1. How hard you worked on this, honestly, is a bit irrelevant to the quality of the final product.2. If you have trouble spelling, can't you just copy it to Microsoft Word and spellcheck it?3. If this is meant to make "teachers cringe," then let me ask, WHY ARE YOU SUGGESTING WE DO THE POSITIVE ONES? That'll still make them "cringe," and let's face it, I don't think it's possible to make that reaction in a positive way.4. The play system.... really.... I don't get. The last row, I have no idea what that was about. Could you possibly explain better?5. A minor nitpick, but your text size is pretty inconsistent. Sorry.6. If you were using GIMP, it really doesn't show. What exactly did you use it for? Judging by all the content in the comic, I think it'd have to be select areas in the text. If that was the case, why didn't you just do all of it in GIMP, as opposed to the different sizes of GIMP and Paint?7. Please, please don't use a bleep sound like in the first panel. I commonly censor it in my comics as part of a joke, but here, it comes off more as you deliberately trying to sound mature, making you look more like a child, and generally rude.8. Please don't use intros like that. Seriously, Dark709, lavaside rahi, Gavla, do any near-professional-level comic topics have ANYTHING LIKE THAT? No. I know it seems nice at first, but it comes off more noobish, as it seems you're putting more dedication into a few lines of someone else's work on the topic than the actual comic itself.9. By far, the most important thing I need to identify:What does this have to do with Bionicle for that matter?Just because you put a bohrok with a poorly slapped-on Hau Nuva on it DOESN'T MAKE IT COUNT AS A BIONICLE COMIC. Bionicle or Bionicle characters have to be the focus! You can't just put a "production notice" with a Bionicle charcter on it to make it a Bionicle comic.