if they have stomaches (they can both absorb energy and eat, but the latter doesn't necessarily mean that they have stomaches). If you change "stomach" to something else not describing internal body parts, it might be better.- You sort of imply that Toa are killers here: Maybe if you change "Makuta or a Toa" into "hero" it would work better. Also, I think (someone else might correct me with this) that there should be a dash at the end of that quote without a space in front of it instead of a hyphen with a space to show that Naho is being cut off, so it would look like this: -The last canon one: Toa Stones aren't made of Toa Power, although they do contain it. Maybe if you change "what it's made of" to "what's in it" it would work better.Now, for grammar and clarity ones:- The spacing should be different here: I think it should be - It seems like you're writing in American English, which means that some punctuation goes inside of the quotation marks (it's a common mistake). Also, you should use double quotation marks instead of single quotation marks (there are other contextual rules, but they don't really apply here). So, here are some things that you should fix: You should put the period inside of the last quotation mark. Change the single quotation marks to double quotation marks and put the period inside of the last quotation mark. Change the single quotation marks to double quotation marks.- In British English, entities like groups or organizations are treated as if they are plural nouns (e.g. "the group are"), but this isn't the case in American English. So, in the following quote, change "them" to "it": - Here, change "find" to "fight." Also, since the machine is important, it would probably be good to describe it in more detail when it is first discovered so readers don't forget about it and become confused later on: - Here, it might be good to change "quote" for another word like "line" because it is a bit awkward: - "Him" should be "his" here: - It might be better if you remove the "ow" from here: - I think that you should add a comma after the "hey." Also, the passage might make more sense if you indicate that he turns his head when he points to the wall: Please don't be discouraged. Many of these are very minor and can be fixed quickly.
  7. I don't think that these are BIONICLE names, as one is the name of a star (Deneb, aka Alpha Cygni) and one is definitely derived from the name of a star (Arctur from Arcturus, aka Alpha Boötis). However, it does seem that Greg's inspiration for these characters could have come from the GBs, as you said.
  8. Odina would also remain hidden because visitors would not be able to leave the island (because they would be dead or for other reasons) or they would not wish to speak of their discovery out of fear of Dark Hunter retaliation. Also, passing Odina doesn't guarantee that you will see the base, as, in addition to the other potential visual obstructions that fishers64 stated, it's on a plateau. However, if travellers did see the base, they wouldn't have necessarily known that it was the Dark Hunters': I doubt that they had a big sign announcing the groups' presence.
  9. Although Mutran created them, they were named after Tridax because they were based on an idea of his.From the BS01 Tridax Pod page:
  10. I think that that's a good idea: like you said, maybe if it's an official topic people will be more careful about constantly restating things.
  11. From BIOsector01's Miru page:
  12. I'm planning on writing about Naho. Would it be okay if I describe her past, even though it has not been discussed in canon? Also, the antagonist does not have to be just one character, correct?
  13. Some alternate banners for the contest: [url=http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=5919][img=http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Infra-Red/Random/S-and-T-7-Banners/sandt7notext.jpg][/url] [url=http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=5919][img=http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/Infra-Red/Random/S-and-T-7-Banners/sandt7text.jpg][/url]Gallery (with a credit file)Also, should I add the entry period closing date to the calendar?
  14. Infrared

    Banners

    Thanks! Matoro represents all named dead characters; the image is also used in bonesiii's banner. As I doubt that more comments will be left, it appears that we have a tie!
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    Banners

    I made several banners for the new S&T contest. Which one do you think is the best one? Gallery Just leave a comment saying which one you'll like best. I'm not sure how many comments will be left here, so I'll determine the maximum number of comments when I see how popular this is. In the end, I'll move the winning banner to Brickshelf (and maybe the others, too) and I'll remove the files from BZPower.
  16. If you wouldn't mind.... Thanks! I believe he controlled the southernmost portion of the known MU (so none of or very few of the Southern Islands; the Barraki didn't conquer very many and thought that they were not useful strategically)....
  17. It seems like there is potential here for some interesting stories, both because of the fact that it allows for further exploration of events that have not been elaborated upon in great detail and because it allows us to see events in new perspectives. I'm definitely planning on entering this; also, if it would be helpful and positions are still available, I would be willing to help judge entries.
  18. Infrared

    My Bionicle Story

    That shouldn't be a problem at all. Sorry if my previous comment sounded brusque....
  19. Infrared

    My Bionicle Story

    If it is in fact going to include the first item listed above, then you should not put it on BZPower: Source: BZPower Rules & Guidelines
  20. Would it be okay if I do as Zorrakh did and add a Lone and Level Sands banner to my signature?

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      Certainly! All support is appreciated. ^_^

  21. Well, technically, gravity and mass are different.... That is a good explanation, though.
  22. I believe that they can find indirect evidence of its existence by looking for the particles that it decays into. To see if the particle is a Higgs boson or not, the mass of the particle is compared to its theoretical mass. Also, it has to reach a statistical confidence of five sigma for it to be officially classified as a discovery (which means that it has a three in fifty thousand chance of being a coincidence, I believe), so efforts to guarantee that the particle is in fact the Higgs boson are definitely taken.
  23. Prior to the Pit, we know very little about the Barraki. It is possible that they had Kanohi powers, but all we know for certain is that they are the only members of their species that we have seen in the story (as Cederak said), so it is possible that they could have wielded Kanohi powers. The only real thing we know about any of their species is that Ehlek's species lived in the waters around Zakaz and all of the members of the species were given Tri-Talons by the Order of Mata Nui, and we know roughly what they looked like (like Ehlek without his spines, or at least that's what Ehlek looked like). Also, we know that Takadox had powers over hypnosis, but they were much weaker than they were after his exposure to Pit Mutagen: So, to sum up, the only powers that we know of is that Takadox had weak hypnosis powers and Ehlek had his Tri-Talons (if you classify that as a power).
  24. Going back and rereading BS01, it looks like I forgot that Krakua also told Lesovikk about Karzahni, which then prompted him to head to the Pit. I think that it would be possible to figure out when Krakua told Lesovikk this and how long it took Lesovikk to get to the Pit if the Lesovikk's Hiatus contest was still going (part 3 of the contest allowed participants to write about Lesovikk's adventures en route to the Pit, if I recall correctly), but since the contest has indefinitely been put on hiatus ( ), the timing of those events isn't clear. Depending on where Lesovikk was in the Matoran Universe, it could have taken from days to several weeks (let's say around three to four weeks for this purpose, I can't recall any source saying that travel took any longer than that) for him to reach the Pit, and assuming that Krakua informed Lesovikk of this after the aforementioned one to two week-long training period, it's possible that Krakua became a Toa before the Inika and it is also possible that he became a Toa afterwards. There are so many variables that can't be accounted for (such as how long it took Krakua to get to Lesovikk [we can assume that Lesovikk traveled via his Sky Sled, the speed of which we can estimate, but we're not sure how Krakua got to Lesovikk, so we can't guess the speed at which he traveled], stops for food if the trip was three or four weeks long [or shorter if Krakua or Lesovikk hadn't absorbed energy for a while, or none at all if they absorbed energy just before the trip], etc.) that mathematically deriving which of the Toa became Toa first with any accuracy would not be feasible, but I suppose ignoring those variables (and potentially reaching an incorrect conclusion) I think that Krakua might be a slightly more likely candidate than the Toa Inika, although I am not entirely certain of that (I tried to test it mathematically to derive that result, but some of the time periods used were not very feasible and I tested by week, not by day; however, I think that a similar result could have been derived without if I fixed those inconsistencies, although I am uncertain).
  25. Krakua communicated to Vakama through a Kratana, and wasn't a Toa until around 1,000 years afterwards.As far as I'm aware, there isn't a set answer to this question. Krakua's first appearance as a Toa was slightly less than one year ago (in the BIONICLE story), while the Toa Inika first appeared slightly over one year ago. If I recall, 2006 took place over the course of around a month, so I'd assume that they spent around a week or two actually on Voya Nui. I'd also assume that Toa Krakua would only appear on official Order of Mata Nui business after he was a competent Toa, and considering the fact that he was part of the Order of Mata Nui, they would probably make him master his powers over a short period of time (maybe one of two weeks). So, I'd guess that the Toa Inika became Toa first, albeit only barely beforehand, although I'd guess that they were Toa Mahri by the time that Krakua became a Toa.
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