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#121 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Mar 23 2012 - 07:57 PM

The Wraith has been reviewed. Sorry for the lateness.
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#122 Offline The Otter

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 10:51 AM

The Wraith has been reviewed. Sorry for the lateness.

I mind not. :P

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#123 Offline The Renegade Emperor

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 11:11 AM

Here it is:[url=http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=3761]SSC #9 Entry: I Will Return[/url] - Lord of the RingsHope I did the format the right way...Thanks very much!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth
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#124 Offline Grantaire

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 11:15 AM

This is it.Also, the Critics club isn't accepting reviews as of now, you'll have to wait until the next round.

Edited by Zarayna: The Quiet Light, Mar 24 2012 - 11:17 AM.

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#125 Offline The Otter

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 11:15 AM

Here it is:SSC #9 Entry: I Will Return - Lord of the RingsHope I did the format the right way...Thanks very much!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

I...think I fixed it. Not quite sure. That was a really odd thing with all the colors and what-not.EDIT: Hey, I did. And Zarayna didn't. I feel so proud of myself. :lol:

Edited by Kal Grochi, Mar 24 2012 - 11:16 AM.

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#126 Offline The Renegade Emperor

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 11:18 AM

Here it is:SSC #9 Entry: I Will Return - Lord of the RingsHope I did the format the right way...Thanks very much!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

I...think I fixed it. Not quite sure. That was a really odd thing with all the colors and what-not.EDIT: Hey, I did. And Zarayna didn't. I feel so proud of myself. :lol:

Thanks to both, I'm not so practical with those formats!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

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#127 Offline The Otter

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 11:20 AM

Here it is:SSC #9 Entry: I Will Return - Lord of the RingsHope I did the format the right way...Thanks very much!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

I...think I fixed it. Not quite sure. That was a really odd thing with all the colors and what-not.EDIT: Hey, I did. And Zarayna didn't. I feel so proud of myself. :lol:

Thanks to both, I'm not so practical with those formats!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

The new forum style trips me up sometimes too. For a while I had to switch back to all BBCode to do links, but I figured out how to do that with the regular forum.I don't know how I'll teach you, though. I don't really even know my own process. .-.

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#128 Offline The Renegade Emperor

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Posted Mar 24 2012 - 11:23 AM

Well, thanks for the efforts. I'll have to get someone teachin' me!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth
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#129 Offline Jedi Master J.

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Posted Mar 27 2012 - 12:39 AM

As requested, I have reviewed Glatorian Chronicles #11: Obsidian Among the Frost. Apologizes for the slight lateness.Posted Image
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Posted Mar 27 2012 - 01:12 AM

And I have reviewed Oasis. With that we are accepting requests again. I'll take the two that were already posted here, since I never updated the main post saying we weren't taking requests, so that means three more requests until we stop allowing them again. Also, there will probably be some slight changes in the way things work in the near future, but I'll announce that later on if things actually happen.(Also, I realize I have not replied to two critics [one a potential critic] who have PMed me...apologies for that, I will try to respond tomorrow)Posted Image

Edited by Velox, Mar 27 2012 - 01:13 AM.

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#131 Offline Despair

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Posted Mar 27 2012 - 01:40 AM

Reinforcements by Despair.First fan fiction I've written, so any criticism is appreciated. :biggrin:
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#132 Offline L'Etranger

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Posted Mar 27 2012 - 04:56 PM

http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4050 (Blood On The Sand) -Lord Darkon
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Posted Mar 29 2012 - 06:51 PM

Kingdoms by ClickThanks in advance, I've been wanting some very professional, very thorough critique for a while now!

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#134 Offline Velox

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Posted Mar 29 2012 - 11:22 PM

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I Will Return by Lord of the Rings -- Assigned to JinklemeisterReinforcements by Despair -- Assigned to Tyler Durden

Blood on the Sand by Lord Darkon -- Assigned to ZaxvoKingdoms by Click -- Assigned to TheMightyFighty (now some other name which I shall look up later =P)

I swear there were five stories, so if I missed one let me know -- otherwise, we will accept one more request, and I will review it. Also, I would like to announce the newest critic: Jinklemeister. I'm sure he'll do great. Posted Image

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Posted Mar 31 2012 - 10:04 PM

Well, if you don't have a fifth, I'm jumping in.Shadows by Kal Grochi.I warn you, it will be a weird read until the end, possibly.

Edited by Kal Grochi, Mar 31 2012 - 10:11 PM.

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Posted Apr 01 2012 - 10:26 PM

And I've reviewed Blood on the Sand by Lord Darkon
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Posted Apr 04 2012 - 03:40 PM

I might need an extra day or two to finish my review: I have a killer biology packet (around 285 multiple choice questions alone) I've been working on since Monday, so I'm focusing on finishing that up.Thanks in advance and sorry to Despair for the inconvenience.-Teezy
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Posted Apr 04 2012 - 05:40 PM

It isn't a problem. I'd wait for a month if it meant getting some good criticism on something I wrote.Just know that I have pretty high expectations for you. :P
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Posted Apr 09 2012 - 08:12 PM

So, it's been over a week now. Are we going to be taking new requests soon?-Ced
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#140 Offline Parks and Rekt

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Posted Apr 10 2012 - 01:23 PM

I'll have my review up today, then I'll be ready. Been a bit delayed with Easter break schoolwork and staying with family.-Teezy
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#141 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 11 2012 - 01:44 AM

Yeah, sorry everyone...I haven't been on the computer much because of the Easter Triduum, Easter itself, and now I'm on vacation. I'll try to get my reviews up soon (I'm also taking Tolkien's from last time, as he's taking a short hiatus). I'll let in more requests once at least a couple more of these are reviewed. Sorry again, and thank you everyone for your patience. Posted Image
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Posted Apr 13 2012 - 01:31 PM

In the meantime, if any writers want their stories reviewed, or [Velox], if there are any that need reviewing, drop me a PM. I can do them.
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Posted Apr 13 2012 - 07:42 PM

By the way, TheMightyFighty now goes by Shawn Spencer. PSYCH!! (no, seriously though, double PSYCHED you out in the end!!)

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Posted Apr 14 2012 - 12:51 PM

Uhm, Jinklemeister seems to have taken a vacation... Well, I'll wait some more. It's the entire life I've been waiting for something!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth
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#145 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 15 2012 - 03:49 AM

Alrighty, I've finished my two reviews, and Jinklemeister and Shawn Spencer have been PMed; I will take their stories if they do not reply soon.So with that: We are now accepting five (5) more requests!Sorry again for the delay, everyone. Posted Image
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Posted Apr 15 2012 - 01:11 PM

Warm, by Grant SudAnother CoT story. :B
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Posted Apr 15 2012 - 02:37 PM

Alrighty, I've finished my two reviews, and Jinklemeister and Shawn Spencer have been PMed; I will take their stories if they do not reply soon.So with that: We are now accepting five (5) more requests!Sorry again for the delay, everyone. Posted Image

Why thank you, kind sir.This is twice I've had the person in charge of the respective critic club critique my writing. How odd.

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Posted Apr 15 2012 - 05:49 PM

Rivalry (http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4288) - Lord Darkon

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#149 Offline Parks and Rekt

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Posted Apr 16 2012 - 05:36 PM

And Reinforcements has been reviewed. Sorry to Despair for the delay and thanks to Velox for the extension.-Teezy
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#150 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 17 2012 - 12:32 AM

ATTENTION CRITICS AND CUSTOMERS

Starting today there's going to be a change in how things are done. From now on, there is no "five requests at a time rule." There is no "List" -- or at least not in the way it was used before. Instead, there is no request limit. From this point on, as soon as a request comes in, I will be assigning it to a critic by both posting here and PMing said critic. Critics will then have one week, as usual, to complete their assigned story. I will simply rotate through the list. However, if every critic currently active already has a story assigned to them, we will stop accepting requests until a critic has completed their review. As such, every time I post an assignment, I will include whether or not we are still accepting requests, so keep checking my recent posts.

What does this mean for customers?

Not much, except that we should be able to accept more things more quickly. All you have to do is, as I said, check a recent post of mine to see if we are currently accepting requests and then read the front page like always and use the proper format when requesting.

For those two requests we have currently, I will be taking on and Cederak will be taking the other; from here on out new requests will follow the new system.

All critics will be receiving a PM shortly, so if you do not receive a PM, please PM me.

Also, I would like to announce that Cederak will be joining me as Co-Curator (who has excellently run the ECC, is a great critic, and has helped me with this new system).

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Posted Apr 17 2012 - 06:21 AM

I think I love this system.-Teezy
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#152 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 17 2012 - 06:43 PM

Warm, by Grant SudAnother CoT story. :B

Assigned to myself.

Rivalry (http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4288) - Lord Darkon

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Posted Apr 17 2012 - 11:55 PM

What about Kingdoms (Mine)?
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Posted Apr 18 2012 - 12:47 AM

That and "I Will Return" have been assigned to critics who unfortunately became inactive without any warning. I'm giving them a couple days to respond and if they don't, then either myself or someone else will review them. =] Sorry for the delay, and I appreciate your patience.Posted Image
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Posted Apr 18 2012 - 12:00 PM

My first Bionicle SS.My Old Friend - thebeggerpie
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Posted Apr 19 2012 - 06:45 AM

That and "I Will Return" have been assigned to critics who unfortunately became inactive without any warning. I'm giving them a couple days to respond and if they don't, then either myself or someone else will review them. =] Sorry for the delay, and I appreciate your patience.Posted Image

I was born patient, so thanks for the efforts anyways!----- Lord of the Rings -----Titles: Dark Lord, Lord of Mordor, Lord of Gifts, Lord of Barad-Dûr, Lord of the Earth

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Posted Apr 20 2012 - 01:32 PM

Rivalry, by Lord Darkon has been reviewed.-Ced
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Posted Apr 20 2012 - 06:34 PM

My first Bionicle SS.My Old Friend - thebeggerpie

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Posted Apr 20 2012 - 06:35 PM

Welp. Guess I should get on that then.-Teezy
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Posted Apr 23 2012 - 08:17 AM

My first Hero Factory SS, though certainly not my first SS. I don't want to be picky, but a reviewer will get more out of this if they follow Hero Factory. Naturally. XDSundown - Lord Ghirahim (AKA Angel Bob)

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