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Congrats guys! Its not everyday I see two bionicle fans marry each other.

Im kinda nervous, some of the other entries I've read are pretty good.

I'm pretty sure it also made the powers stronger in general, and that they would have much more room in their Suva's to store other masks. Also, the Toa wouldn't have to summon the non gold kanohi from their suvas, so it was quicker to switch the power you were using.

Plus, the Toa did know that there were other Makuta prior to them arriving in Karda Nui because they met Icarax while the Toa Mahri were in the pit.

welp, I just got 20 bucks, and Im thinking of donating it all to this.

you know what, since I am semi-well known on Biotube, Im gonna do a lets play series with this game to help promote this project.

How does May 26 sound?

well, I can't donate right away, but when I have the money, Im gonna donate $40

Im willing to donate 40 dollars for this.

Thanks! I would recommend that you read another story I wrote for the Lesovikk's Hiatus contest. Here is a link: http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=8505&hl=

I would recommend going to biosector01.com before you post topics with questions. If you can't find the answers you seek on BS01, THEN its recommend you ask others. the answers are simple, Gelu had a faster form of transportation, and the bara magna villages were on a PORTION of Bara magna, not the whole entire planet. There was more than enough room for the Great spirit robot and the prototype robot to fight on Bara Magna. No, there is no map of spherus magna, and I doubt we shall get one. The Skakdi are with the skadi fusion, and the Skakdi Fusion is on the Aqua Magna region of spherus Magna (aka the water portion). The Toa are on the Bara magna region trying to find a location for New Atero (aka a place where they want to live) The Barraki are remaining quiet somewhere. Greg has revealed that TSO is somewhere on Spherus Magna creating an army. Once again, I would like to stress that you research all your questions on BS01. Here is a link: http://biosector01.com/wiki/index.php/Main_Page

That's a good question actually.I would say as fast as you can think, but there would be limits. I just don't know what the limits are.

Ok, after a long time, Ive finnaly been able to fix my entry. the Word count is now 1,342

I'm not sure using Guardian was the best choice here. Quoting from the Dark Hunters guide: It's not a serious mistake, but just to be on the safe side, you might want to change the name. I'm not sure if a Toa has enough strength to knock out a Kane-Ra bull (which, by the way, should be capitalized like I did). This is more serious. The Dark Hunters guide says explicitly that Firedracax was recruited by the Dark Hunters during the war against the Brotherhood. You need to change Dark Hunter. Again, we are on uncertain ground here. It seems to me that when Nidhiki meets Lariska in Birth of a Dark Hunter, it is implied that he had never met her. In addition, in the same story, Nidhiki is clearly no match for her, while here it seems that, if he didn't defeat her, he at least achieved a stalemate. Again, you might want to change the Dark Hunter just to be on the safe side. Language mistakes: I think "dark hunter" needs to begin with capital letters. Not "was in Metru Nui" but "had been in Metru Nui" and not "the many battles he fought" but "the many battles he had fought." Since you're using the past tense, you need past perfect to talk about events taking place before the present. Either turn "it is normal" into "it was normal" or turn "future historians could have" into "future historians can have". There needs to be tense consistency. Turn "overheard" into "had overheard" and "plan" into "planned". I'm also not sure that the word "population" is adequate here. Most of the Toa who fought in the war were not in Metru Nui permanently, but had only come to reinforce the city. "Even if we did", not "even if we do". You could also avoid repeating "do" and try to find a synonym. "I hadn't thought", not "I didn't think". Turn "were" into "would be" or just eliminate the verb altogether. I'd capitalize "green". I also think you shouldn't repeat "accompany" so much. The semicolon ( doesn't seem to be appropriate there. And the link between having good memories and not being completely safe is also unclear within the sentence. Ah, and you should turn "I learned" into "I had learned". Capitalize "plant life". Do the same every time you describe the Toa's element, be it as "the Green", "Plants" or "Plant Life". Capitalize "dark hunter". Do the same everywhere. I'd also put "due to the lack of air" and "he fell unconscious". "at the time", not "at one time". Say what weapon he had, otherwise the sentence isn't clear. Capitalize "fire". Do it every time. I think you should always write "fire-spitter" like this. Turn "it shall remain" into "it would remain". Put a comma before "however". DONE. Sorry I couldn't do it earlier, but I finally found the time to edit it. BTW, that line with the good memories was my attempt at advertising a canon-fit series that I am making. Once people listen to the series, this will become clear.

1: What Kanohi do Orde and Zaria wear?2: What is the Skakdi fusion going to do about the Toa Mahri?

Before Teridax's Reign. So before Makuta took over the Matoran Universe and messed things up. Legolover, (this is the equivalent to replying on BZP, isn't it? im kinda new here but a big bionicle fan) No, the Makuta I have introduced has an important part in the plot, has dialouge and interacts with Lesovikk. She is never named, except by the title "Makuta". At one point she mentions she dislikes Teridax, im implying she is one of the Makuta who sided with Miserix at the Convocation. So, new character, yes, but completely compatible with canon. Also, loads of other characters who arent really developed, like Matoran in a village, most unnamed (the ones that are named are canon characters) but a few that Lesovikk interacts with briefly (get in a small barfight). Are barfights even canon? BTW, you should also read my entry.

They are not robots.They have organic parts as well, not just mechanical.

Sounds like you could use my help! I in fact do voice acting in a number of series' on Biotube.

I just found the easter egg in ta koro with the Toa Mata!

I know that the shadow matoran wern't altered by the leeches, but were altered by Mutran AFTER they were leeched. Im not sure if they were reverted to their normal forms though.