[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]As I said in the actual topic, I was pretty displeased with BIONICLE's ending, so I decided to write my own take on how I would have ended it. Is it actually better? Maybe, maybe not. That's for you to decide, and I'd really appreciate any feedback you have, both from a story perspective and in my actual writing abilities.[/font] [font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]I took some things made from 2008 onwards and tweaked some and completely changed others. Other things I changed were originally confirmed before that, but they didn't make too much sense when I was researching them on BS01, so I rewrote them too.[/font] [font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]Here's the retcon list for the stuff I decided to change for this chapter. I'd advise reading the actual chapter first, though, to avoid any possible spoilers.[/font]
- [font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]-Kapura, not Velika, is the Disguised Great Being. Velika just doesn't make as much sense as Kapura did to be the Great Being. He was actually Greg's first choice, but apparently he was discarded because of the “mindwipe” given to the Matoran. I never saw why Greg had to invalidate his own answer in that instance, though. Just saying “Obviously, Great Being means that his memory doesn't get erased because” is a perfectly valid answer in my opinion.[/font]
- [font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]-Mata Nui did not “bring Makuta into being”. Makuta, in the main canon, is said to be destined for the second or third robot after the prototype; it's a little unclear which. Either way, having Mata Nui be the one to create Makuta just doesn't make sense. If he was made for the second robot, why was Mata Nui created first? And if he was meant for the third robot, why wouldn't the Great Beings directly create him themselves instead of leaving it to Mata Nui?[/font]
[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"]Any kind of review is welcome. Thanks for taking the time to read.[/font]
Edited by Kahi, May 02 2013 - 02:45 AM.