Rahkshi Lalonde Posted September 5, 2014 Posted September 5, 2014 (edited) well, this is a project i'v had in the pipes (the pipes in my brain) for a while now, and hey, it's about time it showed some fruit! it's worth mentioning (to me at least) that this was going to be written, and in the Epics forum. but, as you can see in my Art Topic, that has clearly changed. another note: this'll get kinda dark, but I'm trying my darndest to keep it within BZP appropriate levels of dark (nothing worse than slight oozing blood-analogue from the mechzombies is all.) and, though i'm quite capable of drawing someone getting disemboweled in full view, (no i won't link that!) i like my proto where it is, thank you. ^haha, look at the rambling, this is a comic topic! where's the comic? The Cast: Nita The Comic: Latest Page Chapter one An initiation worth writing home about. 01 02 03 04 05 06 07 08 09 10 11 Edited August 14, 2021 by Rahkshi Lalonde updating Nita's profile link! 8 Quote
Voxumo Posted September 5, 2014 Posted September 5, 2014 Despite having no clue as to the plot, or anything, just those first three pages weave a story of their own. Looking forward to more. Quote Banner made by Onaku BZPRPG CHARACTERS Syvra-Tivanu If you interact with one of my characters and I don't respond or acknowledge the interaction within a day, send me a PM. Odds are I missed or did not see the post.
TBK Posted September 6, 2014 Posted September 6, 2014 I actually really like this already, especially considering that it's one of the only comics here with a darker, more serious tone. (And I just have a soft spot for hand-drawn comics.) I'm looking forward to watching this Grim tale unfold. Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted September 6, 2014 Author Posted September 6, 2014 wow, a decent reception already, and i haven't even gotten to plot stuff yet! also, page 4 is up. not as happy with this one. i think it's the fact i couldn't get that swing blur to look right. Quote
Chro Posted September 7, 2014 Posted September 7, 2014 Looks okay to me. Quote save not only their lives but their spirits
Calvirick Posted September 10, 2014 Posted September 10, 2014 I think your strongest point, as far as composition, is your color. I love dreary colors like the ones you've successfully used. I'm super interested to see how you develop this. Quote
Pohatu: Uniter of Stone Posted September 12, 2014 Posted September 12, 2014 More please! I haven't seen a hand drawn comic like this in a while! Quote I HATE SCORPIOS ~Pohatu Master of Stone, 2015
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted September 19, 2014 Author Posted September 19, 2014 well, took me long enough. Pages 5 and 6 are up! (also, i misspelled "apocalypse" in the tags, oopsie.) Quote
Pohatu: Uniter of Stone Posted September 19, 2014 Posted September 19, 2014 It looks like you were saying Balk and Kraw in the fifth comic. Was that meant as a Mixels reference? Quote I HATE SCORPIOS ~Pohatu Master of Stone, 2015
Calvirick Posted September 19, 2014 Posted September 19, 2014 I would hope that you don't get discouraged, but I can't tell what that monster is. Do you think you could explain what exactly it's supposed to be? Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted September 19, 2014 Author Posted September 19, 2014 I would hope that you don't get discouraged, but I can't tell what that monster is. Do you think you could explain what exactly it's supposed to be? Luckily, we have our good in-universe friend Miranda "Meltdown" to handle this sort of question!The "Brutes" are a collection of seemingly related metallic titans. and they also seem to be the cause of the downfall the previous occupants of this city faced. they share physiological traits with one another, such as all having the same glowing red fluid and crystals all over their inner mass.Most Brutes bear simple steel claws or blades, but some higher tiers seem to carry highly unnatural blasters or projectile weapons, leading me to believe they are at least partially artificial. Possibly even fully artificial, as some sort of army! though, that does make the level of decay they sport a rather odd thing... As far as we can tell, their goal is to wipe out everyone who remains in the city, though that's only a guess based on what we've seen. I've made it my goal to study them to their fullest, find out what makes their crystalline hearts tick...Miranda Meltdown. Quote
Calvirick Posted September 20, 2014 Posted September 20, 2014 I would hope that you don't get discouraged, but I can't tell what that monster is. Do you think you could explain what exactly it's supposed to be? Luckily, we have our good in-universe friend Miranda "Meltdown" to handle this sort of question!The "Brutes" are a collection of seemingly related metallic titans. and they also seem to be the cause of the downfall the previous occupants of this city faced. they share physiological traits with one another, such as all having the same glowing red fluid and crystals all over their inner mass.Most Brutes bear simple steel claws or blades, but some higher tiers seem to carry highly unnatural blasters or projectile weapons, leading me to believe they are at least partially artificial. Possibly even fully artificial, as some sort of army! though, that does make the level of decay they sport a rather odd thing... As far as we can tell, their goal is to wipe out everyone who remains in the city, though that's only a guess based on what we've seen. I've made it my goal to study them to their fullest, find out what makes their crystalline hearts tick...Miranda Meltdown. Oh oh! I get it now. I had forgotten that you had written this already. That's super fascinating! Do you have like this entire story planned out? Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted September 24, 2014 Author Posted September 24, 2014 Today we learn that Brutes can't stand on pegleg. That's super fascinating! Do you have like this entire story planned out? Well, i have enough of it that i could give *major spoilers* if i wanted to. :v Quote
Calvirick Posted September 24, 2014 Posted September 24, 2014 Today we learn that Brutes can't stand on pegleg. That's super fascinating! Do you have like this entire story planned out? Well, i have enough of it that i could give *major spoilers* if i wanted to. :v Dang, now you've got me hooked. HAHA, you wouldn't say you've got this story written as far as LEGO did when they started Bionicle. I'm thoroughly hooked now. Quote
Chro Posted September 24, 2014 Posted September 24, 2014 (edited) they share physiological traits with one another, such as all having the same glowing red fluid and crystals all over their inner mass.inb4corruptedquaza spoipers It looks like you were saying Balk and Kraw in the fifth comic. Was that meant as a Mixels reference?I'd say that's probably just coincidentally Mixelesque sound effects. Edited September 24, 2014 by Chro Quote save not only their lives but their spirits
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted October 21, 2014 Author Posted October 21, 2014 it's been, what? a month?oops.Page eight!(is this too messy? if it's too messy i can edit that out. :i) page nine is, like, 20% done too, so idk, expect it but don't i guess? :u Quote
Pohatu: Uniter of Stone Posted October 22, 2014 Posted October 22, 2014 I've been wondering: which Hero Factory character is the brute in the current story based on? Quote I HATE SCORPIOS ~Pohatu Master of Stone, 2015
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted October 22, 2014 Author Posted October 22, 2014 I've been wondering: which Hero Factory character is the brute in the current story based on? Brute McBadguy the third. (its a nobody, only introduced to die off seven pages in. technically the story hasn't even started yet. :u) Quote
Agent_blackwasp Posted December 2, 2014 Posted December 2, 2014 Soo the next one should come around this month. Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted December 12, 2014 Author Posted December 12, 2014 (edited) Page Nine! the text miiight come across as forced? sorry. it is the first page to have conversational text, so future pages will sort themselves a bit better. :0 (also these pages shouldn't be coming so sloooowly. i'll pick up the pace, i swear!) Edited December 12, 2014 by Rahkshi Lalonde Quote
Specter Knight Posted December 12, 2014 Posted December 12, 2014 I don't know about you, But I think that "Currently nameless character" Should watch out for that bird. Quote (I'll do this eventually, I swear...) My BZPRPG Characters Corpus Rahkshi Characters: Kol Arsenal Swarm Amalgamation Skyrise Characters: Zavon
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted February 20, 2015 Author Posted February 20, 2015 sorry for all the delays (aaaaaaaall of them) figured i should throw you guys a bone here, Page 10 still working on technical difficulties, page 11 whenever. 2 Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted April 28, 2015 Author Posted April 28, 2015 Page Eleven! (sorta) eh, another new page coming soonish, but man, look at this plot twist here! Quote
Ghidora131 Posted April 28, 2015 Posted April 28, 2015 Whee fun happies Your art skill increased by 9000 Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted May 29, 2015 Author Posted May 29, 2015 okay, almost time for regular content to return, almost, just gotta familiarize myself with the style, setting, and Nita again, oops. in the meantime, part 12(?) of whatever is going on, and, a Nita Profile (Minor spoilers? [minor spoilers you all saw coming anyway?]) Quote
Naota Takizawa Posted May 29, 2015 Posted May 29, 2015 I love filler, that's why I watch Naruto. Anyway, I'll just sit and twiddle my thumbs until the next comic comes out. *Goes insane from boredom* Seriously, though, I liked reading the first 9 pages, the art style is great and it's darker tone helps the comic stand out. Quote If you like Pingu & want to support a good project, click here. Also, I've rejoined the BZPRPG & I have a new profile for a new game. Click here to see it.
SailorQuaoar Posted May 29, 2015 Posted May 29, 2015 (edited) I'm not always a fan of your cartoony art style, but you've made a really good comic here. It's actually hand-drawn, and you're able to evoke a good sense of atmosphere with the dark color palette. I'm actually intrigued by the characters and story. Is this a backstory for the Ordeal of Fire villains? So all in all, good job. One of the best comics currently up here. Edited May 29, 2015 by SailorQuaoar Quote
Rahkshi Lalonde Posted July 18, 2021 Author Posted July 18, 2021 Woah hey, turns out that that "technical Difficulty" i encountered ended up lasting, oh, say, seven years? how about that haha, well i think it's about time i dusted this off some, so without any further introduction, Pages 10 and 11 are here! 1 Quote
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