Maganar

Definitely the MOC with the most different ingenious piece usages I've ever seen. I can't decide whether the the Aqua Raiders system harpoon guns, the squashed Nynrah Ghostblaster tube or the Hordika/Visorak ripcords are the most clever. I can, however, decide on a favorite body part: epic head! That head is...amazing.That said, the Knights' Kingdom helmet seems to stand out when viewed from directly behind, but I really can't complain about something that minor on a MOC that is this great overall. Astounding, easily a 9.5+ out of 10. From the front: 10/10; I just can't find anything I don't like about it when viewed from that angle.

Well this is awesome. The scaling is perfect for a McToran; I love how the gunwhales come up just underneath Macku's arms. Nice job in keeping the sleekness continous even on the underside; I would have probably gotten lazy and not perfected the bottom the same way you did had I been the one making the canoe. Very nice!

Review time! :yes:OK, here's the lowdown: I like the Rahi's-perspective opener. You'd had inhabitant POV openings before and it was nice to see one that was a little more different, seeing from a non-sentient's POV. Of course, there probably aren't a whole lot of sentient inhabitants to Durgolund in the first place...The next part had been rather run-of-the-mill dialogue filling in the latest developments, not that I would change that. It's needed to put things in order, I'm just saying that there is little to remark upon there.Then, Tobduk's introspection. I recall something from an earlier installment where you mentioned that Tobduk raged and battled to keep from ever dwelling on the fate of his homeland, or something along those lines. When you returned to that point, but now he was intentionally focusing on these memories to remove his hatred and replace it with grief, that caught me off guard. You kinda let it creep up on us and that was really great.One thing I would have liked, though, would have been a bit more physical description of Durgolund's hostility. My imagination was running wild and it wanted some descriptors to fill in the gaps with. For all I know, you could plan to flesh it out more when Tobduk arrives, but that would be one thing I want to hear about. The place sounds nightmarish, and I want to more than you've said so far! :(So far, so good. I'll let you do your thing until I've seen some more chapters.

Color schemes. That's the one big thing to improve. Most of the designs and basic construction are unique and flow nicely. A couple awkward pieces, but the actual builds are really good overall. Now, that's my overview of the team - let me look at each one specifically.Ginaku: one of the best you have here, IMO. The yellow/keetorange color scheme is not preferable, but fully understandable if you were low on pieces of those colors. Shield strapped to the arm is very cool.Lenfark: I'm not sure about those pseudo-limbs sprouting from his shoulders. Otherwise, nice build but too many colors. Luckily, you balanced the amounts of each color here, so that mitigates the downside of there being too many colors.Morphix: color scheme is not a problem on this one! Yay! Not much for me to say, nothing struck me as exceptional beyond that. I like this one, too.Angruhil: This was the main one for the "awkward pieces" I noted earlier. I'm not sure those - are they Knights' Kingdom? - pieces work out. They seem a little clunky. Aside from that, nice build, just clean up the color scheme if you want to make it even better.Gravlix: my other favorite, with Ginaku. Color scheme is acceptable here, and the weapon is uber-cool. Yeah, the two G's are definitely my favorites. :smeag:Jehu: This is the only one I didn't like as much, ironically. The lanky build makes sense for someone who rarely lives outside of a suit, but it seemed a little straightforward of build even considering that. As I said with most of the others, the color scheme would be the main point to improve upon, but they were generally acceptable. Jehu, on the other hand, possesses a smattering of colors that really ought to be dealt with. On a more complimentary note, that exo-suit's pretty nifty.So, really cool MOCs you clearly spent quite some time on. I like most of them as they are, but the color schemes would be the thing to deal with if you want to improve them further. Jehu's the only one I think is lacking, and would probably benefit from being redone. Awesome work!

It's already been noted that this is short, so I won't bother with touching on that subject.You did a good job of building a scene, using lots of detail. It was easy to picture it in my head.Endings that leave the reader to determine the prior events are a pretty well-established way to conclude short stories due to their very nature: short. So that's fine. Plus, I like having something I think about when I finish reading something. One thing you could have done to build on that, though, would have been to leave cryptic indications to the preceding events, but being pointedly unclear. As is, there is no indication as to what potential motives or events occured earlier (aside the obvious quintuple murder, but that is little to go by). If you write another - I like Waffles word choice on this - vignette (more so than a full length short) like this, leave some cryptic clues to give the reader something to think about and it'll be even better!

Well, part of the reason I had solved those Christie mysteries was because of the sheer volume of attempts I had and the reduced cast of characters in the short stories. The collection I'm reading right now has eighteen shorts and I got like three or four right or something like that. I only had one shot to get yours right, not eighteen, but the surprise I got still warranted the comparison. Just don't bloat your ego just yet, I was only saying you caught me off guard even after I had should have pre-empted a twist ending, not that you had topped Christie. http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/tounge2.gif As for your sci-fantasy touch, well, it just wouldn't be you if you didn't have that!I had neglected BZP for the last month due to my responsibilities as a yearbook editor. You see, we're just about to ship off the finalized copy of the book to the printers and the workload is at a max. However, things have calmed down and I had time to finally read all your earlier installments (well, most - I still need to read Disassemby Line) and I can now make a comparison! Honestly, your earllier work wasn't as lacking as you had indicated in an eariler reply to me, but it has still clearly improved. As of yet, Dark Moonlight is the apex of your work. That's the thing that has me most psyched for The Poisoned Island; you seem to continually make each work more impressive. Keep it up.

I'd try to calm Zarohum down if I wasn't cowering behind him, offering him up as a sacrifice to the mosquito in the hope that it will then spare my life. That thing is creepy! Way too realistic for my comfort...nah, just kidding. I would never serve Zarohum up to an insectoid foe http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/fear.gif - Wait, there isn't anything like this in real life, right?There isn't really a whole lot for me to say here other than it's just so frighteningly realistic there isn't anything major to improve. The red zamors would have been cool had you had them back when you made this, but seeing as you didn't, that wasn't an option. The zamor-holder abdomen was an ingenious idea in general....and about the mosquitoes in Alaska and Minnesota: I've been to both states. When I was in Minnesota, I saw a keychain at a tourist shop with an image of a mosquito on it, reading "[a native mosquito specie's scientific name], the state bird of Minnesota." Just as a note, the biggest ones I've ever seen weren't in Minnesota, but in Alaska.

Those things are awesome! I should probably specify what I mean by "things," right? Uh...ears, hair, headress? I'm not really sure, but those...head things...are awesome! I know all you did was strap on those Mahri wing/fins, but it looks great.Both MOCs are nice work for the most part, but I feel the male needs some more attention to the hands. The Avohkii just aren't giving my the right vibe. These are well-put together. Nice work.

Chirox next? I'll be sure to come and see. As for this MOC here are my thoughts:I agree with Sumiki on the funkiness of the chest, but I also believe a matter of personal preference goes into that and if you like it, it's good. Likewise, I also agree on the necessity to attend to the legs more so than anything else.The feet you built were pretty clever and I really liked those. The general use of spiky and prodded pieces clearly established an intimidating aura, which is something a Makuta ought to have. The original set lacked that fearsomeness, but this certainly doesn't.Now, as for the weapon, it is both something out of a nightmare and something I fell in love with at first sight. I mean: braided flail = pure win!As I said, I can't wait to see any future revamps of yours. This one was a wonderfully built improvement.

Wretched Automaton stated things pretty clearly. I agree with him on just about everything he said.One side-note to be mentioned is that Makuta did have a tendency for lots of back-up plans. Granted, a lot of the plans we thought to be back-up plans initially were actually either part of the one Plan or intentional distractions, we would eventually find out when he assumed control of the MU robot. Regardless, maybe the Nui stone was just another back-up plan or distraction - as well as potentially an artifact to strengthen a Shadow Toa enforcer as almost everyone has suggested. It's hard to tell, because it has always been hard to tell Teridax's motives. What was clearly a main directive at certain story points is revealed to be a distraction; what was once a back-up plan proves to be a component of the master Plan; what was an optional directive is exposed to be crucial to his success. Makuta always has been tricky and unpredictable, but we knew at least most of his plans after the main story's finale and that leads me to back up Automaton.

Interesting...we could have had a plot hole as large as the hole in Makuta's head come Jan. 2011 if GregF hadn't mentioned a Great Being in hiding during the serials! Honestly, a very clever deduction and it deserved the 'Key to Nongu.' There is little other in the way of plausible explanations and I have no choice but to unconditionally accept this as an unconfirmed piece of canon after reading the argument you made. This theory pulls together info from a lot of different sources of canon and successfully incorporates all of them. Nice thinking.

Sorry about the length, I'm giving a review on the last several chapters as I have been side-tracked recently... ...That was a dramatic ending! Expert execution in mixing a number of legitimate hints with numerous red herrings. I suspected someone would end up infected once the endless references to the rage-inducing saliva were made, but I never took the time to guess who in my desperation to uncover the truth. Your earllier note that the monstrous Rahi would not be the star beasts in this installment were incredibly true; the beasts that lied within that you invented were far more terrifying!Just so you know, I'd been reading a bunch of Agatha Christie short stories prior to reading the ending of Dark Moonlight. I'd solved several right and had been priding myself in successfully seeing through the Queen of Mystery's deceptions a couple times and then - WHAM! - I read this and just about jump out of my seat at the final revelations. Never saw them coming and you left some decent clues. That was a professional finale.The way you alluded to the events of the sea monster battle but avoided describing them in order to return to the events more germane to the mystery was well thought out. However, I would have appreciated it if you had mentioned the battle not only in dialogue, but said something vague about the battle in one of the character's heads to flesh it out a bit (e.g. "Tobduk pushed the thoughts of thrashing tentacles and water that seethed with his own rage aside. He needed to focus on the task at hand."). I only say this because it is my credo that I always try to find at least one negative to help someone improve, but I really had to struggle to find something in here. It was great.Final words: I am excited to see how you have tied the last three issues of Makuta Hunt together with the insidious Makuta Droth that seems to lurk behind it all. The tension is building to witness the battle on the land that Luporax so vividly described with his last words that you indicate will soon occur. I am waiting for more epicness now. I trust you will deliver.Ok, I'm done here. Hope this covers everything and thanks again for writing Dark Moonlight!

The latest additions are also great. The modifications you drew into Hahli's mask were perfect. Her mask no longer looks like something meant to scare away the unsuspecting and more like the facially-attached item of power it is supposed to be. Take heed, though, there seems to be a perspective problem in the image with Hahli and Nuparu that makes Hahli appear noticeably taller than Nuparu. She is closer to the viewer, as the position of her feet indicates, but she is also hunched over. You increased her size as much as would be necessary had she not been hunched over, but was still closer to the viewer. Hence, the impression that she is slightly taller than Nuparu. All in all, that's pretty minor and I had to sit here scratching my head for quite a while before I was able to pinpoint what it was that was confusing me as I looked at that image. 'Grats on more spectacular work.

I think it's pretty clear Makuta initially saw his actions as just setting the record straight. He just wanted to make it clear who had really done all the work, who had been taking care of everything, and, frankly, who he saw as in charge - himself and the other Makuta. At first, we could say, he saw himself as trying to be a sort of hero and champion of good for his brethren.In time though, that didn't seem to work. No one got his message, and he turned to morally and ethically questionable means to attain his goals. When that continued to be ineffective, I think he stopped viewing the world as right and wrong - just whether it suited him or not. In the end, I think Makuta is just a case of someone who doesn't see any fairness in the world (because he never got his credit) and therefore felt that it didn't matter if he did supposedly evil things. If the world wasn't fair, what did anything at all matter? Why shouldn't he take power at the expense of others? In the end, I don't think he saw anything as good or evil, much less viewed himself as one or the other. He'd just given up on playing the hero.

Overall, amazing. Water is a particularly tricky subject to render on paper and you gave the right impression. Everything was great, but I could agree with the 1st Shadow on the part about something to differentiate the body parts that are underwater. Since the water is very calm, perhaps not distortion from ripples, but maybe it should be paler in color...or darker. I'm not entirely sure, I just feel that one or the other might give the right effect. I haven't really done any subjects in water before...Well, whatever. I really like it.

Toxin excels at projecting an eeriness and the tubes and pipes sell it in a way that perfectly fits with your backstory. Nothing much to say here, because it's just awesome and there isn't much to complain about.Maruader's lower body and upper body are both great...but they don't entirely fit together. The lower portion is much more bulky in nature, and the top almost seems spindly. Other than the extreme dichotomy between the lower and upper body, however, and Marauder is going golden just like Toxin....or green, not golden, I guess. http://www.bzpower.com/board/public/style_emoticons/default/tounge2.gif

Well...that's really awesome.The heads in his chest befuddle me. I just can't fathom how you pulled that off. Everything fits and flows. Other than the widely-noted expert head usage, nothing in particular strikes me. I don't mean that in the sense that it is boring - I mean it in the sense that it all flows so well I can't think of anything else else to say other than it looks really cool.

The time you spent shows. Nice work.Especially cool is the choice of pieces. Your carefully chosen pieces give the main body an appearance that resembles reptilian scales and the head and arms a mechanical look. Actually, everything looks both scaly and mechanical simultaneously. So that's why I say the time spent is apparent. The only way to find the right piece is to find all the wrong ones until there is one left that was the most scaly and mechanical, which you quite clearly did for every piece. Awesome work.

As you know, the main body is the gem of this creation. It is solid and just seems to feel right when you look at it. Interestingly enough, despite their afterthought construction, the legs have the right gait. If you (and you said it was a probably) revisit this, start from scratch on the legs as you most likely planned to anyways, but build the new ones to have a similar gait.The arms aren't too bad, but they need to either be shorter or longer. If you want it to be a construction or melee fighting mech, it needs longer arms to reah outwards from the body - they wouldn't be able to do much as they are. It you want a ranged-type combat mech or something of the like, shorten the arms to keep them in a little closer to the body. The Kanoka launcher with the laser sight or whatever suggests the latter and the Lehrak staff type moreso suggests the former, so you could make it work either way. Just choose one to focus more on and eliiminate the middly-lengthedness of the arms because they look a bit awkward as is.Otherwise... *Whisper* It's C'est magnifique! *Wink*

I came to this this topic fully expecting someone to have already mentioned this quote, but -somehow- iy has evaded everyone else's memory."I'm here to kill you.""Oh. I knew there was something I liked about you!" - Mazeka and VezonHonestly, I like most of the epic quotes that reach inside and touch something in you just as much or probably more than the funny ones, but all the best have already been mentioned. There isn't really a point in reiterating.I have to say, reading this topic I found myself alternatively shifting from uncontrollable fits of laughter to periods of solemnly remembering some of the most emotional parts of the storyline. I largely ignored the "worst quotes" people brought up because I can't think of any garishly awful quotes and the ones most people have been discussing are more so cheesy than anything else. I understand that GregF needed to throw in a couple lines (esp. in the movie scripts) that make older audiences cringe slightly in order to maintain the interest of the younger age group that provided TLG with a hefty source of income that allowed the line to continue. To be honest, there weren't really any truly ghastly quotes even in the movies. The few perpetrators of extreme cheesiness are the couple everyone keeps bringing up "Cause that what friends do." and "Woohoo!" Let's be fair. Two dreadful ones among all that canon isn't all that bad and the veritable plethora of amazing quotes that keep coming up in droves is simply awesome.

Heavens above. I'm not sure I can choose a favorite among all of those. Regardless, Taipu said it like it is for most amusing power. Just imagine if you had the power to make somewhat act like Vezon for your amusement. Just a little high-tier confusion power and *poof* you can make someone start babbling as incoherently as him while giving you a look like . You can't deny it - everyone gets a kick out of his antics....So Confusion would provide endless entertainment!

Considering he was a venom eel at the time, I have to question is Zaktan would have been capable of dispersing into protodites. I'd assumed they'd kind of merged into an amalgum when that happened and could no longer be separated. However, I still place it as reasonably possible that Zaktan really is the driving force behind our new friend Goldie. The green mist is crazy suspicious and there wasn't anything in canon to indicate the protodites had fused when he mutated into a venom eel.I'm still unsure...but if it is Zaktan and we find out - I'm throwing a giant party. Zaktan was possibly my favorite villain.*sniffsniff* I miss you Zaktan...Yo yo Piraka!