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#161 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 23 2012 - 08:37 PM

Sundown - Lord Ghirahim (AKA Angel Bob)

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Posted Apr 23 2012 - 08:55 PM

Has there been any word from Shawn Spencer? I still haven't gotten my review on Kingdoms.
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Posted Apr 23 2012 - 10:30 PM

If you're still taking requests for reviews, I would greatly appreciate a review for Redemption :)
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#164 Offline Cederak

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Posted Apr 23 2012 - 11:45 PM

Has there been any word from Shawn Spencer? I still haven't gotten my review on Kingdoms.

Unfortunately no. Guess he "psyched" you on that. Terrible jokes aside, I'll be assuming control of the situation. Expect a review from me on Kingdoms in the next 48 hours. :)-Ced

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#165 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 24 2012 - 12:48 AM

And "I Will Return" will be reviewed by Jedi Master J. (many thanks for volunteering), since Jinklemeister is still MIA.

If you're still taking requests for reviews, I would greatly appreciate a review for Redemption :)

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Posted Apr 24 2012 - 12:03 PM

And "I Will Return" will be reviewed by Jedi Master J. (many thanks for volunteering), since Jinklemeister is still MIA.Posted Image

Ok, thanks! MIA made me laugh, dunno why...

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Posted Apr 24 2012 - 04:58 PM

The Mystery of Death by thebeggerpie
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Posted Apr 24 2012 - 09:11 PM

Kingdoms, by Click has been reviewed.-Ced
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Posted Apr 25 2012 - 09:37 AM

Thanks for getting it done so quickly Cederak! I'll have to keep in mind a lot of the things you mentioned next time I write. I can't believe I missed so many spelling errors! :P
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Posted Apr 25 2012 - 10:58 AM

Redemption has been reviewed.
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Posted Apr 25 2012 - 12:18 PM

The Mystery of Death by thebeggerpie

Regrettably, your last request (My Old Friend) has not yet been critiqued, and thus, we cannot accept The Mystery of Death at this time. See the "One story at a time" rule in the SSCC's initial post. Once Tyler Durden has critiqued the first short story, feel free to return with The Mystery of Death. Thank you! :)-Ced

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Posted Apr 25 2012 - 12:31 PM

The Mystery of Death by thebeggerpie

Regrettably, your last request (My Old Friend) has not yet been critiqued, and thus, we cannot accept The Mystery of Death at this time. See the "One story at a time" rule in the SSCC's initial post. Once Tyler Durden has critiqued the first short story, feel free to return with The Mystery of Death. Thank you! :)-Ced

Huh. Details DO matter. Sorry, I'll wait.

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#173 Offline Tyler Durden

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Posted Apr 25 2012 - 08:07 PM

Speaking of which, that should be done tomorrow.-Teezy
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Posted Apr 25 2012 - 09:21 PM

Requesting a review on my storySlipping Through http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4570by Nick SilverpenThanks!

Edited by Nick Silverpen, Apr 25 2012 - 09:22 PM.

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Posted Apr 26 2012 - 11:35 AM

Angel by Peach 00I'm not sure if things are filled up or not, but if you guys can review it, I'd really, really appreciate. :)(Just as a side note, for critics MIA, I'd love to help out if that's fine, just as a temporary critic - only if critics are busy, that is. If that's cool, I'm happy to help. ^^)
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And with glasses high / We raised a cry / For freedom had arrived
 
On the day the wall came down / The ship of fools had finally run aground
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I dreamed you had left my side / No warmth, not even pride remained
And even though you needed me / It was clear that I could not do a thing for you
 
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And there's a change that even with regret / Cannot be undone
 
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Of loyalty, of history / In shades of grey
 
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Posted Apr 26 2012 - 01:08 PM

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#177 Offline Cederak

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Posted May 04 2012 - 12:25 PM

Angel by Peach 00I'm not sure if things are filled up or not, but if you guys can review it, I'd really, really appreciate. :)(Just as a side note, for critics MIA, I'd love to help out if that's fine, just as a temporary critic - only if critics are busy, that is. If that's cool, I'm happy to help. ^^)

While I can't speak for Velox on whether or not we need any temporary assistance right now, I'll be taking your request for Angel. Expect a review sometime in the next 48 hours.-Ced

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Posted May 05 2012 - 06:55 PM

Angel, by Peach 00 has been reviewed.-Ced
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Posted May 06 2012 - 09:00 PM

Apologies for the lateness of this...I've been sick recently so kinda forgot about this. =P

Requesting a review on my storySlipping Through http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4570by Nick SilverpenThanks!

Assigned to Zarayna.

http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4534(Delving Too Deep) - Lord Darkon

Assigned to myself. Oh and @ Peach ~ Thanks for your offer as always; I'll keep that in mind! Though, surprisingly, I think we're good right now haha. Posted Image

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Posted May 07 2012 - 01:44 PM

I'm not sure whether or not to count the downtime, but it definitely has been at least a week since I applied for a review. There's no need to jump to it, though; I suppose I'll just write something else and wait for my friends to review it.
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Posted May 07 2012 - 03:05 PM

I'm not sure whether or not to count the downtime, but it definitely has been at least a week since I applied for a review. There's no need to jump to it, though; I suppose I'll just write something else and wait for my friends to review it.

Even without the downtime, the critic assigned to handle your request has exceeded their seven day deadline. Upon glancing at his profile, it would appear he will be away until the 11th. I'm not sure whether Velox was informed of that beforehand. In any event, I'll try to speak with Velox later today about this matter. On behalf of the SSCC, I apologize for this unanticipated (to my knowledge) setback.-Ced

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Posted May 07 2012 - 03:49 PM

I'm not sure whether or not to count the downtime, but it definitely has been at least a week since I applied for a review. There's no need to jump to it, though; I suppose I'll just write something else and wait for my friends to review it.

Sorry about that, apparently Velox forgot to mention that I PMed him to inform you all that I won't be able to write up a review for either of my assignments here until after I am finished with my finals this week. And well, that won't be until after this Wednesday. So if you can wait just two more days, I should be able to get my review up for you by then. Once again, sorry about that.

Even without the downtime, the critic assigned to handle your request has exceeded their seven day deadline. Upon glancing at his profile, it would appear he will be away until the 11th. I'm not sure whether Velox was informed of that beforehand. In any event, I'll try to speak with Velox later today about this matter. On behalf of the SSCC, I apologize for this unanticipated (to my knowledge) setback.-Ced

Again I did contact Velox here (On the day that forums came back.), so this information should of been pass along already. However I admit I probably should of made a post here, so I am sorry about that and I'll try to be mindful of doing that in the future, if something like this happens again.But anyway, like I said above, if he can wait another two days, I should be able to get my review up for him. Right now, I can't though since I got stuff to review for my finals this Wednesday. Posted Image"I'm a heartbreaker...My name...Charles."

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Posted May 07 2012 - 04:23 PM

Yeah, that was my bad; I glanced at the PM at a time when I was sick/doing other things so didn't do anything about it and then unfortunately forgot about it. I echo Cederak's apology, and on behalf of the SSCC would like to offer you a complementary coffee mug!...I wish. We need licensed products for the SSCC. Anyway, sorry again, and we appreciate your patience. Posted Image
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Posted May 08 2012 - 07:49 AM

No coffee, thanks! :PWhatever, I'm waiting patiently and I thank Charlie Brown for taking my request, along with Ghirahim's one.
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Posted May 09 2012 - 07:28 AM

I'm officially done with school for the summer, so I can take requests if they come up.
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Posted May 10 2012 - 11:15 PM

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Posted May 13 2012 - 08:56 AM

I reviewed Slipping Through yesterday.
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Posted May 13 2012 - 03:14 PM

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Posted May 14 2012 - 01:28 AM

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Posted May 15 2012 - 07:39 AM

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No need to apologize, IMO. Thanks!

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Posted May 19 2012 - 09:00 AM

Glatorian Chronicles #12: The Future Begins Where the Past Ends by TNTOS.-TNTOS-
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Posted May 19 2012 - 03:25 PM

Glatorian Chronicles #12: The Future Begins Where the Past Ends by TNTOS.-TNTOS-

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Posted May 19 2012 - 06:27 PM

To Take The Stars From The Sky (http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4874) - Lord Darkon
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Posted May 20 2012 - 08:31 PM

To Take The Stars From The Sky (http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4874) - Lord Darkon

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Posted May 25 2012 - 02:31 PM

In the Jungle, by Nuile: The Daft Wordbender, please. :)I appreciate the quality of the reviews given here. It's nice in general when someone reads your story and comments, but you don't get quality reviews from every reader in the library.

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Posted May 26 2012 - 04:34 PM

To Take the Stars from the Sky, by D.A.V.E., reviewed.JRRT
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Posted May 26 2012 - 05:00 PM

In the Jungle, by Nuile: The Daft Wordbender, please. :)I appreciate the quality of the reviews given here. It's nice in general when someone reads your story and comments, but you don't get quality reviews from every reader in the library.

From the desk of Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:

Yes, the SSCC prides itself on quality. On that note, Zaxvo will be handling your request. Thank you, Nuile. :)-Ced

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Posted May 28 2012 - 09:29 AM

GC12 has been reviewed. I apologize for the lateness; I know it means a strike against my name.
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Posted May 29 2012 - 06:20 AM

Hey guys. I'm sure everybody and their muaka is asking for a review what with the contest and all, so don't worry if you can't get to this one for a while.Lhii the Surfer - Tekulo: Toa of Gales
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Posted May 29 2012 - 06:48 AM

I might as well...Shadow of the Wind - BaltaEDIT: A topic has been made.

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