TERIDAX941 Posted September 21, 2017 Share Posted September 21, 2017 Wow that got deep quick! Kinda makes you stop and think for a bit. It's a nice element (no pun intended) that Tahu isn't one to just follow the virtues blindly like everyone seemed to do in the story, he has serious concerns about the ethics and the ups and downs of those. 1 Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted September 21, 2017 Author Share Posted September 21, 2017 (edited) Tried doing a few things differently with this page. It was cathartic after those last coupla' pages drained me. Edited September 21, 2017 by NickonAquaMagna 2 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
That Matoran with a Vahi Posted September 21, 2017 Share Posted September 21, 2017 I like where this is going even more now. It's still the classic overall storyline, but you've got such a fresh, new take on it... and I love the way you've seriously thought through things that a lot of fans - myself included - just took for granted without really considering, like the meaning behind the virtues. This comic captures everything I ever wanted from Bionicle, and more besides; looking forward to each new page ^^ Also, just for the record, if this was a real physical graphic novel? I would buy it right away. 2 Quote "New legends awake, but old lessons must be remembered. For that is the way of the BIONICLE." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted September 22, 2017 Author Share Posted September 22, 2017 I love how much the sky adds to these scenes. So glad I took those pictures when I did. Even if the quality isn't great, gumming them up to look appropriately cartoony for this isn't too hard. Enough with the exposition dumping, time to see some Rahi fighting in the present!Is what I'm sure some are thinking after these five pages of non-stop talking... don't worry, we're not far off from that. 3 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TERIDAX941 Posted September 23, 2017 Share Posted September 23, 2017 Go Takua! still enjoying things quite thoroughly! But yes, eager to see a battle Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted September 24, 2017 Author Share Posted September 24, 2017 Sorry to say this is it for now. I need a break, so I'm taking the week off. Hopefully the comic will resume this next saturday. What's everyone's impression of this so far? As far as the "first issue" and the first few pages of the next one go? Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted September 24, 2017 Share Posted September 24, 2017 It's really good so far! The worldbuilding is excellent and the storytelling is remarkably fitting. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CommanderKumo Posted September 24, 2017 Share Posted September 24, 2017 I like it! 1 Quote My Youtube channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UClo2J14RKmVtcnoJTv7g6PA , Bionicle films coming soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MechaAshura20 Posted September 24, 2017 Share Posted September 24, 2017 (edited) Wow, I cant believe Vakama just told Jaller to shut up. Edited September 24, 2017 by MechaAshura20 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted September 25, 2017 Author Share Posted September 25, 2017 Wow, I cant believe Vakama just told Jaller to shut up. He used their lord's name in vain. 1 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TERIDAX941 Posted September 25, 2017 Share Posted September 25, 2017 Love it so far! Eager to see how the next developments go! Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ta-metru_defender Posted September 26, 2017 Share Posted September 26, 2017 Can't wait to see the other Toa. Your art style's terrific. Also enjoying the introspective digression. Adds another layer to it, assuming you circle back round these themes. Which give that they're the Three Virtues, I don't see not happening. 2 Quote Hand-drawn, bespoke avatar by none other than Mushy the Mushroom. a body adrift in water, salt, and sky Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Iver Posted September 27, 2017 Share Posted September 27, 2017 Three cheers for well-done fantasy theologies! 2 Quote "You humans are absurd, Rook. Furious when you're not in control, terrified when you are. Pull it together." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steampunk Tahu Posted September 27, 2017 Share Posted September 27, 2017 Very nice, I still prefer the Toa washing up vs. crashing, buy your story seams much more fast paced than the original. I also prefer the concept of all male ta matoran, all female ga matoran ect, but that does restrict storytelling a bit. Anyways its a great start to the retelling. PS. That bit where Jala says "Mata Nui" and Vakama rebukes him was a stroke of genius.My comment was on the first page by the way.My comment was on the first page by the way. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted September 27, 2017 Author Share Posted September 27, 2017 Yeah.... ever since I saw that shot from the cancelled PC game of the cans falling from the sky, that image stuck with me and I was SO DISAPPOINTED when Dume and the other Turaga revealed that no, they'd been floating in the ocean for all that time. Given the later revelation that Mata Nui's robot body crash-landed on the planet, that he himself literally fell from space, I was even more dumbfounded by this retcon. It seems perfectly plausible to me that the Toa cans could've been EJECTED from the robot as he was falling and remained floating up there until the Turaga realized their heroes were taking too long to show up and appointed Takua to summon them. ....and I think I just gave away another thing I've changed about this story (their pods being ejected while Mata Nui was still in space, I mean). Oh well. There's something weird about Ga-Matoran and Toa of water being uniformly female. It pushes the stereotype of women being wiser and fairer than men and puts an undue burden on any given team's Toa of water to be the voice of reason when the male members fight or whatever. Makes you wonder how many Toa teams may've been dysfunctional to the point of disbanding if they didn't have the "girl ninja" tempering them. Changing that just seemed like a good idea. 1 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted September 28, 2017 Share Posted September 28, 2017 Actually yeah after the robot crashed it ejected the toa canisters. When Takua placed the stones to summon the Toa 1000 years later is when the canisters propelled themselves toward the island. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted September 28, 2017 Author Share Posted September 28, 2017 Actually yeah after the robot crashed it ejected the toa canisters. When Takua placed the stones to summon the Toa 1000 years later is when the canisters propelled themselves toward the island. Oh yeah. I'm just saying I thought it'd be neat if they were ejected on the way down before Mata Nui landed, as if to make it harder for Makuta to intercept the canisters somehow. 1 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steampunk Tahu Posted September 29, 2017 Share Posted September 29, 2017 Yeah.... ever since I saw that shot from the cancelled PC game of the cans falling from the sky, that image stuck with me and I was SO DISAPPOINTED when Dume and the other Turaga revealed that no, they'd been floating in the ocean for all that time. Given the later revelation that Mata Nui's robot body crash-landed on the planet, that he himself literally fell from space, I was even more dumbfounded by this retcon. It seems perfectly plausible to me that the Toa cans could've been EJECTED from the robot as he was falling and remained floating up there until the Turaga realized their heroes were taking too long to show up and appointed Takua to summon them. ....and I think I just gave away another thing I've changed about this story (their pods being ejected while Mata Nui was still in space, I mean). Oh well. There's something weird about Ga-Matoran and Toa of water being uniformly female. It pushes the stereotype of women being wiser and fairer than men and puts an undue burden on any given team's Toa of water to be the voice of reason when the male members fight or whatever. Makes you wonder how many Toa teams may've been dysfunctional to the point of disbanding if they didn't have the "girl ninja" tempering them. Changing that just seemed like a good idea. Yeah, your changes make a better story, I'm just getting nostalgic about the original, keep up the great work. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lemony Lepid Posted October 1, 2017 Share Posted October 1, 2017 I would love more of Le-Wahi. Just that one frame of Lewa being covered in paint and flowers was so laughably amazing that I want more. Oh, uh, and the other stuff going on is good too, I guess. Quote ~~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evil_jaga_genius Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 I'm intrigued that Takua doesn't mention his friends dying, just that he'll probably never see them again, that they're 'taken away'... I have a theory. There was a cut part of MNOG where there was supposed to be a seventh village of shadowy Matoran who worshiped Makuta - did the Matoran Takua's talking about turn into that hidden shadow village? I'm so... happy to see all this come to life. MNOG is by far my favorite piece of Bionicle, and seeing revived like this with the little twists you give it... it's fantastic. Everything just fits. And thank you for keeping the sci-fi part of the world intact, that there are scientists and machines alongside stuff like the sun being an angry face in the sky. I don't know, it seems like there's this trend whenever people try to re-imagine Bionicle, that everyone's just these ordinary tribal islanders and all the weird tech you see in MNOG just falls by the wayside. And it just doesn't (pardon the pun) click the way Bionicle itself did. I'm so glad you've kept that steampunk-sci-fi stuff in. It feels right, it feels like home. And... sheesk, the attention to detail here is crazy! Vakama, with his welding mask, his Metru armor pieces, those crazy eyebrows... Nixie with her telescope, the candle-head Onu-Matoran, Makuta constantly whispering to Tahu to sleep and slumber, everything. Everywhere I look there's so much Bionicle layered down, woven together, and like I said before - it all fits. Not like everything is supposed to be an overt reference to 'the good old days', but how all the different details have been drawn closer together, tighter, more coherent than they were to begin with. And I can't get over how awesome that is. I know you're trying to build up tension in the plot, but I can't help but take a relaxing breath when I see all this. It really does feel like home to me. On one final note, I'm sure some people have realized that I've been using one of your Nui-Jaga artworks as an avatar for the past few years. I got so hyped seeing those Rahi silhouettes in Takua's flashback! I can't wait to see how my favorite Rahi has evolved with your drawing style. So - keep up the fantastic work! 3 Quote Avatar by Nicholas Anderson (NickonAquaMagna)My blog: The Jaga's Nest Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted October 2, 2017 Author Share Posted October 2, 2017 (edited) Thanks. Sorry to say, this month is gonna be kinda crazy. I've begun work on the Planet Ripple trailer, but it's a collaborative effort so I'm still working things out with other people. I can only hope I'll have finished editing it in a week or so. Once that's out of the way and I've prepared everything I need for the convention, I'll get back to this. Wish me luck. And yeah, I know it feels a lot like MNOG right now.... but this story's gonna go some crazy places before it's over. I'm going to keep it as coherent as I can, but if there was only one year for finish Bionicle's story, well it's going to end up being very different and have a different message at the end. No 7th tribe, sorry to say. I only just found out about that unused concept yesterday. But the Matoran are being taken... somewhere. You'll find out later. Edited October 2, 2017 by NickonAquaMagna Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ta-metru_defender Posted October 3, 2017 Share Posted October 3, 2017 It's all good. Quality work takes time, especially something like this which is so unlike anything I've seen on BZP over the past fourteen-odd years. Can't wait for more. Quote Hand-drawn, bespoke avatar by none other than Mushy the Mushroom. a body adrift in water, salt, and sky Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TuragaNuva Posted October 11, 2017 Share Posted October 11, 2017 (edited) I've been meaning to read this since it was featured on the front page, but only just now got around to it. I'm so glad I did, though! This is a fantastic mix of classic elements of Bionicle's story with new, interesting, and bold ideas (and it certainly doesn't hurt that the art is amazing, too). I'm hooked! Feel free to take your time on updating, though. A new page every day is a lofty goal, and I know I would be more than happy with an update every week or so. Edited October 12, 2017 by TuragaNuva Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted October 12, 2017 Author Share Posted October 12, 2017 I'll get back to it soon. Right now, I basically just need one line for the Planet Ripple trailer, and then it's done. After that I've gotta finish a few commissions and I'll get back to updating this pretty regularly. One page a day... no way, then it would take years and years to finish this comic. I'm going to wrap it up within one year if I can help it. 1 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TERIDAX941 Posted October 12, 2017 Share Posted October 12, 2017 *happy dance* Can't wait! Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Meyres of Drifting Huna Posted July 23, 2018 Share Posted July 23, 2018 "This morning one of your fellow villagers tried to convince me the moon is a face." ...'Nuff said. This story is amazing. Quote Link to my comics coming soon... once I start them, that is. Also, credit to my cousin ~The 1st Shadow~ for my avatar Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted January 12, 2020 Author Share Posted January 12, 2020 Hey, everyone. I've been hard at work on this story (off and on) anyway and have finished, well... a good number of new pages that I've simply neglected to upload here. I'll start posting more soon, as I have more time for it. 5 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Great Spirit DM Posted January 29, 2020 Share Posted January 29, 2020 This is a remarkable retelling of the BIONICLE story. It reminds me of SAO Abridged, in which the original is so thoroughly deconstructed that the result is a deeper and more coherent narrative. I especially like Takua's character. The MNOG is by far the best part of BIONICLE and even without the mind-wipe, your presentation of Takua is more faithful to his characterization in the game than any other part of the BIONICLE canon. The art style is also brilliant. Scaling back on detail overall makes the more intricate parts--like Tahu's chest--stand out more. Great work, and I look forward to seeing more. Quote Conflux: BIONICLE Tabletop Combat System Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted January 30, 2020 Author Share Posted January 30, 2020 (edited) 7 hours ago, The Great Spirit DM said: This is a remarkable retelling of the BIONICLE story. It reminds me of SAO Abridged, in which the original is so thoroughly deconstructed that the result is a deeper and more coherent narrative. I especially like Takua's character. The MNOG is by far the best part of BIONICLE and even without the mind-wipe, your presentation of Takua is more faithful to his characterization in the game than any other part of the BIONICLE canon. The art style is also brilliant. Scaling back on detail overall makes the more intricate parts--like Tahu's chest--stand out more. Great work, and I look forward to seeing more. Thank you. Uploading some new pages tonight. But first... Some older pages that needed to be revised. The original uploads of these pages were just... insufferable to read after a while. I managed to trim the text down by about a 3rd, making it much more concise and less repetitive. Just goes to show what a difference a couple of years can make. Recommended that you enlarge these pages. Sorry the resolution isn't that great, but hey, that's BZP for ya. Gotta keep those file sizes below 750 kbs. If you want the proper resolution, I recommend going to my DA gallery. https://www.deviantart.com/nickonplanetripple/gallery/64101494/the-toa-a-bionicle-retelling Edited January 30, 2020 by NickonAquaMagna Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted January 30, 2020 Author Share Posted January 30, 2020 And now, finally... SOME NEW PAGES. Here we get our first look at a "river Tarakava." The turquoise toy was always stumpier than the blue one, so I like to imagine that's a sleeker ocean variety built to swim greater distances and depths. The Toa resumes! And we're riding this one 'til it's over. 4 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TERIDAX941 Posted January 30, 2020 Share Posted January 30, 2020 WOOHOO! Super excited to see this return! And wow way to make the Tarakava scary. Can't underestimate those punchy arms. 1 Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blue91233 Posted February 8, 2020 Share Posted February 8, 2020 I am enjoying this so far. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickonAquaMagna Posted February 9, 2020 Author Share Posted February 9, 2020 Well.... they made it to the Kini. A lot was covered in these pages! Feedback is appreciated. 4 Quote The Toa- A Bionicle Retelling by NickonAquaMagna http://www.bzpower.com/board/topic/25275-the-toa-a-retelling-of-bionicle/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TERIDAX941 Posted February 26, 2020 Share Posted February 26, 2020 So off topic a bit, and I feel really stupid about this, but I finally put two and two together and realized that you are the "Nick on Planet Ripple" who made all those LEGO Rewind videos on YouTube. I don't know why I didn't realized this earlier, but I am a huge fan of that series, and I've enjoyed hearing and learning about those old retired LEGO series. Anyways, back on topic, the comic is going great, the silent panels are intriguing, give this a sense of suspense. Keep up the good work! Quote Formerly Iron_Man5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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