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IC - Aenarius:The figure strode through the tunnel at a brisk pace, shield on back and mace at side, clanking against his armor as he moved. It was quiet under the earth as he walked. After his last escapade in Le Wahi, he was lying low for a while, and he had decided travel to Onu Koro would be the best.

IC - Caith:The toa regarded the matoran who faced him intently."So why am I here?" he asked, taking a sip from his cup."You're here because I have a job for you," the matoran replied, wiping the brow of his noble komau."There's a toa, once a guard member. Aenarius. He's exiled now.""Which friend of your did you murder, or how much did you rob from you?" Caith asked a little bitingly."Smart. He killed a friend of mine in the guard, just because he slept with another guard's girl. Anyways, he was last seen traveling to Onu Wahi. I want you to find him." The matoran leaned forward. "And I want you to kill him."A smile spread across Caith's face. "Why don't we talk about payment?" he asked off handedly.OOC: Caith to Onu Wahi.

You... Remember me?I remember such shock last time I tried to get back in.I'm bringing back my former guard, now turned vigilante back.

IC - Dorcha:The dull-armored matoran walked softly through the dark jungle, hands poised to draw blade in an instant, or throw dart as quick. His eyes darted across the surroundings, alert.Ahead was where the matoran he had been shadowing had last been seen, but now it was deserted. His eyes picked up on several things as he drew close: the churned up ground as if a sttruggle had happened, and some few belongings he recognized."Your fate I wouldn't like to think of," the former guard whispered. "But you might survive."Then he vanished into the jungle, following the fresh trail.

The Zar has returned.He'll be RPing with himself in Le Wahi.

I've written a story about a matoran running across a city and getting killed. It's just the way I like to write sometimes. In my view, not every story needs a concrete story, not every story need a plot, really. This story was simply my attempt to capture one image in writing; that of a ruined Templar wandering a rain-swept forest road. I do that quite often, with stories such as An Assassin's Reflection, The Refugee, Within temptation, and perhaps Living Stone. You pinpointed it very well when you said this story was about a condition. While in, for instance, An Assassin's Reflection, I focused on the struggle of repentance, and ended it with final impenitence in this life. In this, I tried to capture guilt, and this time repentance, with quite a bit of despair mixed in as well.Granted, this story was rather short; as a one-shot and quick-write, it was meant to be, but looking at it, I can't think of how much I could really expand it, just because I managed to hit what I was aiming at. I could, granted, make it more focusing on post disbanding of the order and less on one particular person, but... that would change the story too much for me.I will also grant you the first grant you the first run on sentence as well as msot other errors you pointed out; the second one, however, I rather like, rawr! Overshadowing meaning that the darkness of the forests hid the falling rain.Dark silver? I honestly have no idea where I was going with that.Also hey, I like adverbs, and I was aiming for that form of narration; people often nitpick my way of overstating things in the name of scenery. To respond I just stand next to Chesterton so I can shine by comparison. :PAnyways, thanks for the review. This will be irksome to match.

My favorite version of it is in Polish, and there's no English translation. ;.;

Are elephants and donkeys natural enemies? Because I totally see an inter-animal war about to start.

I want to write a comedy with this title.

I USE SHIFT WHAT IS THIS NONSENSE AND I USE TWO HANDS TO TYPE WHILE DOING IT HA

Not days, but definitely moments.

Granted, but diehard Bionicle fans are so repulsed that they form a terrorist group and invade Denmark, which makes such a negative bakclash against Bionicle that all hope of it return dies.I wish Hapori Dume's profile could still be accessed.

So, I'm thinking of having one of my characters join the ILF/ILS. My question: what are they doing right now?

So, a lot of you probably remember War Zone. Well, coming this December, I present, BZPOWER (POWERED BY INVISION POWER BOARDS) In short 'War Zone 2'. It will have a very similar theme of disorder, but the backstory will be much different, and it will be a lot less sandbox. No, players cannot control a forum, seeing as about half will be anarchist wastelands and the rest will be already controlled by the remains of the staff. Anyone interested in this? I'm looking for people willing to either help me write it, or help me GM it, or both. (As the case in last RPG Contest, I do not want to be head GM, just because of past experience).

Velox, the 19th was Monday.

Unfortunately, since you 'was' instead of 'are', you no longer exist in the present; and since the present is the only time of actuality, you therefore cease to exist, dying a horrible death, and an even more horrible destruction of your soul. The end.I wish that love would never die, I wish that God would be forgiven. #lesmis.

The only nitpick I could find was that the left arm looked a little too long, and the right a little think. Aside from that, excellent picture: I especially like the penciled/engraved texture it had.

Wow.That this has no reviews is a tragedy in of itself.Although I've never been found of the glitch-in-AI concept, I admit you did a masterful job with this; I could not find any flaws whatsoever. I do wonder what this red light is supposed to be though...

Honestly, the only thing I could think of to nitpick is that it seemed... A bit abrupt. Almost as if you started with a slow haunting beginning, and then broke into a run to get to the end; from when the character saw the toa to the end could be expanded a bit, IMO.Aside from that, very good story, you handled the feeling of loss very well.

I found two errors in this: foot instead of food, and you didn't indent the first paragraph. Aside from that? This story was excellent; I'm glad I don't have to do a SSCC review, because I'd have to spend it all on praise, just because I can't find anything to nitpick. You painted a picture starkly haunting, and made the reader see through the character's eyes perfect. I liked especially how you balanced out the theme of death and dying, of final farewell, with that of putting one's house in order. I love your interpretation of Gravestone, definitely.

On that note...Member Name: Zarayna.Theme: Gravestone.Word Count: 635.Story: The Refugee.

IC:"Then let us continue our journey until such knowledge is attained," Boran said, not sounding unduly worried. They had been walking through the mists for some time now, and this was the first sign of other life.Go to the mist fades. Then go beyond."Aylan, take ye the front, and should this rahi come near, cast him into slumber."

Hah! It's fully updated and formatted.I feel victorious.

1. When was your favourite point during your stay on BZP?My roleplaying days: mid 2010 until early 2011.2. How long have you been a member of BZP?Over five years now. Wow.3. Should that previous question have been the first question?Yeah, sure. Why not?4. Have you had any long disapperances from BZP? If so, why?A lot of inactivity until 2010, and a few week long hiatuses, but that's it.5. Are you as interested in BZP as you used to be?No. it feels more like a sleepy backwater to me now, which makes me feel sluggish, so I lurk in SS and Blogs now.6. Do you feel that BZP is slowly losing its members, or that BZP generally has less activity?Yes.7. If Bionicle had not been replaced, do you think that BZP would always remain strong as long as Bionicle was ‘updated‘‘ on a regular basis?It would likely have remained more active.8. Have I asked enough questions yet?No.9. Do you want a hug?...No thanks, I'll pass.

1. The US of A.2. English only, although apparently half my friends think I speak Latin as well.3. Yes.4. I have no clue, probably no available Bionicle sets.5. It's very quick, but again I don't know.6. Neither. I used to buy them in both; old sets online, new ones in the stores.7. I'd have no problem with it, but they're already largely available.9. Octophobia?10. You aren't, you're that weird raptor who write comedies, a few short stories about cake, and lives on Cyprus.