Nuju Metru

You're gonna have to do better than that, brutha.

Easy to relate to? Kay.

 

You are now officially my little brother.

 

~EW~

A. But you have to get Grokk a cameo in there.

Cerberus?! I will never join you!

In that case, you will be annihilated by my technologically-powered wrath... or some such ominous statement.

I gotta feeling,

A feeling deep inside, oh yeah

Oh yeah

It's a good thing that when I saw "I Gotta Feeling" that I thought of the Beatles one

No matter how you work it, I don't think a Zamor gun will have too much power. Unless you don't want power. Meh. Did you try a ring made out of tubes for the cartridges? You could try that. It's the only thing I can actually think of.

Laka

What I have so far is the rotating magazine portion, which is basically three multi-shot zamor launchers arranged in a triangle- with all their fronts pointed forward. What the pickles are would be making it so that the trigger mechanism doesn't push the entire magazine off its axle, instead of just pressing the launcher one and firing the shot, as well as making the mag-triangle rotate in synchronization with the opening of the placeholder beams, that keep one of the three launchers fixed in place while firing by clamping on them.

So yeah... If I find some solution to the above problems that lets the whole gun run very smoothly and efficiently, even at all, I will be very proud of myself.

If your protagonist was a sheet of cardboard before, he must be something like a solid concrete wall now! =P

This is - and that´s is in no way meant as offensive towards the original piece - a great improvement from the first. The characters are far better explained, and I think a lot of people will sympathize Orion for liking birds.

 

If anything, his fall seems a bit odd - I understand what emotions and desires you put as a reason for him jumping off the tree, still I doubt that anyone, even with the influenceable mind of a child (btw, how old is he supposed to be? You mention he´s three years older during the second part, so it seems that you´ll make his age matter. Yet, we don´t get to know it?), would jump off a tree believing they wouldn´t get hurt. Especially since he seemingly expects to fly.

 

Also, I like how you end the chapter in a twist (although this is only the start, so I suppose you´re just putting up a direction, rather than 'twisting' it), but isn´t it a bit early for the main protagonist to be shocked like this? I personally would´ve preferred to have that revealed later, and instead made some minor clue to it with which to end chapter one.

 

But anyway, great story; I wouldn´t even be surprised to see it published. I´ll have to keep up with it this time.

 

-MOSM-

Well, I said in the chapter; "Now ten years old, he still had not grown much larger..." So his age actually is told. And he jumps out of a tree like that because he isn't right in the head.

And I'm not at all worried about revealing Lorimus' relationship to Orion now - Lorimus is a minor character in the whole arc of the story, only really present in the beginning.

I still kinda wanna see that movie. Clash of the Titans, not so much.

 

Go see that movie.

Do not go see Clash of the Titans.

Nice! Now what's your first order of business?

...No Idea...

your name matches so lovely with your eyes, Nuju darling.

Haha, thank you very much. I picked the outfit to do so.

Yeah, I'm the nice one... or so we will lead you to believe.

-Nuju Metru

I thought it was okay...

-K

See above image.

Oh come on, it wasn't that bad...

 

-SK

Did you see it? Yes it was. Liam Neeson was dressed in a FREAKIN SUNSHINE SUIT. ><

Ah, my gift of seeing once again saves me money and time. I knew this was gonna be a bad movie the moment I saw the first glimpse of it in a 30 second ad.

My pleasure.

The Psychedelic Roadtrip.

What if you go just to make fun of it?

 

 

~Eeko~

That's what I went there to do. It was so bad, that even making fun of it was no fun.

Are these made by the creators of Charlie the Unicorn?

Yes.

And if there's talk of turning this into a fad, I'll shoot a harpoon at you. Don't even think about it.

-Carl

You two are such silly heads.

Silly heads with hats. Even better.

Yeah, we're intentional twins.

Yes I can.

Of course I know who you're talking about. We're talking about the same guy, right? An extraordinary guitarist, an amazing singer and songwriter... if you haven't heard of Mark Knopfler or listened to his music, then I suggest you do so to rescue your life.

 

So... yeah. I love Mark Knopfler and Dire Straits, in case you can't tell. Pretty awesome that you got to see him in concert. My parents saw him live, but I haven't yet. Someday, I guess.

He has the most amazing back-up musicians, too.

*likes*

I agree with this.

he's the guy from Dire Straits, don't recall offhand what role he plays in the band.

Lead guitarist, singer, and songwriter. He went on to have a solo career after dissolving the band in which he did (and does) the same things.

HI.

 

I am feeling enthusiastic right now. How are you?

 

-Nukaya

Pretty happy I suppose - spring break for us break started this week.

ONE OF THE LAST TWO MUST BE SHOPPED YOU CAN'T POST IN TWO TOPICS AT THE SAME MINUTE

 

or maybe you can

Same minute, different seconds.