Axilus Prime Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 Well, better than your last intro. Congratulations on improved grammar. You do need to turn out something better, as Sybre said, though. Aside from grammar I have nothing good to say here, actually. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 Well, better than your last intro. Congratulations on improved grammar. You do need to turn out something better, as Sybre said, though.Aside from grammar I have nothing good to say here, actually.Heh, yeah.... like he siad,"Looks like I failed to make a beginning comic........again" "Hooray."Comic 2 Introducing Raiden: Toa of Storms! is now currently up.Also an announcement I have been meaning to add in my comics that I just for some reason keep forgeting to add: I will still use MNOG kit, but this time I will, however, use it in a much more advanced way.Also yeah, this wasn't that long, but hey, cut me some slack I still working out the kinks... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 Actually, a tip would be not to use multiple kits. It doesn't look right. At all.Pros: You turned it into a joke.Cons: This still wasn't funny at all.Keep working at it, and I'll help you whenever I can. You'll get better. Look to Tehurye as a role model (but don't copy his jokes, even as references. You're at too early a stage to do that.), he's a good new guy to follow. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 Actually, a tip would be not to use multiple kits. It doesn't look right. At all.Pros: You turned it into a joke.Cons: This still wasn't funny at all.Keep working at it, and I'll help you whenever I can. You'll get better. Look to Tehurye as a role model (but don't copy his jokes, even as references. You're at too early a stage to do that.), he's a good new guy to follow.I will tell why I use multiple kits later.... also like I siad still working at the kinks. Should be finished by next comic..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 Why would you save that for later? Tell me, so I can see if the reason is good enough.I used to use multiple kits as well, and my reason wasn't good enough. Leraku had a good reason for that once, though, so...Yeah, you should tell me now, since you already have the reason. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 (edited) Why would you save that for later? Tell me, so I can see if the reason is good enough.I used to use multiple kits as well, and my reason wasn't good enough. Leraku had a good reason for that once, though, so...Yeah, you should tell me now, since you already have the reason.Comic Magna (See what I did there?) has many worlds. Like my last comic, there is Chimoru world, MNOG world, Rayg world, and et c. The first three I mentioned as well as A.T.O.S kit (But mostly for backgrounds) are the ones I will probably only use. Edited November 3, 2012 by HYBRIDNO DXC2000 5.0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 Ah, so then planet-hopping means kit changing?That sounds good, I suppose. It's like a simplified version of Ler's explanation. As long as there aren't different kits in the same scene, you're good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 Ah, so then planet-hopping means kit changing?That sounds good, I suppose. It's like a simplified version of Ler's explanation. As long as there aren't different kits in the same scene, you're good.Oh Ler used this idea.... I guess that makes it semi-original....... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Calvirick Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 I think you needed more panels for that comic. It would've been great if you had, for the second panel, HD glare at the PGS and then cut back to the second monologue line. It adds an effect and can sometimes make a comic seem more funny. Cause I know being funny is what your after. And apparently, abusing PGSs is a funny act. XP Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 I think you needed more panels for that comic. It would've been great if you had, for the second panel, HD glare at the PGS and then cut back to the second monologue line. It adds an effect and can sometimes make a comic seem more funny. Cause I know being funny is what your after. And apparently, abusing PGSs is a funny act. XPYup, not many people do PGS abuse from what I have seen. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Calvirick Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 I think the people that do, play off of what the legendary Dark709 did. Seems like a lot of comic makers these days play off a lot over each other too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 I think the people that do, play off of what the legendary Dark709 did. Seems like a lot of comic makers these days play off a lot over each other too.Wait, wasn't Dark709 known for Cast Abuse and GS abuse? I thought he didn't have PGSs. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 I think the people that do, play off of what the legendary Dark709 did. Seems like a lot of comic makers these days play off a lot over each other too.Wait, wasn't Dark709 known for Cast Abuse and GS abuse? I thought he didn't have PGSs.off topic, but he didn't have any PGS's.I concur with Calvirick's suggestion. Or you could have HD shove Raiden out of the panel. The comic was rather bland, though. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 I think the people that do, play off of what the legendary Dark709 did. Seems like a lot of comic makers these days play off a lot over each other too.Wait, wasn't Dark709 known for Cast Abuse and GS abuse? I thought he didn't have PGSs.off topic, but he didn't have any PGS's.I concur with Calvirick's suggestion. Or you could have HD shove Raiden out of the panel. The comic was rather bland, though.Yeah I know....... oh well... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 These comics have kinda gone too far downhill. I was really expecting something from the Raiden comic. Why are you doing this? Why? :(And the series will be 100% ruined if you use multiple sprite kits. It just doesn't look right. Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 (edited) Comic 3: Introducing......SORAN! is up! got kinks worked out now! Edited November 3, 2012 by HYBRIDNO DXC2000 5.0 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 Now THERE'S a comic! It's got jokes, too! Anyway, yes, Soran has proved multiple times that he can fly. And I like chicks who like BIONICLES, too. And why play catch with a BIONICLE?Nice improvement! Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 3, 2012 Author Share Posted November 3, 2012 Now THERE'S a comic! It's got jokes, too! Anyway, yes, Soran has proved multiple times that he can fly. And I like chicks who like BIONICLES, too. And why play catch with a BIONICLE?Nice improvement!Thanks! Also I must thank you for still reading this after my first two fails. Glad you liked the comic! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Calvirick Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 The professional has failed the most. If you choose to grow from your failures, then you get better. It taste bitter, but when its all over, you can look back and see how much you've improved. You just earned some serious man points listening to hard criticism. XP Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 3, 2012 Share Posted November 3, 2012 Wow, good work! Glad to see you listened to all our criticism and advice. This is a good direction to go in.As for text, I suggest making it bold all the time and using italics for emphasis. It's easier to read.Now for the good parts, for there are many.I liked the Soran puns, which have been increasingly viral. It's also cool how you took that bit from his user page, and I found that even funnier.Awesome, superpowers! Many people need that for Rhotuka.I wouldn't believe that either, but there's that hurricane, and that could most certainly do that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 4, 2012 Author Share Posted November 4, 2012 Wow, good work! Glad to see you listened to all our criticism and advice. This is a good direction to go in.As for text, I suggest making it bold all the time and using italics for emphasis. It's easier to read.Now for the good parts, for there are many.I liked the Soran puns, which have been increasingly viral. It's also cool how you took that bit from his user page, and I found that even funnier.Awesome, superpowers! Many people need that for Rhotuka.I wouldn't believe that either, but there's that hurricane, and that could most certainly do that.Hurrican Sandy some how makes it to Comic Manga? This is unheard of..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 4, 2012 Share Posted November 4, 2012 That's what happens when you break the fourth wall. :PThings can go in too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 4, 2012 Author Share Posted November 4, 2012 That's what happens when you break the fourth wall. :PThings can go in too.I have got use that as an idea one day......... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 8, 2012 Author Share Posted November 8, 2012 Comic 4: Introducing.....Axilus Prime is now up!Tried to give it an Axilus Prime feel......so I am not sure if this comic is exactly all that good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Logan Tec Posted November 8, 2012 Share Posted November 8, 2012 I love the new comics i wonder what will happen with me i liked the resizing joke well all for now good bye and i say = rights for waffles and comic makers alike(yes in stead of cheese i like waffles now.) also i can't really give you comic making advice but your humor has improved Quote one day this will contain greatness only the best. But take this with the ocean of salt then you will know what to expect from this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 8, 2012 Author Share Posted November 8, 2012 I love the new comics i wonder what will happen with me i liked the resizing joke well all for now good bye and i say = rights for waffles and comic makers alike(yes in stead of cheese i like waffles now.) also i can't really give you comic making advice but your humor has improvedThanks! I will also keep the waffle obbsession in mind for your PGS introduction. Glad you liked the comic! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted November 8, 2012 Share Posted November 8, 2012 The fourth wall. Broken. Technical difficulties. You have no idea what you've done! Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 8, 2012 Author Share Posted November 8, 2012 The fourth wall. Broken. Technical difficulties. You have no idea what you've done!Most likely not. Oh well, Fourth Wall jokes always seem to be some of the best jokes. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 8, 2012 Share Posted November 8, 2012 A bit too screamy for Axilus, but aside from that, it's great! One thing I would like to suggest is don't change the text color as a character speaks. Instead, make some guys speak in italics or bold, or even their secondary colors (Such as Axilus speaking in blue or gray, or red with a bold effect because he's huge.)That way, it'll be easier to tell who says what.Anyway, I did love that, you pulled off the long freedom and justice speech off perfectly. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 8, 2012 Author Share Posted November 8, 2012 A bit too screamy for Axilus, but aside from that, it's great! One thing I would like to suggest is don't change the text color as a character speaks. Instead, make some guys speak in italics or bold, or even their secondary colors (Such as Axilus speaking in blue or gray, or red with a bold effect because he's huge.)That way, it'll be easier to tell who says what.Anyway, I did love that, you pulled off the long freedom and justice speech off perfectly.Through out the series you will probably have a personality close to Mata Nui and TNG. Thank you for the advice as well, I'll try it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 9, 2012 Share Posted November 9, 2012 Uh, you may be missing the point of what I said.I'm really not that proud of my old comic series, to say the least. Just make the personality be like in Prototypes, but with long speeches and a shorter temper. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 9, 2012 Author Share Posted November 9, 2012 Uh, you may be missing the point of what I said.I'm really not that proud of my old comic series, to say the least. Just make the personality be like in Prototypes, but with long speeches and a shorter temper.Sorry I figured he be like Mata Nui. (You know, with the long speeches about justice and all) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 10, 2012 Author Share Posted November 10, 2012 Comic 5: 1-Year Vahi Part 1 is up!I improved my background that I made. I also took Soran's advice and decided to 2x everything. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 10, 2012 Share Posted November 10, 2012 The first thing I have to say is that this is a good comic, nice work.I think that the way you make jokes about graphical fails is getting old, though. Just sprite a simple box, like the ones I used to use before my computer died.The styrofoam also seems to be suspended in midair. Unless it's super-sticky (which styrofoam normally isn't)I liked the running joke about the freedom and justice. Makes me wonder how a box will help with that. Also wondering who's next to show up.Finally, I would like to end this with a bit more advice: Clean up your first post so that all references to your old comics are out, add a restarted PGS list (but with everyone who's already in) and remove Comic 0. You don't need that one anymore. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Logan Tec Posted November 11, 2012 Share Posted November 11, 2012 (edited) LoL lets speed up time nothing wrong will happen hmmm the wonderful possibilitys of things that could go wrong Edited November 11, 2012 by Tecnokua Quote one day this will contain greatness only the best. But take this with the ocean of salt then you will know what to expect from this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 12, 2012 Author Share Posted November 12, 2012 @Axilus Prime: Yeah it is getting old. I will probably use it only one more time, but that will be way later.Also with the whole styrofoam in the air thing, I was trying to give the efect that Raiden was running when he was holding the box.Well might I just say that the incedent you and Raiden do begins the plot of my comics, so you basically fought the first fight.Well the PGS may appear in the next comic or the comic after that. It depends how long the next comic may be.@Tecnokua: Eh it won't screw up anything much in the next comic, but that is however, an idea I should use.Comic 6: 1-Year Vahi Part 2 is up!Update: IMPORTANT: Change of plans. You now WILL have to resign as PGS. I will PM you to give me a sprite or you can. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted November 13, 2012 Share Posted November 13, 2012 More like Mask of Armory...Though Axilus would probably do something about that, seeing as he just witnessed a heavy assault. Ah, so I'm guessing that's the next PGS. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 13, 2012 Author Share Posted November 13, 2012 More like Mask of Armory...Though Axilus would probably do something about that, seeing as he just witnessed a heavy assault.Ah, so I'm guessing that's the next PGS.Well if you want I will explain what happened. Well...he made him go back in time in to a state where he was gravely injured and then brought him back in to this time still injured. He will stay like that only for ten minutes though.I figured that AP would think justice was being served to Raiden.Yes that's the PGS. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted November 13, 2012 Share Posted November 13, 2012 Your'e right where you need to be, Magnesius… Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hexann Posted November 14, 2012 Author Share Posted November 14, 2012 Your'e right where you need to be, Magnesius…Perhaps so, well I guess this quote contains way to many spoilers. Oh well. So you technically put in three PGSs: Magnesius, Barysmius, and Malignus. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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