Toa Deserok

Shading, some more shading, then much more shading.... after that add a little extra shading: this is usually what I normally do with my pieces, and they still do not turn even half as good as this. I mean seriously, what type of pencil or pen did you use to shade or ink with this because I can only do so much with a sketching utensil. I am overtly impressed -- actually amazed that one could actually create a sense of depth with use of such heavy inking.You sir have a gift... and I have only amazement at it. It is amazing there is such concept artistry as this for Pokoro-Productions (is that supposed to be like the BNG project, or something else?). I can say after that is you have an eye for great detail and proportions in this piece. And besides that, the shading is the most suburb part of this.And you said this was done in 2 hours? Did you do this in literally two straight hours or did you take two hours over a long period of time to make this? Really, it doesn't matter, for this is too awesome to pass down.Keep it up, since this is already reach the stars and higher. So keep shooting, cus' you may actually land a strong career in illustrating. -Toa Deserok

Actually, now that I think about it, what is your main story arch supposed to be about? I only now thought of it and am still guessing between the matoran's artistic story of toa or the actual Takanuvia backstory? -Toa Deserok

Lobo, with all his teeth remaining before Superman beats him for stealing Lois' Jewelry.

All I can say is that your artwork is getting better and Takanuvia is looking finer each time. Anyway, good to see you are back... from being back. Just curious, any chance for cameo's at all in the uncolored comics? I wouldn't mind a spot. -Toa Deserok

"But it has skulls"LOL. Really fun comics at times, though I am curious... are we going to see any fully colored comics in the future or is it easier without it? I'm not demanding but just curious. Otherwise, it is coming rather nicely in pace and mood. -Toa Deserok

I think I read in the rules that you cannot repost completed stories and you just link them, unless I misunderstood thatI don't particularly care for reviews, i just wanted to make sure there was a stable link for everyone who was interested in reading itDon't worry about stable linkage... it works quite fine. I'm actually glad to see a link up... it means there is still interest alive in it. All I can say for now is I'm glad to see the chronicled adventures of Tachi and Komas. Nice to have it back, Lady Kopaka. :biggrin:It's a pity that we can't edit our works though. I'd really be interesting to see a second helping of older stories. But then again, some things are better left undisturbed, for the works are better remembered this way.-Toa Deserok

Glad to see that you're back. Hopefully your free time should be expanded with Christmas Break already going on.

What do you mean edged? If you're referring to the dark surrounding, it's meant to be dark like a pit. It is smoothened like you're looking into the mind's eye, into your memories or darkest recesses of your nightmares (ok, that is kinda weird and freaky, but its supposed to jive that sort of sense). I can see where you guys go with the eerie part, but nothing else? Maybe proportions, or something like that? If you want, there is an uncolored scan of it here so you can better outline it without the colors.-Toa Deserok

A little taste of what I plan for my fan epic, entitled Sins of Our Forefathers. The picture was all done by hand, gimp, and word's paint. It took a few days and several hours to get this accomplished in total, sometime during the summer when I worked on this. Overall, I feel a strong emotion behind this piece when I look at, and I like that with my pieces. I feel it is an accomplishment when I manage to retain vibrant works like this. I hope this is with others, 'cus I'm already proud to have done it.If you'd like to see the story behind this, you can click on the "spoiler" tag below to reveal the info about it:This picks off where Disgrace Amongst the Skrall left (sort of), but it follows a different approach rather than by the view of an ex-Skrall. Now it follows the story of lamentation and fulfillment by Padelean, a female Skrall recently afflicted by amnesia (loss of memory of her past self), but she still remembers bits and pieces of her troubled life.... especially the pain brought by it. Now she struggles to find her identity, as well as find Malduki in time to save him.Otherwise, enjoy and comment on it.-Toa Deserok

I decided to have Kiina in there originally since there were only a few glatorian that could have the canon freedom of exploration (since they weren't discussed in winter 09 storyline). I originally set her to be a love interest in story, but it later fit for her just to be a close friend figure of Malduki's (the Skrall). As for Malduki's character, it is supposed to be a sort of black sheep toned story, since I don't think even the Mongolians could be without sympathetic soldiers. You should at least expect sympathy within any small proportion of an army, since they still are human in a way. Good thing to. Enjoy the epic while you're at it. As for the coloring, I don't know how to make it more complex when I have only Gimp to color with. I'm actually wondering if somebody has advice over that sort of thing. I could have gone with the uncolored, but I figured text was better with more color to stand out. Either way, thank you for all the comments and criticisms. I'm definitely hoping to make more of these, but could afford more advice like this so I can do better the next time around. -Toa Deserok

That's the one thing that I find kinda ridiculous about some of the topics. They clearly need to spend hours one pixelations just to get the sprite for one character, but they could just easily draw a comic strip within the same time and scan the picture through. This isn't to hate on their work (they work REALLY hard on them), it's just that they get kinda repetitive when almost 99.9% of comic users on BZP refer to nothing to hand drawn comics and only do pixelations. As for the font, I've mostly just used windows for my fonts. I suppose that I could try looking through web sites for different fonts. Otherwise, I've never had a problem with them. Thank you otherwise for the comment and the criticism. I hope there is more advice for me if I should ever do another mosaic. -Toa Deserok

_ _ WARNING: Comic is a big file, so you might wait a little bit. _ Uncolored and unedited comic down below with no words _ Ever since the Great Abyss (BZP's downtime), many of us had been waiting patiently for BZP's return and had taken up several hobbies and interests to keep us occupied since them. Some of us decided to make more stop motions, some decided to brush up on their artistic skills, and some decided to stay in contact with other members for talks about normal, everyday life. I happened to do all that and more while on my free time, and this is one of the results. . . With this being a mosaic, I decided to format it in a short story format so that anyone can jump right into the comic and get a general assessment of the character and the plot at the same time. It took me several weeks, buying week's time to get it painted when it only took a few days to physically draw. . . Based on my epic Disgrace Amongst the Skrall, it should be an interesting read. Hopefully, you guys should have your appetite for story telling only part filled, otherwise here is a link. Otherwise, enjoy and comment on it. -Toa Deserok

Issue One: ReentryPages1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, and 9. (warning: the pages will contain some blood and deathly violence within them, but I'll try not to be excessive with it). I'll have more chapters and pages up, but for now I'm just starting off with bits and pieces of the story for now. If any of you don't know what's going on, don't worry. This is a sequel to my epic, Disgrace Amongst the Skrall, which you can view down on my Signiture below. Otherwise, there isn't much I can give to you except that Padelean, the main character, is trying to rediscover herself. Enjoy and comment. -Toa Deserok

Very interesting, beginning with the posing and the coloring your artwork holds a lot of variety in delivery. Personally, I like the first one the most. Something about the posing mixed with the elemental feeling you give him/her in blending with the night. I actually swore that was Lariska for a second there because of the color scheme and small dagger. Nice job nonetheless.

Will be nice to get into Christmas Break soon. Can finally go to gift-giving and family time-spending. Away from all of the school work and high-school everyday life, it should go pretty well. And now to enjoy snow when I can. Speaking of gift giving, there was an art piece that I made of you, Lady K., as well as several others. I figured you were kinda busy with some things before this, but you can check it out now if you'd like. The topic should be right here. I am not trying to solicitate, but merely show that it is available now for viewing. Hope you enjoy it. -Toa Deserok

Just one thing about the remaining entries: would you be able to do one thing with the remaining entries if not include them in the Glitch Sequel and story? I'm just curious about this. Man, even with two tries, you don't always hit the target. Congrats to all the winners anyhow and all the rest of the contestants, you all did a great job! -Toa Deserok

Yeeaaaahhhhh! Now this is going to get good. -Toa Deserok

Thank you. I think your character entry is also a bit interesting, being a part soulless being part computer virus.... interesting concept. I wonder if only one of these characters can be choosen or if two or three are allowed in? -Toa Deserok

And here is my other MOC, either Epic or fan based: The MOC Name: Tredxx Species: unknown Job/employment: Merchant/ Traveler History: Once a former Dark Hunter, Tradxx was renowned for his swiftness and cunning, as well as for his seemingly limitless fighting skills as an assassin. Trained by Lariska and Ancient, he knew the inside business of the Dark Hunters unlike many beings. During his time in the Dark Hunter's ranks, he enjoyed the missions that he was assigned and loved the rewards and treasures given to him from them. Mission after mission, he always got the assignment done, but his thirst for blood and riches always dwindled with every mission past. Still, his fame and reputation spread throughout the Dark Hunters, and he couldn't just leave with such reputation to earn and bear. As soon as the Toa/Darkhunter War began, he began to open his eyes. He thought that it was the blood and the riches that made him pursue his missions, but he realized it was the beauty of his destinations that made him fascinated and the journey he took to get there. He realized this as he gazed eyes upon the beauty of Metru Nui, with its boundless wonders, and the liveliness that its people gave it. What beauty that held Metru Nui before was taken from him as he witnessed the Dark Hunters' brutal invasion of Metru Nui. As districts upon districts were sacked, burned, or desecrated by the Dark Hunters, many matoran could be seen screaming and fleeing if they weren't already killed or captured. He was horrified by this, not only by the act of destruction brought about by the Dark Hunters, but also by the death he himself, caused in the past. In past missions, he would only assassinate a certain target or too, but not set all Karzhanii loose on a people or city. He had gone mad from this realization, turning on Lariska when the toa arrived (led by Lhikan) to combat them, and evened the odds for them by providing valuable intel on the Dark Hunters tactics. He had fought with the toa to the end of the war, when Toa Nidiki was revealed to betray the toa and the Dark Hunters were captured within an ambush gone wrong. The war was over. Toa Lhikan, most grateful of his support and dedication to the Matoran, offered to make him a protector of Metru Nui and an aid to Turage Duma. Tradxx declined, and only asked for a boat and a few supplies to make sail for the south. The toa made an inquiry to his request, only getting this in response: "I've done many things, terrible things... yet all I've ever wanted to do was journey and discover. I'd like to do that." Since that day, he has traveled from island to island, making a new reputation as a traveler and merchant. But one unfateful day, while he was traveling to a certain island, Lariska had slipped into his sleeping quarters to kill him. Surprised, but not frightened, he survived her attempt at revenge and drove her out. She escaped, but not before she told him that the dark hunters were coming for him. Ever since then, he has watched his back, rarely making any travels outside of any toa guarded ports. He is currently docked at Jiahk, and unable to make for the coast due to wreaks done to his ship by pirates. Although it is reported to be only pirates and local criminals that were responsible, he still felt the cool and suttle feeling of uneasiness run down his spine: .... Lariska was coming to Jiahk, coming for blood. Appearance: The normal size of a toa, Tradxx is heavily armored and somewhat stoat-looking from his many layers of clothing. That is only a disquise, as his body is slim and muscular due to years of training and combat. Bruses and scratches can still be seen on his body, though he prefers to cover these up so nobody can ask him about the experiences behind them. He has an ammo belt and two pistols on it, along with ammunition for his bigger rifle, one that he most preferable calls "his boom-box". He wears hardened boots, made of Muaka hide and leather, which are durrable for long treaks and hiking. Weapons: He carries two pistols for long range, and his own "boom-box" to use for firing on hardened objects or splintering into masses of beings (shotgun). He also hides two daggers behind his back, mostly for close combat. His most preferrable weapon is his single claw (right hand), which can cut through most substances except protosteel. Personality: Perferring not to fight, he admires travelling and trading to make up for all the wrongs he has done. Quiet and discrete, he rarely speaks with others unless spoken to, for most often his appearance gives an answer. He has little patience for punks and low-lifes, as they normally look for trouble with other people.

Actually, I do have one Idea you could try. What if instead of going with another epic to write, you could base the web comic on that instead? It is just of thought, one that I hope you could think about. -Toa Deserok

Here is my epic MOC: Link to the topic for MOC pics Character descriptions: Name: Saibarru Species:Unknown Affiliation: Order of Mata Nui Status: Active, in hiding Duty: Observe and record events of Jiahk to the Order, as well as carry out assignments in the region and/or give assistance to agent(s) operating nearby in Jiahk History: Once a normal resident of the Southern Regions, Saibarru was forced to relocate north with the rest of his species to escape the dangers of island tensions and droat. Slave convoys (with connections to Xia) happened upon them as they sailed away by ship and took most prisoner, drowning the rest at sea. Saibarru and the survivors took to lives of slavery in the Underground of Xia. Fighting in pits, Saibarru became a frequent champion and became renowned throughout the underground and even in other islands like Stelt, where Gladiators were highly adored in the arenas for blood sports. When the Xians offered to reward Saibarru with freedom at the cost of purposely loosing one match, Saibarru agreed. When the match was nearly ended, Saibarru found he had been tricked and tried to escape. But he lost the match and was disposed of in the arena, little more than a grain of sand once again to them. Thinking he would die, Saibarru was surprised to find a being offering him help after the Xians had left him to rot. Revealing himself to be a member of the Order, the being rescued Saibarru and offered him a place in the organization. Promising him that the Order would not use him like the Xians did, Saibarru reluctantly accepted the offer. Several hundreds of years of training, disciplining, and mission-taking, Saibarru still had doubts. The Order still used its agents like Xians did, and so he doubted his worth to their supposed "dedication to Mata Nui". Tempted to break away from the Order, Saibarru is always reassured by the realization of his better position in staying there then leaving for places like Xia. Still, thoughts of desertion hang in his mind. One of the things that differs him from most Order agents is the fact he seeks truth, justice, peace in many forms of duty; yet his fear of being manipulated holds him back from not only performing duties of great honor and sacrifice, but also in having faith in himself and his organization. But when a clear evil is ever presented to him and the helpless are abandoned for death, he will be one of the first to make a stand. In realizing Jiahk's promise and its reflection of his values, Saibarru was fortunate to land the task of watching the city of Jiahk. He has since remained on duty. Abilities: One of the unique things about his race in comparison to others', is there inherited ability to manipulate their own raw energy into any form or shape they choose. Their raw energy is species related, and is not linked to any other source of power. They can use the energy in many ways; some uses include increasing the hardness of armor, others for creating physical objects or even project the energy for combat. Given the raw ability of his, it also is able to obscure the focus of most beings (when struck by an energy blast), preventing the foes from using their powers in combat, but only for a duration of time. This ablity doesn't affect himself or any of his own species. Given his status in the Order, his mind is shielded from mental intrusion and control like most members. As well as that, he also recieved power-ups with are available to Order members: one power-up was the added ability to detect mask power fluxes (readings of masks just being used), ranging from minor to major mask fluxes in a given radius. Another ablilty he has been given is armor color alteration (limited ability over light), being able to change his armor in any color, shade, or texture he chooses. These abilities, coupled with his natural endurance and Makuta-leveled strength, makes him a dangerous opponent or powerful ally. Personality: Although brave and selfless, he is also also hesitant and cautious. Often doubting his true worth, he fears being used and betrayed even by those whom he alligns himself with. His tendency to distrust others he works with sometimes becomes problematic as he sometimes goes on missions by himself just to ensure nobody turns on him. Some of his own comrades mistaken this for a steak of pride, thinking he can do everything alone. On a side note: Saibarru also has a huge bitterness towards Vortixx over how they betrayed him. He detests using Xian manufactured weapons, instead making weapons of his own. Weapons: With a protosteel arm-blade on his left arm, Saibarru is able to focus his internal energies upon any target that crosses his sights. Able to deal plenty of damage and cut through the toughest of material. With a boomerang attached to his other arm, it can absord energy and use it to increase the damage it deals to any opponent or object. These, accompanied by his Great Mask of X-Ray vision, make him formidable in every stature. Clothing/armor: Prefers to wear white and black armor, as a rememberance of the horrors of his imprisonment and slavery to the Xians (prison-clothing color before recruitment to Order). If he is forced to go out into the open or in a crowded place, he will often equip a cloak made of protodermic cloth (dark-brown in appearance). Appearance: Average to the size of a Makuta, his figure is enough to intimidate most opponents looking for a fight. Most of the time, he prefers to remain isolated and hide his features when others are nearby (if they aren't familiar or not with the Order) or wear a cloak to conceal them. But when he is revealed, a deep scar is shown in the middle of his face and scratches can be seen on his armor. He also wears specialized boots that help him to hover slightly off of the ground (which allows him to move through landscapes and enemy compounds without leaving a physical trail), but he only equips them when he is forced to scout outside of his secret compound. Current Assignment: investigate death of Makuta Szian; report findings

Don't worry about it, take your time...until the deadline comes along. Great entries guys, hopefully we'll see a few more! And see more, you will. I'm hoping to add two actually, one from an epic I am currently underway with (a MOC character) and another that is entirely up to be decided (also a MOC). I am wondering if that would be allowed, mainly with the part of the epic character. I however, would make it so that you would have whatever rights you can to the character as I use him in my own story at the same time. What I am proposing is basically making two different versions of the character, but both with the same background and characterization. As for the other MOC, I can fit him in as a character if it is needed (even if the other one can't be included). -Toa Deserok